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Body Paragraph #1 Self-Edit
Goal:
 I can revise a body paragraph to meet the criteria for a formal essay.
Directions: Complete the self-edit document, and then revise your body paragraph. Be sure the completely edited draft is
printed in class.
TOPIC SENTENCE – Write the topic sentence below.
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Does the sentence include the important parts of the theme?
Yes
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No
Does the sentence include the topic of the paragraph (character, symbol, or event?
Yes
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No
Is the topic of the paragraph the same as the first supporting detail listed in the thesis statement? Yes or No
Does the topic sentence need to be revised?
Yes
or
No
If the topic sentence needs to be revised, write the revised sentence below in red or green pen.
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BACKGROUND SENTENCES – Write the background sentences below.
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Do the background sentences come directly after the topic sentence and BEFORE the direct quote?
Yes
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No
Is there more than one background sentence?
Yes
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No
Do the background sentences provide information necessary to understand the focus of the paragraph?
Yes
or
No
Do the background sentences need to be revised?
Yes
or
No
If the background sentences need to be revised, write the revised sentences below in red or green pen.
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LEAD-IN, QUOTE, & PARENTHETICAL CITATION – Write the lead – in and direct quote.
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Does quote reflect the topic of the paragraph? Yes
or
No
Does the lead-in form a complete sentence with the quote?
Yes
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No
Does the lead-in provide the speaker and context (information helpful in understanding the quote)? Yes or No
Is the parenthetical citation written correctly (Steinbeck 12)?
Yes
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No
Does the lead-in, quote choice, or citation need to be revised? Yes
or
No
If the lead-in, quote, or citation needs to be revised, write the revised sentences below in red or green pen.
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ANALYSIS – Write the sentences that analyze the direct quote.
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Do the sentences come directly after the direct quote?
Yes
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No
Do the sentences begin with some form of “This quote shows / tell, etc.”? Yes
or
No
Does the analysis prove HOW the quote supports the argument? In other words, the analysis SHOULD prove how
the character, symbol, or event reflects the theme.
Yes
or
No
Is the analysis greater than one sentence?
Yes
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No
Do any of the analysis sentences need to be revised?
Yes
or
No
If the analysis sentences need to be revised, write the revised sentences below in red or green pen.
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CLOSING SENTENCE – Write the closing sentence below.
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Does the sentence sum up the paragraph?
Yes
Does the sentence preview the next paragraph?
Does the closing sentence need to be revised? Yes
or
Yes
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No
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No
No
If the closing sentence needs to be revised, write the revised sentence below in red or green pen.
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