Homework
due:
Freewrite
(can turn in online
or on paper)
Meeting 2:
Tosspon’s
English 105
Building
Foundations
Review: Diagnostic
Thesis Statements – Chpt 2
Narrative – Chpt 12
Reading/Writing Connection – Chpt 8
Grammar Log Overview
1. Collect supplies:
– syllabus, handbook, Grammar Log (digital or hard
copy), Writing utensil, and the .docx file (from
your email or http://healdlogin.com ).
2. Use the “Review” tab and click “next” to look
at each comment.
3. For the comments that have “#” symbols,
write the # on the grammar log.
4. Write the sentence on the grammar log.
5. Correct the sentence on the grammar log.
– Use the green handbook, the internet, and
classmates to help you figure out how to change.
Your Diagnostic Essays
• Open the attachment.
– You should be able to open it in word by right clicking
on it, or by simply clicking on it.
• Review my comments by clicking on “Review”
and then clicking “Next” or “Accept” on the menu
bar.
Grammar Log
• For each # error (not ALL comments), correct using
the Grammar Log, Syllabus pg 7, + green handbook
– In this example, the error is #5
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This is worth 10 points per paper. No errors means you automatically get the 10 points.
Correct the
error
#5
In the beginning the dog wasn’t
sure what he wanted to do.
In the beginning, the dog wasn’t
sure what he wanted to do.
Find how to
Correct your
Errors by
using the
syllabus
(pg 7) and
the green
handbook.
Common Errors
We will be adding one of these “cracks in
our foundation” to our lesson each week.
• Confused words
– there=/= their
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Fragments/Run Ons
Professional Language
Hook/Introductions
Wordiness
Semicolons
ESL? Verb Tense Shifts?
See pages 337-358 (handbook)
Include:
Each type of error you tend to make
How to Correct that type of error
Sample sentences w/ the corrections
Awesome. PreWrites, etc
REVIEW CHPT 1
When You Write
Narrow a large topic
Start
early
Select something in
which you currently
have a strong
interest
Select a subject
Find the best space
for you
Discover your Audience
• Identify your readers
Why are
they
reading it
– what do
Who is the
audience?
they hope to
gain?
What knowledge
does your audience
have about the
subject?
What is your
audience’s
attitude towards
your subject?
Special qualities of your audience?
1. They don’t like to be bored. (if you
are bored writing it, they’ll be bored
reading it)
2. They hate confusion and disorder
3. They WANT to think and learn
4. They want to see/feel what YOU
see/feel
5. They are turned off by
pretentious/phony voices.
Chapter 2
Thesis!
Pg 31
The Thesis
• A thesis MUST tell the reader what they’re
going to be reading.
• Can change/be refined between draft and final!
Working thesis!
• All of your main points must fall under it!
• It is your topic + your point about it.
JigSaw: Chpt 1
• Each group assigned a section
• Read the section
• Develop a “Poster” w/ graphic to Explain your
section to the class
• class, as group explains, read along, highlight, or take notes.
– We will be playing a game w/ this info next week
Good thesis
-States opinion (pg 33)
-Asserts 1 idea (pg 33-34)
-Has something to say (pg 34-35)
-Is limited to fit (pg 35-36)
-Clearly/specifically stated (36)
-1st or 2nd paragraph (36-37)
Avoid Common Errors
1. Don’t just announce topic
(37)
2. Don’t clutter with “I think”
(37)
3. Don’t just state a fact (38)
4. Don’t ask it as a question (38)
Game! Pin the Thesis
• Groups each will get a set of
thesis statements.
Record the #’s you have!
• Decide which are “adequate” and
which are “inadequate”
– Use tape to put statements onto the
corresponding location.
– Be prepared to justify your
choice to the class.
• On 1 page per group, rewrite the
inadequate thesis statements.
