Will Rogers, famous comedian, on the way lawyers write Will Rogers (November 4, 1879 – August 15, 1935) was an American cowboy, comedian, humorist, social commentator, vaudeville performer, actor, and one of the best-known celebrities in the 1920s and 1930s. Then if you give it to The you read If it’sminute in a few words another lawyer to and is plain andyou something and understandable read and he doesn’t can’t understand it, onlycan one way, was know justalmost whatititbe you written by a nonmeans, why then sure that it was lawyer. you can drawn upbebysure a it was drawn up by a lawyer. lawyer. Canadian Bar Association and Canadian Bankers Association Joint Committee Report (1990) “The Decline and Fall of Gobbledygook: Report on Plain Language Documentation” Legalese is a style of writing used by lawyers that is incomprehensible to ordinary readers. Is legal writing different from (or superior) to ordinary writing in English? UCLA Prof. David Mellinkoff: If it’s bad writing by the standards of ordinary English, it is bad legal writing. If it’s good writing by the standards of ordinary English, it is more likely to be good legal writing. Is legal writing different from (or superior) to ordinary writing in English? Richard Wydick Professor Emeritus at the Good legal writing University California at should notofdiffer, Davis School of Law without good reason, Lecturer, International from ordinary wellLegislative Drafting Institute written English.... presented in New Orleans the Public Lawlegal Center, a Inbyshort, good joint venture of Tulane and writing is plain Loyola law schools English. National University of Singapore, Legal Writing Programme, 2001 Judge Gerald Lebovits, New York City Civil Court; faculty member: Columbia University - Law School, Fordham University School of Law, and New York University School of Law The hallmark of good legal writing is that an intelligent lay person will understand it on the first read. “Free at Last From Obscurity: Clarity — Part 2” Legal writing should be directed to smart high-school students. If they understand you, so will a more educated readership. Keep your words, sentence structure, paragraphs, and organization simple. Complex prose is weak prose. The erudite explain difficult concepts in easy-to-read language. “Legal-Writing Myths — Part II” US Supreme Court Justice Clarence Thomas on accessibility Bryan Garner’s interviews with US Supreme Court justices I’d love one day for someone at a gas station who is not a lawyer to come up to me and say to me, “You know, I read your opinion, and I don’t agree with you.” Wouldn’t that be wonderful? “I’m not a lawyer, I read your opinion, I understood it, I don’t agree with you, but thanks for making it accessible.” So we talk of it in terms of accessibility. US Supreme Court Justice Stephen Breyer on clarity for ordinary persons If an ordinary person who is not a lawyer can understand it, I think that gives weight to what the Court does, and law is supposed to be intelligible. They should be able to follow it without having to take special vocabulary courses. Garner: Do you think it matters whether ordinary people can understand judicial opinions? And the purpose of an opinion is to give your reasons, and you give your reasons both for guidance, but also it should be possible for readers to criticize the writer. Now, people can’t criticize what I say, they can’t explain why they think it’s wrong, unless they can understand. Michigan Bar Journal article What is legalese? Prof. Richard Wydick, UC Davis School of Law, in “Plain English for Lawyers” (1979) We lawyers cannot write • wordy plain English. We use eight words to say what could be • unclear said in two. We use old, • pompous arcane phrases to express commonplace ideas. • dull Seeking to be precise, we become redundant. Seeking to be cautious, we become verbose. Our sentences twist on, phrase within clause, within clause, glazing the eyes and numbing the minds of our readers. The result is a writing style that is: Four elements of legalese Prof. David Mellinkoff, UCLA School of Law, in his book “Legal Writing: Sense and Nonsense” (1982) 1. Formalisms, such as comes now 2. Archaic words, such as hereby 3. Redundancies, such as each and every 4. Latin words, such as per curiam aforementioned foregoing henceforth hereafter hereby herewith hereunder heretofore thereafter thereof therewith whereas wherein whereof Characteristics of legalese (1/3) The legal vocabulary is commonly archaic and inflated. It abounds in: doublets and triplets (give, devise, and bequeath); here-, there-, and where- words (herein, thereto); Prof. Joseph Kimble, Cooley College of Law, Michigan, USA; Burton Award for “Reform in Law” Federal Rules of Civil Procedure (2007); Federal Rules of Evidence (2011) multiword prepositions (with regard to, subsequent to); other wordy phrases (in the event that, until such time as); strange, useless jargon (inter alia; Further affiant sayeth naught; In witness whereof, the parties hereto have affixed their signatures). Characteristics