Entertaining Beginning Grab their Attention Entertaining Beginning Action! The bear lept from the water and slammed its claws into the salmon. I could see it all with my new binoculars, but I wanted a better look. Entertaining Beginning Dialogue! “We’ve got to get out of here!” screamed Bart and Lisa. They knew that sneaking into the old basement might get them into some trouble, but they had no idea it would be this scary. Entertaining Beginning Sound! The beast’s terrifying roar shook the ground. I didn’t want to get any closer but I knew my brother wouldn’t feel the same way. Entertaining Beginning Cliffhanger Question! The squirrel clung to his acorn for dear life as he sank deeper and deeper. Suddenly, he was surrounded by hungry piranas. As I watched the movie I wondered if there were any piranas in the river by our house. Entertaining Beginning Look at the pictures and read the boring beginnings beneath them. Your job is to revise 3 of them so they become entertaining beginnings. The first one is an example featuring each type of entertaining beginning. Grab the reader’s attention! Remember: You are writing a very short story so you need to start your story as close to the Main Event as possible. On the day of the camping trip I woke up early. I had some toast and peanutbutter and then I got ready to leave for the woods. Action: I swung my backpack over my shoulder and headed into the woods. It would be a great day for a campout! Dialogue: “This is the perfect spot to set up the tent!” I said. Sound: HOOO! HOOO! An owl swooped down toward me, complaining that I’d set up my tent in his part of the forest. Cliffhanger Question: As I headed out for a hike I hoped I wouldn’t run into any grizzly bears. One night I went in to explore a haunted house. This is a story about how I got chased by a tiger. One day Jack decided to go fishing at the lake. I was bored. There was nothing to do. There was nothing on TV. Maybe I would call Joe and we could go and catch frogs. One rainy night I got locked out of my house. This is a story about me. One day I sat outside. I like summer. I like to go outside. Entertaining Beginning: Check Point! Now that you’ve written a few Entertaining Beginnings, it is time to stop and see how you are doing. Choose one of your Entertaining Beginnings to analyze. First answer this question: How does my Entertaining Beginning grab the reader’s attention? Now it is time to show your writing to a few classmates. Ask them to fill in the blank in the following statements: The way you _________________________ will grab the reader’s attention. You should try ________________________ to really grab the reader’s attention. Use your classmates’ feedback to improve one of your Entertaining Beginnings. Finally, you need to show me.