ENGLISH 105 – MEETING 3
Chpt 4, Chpt 20, Readings, Writing the Rough
Draft of your Narrative paper.
CHAPTER 4, PG 81 (NEW), 70 (OLD)
What is the difference between a lead-in and a
thesis?
 How to Write a Good Lead-In
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Get a partner
 Draw a # from Mrs. T (1 per partner group)
 Discuss your # (pgs 82-84) for 5 minutes
 Explain your # to the class
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AVOID ERRORS IN LEAD-INS
Make sure your lead-in introduces your thesis
 Keep your lead-in brief
 Don’t begin with an apology or complaint
 Don’t assume your audience already knows your
subject matter
 Stay clear of overused lead-ins (dictionary
definitions anyone?!)
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GOOD LEAD-INS
Go to
http://ttosspon.wikispaces.com/Sample_Essays
 Spend a few minutes reading these online essays
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What kinds of lead-ins do you see?
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Can you find the thesis sentence? What is the topic?
Think about it! Write down the title and the type of
lead-in it has, and then talk with a partner about it.
HOW TO WRITE A GOOD CONCLUDING
PARAGRAPH
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
A Summary of the thesis and the essay’s major
points (most useful in LONG essays)
An evaluation of the importance of the essay’s
subject
A statement of the essay’s broader implications
A recommendation or call to action
A warning based on the essay’s thesis
A quotation from an authority
An anecdote/brief example that
emphasizes/sums up
CONCLUSIONS (CONT.)
8.
9.
10.
11.
12.
An image or description that lends finality
A rhetorical question
A forecast
An ironic twist/witticism/pun/playful use of
words
Return to the technique used in your lead in
A CONCISE GUIDE TO PUNCTUATION:
PG 573 (NEW), PG 545 (OLD)
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Punctuation does not exist to make your life
complicated.
Now, look at the difference punctuation makes!
Has the tiger been fed Bill?
Has the tiger been fed, Bill?
"Woman, without her man, is nothing"
 "Woman: without her, man is nothing"
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THE PERIOD
Use it to end a statement.
 Use it to end a command or request.
 Use it after initials and abbreviations
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Only one period is necessary if the sentence ends
with an abbreviation:
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The elephant was delivered C.O.D.
QUESTION MARK
?
 Use it after every direct question
 NO question mark is necessary if question is
indirect
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EXCLAMATION POINT
!
 Follows words or phrases or sentences that show
strong feeling.
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THE DREADED COMMA!
1.
Separates 2 independent clauses (basically 2
complete sentences) that are combined with a
conjunction (FANBOYS- for, and, nor, but, or,
yet, so)
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2.
3.
4.
5.
Do NOT join 2 sentences using ONLY a comma.
Look out for “however”. It is NOT a FANBOY and
cannot join 2 sentences together.
Sets off an introductory phrase
Sets off nonessential phrases/clauses
To show continuity when using conjunctive
adverbs such as however, moreover, thus
Separate a series of words
THE DREADED COMMA - CONTINUED
6.
7.
8.
9.
10.
11.
12.
13.
Separate adjectives of equal emphasis
Set off a direct address
Set off items in addresses and dates
Set off a degree or title following a name
Set off dialogue from the speaker
Set off “yes” and “no” and other weak
exclamations.
Set off interrupters and other parentheticals
NOT to be used lightly, but when you need to
take a breath (read it aloud and try it out!) and
when you need it to make sense.
PRACTICE WHAT YOU’VE LEARNED
Comma Errors – 551 (old), 579 (new) –
B. Study the comma rules 5-13… Correct any
comma errors you see in the following sentences.
1.
1.Yes
Yes,
Hortense
Hortense,
in in
thethe
1920’s
1920s
young
young
women
women
diddid
indeed
indeed
cut
cut
their
their
hair
hair,
raise
raise
their
their
hemlines
hemlines,
dabdab
perfume
perfume
behind
behind
their
their
knees
knees,
and
and
dance
dance
thethe
Charleston.
Charleston.
PRACTICE – B PG 551-552 (OLD), 579-580 (NEW)
2.
2.In
In1873
1873,Cornell
CornellUniversity
Universitycancelled
cancelledthe
theschool’s
first intercollgiate
footballfootball
game with
school’s
first intercollgiate
gameMichigan
with
when thewhen
president
announced
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Michigan
the president
announced,
will
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men to30
travel
miles 400
merely
to merely
agitate to
a
not
men400
to travel
miles
bag of awind.”
agitate
bag of wind.”
3. Jan
Jan,Marian
Marian,Donna
Donna,
Ann,
and
Cissy
graduated
Ann
and
Cissy
graduated
from
high
school
onon
June
5, 51964,
from
high
school
June
1964in
inTexarkana,
Texarkana
Texas,
Texasininthe
theold
oldWalnut
WalnutStreet
StreetAuditorium
Auditorium
4.
said Henry
Henry,“but
4.“I
“Imay
may be
beaaman
manof
offew
fewopinions,”
opinions” said
“but
I insist
that
I am
neither
against
I insist
that
I am
neither
forfor
nornor
against
apathy.”
apathy.”
PRACTICE WHAT YOU’VE LEARNED
5. Did you know,
know for
forinstance
instance,that
thatearly
earlyAmerican
American
settlers
settlers
once
once
thought
thought
the
the
tomato
tomato
was
was
soso
poisonous
poisonous
they
they
used
used
the
the
plant
plant
only
only
forfor
decoration?
decoration?
Homework:
due next week – written out on separate paper
Comma Errors – 551 (old), 579 (new) . A 1-5
SEMICOLON (;)
1.
2.
3.
Use to link 2 closely related sentences/
independent clauses
Use to avoid a comma splice when connecting 2
independent clauses with however, moreover,
thus, etc.
Use between a items in a series that already
have a comma.
PRACTICE WHAT YOU’VE LEARNED
Homework
Semicolon Errors #1-5
– 553-554 (old), 581-582 (new) –
RESPONSE TO LITERATURE
“…MANZANAR” OR “..TALKIES”
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Choose one of the activities listed to respond to the story
you read for this week. Do it on a separate piece of paper
(turn it in), alone/with a partner/in a small group (3-4
people) (1 turn-in per group with ALL names on it).
Draw a symbol or picture that represents the story (the
more detailed the better)
Write a script of an interview of the narrator/main
character for a news broadcast (can be during or after the
experience mentioned).
Write a response letter from another character’s perspective
For “Manzanar” only: Research the Japanese internment in
America and report to the class.
PROFESSIONALIZING OUR WRITING
Words to avoid
 Look at the list of words provided. Read why
each one is not desirable.
 Brainstorm! Come up with some synonyms for
these words so that we can avoid using them!
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WRITING YOUR NARRATIVE
Paper assignment: take your outline and WRITE
your story.
MUST be in the MLA format (titles, headings, pgs)
(if you are citing sources, we will learn how to do so
in the coming weeks, but you may see a sample
in Chpt 14 (Old book pg 392 sample on pg 409.
New book pg 402 sample essay on pg 422)
HOMEWORK
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Narrative Essay
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Punctuation: due next week – written out on
separate paper
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1st draft DUE at the beginning of NEXT MEETING (50
points) – bring 2 copies (0 points will be awarded if we
begin class and you do not have a 2 copies of a completed
draft)
Comma Errors – 551 (old), 579 (new) . A 1-5
Semicolon Errors #1-5: 553-554 (old), 581-582 (new)
Choose a book to read for this class;
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You will propose the book (and WHY you would like to
read it) to me next week. You can get one from your local
library, buy it online @ Amazon, borrow it from a friend. It
MUST be a book you have not read before.