of legalese (2/3) Passive voice and abstract nouns (in place of strong verbs) are overused. Conditions are often piled up at the beginning of the sentence. Main verb is delayed by putting lists of items in the subject or by embedding Legal clauses between the main subject and sentences verb. tend to be long and Exceptions are tacked onto the end (sometimes in so-called provisos) instead flabby. of putting them in a new sentence. From BSP Circular No. 702 (protection of credit card holders from unfair collection practices) Banks/quasi-banks and their subsidiary or affiliate credit card companies shall also provide the following information to their cardholders: 235 words in one sentence 1. A table of the applicable fees, penalties and interest rates on credit card transactions, including the period covered by and the manner of and reason for the imposition of such penalties, fees and interest; fees and applicable conversion reference rates for third currency transactions, in plain sight and language, on materials for marketing credit cards, such as brochures, flyers, primers and advertising materials, on credit card application forms, and on credit card billing statements: Provided, That these disclosures are in addition to the full disclosure of the fees, charges and interest rates in the terms and conditions of the credit card agreement found elsewhere on the application form and billing statement; and 2. A reminder to the card holder in the monthly billing statement, or its equivalent document, that payment of only the minimum amount due or any amount less than the total amount due for the billing cycle/period, would mean the imposition of interest and/or other charges; Provided, That such table of fees, penalties and interest rates and reminder shall be printed in plain language and in bold black letters against a light or white background, and using the minimum Arial 12 theme font and size, or its equivalent in readability, and on the first page, if the applicable document has more than one page. Characteristics of legalese (3/3) Kimble in “Lifting the Fog of Legalese” More generally, legal writing tends to be poorly organized and poorly formatted. And in its effort to be precise and exhaustive, it becomes excessively detailed and too often sinks into redundancy, ambiguity, and error. The result is legalese — a form of prose so jumbled, dense, verbose, and overloaded that it confuses and frustrates most everyday readers and even many lawyers. Legalese violates nearly every principle of good writing 1/4 Mark S. Mathewson, Director of Legal Publishing for the Illinois State Bar Association (Michigan Bar Journal January 2003) “One L” by Scott Turow “It was something Classic account of life during the like stirring first year at Harvard Law School concrete with my eyelashes.” Legalese violates nearly every principle of good writing 2/4 The irony of legalese:For the most part, the substance of the law— the more you know about the stuff you thought words and how to arrange would be difficult—is them, the more frustrated easy compared to the you are by a ‘‘language’’ that words, phrases, violates nearly every clauses, sentences, and principle of good writing. paragraphs under which it is buried. Legalese violates nearly every principle of good writing 3/4 Some distinctive features of legalese include the following: Arcane and archaic vocabulary Overspecificity and redundancy Abstraction and indirectness Long sentences and complex, convoluted constructions Grammatical complexity Legalese violates nearly every principle of good writing 4/4 Jury instructions It will be your duty, when the case is submitted to you, to determine from the evidence admitted for your consideration, applying thereto the rules of law contained in the instructions given by the court, whether or not the defendant is guilty of the offense as charged. Your duty is to determine whether the defendant is guilty of the offense charged. You must do this by applying the law contained in these instructions to the evidence admitted for your consideration. Reasons to avoid legalese The costs of legalese are not entirely stylistic. Many studies have shown how it costs clients money, impairs persuasiveness, and generally detracts from a writer’s reputation. “Lifting the Fog of Legalese” by Joseph Kimble Australian company sues because it didn’t understand the contract Alternative to legalese: Plain English Plain English requires the writer to take each sentence and ask: Will this be misunderstood? Is this the clearest, Many lawyers These questions don’t demand know focus how to write in plain efficient on message, English. Theyrespect never unlearned for audience, the badmost habits they way writeinit? and intent gleaned from to be thecoherent. poor roleGood models theytoread law legal writers school. Although writeknowledgeable the document in the law, lawyers Islearn this word in asociety’s — way thatbest bestpaid serves writers the — need to more necessary? reader.communication. about They convey ideas with