Guidelines for a good thesis (pg 33)
• States the writer’s clearly defined
opinion on some subject
• Assert ONE main idea
• Have something worthwhile to say
• Limit thesis to fit the assignment
• State thesis clearly, in specific
terms
• In first or second paragraph.
Thesis Statement Answers
• Identify whether each is adequate
or not, explain the problem
1. Adequate
2. Inadequate
3. Inadequate
4. Inadequate
5. Adequate
6. Adequate
7. Inadequate
8. Inadequate
9. Adequate
10.Inadequate
11.Adequate
12.Inadequate
13.Adequate
14.Inadequate
15.Inadequate
16.Inadequate
17.Inadequate
18.Adequate
19.Inadequate
20.Inadequate
21.Inadequate
22.Adequate
23.Inadequate
24.Inadequate
25.Inadequate
26.Adequate
27.Inadequate
28.Inadequate
29.Inadequate
30.Inadequate
31.Adequate
32.Inadequate
33.Inadequate
Chapter 12
Narrative:
Telling a story
What is Poverty…
Read the narrative
With a partner, answer these questions
(1 paper per group, titled “Components of Narrative”)
1. What is the purpose of this writing? The subject?
2. Who is the INTENDED audience?
3. What is the scope? (1 incident? A series of incidents?)
4. When and where was this set? How do you know?
5. List 2 sensory details – smells, tastes, textures, sounds
6. Describe the main character. Is there one? More?
7. What % of the story is dialogue (speaking, look for “ “)
8. Did you enjoy the story? Why/why not?
Narrative (Chpt 12 pg 343)
• A narrative is a story with characters and
there is a definite plot line. A narrative
normally has a beginning, a middle and an
end.
• It can also be used in pieces
to make a point or support
a point
Telling a storycan be fact or fiction.
Writing the Narrative Essay
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Know your purpose
Make your main point clear
Follow a logical time sequence
Use sensory details to
hold interest
• Create authentic characters
• Use dialogue realistically
(pg 344-345, Green handbook pg 100)
Problems to avoid
• Choose your subject carefully
• Limit your scope
• Don’t let your story lag with insignificant detail
Practice a Pre-Write: Looping!
• Freewrite for 5 minutes: Topic: best vacation
Loop it!
Choose 1 sentence from your paragraph. Use
that “center of gravity” sentence.
Freewrite a paragraph using THAT as your
jumping-off point.
Review the 2nd freewrite. Find another “center
of gravity”. Begin a 3rd Freewrite using that
paragraph.
Narrative Pre-Write
• Do a pre-write of your choice (see Chpt 1)
• Choose your own story (fiction, non-fiction,
doesn’t matter!)
• Things to consider as you write
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Describe the setting and character’s appearance
What unusual noises, colors, smells
What does facial expression show?
What might each person SAY
What mood/tone will you create?
Narrative essay assignment
• Tell a story.
• Can base it on your painting OR one of the
topics on pg 347-348, OR propose a topic to
me
– Note, if you’re using the tornado painting,
PLEASE do research (even watch Twister!)
rather than making assumptions about how people
would talk, how scared people would be, etc.
• Essay worth 100 points
• Rough Draft (2 printed copies) due next week
• Final draft due the following week
Homework
• Narrative Essay 1st Draft (2 printed copies)
DUE @ beginning of NEXT MEETING (50 points)
– Final draft due in 2 weeks submitted to
http://healdlogin.com
– Name file: Lastname_Narrative.docx
• Please note: Do NOT type .doc or .docx, those are file types to choose when you “save
as”
• Grammar log for Diagnostic Essay
• Read: Book pgs 349-353 (sample narratives)
• Vocabulary 1 –(10 points each): Select 10 words from your
narrative. Try to challenge yourself, use your thesaurus! What definitions do
we need to read your narrative?
• May get in groups of 4, each person
may use 1 item from this list:
notes/book/syllabus/handouts
Categories:
• Syllabus, Chpt 1, Chpt 2 (Thesis),
Narratives, Classmates