Rubi Almanza
Writing 116
Professor Kahlert
Style: Lessons in Clarity and Grace: Qualifiers
Exercise 7.3 (2,4,6)
2. Original: I will analyze Frost’s use of imagery of seasons in his longer poems published at the
end of his career.
Revision:
Without the metadiscourse:
... Frost’s use of imagery of seasons in his longer poems published at the end of his career.
Full sentence:
Frost used imagery of seasons in his longer poems published at the end of his career.
4. Original: In this essay, I analyze the mistaken assumption underlying Freud’s interpretation
of dreams.
Revision:
Without the metadiscourse:
… the mistaken assumption underlying Freud’s interpretation of dreams.
Full sentence:
Freud’s interpretation of dreams has been underlain by mistaken assumptions.
6. Original: This article discusses needle sharing among drug users.
Revision:
Without the metadiscourse:
… needle sharing among drug users.
Full sentence:
Drug users share needles.
Exercise 7.4 (2)
2. Original: In this particular section, I intend to discuss my position about the possible need to
dispense with the standard approach to plea bargaining. I believe this for two reasons. The first
reason is that there is the possibility of letting hardened criminals avoid receiving their just
punishment. The second reason is the following: plea bargaining seems to encourage a growing
lack of respect for the judicial system.
Revision:
I discuss the need to dispense with the standard approach to plea bargaining. Plea bargaining is
necessary for two reasons. First, hardened criminals may not be receiving their just punishment.
And second, it encourages a growing lack of respect for the judicial system.