the greatest possible clarity. Lawyers’ In defenseobjection of Plain Language to Plain Language The need to express complex ideas precisely makes plain languagePainting with print: Incorporating concepts of typographic and layout impossible. design into the text of legal writing documents, by Ruth Anne Robbins Plain English used in the UK Inland Revenue Tax Law Rewrite project (started 1996 and ended March 2010) Rewritten laws (since 1996): The project’s total cost: £26m Savings for businesses and individuals: £4bn a year Capital Allowances Act 2001 Income Tax (Earnings and Pensions) Act 2003 Income Tax (Pay as You Earn) Regulations 2003 Income Tax (Trading and Other Income) Act 2005 Income Tax Act 2007 Corporation Tax Act 2009 Corporation Tax Act 2010 Taxation (International and Other Provisions) Act 2010 From legalese to Plain English Disclaimer by American Bar Association: “The materials contained herein represent the opinions and views of the author, and should not be construed to be the views or opinions of the law firms or companies with whom such persons are in partnership with, Bryan A. Garner, associated with, or employed by, nor of the editor in chief, American Bar Association, unless adopted Black’s Law Dictionary pursuant to the bylaws of the Association.” Plain English disclaimer by Garner: “The essays in this volume represent the author’s views -- not those of the American Bar Association.” Garner’s Dirty Dozen (words to avoid) 1. 2. 3. 4. and/or deem herein know all men by these presents 5. provided that provided, however, that providing 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. 11. 12. pursuant to said same shall such whereas witnesseth Legalese: formalisms and archaic words Legal language in regulations and other documents is a major source of annoying jargon. Avoid the following terms, among others: above-mentioned aforementioned foregoing henceforth hereafter hereby herewith hereunder heretofore thereafter thereof therewith whatsoever whereat wherein whereof Plain English in construction contracts 1/2 CICC Model Terms Of Construction Contracts For SubContract Works Primary drafter of the Model Contract: Sr Noushad Ali Naseem Ameer Ali, Professor in University Technology Malaysia Plain English in construction contracts 2/2 Before: This Contract shall be deemed to be a Malaysian Contract and shall accordingly be construed according to the laws for the time being in force in Malaysia and the Malaysian Courts shall have exclusive jurisdiction to hear and determine all actions and proceedings arising out of this Contract and the Contractor hereby submits to the jurisdiction of the Malaysian Courts for the purposes of any such actions and proceedings. After: Malaysian law governs this contract and Malaysian courts have exclusive jurisdiction. Before: 69 words in one sentence After: 11 words Examples from Rhode Island 1/3 “Plain English Is the Best Policy” by John Aloysius Cogan Jr. Before After What happens if myas spouse and I both The plan covering the patient have health coverage for our child? a dependent child of a person is covered under more than whose date Ifofyour birthchild occurs insurance policy, the policy of the earlier in theone calendar year shall adultthe whose birthday is earlier in the year be primary over plan pays the claim first. For example: Your covering thebirthday patientisas a in March; your spouse’s dependent ofbirthday a person is in whose May. March comes earlier in date of birth the occurs laterMay, in the year than so your policy will pay forprovided. your child’s claim first. calendar year Examples from Rhode Island 2/3 After Before What happens if I am separated or However, in the case oflegally a dependent divorced? child of legally separated or divorced If yourthe childplan is covered by your and also by the parents, covering the policy patient of your separated or divorced spouse, the policy as apolicy dependent of the parent with legal of the parent legal custody pays first. In other custody, or as awith dependent of the words, if you have legal custody, your plan pays first. custodial parent’s spouse (i.e., The same rule applies even if your child is covered by a stepparent), shall be primary over the For example: health insurance policy of a stepparent. planYour covering the patient as acustody, and his/her new former spouse has legal spouse’s of policy child. legal The new spouse’s dependent thecovers parentyour without policy will pay your child’s claim first. custody. Examples from Rhode Island 3/3 After Before Your injury or illness haveincluding been caused In the event a thirdmay party, yourby someone else. If so, we can collect from that person any claims we employer/agent, is or may be responsible for pay on your behalf. For example, if we pay for your causing an illness or injury which hospital stay, we can collect thefor amount wewe paid for your provided any benefit or made anyyou. payment hospital stay from the person who hurt We cantoalso collectwe payment from that person if he she agreed you, shall