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Point of View:
In this role, you will be strictly focused on the author’s point of view. In a narrative, the author should write in third-person omniscient, third person limited or first person point of view.
Please edit your peer’s paper for any inappropriate cross over of pronouns, such as “we”, “I”, “you” or “they”---(Edit by crossing out inappropriate pronouns.)
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Commas: In this role, you will be strictly focused on the author’s comma usage. Please edit comma splices, run-ons, as well as inappropriate use of the semi-colon and colon. Please make comments about your peer’s sentence variation in the paragraph. Are they using too many simple sentences?
Too many compound/complex sentences? Or do they have a good variation? —(Edit the commas and then write a one sentence about your peer’s sentence variation.)
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Verb-Tense and Subject-Verb-Agreement: In this role, you will be strictly focused on the paragraph’s verbs. You need to make sure there are no inappropriate tense shifts. The text should remain either in present tense or past tense. You also need to make sure that if your subject is plural or singular, your verb matches. Ex: “We is” verses “We are” —(Edit this section directly on the paragraph.)
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Flow: In this role, you will be reading through your peer’s entire narrative and noting the flow of the paper. Do the ideas build on one another? Are there good transitions between sentences? Is there good sentence variation? Are there sentences or ideas that seem repetitive? Are there unnecessary words? Do you stumble over sections and have to reread them? —(Edit this section by marking these areas with “awk”, “wordy”, “poor trans”, “repetitive” and “vague”. Also feel free to add in your own suggestions. Then write one to two sentences summarizing the quality of their flow, based on the questions above.)
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Word choice/Syntax: In this role, you will be looking over the entire text for word variation, proper word-choice, areas of unnecessary words, and repetition of words. —(Edit this section by marking these areas with “wordy”, “word-choice” and “repetitive”. Also feel free to add in your own suggestions.)
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Typos: In this role, you will be looking for silly typos, such as incorrect capitalization of words, formatting issues, word choice (there verse their), inappropriate apostrophe usage, spelling errors, and any other grammar mistake that seems unintentional. —(Edit this section by crossing out errors and replacing the mistake with the correction.)
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Imagery:
In this role, you will be looking at the author’s use of imagery in their writing. Highlight three areas in their narrative that seem boring and less vivid. In other words highlight three areas where the author is telling what is happening and not SHOWING you what is happening. Identify three areas where the author is demonstrating imagery. —(Edit this section by highlighting three areas that need more imagery and highlighting three areas that exemplifies good examples of imagery.)
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Dialogue: In this role, you will be looking strictly at the author’s use of dialogue. Make sure that dialogue tags (he said, she exclaimed) give the characters’ a voice and personality. Be sure that the author has a new line for each new speaker and that the dialogue is moving the story forward, increasing the tension of the plot or revealing emotion or character relationships. —(Edit this section by crossing out errors and replacing the mistake with the correction.)
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Hero’s Journey Elements: In this role, the author will be identifying the major elements of a hero’s journey within the narrative. You will highlight the element and label it as “crossing the threshold”,
“father figure”, “abyss” and etc. See your notes. —(Edit this section by highlighting elements and labeling them, then making a list of elements that the author needs to elaborate on and/or add.)