REVISION MATS created by 11JKL 1 at
The John Lyon School
'PAIN WHICH
BURNT MY
GROIN'
'I SLID HEAD
FIRST ON MY
BACK'
'GROTESQUE
DISTORTION'
'MY LEG!'
'IT WASN'T JUST
BROKEN, IT WAS
RUPTURED,
TWISTED,CRUSH
ED'
'LEFT HERE?
ALONE?'
'I COULD FEEL
MYSELF
TEETERING ON
THE EDG.E'
'I'VE BROKEN MY
LEG, THAT'S IT. I'M
DEAD.'
'SIMON WOULD
NOT BE ABLE TO
GET ME UP. HE
WOULD LEAVE ME.
HE HAD NO
CHOICE.'
TOUCHING THE VOID- JOE
Joe and
Simon were
mountain
climbing in
the Andes
until Joe
had been in
a terrible
accident.
The passage
explores the
emotions
and
thoughts of
both Joe
and Simon
Language Device
Quote
Explanation
Triplet
“Ruptured, twisted, crushed”
It shows complete devastation of
Joe’s leg and shows the great
intensity of the injury.
Short Sentence
“I’m dead”
It creates tension as it is sudden. It
shows he has lost hope which
would therefore create a sense of
anticipation.
Rhetorical Questions
“Left here? Alone?”
Joe has lost hope and is aware that
he cant be saved. He is petrified
and filled with negative emotions.
Repetition
“If”
Joe repeatedly used the word “if” to
show the readers the fear he felt of
dying and how his “thoughts raced
madly”.
Facts
“We were above 19,000 feet”.
It indicates to the reader of how
much danger he was in. This builds
up the tension.
Semantic Field
“I felt like screaming and I felt like
swearing”
This is a semantic field of losing
control and it is used to create
tension and anticipation.
“spasm of pain”
“Effort brought back the nausea”
“I asked him what had
happened and he looked
at me in surprise”.
“I trudged after it
slowly”
From Touching The Void
Simon
He looked
pathetic and my
immediate
thought came
without any
emotion”.
In a way I hoped he would fall”.
“I watched him dispassionately”.
TOUCHING THE VOID- Simon
Joe and
Simon were
mountain
climbing in
the Andes
until Joe
had been in
a terrible
accident.
The passage
explores the
emotions
and
thoughts of
both Joe
and Simon
Language Device
Quote
Explanation
Phrase
“I watched him quite
dispassionately”
'dispassionately' shows
Simon's rational mind
Short Sentence
“It didn't frighten me”
It relieves tension as it shows
Simon may have a plan, giving
the reader hope.
ellipsis
I kept staring at him,
expecting him to fall...'
Shows Simon does have
emotions, however his
rational thought will come
first.
Facts
'...I knew he was dead'
Simon has to be rational in
these situations, hope will not
ALWAYS work and he has to
face reality (luckily for Joe in
this instance hope did work)
Red connotes blood and shows danger as
it links to the many deaths (blood) that
are caused due to not being safe at a
beach.
Targeted at tourists, surfers, swimmers
and parents/families
Uses imperatives to use forceful authority
Children are safe and having
fun because of the RNLI.
Anaphora/Triplet – repetition
of “life” shows they are
making sure no lives are lost
and that they are protecting
you.
Yellow symbolises a warning but
says that you can still enjoy
yourself (links to the sun)
Imperative – Forceful tone
“Safest
Place” –
Positive
Superlative
A true story is right at the beginning so
people will know that the RNLI will save
anyone who is in a problem.
Continuous repetition of names keeps
reminding is that it is a true story.
The story is written in first person to
prove that they do save anyone.
Advice for what should be done if caught
in a rip is written in easily relatable for
the reader.
Simple diagrams with labels for readers to
easily understand the danger of a rip as
well as what to do if they are caught in
one.
The RNLI shows their importance by
separating a whole new page to
supply their information to readers.
“best-all-round”
Positive/cautious language
Triplet - Shows it is relevant to all the
different people/ongoing activities at
the beach
and it adds clarity by saying what to
avoid and what to ignore.
Antithetical Modal verb – know what
support is needed
Short sentences – know unnecessary
info
Polls and Statistics – show that they
have a strong force, lots of assets and
lots of funding
Can’t help without funding from
“you”
A section for lifesaving advice and
information again shares safety
precautions and advice readers
should remember.
Creates a semantic field of
protection
An image of the people caught in the
dangerous situation, giving a more
personal feel towards the reader.
Trappers
Dead Words
SPAG
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Triplet
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Spelling(Misspelled words)
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Rhetorical questions
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Adjectives and Adverbs
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Polls and statistics
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Personal anecdote
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Emotive language
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Repetition
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Sentence structure
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Went - Dashed
- Swam
- Hurried
- Accelerated
Happy- Grateful
- Delighted
- Thrilled
- Ecstatic
Sad - mortified
- emotional
- devastated
- terrified
Metaphors
Similes
Capital Letters
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Punctuation (Key types)
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Advanced Vocabulary
Personification
Environment
Surprise
Necessary
! –used to emphasise a point
?-to show a question
:-to introduce a list
;- to connect two independent clauses
Descriptive Language
Paragraphs
Onomatopoeia
Aman & Cameron
It is structured in a
way which is easy
to read as it draws
attention to key
facts. This includes
summaries,
subtitles and
hyperlinks which
lead to other
intriguing details,
further supporting
Greenpeace’s
work.