succeed to youreven right of or recovery to pay you directly or has beenparty. ordered by is a court to pay against such responsible This our right you. If the person who caused your injury has already of subrogation. If you do not seek damages forpaid you, we can collect from you the amount he or she has your illness or injury, you must permit us to already paid to you. This is called subrogation. In addition, initiate on your behalf if you dorecovery not try to collect money from(including the personthe who right toyour bring suityou in your caused injury, agreename). to let us do so in your name. From the State Bar of Michigan Plain English Committee 1/2 Before After I give my Agent the power to exercise or perform any act, power, duty, right, or obligation whatsoever that I have or may I give my agent hereafter acquire, relating to any person, matter, transaction, or property, real or personal, tangible intangible, theorpower tonow doowned or hereafter acquired by me, including, without limitation, the anything that following specifically enumerated powers. I grant to my Agent full power and authority to do everything in exercising I have anecessary right or any of the powers herein granted as fully as I might or could do duty to do, now if personally present, with full power of substitution or orconfirming in theallfuture. revocation, hereby ratifying and that my Agent shall lawfully do or cause to be done by virtue of this Power of Attorney and the powers herein granted. From the State Bar of Michigan Plain English Committee 2/2 Before “[Name] informed you of the procedures for calculating interest for insufficient estimates. If the enclosed invoice(s) include charges for insufficient estimates, a detailed insufficient estimated [sic] used to calculate these charges is also enclosed.” After “How to pay your bill: To avoid penalties as well as further interest, you must pay this bill by its due date.” Examples from Kimble 1/3 Before After Please be advised that I am in receipt of your letter in regard to the above matter and have enclosed my response to the same. I received your letter about the Spann case and have enclosed my response. From a jury instruction: The fact that the defendant did not testify is not a factor from which any inference unfavorable to the defendant may be drawn. Although Mr. Charles didn’t testify, you should not hold that against him. Don’t consider it in any way. Examples from Kimble 2/3 Before After In case any building or structure is erected, constructed, reconstructed, altered, converted or maintained, or any If any use of land or of a building, structure or land is used, or any land is divided into structure — article or if the lots, blocks or sites in violation of this or of any local law, structure violates ordinance or other regulation madeitself under— authority conferred article of orthe a local or thereby, the proper localthis authorities town, law in addition to regulation, the proper other remedies, may institute any appropriate action or authorities mayconstruction, take proceedings to prevent town such unlawful erection, reconstruction, alteration, conversion, maintenance, legal action to correct or use or division of land, to restrain, or abate and suchto violation, to endcorrect the violation prevent the occupancy of said building, structure prevent any illegal useorofland or to prevent any illegal act, conduct, business or use in or about the premises. such premises. Examples from Kimble 3/3 Before (from a standard provision in contracts): After If any term, provision, Section, or portion of this Agreement, or the application thereof to any person, place, or circumstance, shall be held to be invalid, void, or unenforceable by a court of competent jurisdiction, the remaining terms, provisions, Sections, and portions of this Agreement shall nevertheless continue in full force and effect without being impaired or invalidated in any way. If a court invalidates any portion of this agreement, the rest of it remains in effect. Example from bank document Acceptance by the bank of payments in arrears shall not Irregular Payments constitute a waiver of or otherwise affect any acceleration payment hereunder or other right or remedy exercisable You accept late hereunder. No failure or delay on thecan part of the bank in partial exercising, and no failure to filepayments or otherwise or perfect or enforce the Bank’s security in or with respect even to any payments, collateral, shall operate as a waiver of any right are or remedy though they hereunder or release any of the undersigned, and the marked “payment in obligations of the undersigned may be extended or waived full,” without losing by the bank, contract or other agreement evidencing or relating to any obligation or collateral may be amended any of your rights and any collateral exchanged, surrendered, or otherwise under this note. dealt with in accordance with any agreement relevant thereto, all without affecting the liability of any of the undersigned. Insurance company form