Swap CEL- Read your partner’s
essay.
1) Does it make sense? Yes/No/Don’t know
2) Does the introduction have the 5 key points
Yes/No/Don’t know
3) Do they use the words of the question in each
paragraph? Yes/No/Don’t know
4) Is there a topic sentence at the start of each
paragraph? Yes/No/Don’t know?
5) Is the essay technically accurate Yes/No/Don’t
know
6) Have they used appropriate evidence?
Yes/No/Don’t know
Homework for Monday
• Learn poem
• Read over and highlight ‘War Photographer’
notes.
• Research topics for discursive essay.
Discursive essay – some ideas…
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Organ donation
Police corruption
Youth of today – ‘An Invisible Man’
Paralympics have changed the face of disability…
Paralympics – real Olympic values
The Royal family and publicity – (Harry and Catherine)
Anti Islam film and protests. Freedom of speech versus
respect/tolerance.
• Facebook – Friend or Foe. (bullying, party/death…)
• Supported study on Monday will review ‘War
Photographer’ work and finalise discursive essay.
‘War Photographer’ feedback
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Never use ‘you’ in essay. Keep it formal.
Never use abbreviations – etc, don’t, can’t
Always use capital letters and ‘ ’ for title.
A poet writes a poem not an author or a writer!
Topic sentences clearly say what a paragraph
will be about. Use them!
• Never start or end a paragraph with a quotation.
• Use : to introduce a quotation if it starts with a
capital letter.
Revise use of the apostrophe
• The poets use of rhyme scheme…
• All the photos the photographer
developed..
• Carol Ann Duffys use of setting
• The five poets we have studied are
• The plays main theme is…
• There are four plays on the curriculum.
• Carol Ann Duffys the poet laureate.
You must know
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There, their and they’re
Where, were and we’re
Your and you’re
To, two and too
How to list: The poet’s use of imagery,
tone, rhyme scheme and setting exposes
the theme of war.
• The poet’s use of metaphor and
onomatopoeia…
Topic sentences
Setting/contrast/theme
The use of contrast is very important
because the setting shows two sides of
the war photographer’s experience. On
one hand the opening line states:…
Imagery
Duffy uses imagery to expose the contrast
in the two worlds described in ‘War
Photographer’. When we first meet him
the photographer is described…
Tone
The unpredictable nature of war is
reflected in the way the poet uses tone to
show how quickly things can change. This
is clear at the start of stanza three with the
dramatic words ‘Something is happening’
Review your essay
• Take on board comments
• Take a highlighter and highlight your
quotations.
• Have you used enough?
• Only highlight a quotation once.
• Look at how much analysis ollows your
quotation.
• Is it enough?
Homework
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Groups of 4
Number yourself 1 – 4
Number 1 – oldest
Number 4 – youngest.
Rewrite a paragraph each
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Number 1 – Setting
Number 2 – Form
Number 3 – Imagery
Number 4 – Tone
You must:
Use topic sentence
Refer to question
Use appropriate quotations and analysis
Contrast this with the opposite evidence in the poem
using In contrast, On the otherhand, Whereas…
Another way the poet uses contrast to develop the theme of war
and its effects on the individual is through her use of form.
When we first look at the poem we see that it is set out in 4
equal stanzas, each has 6 lines and an identical rhyme scheme
(ABBCDD). This suggests that the poem has some order and is
written in a controlled style. This sense of discipline is
emphasised with the organisation in the darkroom, “spools of
suffering set out in ordered rows” which highlights the ‘ordered’
nature of the protagonist. However, on closer inspection it is
clear that the apparent order of the photographer’s life is an act.
When we examine the form of the poem we realise this
apparent order on the outside is contrasted with disorder on the
inside. For example the final line of stanza 1 has four sentences
‘Belfast. Beirut. Phnom Penh. All flesh is grass.’ These short
sentences reveal that life is short in these war zones. This is
contrasted with longer sentences which cover 4 lines such as:
‘Home again
to ordinary pain which simple weather can dispel
to fields which don’t explode beneath the feet
of running children in a nightmare heat.
This suggests to me that his time at home is long, tedious
and he seems to feel guilty that he can return to a safe place. This is
important in developing the theme that we are fortunate if we are
unaffected by war. The oxymoron of ‘ordinary pain’ suggests that he
has witnessed real pain and this contrasts with what we consider to
be pain at home. I believe that the poet’s use of a regular rhyme
scheme contrasted with the enjambment represents the war
photographer who appears to be very efficient on the outside but
inside his thoughts are chaotic. This is clear as he develops his
pictures, ‘his hands which did not tremble then though seem to now’
reveals that he is struggling to cope with what he has witnessed.
This is further illustrated when Duffy reveals that:
‘A stranger’s features
faintly start to twist before his eyes
a half formed ghost.’
The use of the word ‘twist’ reveals this is an unpleasant experience and
is painful for the photographer to witness. This is further enhanced
by the image of the ‘ghost’ which develops the theme of the poem
which is the fact that the impact of war is often psychological. Duffy
uses contrast in the form of the poem to develop the theme that the
photographer has been damaged by he experience of war despite
the fact he is not a soldier.
Peer review
• In your groups number your paragraph –
1,2,3,4
• swap paragraphs
• 1 pass to 2, 2 pass to 3, 3 pass to 4, 4
pass to 1.
• You will pass each paragraph around until
you are back with your own.
You must assess:
• Is this a good topic sentence? Words of
question/what will be discussed.
• If not – what is missing?
• Is there a clear line of thought?
• Is there appropriate evidence?
• Are quotations set out properly?
• Is there sufficient analysis?
• Has the person stated WHY this technique
is important. Why has it been used.
• Personal response.
Handouts
• You have a number of handouts from me to do
with ‘War Photographer’. These are your notes
and you must read and highlight key points.
• You must know this poem by heart.
• Write notes about what it means to you and
have a clear idea of theme.
• Theme – Different views of war. Contrast
between places of safety and war zones. The
impact of war
Homework
• Write a plan and an introduction for the essays
you have been given. Along with 2nd paragraph
and a conclusion.
• Bring these next Wednesday so that we can
discuss what you felt was easiest to do.
• Think about answering the question – so circle
key words – and make sure you use evidence,
analysis, words of the question and personal
response.
• The harder I practice the luckier I get…
• Research for discursive essay.
Discursive essay
• Should police
officers be
armed?
• The reputation of the
police has undergone
extremes in the past few
years:
Ian Thomlinson
Stephen Lawrence
Hillsborough
Olympics
Murdered PCs
Royal family privacy versus
freedom of the press.