Comments and Suggestions for Revision
Iliad Essay
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Make a stronger statement in
your opening sentence
To strengthen your academic
voice, avoid personal pronouns
Strengthen thesis
Identify characters
Mention the title and/or author
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Capitalization error
Incorrect use of possessive
Italicize the title of the text
Noun-pronoun agreement
Clarify antecedent for pronoun
Refer to individuals by their full
names or last names
Add a title
Do not underline your own title
Make a stronger point in your
topic sentence
So what? What are the
consequences or implications?
Unify paragraph with a stronger
topic sentence
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Reconsider order of paragraphs
Documentation error
Document source of quote or
information
No Bibliography or Work Cited
Format error
Include specific details
Quote to support
Support or explain further
How is this relevant to your
thesis?
Improve transition
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Avoid wordiness
Improve parallelism
Avoid clichés
Vague
Use clearer, more specific
diction
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Awkward expression
Use active voice
Redundant. Avoid repeating the
same point.
State more clearly or reconsider
Run-on sentence or fragment
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Spelling error
Punctuation error
Subject-verb agreement error
Diction/usage error
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Peer edit grade
Do not introduce new
information in the conclusion
Check the text to correct your
facts
Subordinate the quote to your
point.
Avoid contractions
Overly long quote