It has a search bar
for easy navigation
and to exemplify
the enormity of
their research into
global warming.
It has clear bold
posters to attract
the reader’s
attention and to
further emphasise
their point. This is
further developed
through the use of
colour and
imperatives.
Aims:

To inform and explain the effects and the necessary action
to combat climate change.
Language Techniques:
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It uses statistics to emphasise the reality of their
argument. Line 2 ‘150,000 people are dying’ and ‘within 50
years.’
Many imperatives are used, such as ‘Take Action’ and
‘STOP Heathrow Expansion’. The imperatives are used to
strongly persuade the reader to take action.
Author: It is unknown to us,
but written by Greenpeace, a
organisation of
environmentalists
Genre: It is a web page,
meaning it contains news,
information and is writing to
persuade
Attitudes: It can be thought
of as very biased, but is
supported with facts which
are not necessarily incorrect.
Approach: Strong use of
images, choice of links and
advertisements reinforces the
opinion of the organisation;
reader is engaged in debate
through use of imperatives
Key writing styles: Emotive
language; use of 2nd person to
address reader directly; short
sentences deployed for effect;
1st person plural used to link
the writer and the reader.
Intended effect: To raise
awareness of climate change
and to present a dominated
view which intends to raise
support for Greenpeace.
T
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A
P
P
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S
‘Decentralised
energy, renewables
and efficiency’
‘TAKE ACTION’
To
emphasize
ability and impact
new technologies
will have
The repetitive use of
second
person
to
involve the reader
Catastrophic emphasizes
the
uncertainty
and
danger of the topic, also
climate change’
further
developed
through the use of
‘150,000
alliteration
and
Uses
polls
and
people…50
repetition
statistics to
years…carbon
emissions risen… persuade
seriousness of the
by 2100…’
global ‘hot potato’
There are no personal anecdotes but one
could accentuate this disastrous topic by
including a thought provoking story
The Use Of Colour
Greenpeace uses green to reflect a calm
environment, but the emphasis of climate
change is exemplified through its dark shade,
this can be perceived through the picture of a
boat sailing in dirty water.
‘Catastrophic
‘Extinction’
‘We’
The use of pronouns such as ‘we’
elicit
a
greater
emotional
response
from
the
reader.
‘Extinction’ is emotive and
highlights the devastating impact
of global warming.
‘Serious about
tackling climate
change?’
Greenpeace's uses blue to reflect the calm
and tranquil colour of the sea.
Greenpeace uses orange to symbolize ‘get
ready’. It talks directly to the audience.
The Use Of Imperatives;
‘Stop’
‘Take Action’
‘Add your voice’
‘Donate now’
Rhetorical
question
engages reader and the
use of a metaphor makes
it easier for the observer
to understand
There
are short sentences to be more
‘All that’s missing
direct and have a greater impact on
is the action
the
reader’s
attention.
Long
itself’.
sentences used to inform and explain
The imperatives used to engage
and persuade the reader to take
action. One would advise you to
do the same in your own English
Language pieces.
Inform
Explain
Describe
This is the basic structure of the
passage, which you should use for
your English Language pieces
OM AND ROHAN
RHETORICAL QUESTIONS
The writer is in charge of the questions and hence the
answers are bias to support her argument. This helps to
make the writing persuasive.
The writer her question with a short answers which
summaries the following paragraph. This is key to her
persuasion.
Stats to confuse the reader
PURPOSE:
KEY
QUOTES
‘(farting
cows)’
‘burping’
‘Political
hot potato’
‘Mankind really
to blame?’
‘TREES ARE
HELPING TO
MOP UP’
Use of scatological humour,
which lessens the importance of
the issue.
INFORM THE READER THAT
IT IS ‘US’ HUMANS THAT
AFFECT THE CLIMATE AND
MUST TAKE URGENT
ACTION!
Metaphor – colloquial phrase
Links the reader in – questions us
if we are to blame.
PERSONIFICATION – suggests that trees are doing us
a favour by clearing pollution.
OM AND ROHAN
THE POSTER
SUMMARIES THE
ARTICLE
Circles :
The waves come into the earth with
a small size and they leave larger.
This suggests that the earth is being
destructed .
ANAPHORA:
The writing gets larger and
therefore will scare the reader.
Also draws attention to the reader.
THE USE OF COLOUR:
Red waves – represents
danger from by Global
warming- UV radiation
returns as longer wave
radiation.
Black city – suggests global
warming will cause great
destruction
MISLEADING GRAPH :
The y-axis is misleading as it does
not start from 0- only shows the
worst parts to attract our
attention.
• sophisticated and
refined
connotations.
• Sport associated
with the upper
class.
By Emma Levine
Tarun & Anil
• Barbaric and savage
conditions.
• Grabs the readers
attention- shocking
imagery of a headless
goat.
