Thirty-five quotes as evidence for Term Paper with Thesis
1. “Ranchers who have exploited public lands for generations are angry that wild horses share the range…” (Smith 1). Article 1
2. “No one can argue that in the current economic situation it makes any sense to spend millions of taxpayer dollars chasing
wild horses around…” (Smith 1). Article 1
3. “Public outrage over video of a mustang collapsing during the wild horse roundup in northeastern Nevada” (“BLM Called
Upon to Halt Wild Horse Roundups” 1). Article 2
4. “An older mare collapsing after being stampeded for miles in a helicopter chase … steam blowing from her nostrils…” (“BLM
Called Upon to Halt Wild Horse Roundups 2). Article 2
5. “The BLM will ship captured Antelope Valley horses thousands of miles to Midwestern holding facilities, at great cost to the
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taxpayers and the horses themselves” (“BLM Called Upon to Halt Wild Horse Roundups” 2). Article 2
“The herd will be left with a predominantly male sex ratio…” (“Foundation Demands BLM Call Off Massive Winter Mustang
Roundups” 1). BLM MANAGEMENT
Article 3
7. “Activists maintain that a colt was run also hard and long during the roundup that the hoof walls on its two hind feet came off,
leaving exposed bones and nerves. The colt was euthanized …” (Griffith 1). Article 4
8. “A
mare fell down in a trailer after being driven for miles on the range by a helicopter… and died a short time later”
(Griffith 1). Article 4
9. “Of six horses that have died at the Fallon facility, five involved mares thought to have experienced difficulty making the
transition to hay feed” (Griffith 2). Article 4
10. “The Antelope Valley Complex roundup aims to remove more than 2,000 federally protected wild horses from a 1.3 million acres
public lands area leaving behind approximately 427 horses” (“American Wild Horse Preservation Campaign” 1). Article 5
11. “These roundups scheduled by the BLM are costing taxpayers $40 million per year. The costs are for the holding pens and the
roundup removal process using helicopters and select cattle ranchers…” (“American Wild Horse Preservation Campaign” 2).
Article 5
12. “In Montana this will leave a non-viable herd of only 120 horses” (“Unprecedented” 2). BLM AND RANCHERS Article 6
13. “Young foals, only days old, will be driven by helicopters and are in serious danger of being hurt or killed”
(“Unprecedented” 2). Article 6
14. “The horses have lived here for over 200 years” (“Unprecedented” 2). Article 6
15. “The range is still green in late August following three years of above average rain…” (“Unprecedented” 2). Article 6
16. “The BLM plans to remove 17 horses over ten years old, and old, sick or lame horses shall be destroyed”
(“Unprecedented” 2). Article 6
17. “When they take out the old horses they remove the ones that know the way to water, the good grass, the way around the
canyon-they’re taking all the knowledge of the herd” (“Unprecedented” 2). Article 6
18. “The BLM will destroy this unique little Spanish herd, leaving them well below the bare minimum for genetic viability”
(“Unprecedented” 3). Article 6
19. “…newborn foals run to exhaustion, found hog tied and abandoned on the range, horses and burros bleeding from the
nostrils, broken legs …” (“Unprecedented” 6). Article 6
20. “…range damage is caused by privately-owned livestock, which outnumber horses more than 100 to one” (“Unprecedented” 9).
Article 6
21. “Restore protections included in the 1971 ‘Wild Free-Roaming Horse and Burro Act’” (“Unprecedented” 10).
Article 6
22. “Last month at least 34 wild horses died or were euthanized during and after a forced roundup” (Cohen 3). Article 7
23. “Many of the horses who died as a result of the roundup were forced by helicopters to run for miles in extreme heat” (Cohen
3). Article 7
24. “Mares run so hard that they miscarry their foal or the foal is born too premature to survive” (Cohen 6). Article 7
25. “The horses’ designated habitat has decreased by 30% since 1971” (Phillips 1). Article 8
26. “Heavily pregnant mares had to run for miles chased by helicopters just a few feet from their heads…” (Phillips 5). Article 8
27. “Ranchers and farmers want the land for their livestock, or the land is wanted for mining” (Phillips 6). Article 8
28. “In California…the BLM is running wild horses and burros ten miles or more over rough volcanic terrain with helicopters”
(“BLM” 1). Article 9
29. “California has lost 16 of the original 38 wild horse herds” (“BLM” 1). Article 9
30. “Over 32,000 privately-owned cattle and sheep are permitted to graze annually on Twin Peaks area” (“BLM” 1). Article 9
31. “Revenues generated yearly from livestock grazing fees are estimated at $120,000 … while the cost of roundups is over $4
million” (“BLM” 1). RANCHERS
Article 9
32. “At the end of the nineteenth century, there were two million wild horses ranging across seventeen states”
(Stillman 296). Book
33. “After Bush was elected president, wild horse roundups escalated ferociously” (Stillman 294). RANCHERS Book
34. “When the colts come in, they’re not worth anything because they’re so small. So they hit them in the head and
throw them in the gut pile” (Stillman 298).
“THEY” = cattle ranchers
Book
35. “They use a stun gun. Supposedly to kill them instantly. And this black stallion took six shots and still did not go down…he got loose
on the kill floor and they had to get a rifle…” (Stillman 299). Good Q for grabber. Book
36. ‘The horse is our great silent witness” (Stillman 304). Good Q for end of essay.
Book
37. “Without natural controls such as predators or effective fertility control, populations
[of horses] can double every four
to five years” (“Working Toward Sustainable Management” 8). Counter
Article 10
38. “Wild horses are destroying the natural eco-system for numerous flora and fauna in California and Nevada” (King,
Personal Interview). Counter
Interview
Do you see a pattern in the sub-topics of the evidence (quotations)?
I see: 1. Cost of roundups 2. Injuries and deaths of wild horses 3. Public lands/range/habitat
5. roundup details 6. Some miscellaneous topics
4. BLM
This is my question:
Why are the wild horse roundups wrong?
My answer is: Wild horse roundups (TOPIC) are wrong (CLAIM OR STANCE) because
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I need to complete the blank lines with some of the reasons provided by my evidence. Let’s do that.
Thesis
Wild horses are the symbol of freedom in the American West and should not be rounded up by the Bureau of Land Management because
the process is costly (1), many horses are injured or die (2), and there will soon be no horses left in the wild due to aggressive land
management by the BLM and cattle ranchers (3).
I have THREE reasons, but I need to write EIGHT body paragraphs. How will that work?
I have enough evidence/quotations for more than one paragraph for some of the reasons.
THESIS RULES:
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Thesis must be ONE sentence.
Thesis must have no taboo words.
Thesis must be written in third person (no use of you, your, our, me, my, mine, we, us, etc.).
Present tense is preferred (‘is’ and ‘are,’ not ‘was and ‘were’).
Thesis does not need to mention the counter claim unless you wish to do so. Thesis must still be ONE sentence.
ALL YOUR QUOTATIONS MUST BE LABELED as either BOOK, ARTICLE 1, ARTICLE 2, ARTICLE 3, ARTICLE
4, OTHER (DOCUMENTARY, MOVIE, INTERVIEW, SURVEY, etc.) = six sources minimum.
LABEL YOUR COUNTER CLAIM QUOTATIONS.
CITE ALL YOUR QUOTATIONS.
Remember:
Book = (author’s last name and page)
(Ramirez 53).
Article with author = (author’s last name and page)
(Robinson 3).
Article with no author = (article title in quotation marks and page) (“Horse Roundups” 2).
Documentary or movie = (Last name of director) (Spielberg).