Draft1.1: Finding CH10 Relations
• Your Draft1.1 is an analysis of the article you
find (NOT a CH10 article)
• You need to look at your article and make a
claim about it in terms of writing principles
(and, if helpful, CH10 articles)
• This is NOT you claiming something about the
content of your article (e.g. its position on a
certain topic and your position) but rather
about the effectiveness of the article writing
Draft1.1: Finding CH10 Relations
• A claim about effectiveness can be positive or
negative – but positive may well be easier
• Remember…You are linking two CH10 articles
to your article, but you do NOT have to link
the two CH10 articles to one another!
– 1st CH10 article might support one principle
– 2nd CH10 article might support another principle
Best Way to Start Effort…
1. Read everything…get to know articles
2. Identify what each article uses (principles)
3. Find the patterns between your object article
and at least 2 CH10 articles
– Intersecting patterns between articles
– Likely need 3 points for discussion (estimate)
4. Form a working thesis (How do principles impact reader?)
5. Write Rough Draft - Follow Particular Structure
– Intro&Thesis / Proof 1 / Proof 2 / Proof 3 / Conc.
6. REFINE Working Thesis
– Writing essays is a multiple-draft, cyclic process
Some Writing Principles
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Repetition (words or motifs)
Style – Humor, Business, Descriptive…
Appeals (emotion, fact, ethics)
Tone – somber, upbeat, fatalistic…
Figurative language (metaphor, simile, metonymy)
Analogies (comparison between 2 things in order to explain one)
Rhyme (poetic qualities)
Word choice (unique/interesting/unusual words)
Wordplay (words used in unusual ways – ex: puns, double-entendres)
Organization (Rodriguez, forms other than thesis/proof)
Deliberate/Overt Exaggeration
Deliberate/Overt Violations of Grammar (e.g. Cormac McCarthy / e.e cummings)
There are more possibilities….
Writing principles refer to anything involving the particulars/elements of writing.
They are also sometimes called rhetorical devices
Group Work – Do the exact same
thing for Draft1.1 work
• Rick Reilly + at least 2 Ch10 articles (group choice)
• Identify the patterns (i.e. principles-in-common)
– What does Reilly use? Who in CH10 uses same
principle?
– Break the text up into little parts…analyze pcs
• Craft a thesis statement (Claim / Reasons)
– How does the rhetorical devices impact the reader?
• If time – select some quotes to support reasons
Chapter 10 Articles I Might Consider Using
With Reilly
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Sedaris – his humor is based on a painful experience / Reilly uses humor to discuss a life-death issue
(humor and pathos in common)
Douglass – his use of metaphor, or even repetition of certain key words here – read and write, perhaps
better…learn. These 1-3 words are the key to freedom, to “life,” and his writing centers around those
words in the same way Reilly’s centers around net.
Rodriguez – use of anecdotes/vignettes…Reilly uses anecdotes (little stories as well). Rodriguez also
uses catch-phrases (i.e. particular words) los gringos, etc to make his writing personal
Malcolm X – words/books as salvation…single motif (i.e. book, or education) can change a life. With
Reilly, the right word (net) applied can save, and thus change, a life. X also uses wordplay – “skin
game”/”What’s your alma mater? Books” His words are also very controversial – rape, narcotized, war.
bell hooks – note strong emotional appeals here…also the different voices (italics). The emotion comes
from what? Her word choice, and the form of writing. Also, again, very strong repetition like Reilly.
Silko – motif of the story / storytelling as the means of expressing meaning and linking people with a
common culture. Reilly joins us in his plea by telling us the things that we identify with as well (thru
culture)… McDonald’s, Angelina Jolie, Little Justin’s Kickin Kangaroos, etc. Identity thru using words and
language in a particular way. We are big into celebrity – Reilly uses that. Also relates to Rodriguez in
same way. This is to some degree an alternative argument you could make…
Orwell – he is playing with words/inventing words…Reilly is doing some of that with one word. Further,
he is using humor to make a point about a very serious issue (e.g. joycamp for forced labor
camp)…words/language used in humorous ways with a very serious meaning behind it.
Example Thesis
Rick Reilly’s article fuses humor writing concerning a
serious subject with strong wordplay in order to
generate strong dynamic appeals. (appeals refers
to logos, pathos, ethos)
My Object (to analyze) is the Reilly article.
My Claim: Reilly generates strong dynamic appeals
Reasons (How/Why): humor of serious subj, repetition
Sources: Sedaris, Orwell…maybe even Douglass/X?
Could I use just one kind of principle?
In this case, maybe…and maybe not.
Example Thesis
In “Nothing but Nets,” Rick Reilly uses sports
analogies, a play on words, and a conversational
tone to create a personal understanding with the
reader.
The thesis is a ROAD MAP for your reader
My Object (to analyze) is the Reilly article.
Claim: Reilly creates a personal understanding with
the reader (i.e. a personal connection)
Reasons (How/Why): sports analogies, a play on
words, a conversational tone
POSSIBLE Sources: Sedaris, hooks, maybe even X here
(tone), Orwell (word play), Silko (analogies)
October 14: Participation Grade
Bring a TYPED Outline of your Draft1.1 Essay
1. Working Thesis Sentence (Claim/Reason)
2. Topic Sentence for first Reason
– 1-2 Quotes from article that support this (name article)
3. Topic sentence for second Reason
– 1-2 Quotes from article that support this (name article)
4. Topic Sentence for third Reason
– 1-2 Quotes from article that support this (name article)
Only have 2 Reasons/Proofs? Use 3 quotes per Reason
You will turn this in – make 2 copies (i.e. one for you)