Heald College Teri Tosspon 50 minutes to write, worth 80 points 2-3 pages long Address ALL of these questions Summarize (tell what happened) What kind of intro (look at your textbook)? What was the main point? How did the author support his/her point? Write (at least 2 paragraphs) about what YOU think: did you like it? Was it a powerful story? Did it remind you of anything? Can compare to others. In groups of 3-4, you will be assigned to create a graphic or symbol to represent one of the following areas: Paragraph Development Paragraph Length Paragraph Unity Paragraph Coherence Paragraph Sequence Transitions Planning Thesis essay map: can include a basic “map” in your introduction paragraph Must support the THESIS of the paper The most GENERAL sentence in your paragraph Announces what your paragraph will be about Focus! Revise so they are specific and Unfocused: too many people treat animals badly in experiments. Focused: The cosmetic industry often harms animals in unnecessary experiments. Placing your sentence Put it where it FEELS natural Can go 1st in paragraph, 2nd, or even last. Include enough supporting evidence to make readers understand the topic Make the info clear and specific Avoid vague generalities and repetitious ideas Long enough to accomplish its purpose and short enough to be interesting Avoid the one- or two-sentence paragraph Divide longish paragraphs at a logical point; use transitional phrases Recognizable order Time, space, deductive, inductive Use transitional words/phrases Give examples Comparison/Contrast Sequence Results Repeat key words (substitute pronouns too) Avoid whiplash – maintain coherence! Sequence Consider logic and effect Transitions Use to link paragraphs and/or ideas Vary the type and placement to avoid boredom 1st • First • Begin 2nd • Next • In addiction 3rd • Finally • Then A complete sentence requires: Subject: someone or something doing the action Verb: the action Complete thought How can Verb you check? Subject Add the words “It is true that…” before your Francis named her new mutt Super Dog because he could sentence. Fragments won’t make sense Intentional leap fences in a fragments single bound. used for emphasis or to convey a tone. 1. According to Lawrence M. Ausbel, author of B. 1. The idea of a credit card first appeared in “Credit in the McGraw-hill of 1887.Cards,” According to Lawrence M.Encyclopedia Ausbel, Economics, ideaCards,” of a credit card first appeared author of the “Credit in the McGraw-hill in 1887. 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Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5) Reviewing Chapter 20– Identify Fragment or Run-On To be a complete sentence Subject Verb Express a complete thought ▪ Watch for words like “although” and “because”! Run on = combined incorrectly linked w/ only a comma = comma splice Teams stand in “batting order” in the dugout (each team should have a row). Answer the questions on the worksheet to “hit” A Single – identify if it is a Fragment (F), Run On (R) or Sentence (S) (take 1 base) A Double – correct the F or R (2 bases) 2nd Inning Home Run : identify Subject AND Verb Strike Out: incorrectly identify (F/R/S or Subject/Verb), incorrectly correct the sentence. Giving directions (not informing) Give • Select appropriate subject • Describe appropriate equipment Good • Define special terms • State steps in a logical order Directions • Explain each stop clearly, sufficiently, accurately • Organize steps effectively • If you have many small steps, organize them into chunks! *see 211* Include a thesis! What is your topic and what are you going to tell us about it? Pay special attention to the conclusion Tell us the significance, or end with a story – just don’t abruptly end! TO BID THE WORLD FAREWELL Pg 218 (old: 207) Answer questions 1-10 PREPARING FOR THE JOB INTERVIEW Pg 227 (old 212) Answer questions 1-10 •Assign 1 person to each story (if you finish early, answer your questions then begin reading your partner’s story). •Each of you answer 1-10 (end of your story0 on your own paper. •Then, talk through your answers. •Each of you write your own response: •How are these articles similar? •How are they different? • What do you think about them (like/dislike, understood/didn’t)? Pg 212 (old: pg 200) Once you’ve chosen a topic, use the Process Analysis Topic Starter Rough Draft (2 copies) due 12/16/2010 @ beginning of class next week Final draft due 01/06/2011 (though I would appreciate it via email by 01/01/2011 Avoid fragments/comma splices (p 565A 1-5, + 567A 1-5) Write first draft – Process Analysis Essay (50 points, 2 copies due @ beginning of next week) Write a reflection/journal about anything you want (1-2 pages)