Thesis and
Support Peer
Review
Thesis and Support Quick Check
First, grab your homework and find a partner at
another table.
 Take three minutes and discuss with your partner what
your personal thoughts are about affluenza. Discuss
what they were before you watched the video and
what they were after watching the video. (It is okay
if you didn’t really have an opinion prior to the video
– you could discuss why this never really crossed into
your mindset.)
(On the back of your homework write down 1 – and
your partner’s name)
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Thesis and Support Quick Check
Still with your homework in hand, find a new
partner – it cannot be someone who sits at
your “usual” table!
 Take a few minutes to discuss with that
person what was hard about writing this
thesis and support and what was easy about
writing this!
 (On the back of your homework write down
2 – and your partner’s name)
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Thesis and Support Quick Check
Even still with your homework in hand, find
one last partner – you still can’t be with
someone at your “usual table”!
 Take a minute and discuss with your partner
what you would do if you had fifteen more
minutes to work on this assignment.
(On the back of your homework write down 3
– and your partner’s name)
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Thesis and Support Quick Check
Trade papers with your partner.
 Take a few minutes to read your
partner’s paper.
 After you read your partner’s paper,
write at the bottom who you BELIEVE
the writer’s audience is.
 After this – you can go back to your
table! 
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You are writing to
Convincing that
person that
An arrogant teen who comes from a wealthy family and doesn’t accept
responsibility.
Affluenza is a true
ailment.
An arrogant teen who comes from a wealthy family and doesn’t accept
responsibility.
Affluenza is an excuse
for bad parenting.
A humble and well adjusted teen who comes from a middle class family,
who sees his/her peers getting away with nonsense and not accepting
responsibility and is oozing frustration.
Affluenza is a true
ailment.
A humble and well adjusted teen who comes from a middle class family,
who sees his/her peers getting away with nonsense and not accepting
responsibility and is oozing frustration.
Affluenza is an excuse
for bad parenting.
A parent who is frustrated with his/her teen because s/he is out of control
and reckless because of inconsiderate and out of control behavior.
Affluenza is a true
ailment.
A parent who is frustrated with his/her teen because s/he is out of control
and reckless because of inconsiderate and out of control behavior.
Affluenza is an excuse
for bad parenting.
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First, let’s check the paper formatting. Make any
necessary corrections!
Your Name
Ms. LaDuca
January 12, 2015
ENG 102 - 22390
Period 1
ENG 102 - 22391
Period 2
ENG 102 - 22496
Period 3
A header is NOT
required for a
one page paper
– but is
acceptable if
there!
All of this formatting is worth 5 points – it is 5 points or no
points, you must have the heading information correct, a
title, and the piece double spaced to get 5 points. On the
notecard please put F= and then put 5 or 0
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First, let’s check the paper formatting. Make any
necessary corrections!
For your WC points (5 or 0) you need to have
the following to get your points: the title Works
Cited centered, both sources properly
formatted, in alphabetical order, with the second
lines indented. Please put WC=
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Look at the title! T= 1 pt or 3 pts
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Is it effective? Is it beyond the obvious and mundane, yet
not drippy and sappy? Put a plus if you like the title, or
put a minus if you think the title needs more strength!
Look at the first sentence of the paragraph!
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Review the thesis – circle affluenza
and underline your comment. TH= 1
pt to 3 pts (if it isn’t your first
sentence then it is a zero)
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Using a highlighter, highlight the short quote.
 Circle the lead-in.
 Review the usage. If it is correct, put a plus in the margin,
if there is an error – place a minus sign in the margin.
Make the correction for the person.
Lead in “blah blah blah” (Cooper).
Or
Cooper believes “blah blah blah.”
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SQ= 0pts or 5pts
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Using a highlighter, highlight the paraphrase.
It needs to be the second to last sentence in the
paragraph!
Review the usage. If it is correct, put a plus in the margin,
if there is an error – place a minus sign in the margin.
Be sure there is either a lead-in or proper parenthetical
documentation. Also, be sure that there are no quotation
marks and the end punctuation only follows the
parentheses! P= 0pt or 5pts
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Look for the ellipses! Circle the ellipses!
Check for the following:
 The quote still flows even with the use of an ellipses.
 Proper interpolation is used – if necessary.
 Is a [SIC] required and not there?
 We use the end punctuation PLUS the ellipses since if it is
a long omission!
 Are the periods evenly spaced?
 E = 1 pt or 3 pts
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Check the point of view! This was to
be in third person only, which means
no: I, you, we, us, our, me, my, mine . . .
 If you see any examples that don’t
meet third person point of view – put
an X through the pronoun!
 PV - 0pts or 3 pts
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Look for the reference to something in
the video, using your highlighter (choose
a color you haven’t used) and put a
squiggle over the reference. It must have
Inside Edition (in italics to get points)
VI= 1 pt or 3 pts
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Take out your vocabulary lists!
Look for the vocabulary words that were included – there
should be three!
Near where the words are in the paragraph, write out the
definition.
Look at how you used the vocabulary word – if it is effective
and flows properly and reflects the appropriate meaning, put
a plus sign after the definition. If it is awkward and/or
incorrectly used, put a minus sign after the definition.
VO= 0 pts or 3 pts – 1 point for each vocab word
Argumentation Check
Tone
Views
Purpose
Toulmin
Adversarial
Although concessions may
be made, arguments
mostly are based on
refutations
Opponent is “wrong”
and will be overcome
by evidence.
Rogerian
Non-Confrontational,
collegial, friendly tone
Respects others views and
allows for more than one
truth
Seeks to achieve
common ground, not
to full convince
someone
How successful were you in each of the areas?
3 = Highly Effective
2 = Effective
1 = Hey, I tried.
Final Evaluation
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You will now evaluate the paragraph using
our rubric! Somewhere on the front (or the
back if you don’t have room) please write:
C
O
E
MU
Final Evaluation – Using a 3 (as the highest) and 1 (as the lowest),
evaluate for each of the rubric areas. Include 2-3 sentences of
explanation next to each rubric area! Be sure you are clear!
Rubric Components
Content
Pertains to your ability to fulfill the requirements of the assignment, as well as
your ability to elaborate, apply terms correctly, provide supporting evidence,
and document resources when necessary.
Organization
Pertains to the effective use of such structural components as paragraphing,
transitions, and emphasis that convey the relationship between ideas.
Expression
Pertains to the effective use of language – primarily at the sentence level – and
the maintenance of a consistent and appropriate tone.
Usage and
Mechanics
Pertains to knowing and correctly applying the basic rules of grammar, spelling,
and punctuation.