Key Quotations:
- “Game of Polo with a Headless Goat”- Juxtaposition (see above)
Writing Styles:
- “Wacky Races”- the text relates to a well
- Past tense- generally in 1st person
perspective.
known cartoon.
- “Eternity”- Sense of anxiety.
- “Coming” (repetition)- Triplet, constantly repeated to build up tension.
-Onomatopoeia- “horns tooting”,
to create excitement.
- “Formula One without rules”- Race is dangerous and out of control but exciting for
the spectators. (Relates to ‘Wacky Races’).
- Use of senses and vivid imagery
to engage and entertain.
- “And then the trouble began.”- Short sentence showing the incidents happening may
be worse than the actual race.
-“The race was over.”- Short sentence, definitive tone and sudden slow down of action,
anti-climax.
Possible Exam Questions
- “How does Emma Levine
express her opinions at
the race?”
- “How does the writer use
humour to convey her
experience at the race?”
- Occasional shift of tone allows
the story to flow.
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A semicolon is most
commonly used to link
(in a single sentence) two
independent clauses that
are closely related in
thought.
When a semicolon is
used to join two or more
ideas (parts) in a
sentence, those ideas are
then given equal position
or rank.
Triplet
Moral dilemma for
Rhetorical
Narwhal
questions
Adjective and
“Methodically passing each
adverbs
other”- elegant depiction of
Polls and statistics the narwhal, the “ly” creates a
soft sound and sympathy as
Personal
they seem peaceful.
anecdotes
Emotive language “the images… of men battling
seals”, an imagery of brutal
Repetition
hunting shows both sides of
Sentence
the moral dilemma as the
Inughuit need to kill to
structure
Things to
look for
Description
Opinion
Facts
Narrative
survive but men in the past
have brutally killed them in
the past for their fur.
“harshness of life in the
Artic and the needs of
hunters” the people in the
Artic need to kill the
Narhwal’s to survive for
their “necessary minerals
and vitamins”.
AUTHOR OPINION
“How can you possibly eat
seal?”-rhetorical question. :
Showing us both sides that
create the moral dilemma she
is feeling. Comment
USE P E A R L S/
PEE
POINT EVIDENCE
EXPLAIN
“sea mamals that we demand
to be protected because of
their beauty” Uncertain tone
of voice indicates that she is
trying to
convince herself as well as us.
Reflecting on the questions
raised by that event.
“to dive, to leave, to
survive”-triplet
indicates the narrator’s
desire for the survival
of the narwhal that
leaves us with
conflicting emotions.
INFORM
EXPLAIN
DESCRIBE
“Hungry, lean, scared and
betrayed faces” – Shows the
blunt way in which Alagiah
is describing the children.
Meant to place emphasis on
“betrayed”, which has
connotations of
“abandoned” and
“rejection.”
“sucked of its natural
vitality” –
Personification to
emphasise the ease
at which death can
“extract” a persons
soul.
“between me and them,
between us and them, between
the rich world and the poor
world” – wonderful contrast
used by Alagiah through a
triplet. Places emphasis on the
inequalities and prejudices of
life.
“The shattered leg… fused into the gentle V“It was the feeble smile that
went with apology” –
Extremely emotive section of
the passage, but Alagiah also
uses adjectives to describe
emotions that lead to his
embarrassment. “Feeble” has
connotations of “weak” and
“decrepit”, emphasising the
“In the ghoulish manner” –
fragility of his mental state
Alagiah is emphasising the
“It was the smell that drew me to her doorway; the when confronted with this
deceitful nature of the
ironic gesture from the man.
smell of decaying flesh” – Great balance in the
reporters. With the word
“ghoulish” having connotations sentence, and also the “decaying flesh” a horrifying,
yet captivating choice of adjective from Alagiah; it is
of “predator” and “callous” to
emphasise the reporters devilish meant to emphasise the “rotten” and “putrid”
environment that he finds himself in.
nature.
shape of a Boomerang” – Small metaphor to
emphasise the deteriorating state of the
womans body. Once more, “shattered” has
connotations of “rupture” and “extreme
distortion”, which gives us an image of
Alagiah’s horrified reaction to the woman’s
figure.
Explorers Or boys messing about?
Either way, taxpayer gets rescue
bill! ‘Q’
‘Farce’
(Comic Play)
Highlights the
stupidity of the
The idea of
men.
Men are
made to
seem!
silly!
‘BOYS’
‘Plunged in to the
sea’
‘
‘.’
‘Walked the Himalayas
barefoot’
Mains
‘Adventure had cost the taxpayers of Britain
and Chile tens of thousands of pounds.
‘Trusty Helicopter’…..Cowboy phrase!
Similar to ‘trusty steed.’
Q hints at an obsession with spy fiction
and a fantasy world
‘They’ll probably have their
bottoms kicked and be sent
home the long way.’
DANGER OF SITUATION
Scramble military helicopters.’
The explorers
called it an
‘adventure.’
How Childish!
Desserts
‘Ironically, one of the
aims of the
expedition… was to
demonstrate how good
relations had become
between east and west.’
‘Ironically’ to display their
failure and stupidity….