Paragraphing
Achieving text cohesion with linking words and phrases
Examples of student work (group JAL-KOV)
To begin with, please consult the examples and exercises in your
Reader 2010/11, p 69.
Below you will find four examples of the text from Task 2. Read
them carefully, paying attention to how your colleagues ordered
the sentences and used linking words and phrases to express
their point.
For comparison purposes I have colour-coded the sentences and
it is easy to see how different authors use one and the same
sentence in different places. For instance, all authors agree on
the order of appearance for the first three sentences. However,
the remaining three (green, red and purple) they chose to order
differently. You should also pay attention to the way your
colleagues use linking words since this justifies their decisions
and reveals the logic of the paragraph to you.
Enjoy!
Tourism has become one of world’s biggest industries. It accounts for 11%
Tourism has become one of the world`s biggest industries. It accounts for
of global GDP and employs around 200 million people. In addition,
11 % of global GDP and employees around 200 million people.
estimates suggest that 590 million people travel abroad every year,
Furthermore, estimates suggest that 590 million people travel abroad
sometimes several times, not only for holidays but also for business, and
every year, sometimes several times, not only for holidays but also for
for personal, religious, or health reasons. However, after September 11th,
business, and for personal, religious or health reasons. Due to September
there are fewer Americans travelling, which has been disastrous for some
11th, however, there are fewer Americans traveling, which has been
global tourist economies. Even though the travel industry usually recovers
disastrous for some global tourism economies. Although the travel
very quickly, will this always be the case in future? As we know, in an
industry usually recovers very quickly, will this always be the case in the
increasingly dangerous world, especially with an ever preset threat of
future? All things considered, in an increasingly dangerous world,
terrorist attack, people may not be willing to travel as much as they used to.
especially with an ever present threat of terrorist attack, people may not be
Josipa Jazvić
willing to travel as much as they used to.
Matea Kolaić
Tourism has become one of the world`s biggest industries. It accounts for
Tourism has become one of the world`s biggest industries. It accounts for
11% of global GDP and employs around 200 million people. Moreover,
11% of global GDP and employs around 200 million people.
estimates suggest that 590 million people travel abroad every year,
Furthermore, estimates suggest that 590 million people travel abroad
sometimes several times, not only for holidays but also for business, and
every year, sometimes several times, not only for holliday but also for
for personal, religious, or health reasons. However, in an increasingly
bussiness, and for personal, religious or health reasons. On the other
dangerous world, especially with an ever present threat of terrorist attack,
hand, in an increasingly dangerous world, especially with an ever present
people may not be willing to travel as much as they used to. For example,
threat of terrorist attack, people may not be willing to travel as much as
after September 11th, there are fewer Americans travelling, which has been
they used to. For instance, after September 11th, there are fewer
disastrous for some global tourist economies. It is true that the travel
Americans travelling, which has been disastrous for some global tourist
industry usually recovers very quickly, but will this always be the case in
economies. Altrough the travel industry usually recovers very quickly, will
the future?
this always be the case in future?
Tomislav Korotaj
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