letter Before After We have recently implemented enhancement We arean a little late in to our computer system that will enable us to sending your renewal provide better service to our valued customers. documents because we This has resulted in a slight delay in the have made a change in our processing of your renewal. The difference computer systemyou in order will notice is in the payment schedule. Your service. to provide better annual policy premium has been divided over 11 will Your annual premium (eleven) months, and as now a result monthly be your divided over 11 payment will have increased due to the reduced months instead of 12 so number of monthly installments. the monthly payment will increase slightly. Example: DSWD website Does availing of the 20% senior citizens discount on hospitalization or medical services preclude utilizing PHILHEALTH benefits at the same time? No, a senior citizens discount on hospitalization and/or medical services can be availed of separately. Thus, PHILHEALTH coverage can still be utilized on top of the 20% senior citizens discount. Can I use the 20% senior citizens discount on hospitalization or medical services and my PHILHEALTH benefits at the same time? Yes. Example: PVAO website Educational Benefits heretofore Who may enjoy the benefits? The following persons who have never heretofore enjoyed educational benefit under Philippine law nor under United States law, who desires to study, shall upon certification of the Administrator, be admitted to any school, college, university or institution authorized by the Government. A. Veterans of the Philippine revolutions against Spain and the Philippine-American War; B. Veterans of the Philippine Army or of any recognized or deserving guerilla organization who took active participatin in the resistance movement and/or in the liberation drive against the enemy during World War II from 8 December 1941 to 2 December 1945; C. Veterans of the Philippine Expeditionary Forces to Korea (PEFTOK) during the period from 15 September 1950 to 31 May 1955; D. Veterans of the Philippine Civic Action Group or Philippine contingent in Vietnam (PHILCAG) during the period from 31 August 1964 to December 1969. E. The unmarried surviving spous of the deceased veteran; or F. One (1) direct descendant of a veteran in whose favor he renounces such right or one (1) direct descendant of the deceased veteran in whose favor such right is applied for by the surviving spouse or legal guardian of such descendant. The term “descendant” shall refer to a child of the veteran, or if no one is qualified, to a grandchild, and so on. Possible revisions without legalese Educational Benefits Educational Benefits Who may enjoy the benefits? Who may enjoy the benefits? The following persons who have never heretofore enjoyed educational benefit under Philippine law nor under United States law, who desires to study, shall upon certification of the Administrator, be admitted to any school, college, university or institution authorized by the Government. Upon certification by the Administrator, the following persons who have not previously enjoyed educational benefit under Philippine law or United States law will be admitted to any institution authorized by the Government: Legalese: PVAO citizen’s charter ACCRUED / POSTHUMOUS PENSION benefits Represents pensions and other benefits, to include arrears or unpaid pensions, which were not received by a veteran or a surviving spouse before his or her death. The benefit/s therefore accrue/s to the deceased pensioner’s legal beneficiaries. Processing of Accrued / Posthumous pension involves two major stages 1) computation of arrears and 2) issuance of statement of distribution which takes time due to its quasi-legal nature. quasi-legal “Why lawyers can’t write” Bryan A. Garner, American Bar Association Journal, March 2013 Dunning-Kruger (1999 study, University) Lawyers on theeffect whole don’t writeCornell well and have noorclue that they don’t write well. Unskillful unknowledgeable people: (1) often think they are quite skillful or knowledgeable, While lawyers are the most highly paid (2) can’t recognize genuine skill in others, the rhetoricians in the world, we’re among most inept wielders of words. (3) uniformly fail to recognize the extremity of their own inadequacy, and (4) can recognize and acknowledge their own previous unskillfulness only after highly effective training in the skill. Dunning-Kruger effect Bryan A. Garner, American Bar Association Journal, March 2013 Skillful people tend to overestimate others’ skills and underestimate their own. Designing and improving websites for lower-literacy users Improving websites for lower-literacy users can also help higher-literacy users. Jakob Nielsen People capable of understanding complex information nonetheless is considered preferred more straightforward as “the world’s information. leading expert on Web Revising the text for a broad usability” by consumer audience makes a good U.S. News and site excellent and benefits all users. World Report.