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This unit of work was developed by Teresa Baroni and Josephine Pecorella of All Saints’ Senior Catholic College, Casula and
Bozena Szymanska of Mary MacKillop College, Wakeley, as part of the 2004-5 ATESOL NSW Quality Teacher Programme Project:
Programming ESL in English 7-12 within a Quality Teaching framework.
Commonwealth of Australia 2005
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Stage 6 English (ESL) HSC Course * Module A: Experience Through Language – Elective 2: Dialogue
Language to be taught Resources Syllabus outcomes and content
1. A student demonstrates understanding of how relationships between composer, responder, text and context shape meaning by:
1.1 Identifying features of particular texts and describing their effect on meaning
4. A student uses language relevant to the study of English including:
4.3 language of personal, social, historical, cultural and workplace contexts
8. A student adapts a variety of textual forms to different purposes, audiences and contexts in all modes by:
8.4 composing and adapting texts to address different purposes and audiences
Vocabulary, sentence structure, punctuation, volume, tone and pace
Direct and indirect speech
Structure and language features of an interview
Teaching and learning sequence
Activity 1 (H.1)
Students read monologues and in pairs identify how language used by different speakers reveals their age, gender, and social status.
They share the result of their discussion.
Informally students are assessed on their discussion of the texts.
Activity 2 (H. 2)
Students provide their own definitions of dialogue and distinguish between direct and indirect speech.
Activity 3
In pairs students choose one monologue and construct their own dialogues. Alternately, they can choose a different situation and compose dialogue.
Teacher feedback on students’ dialogues.
Handout 1 and a grid.
Handout 2
Definitions of dialogue and examples of an interview.
Different monologues
Quality Teaching
Elements
Intellectual Quality:
Metalanguage
Substantive communication
Quality Learning
Environment:
Engagement
Social support
Significance:
Background knowledge
Cultural knowledge
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4. A student uses language relevant to the study of English including:
4.5 conventions of language
1. A student demonstrates understanding of how relationships between composer, responder, text and context shape meaning by:
1.2 explaining the ways in which changes in elements of the contexts of particular texts influence meaning
13. A student reflects on own processes of responding and composing by:
13.2 articulating the ways they approach texts
Metalanguage referring to functions and conventions of dialogue
Language of stage directions and instructions for actors in a play
Features of spoken language including tone, volume, pace, body language
Grammar:
Imperative mood
Activity 4 (H.3 A 3 B,)
Brainstorming activity – students discuss different functions of dialogue and conventions of dialogue. It is followed by a matching exercise.
Activity 5 (H. 4) -optional
Using Handout 3 A, in pairs students analyse their own dialogues to explain which conventions of dialogue they have used and why.
Activity 6 (H. 5)
Students read a scene from Away and are asked to rewrite the scene, adding stage directions and instructions for actors regarding their voice
Teacher corrects and gives feedback on students’ stage directions.
Activity 7 (H. 6) – alternative
Students read a passage from
Norm and Ahmed . They discuss the relationship between the two characters and what advice they would give to actors (re tone/volume/pace of voice and body language) for acting this scene to show their relationship.
Students prepare a set of instructions for actors.
Handout 3 A and 3 B
Functions of dialogue and conventions of dialogue
Matching exercise
Handout 4
Matrix to analyse students’ own dialogues
Handout 5
Passage from play
Away by Michael Gow
(Alternatively teachers can choose a scene from any other play.)
Handout 6
Passage selected by teacher from play Norm and Ahmed by Alex
Buzo
List of “tone’ words.
Intellectual Quality:
Deep knowledge
Deep understanding
Metalanguage
Substantive communication
Quality Learning
Environment:
Engagement
Explicit quality criteria
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Significance:
Background knowledge
Connectedness
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5. A student demonstrates understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts by:
5.1 identifying the language features and structures of texts composed for different audiences and purposes
7. A student analyses the effect of technology on meaning by:
7.1 analysing texts produced by a range of technologies
7.2 describing and explaining the effects of technological forms and conventions in personal, social, historical, cultural and workplace contexts
9.A student engages with
Verbal signals in a conversation.
Text structure:
Structure of an essay.
Language conventions:
Functions of dialogue and verbal and nonverbal conventions of dialogue that convey these functions
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Activity 8(H. 7A and B)
Listening task
Students listen to different scenarios (Guido Hatzis) and they are asked to identify different elements of dialogue (language and other verbal signals) and how they reveal the relationship between the speakers (who controls the conversation).
Students analyse a sample essay response.
Students write mini-essays:
‘Explain how Guido Hatzis controls the conversation.
Substantiate your answer with textual evidence.’
Activity 9 (H. 8 and 9)
Before viewing the film students are reminded of the different functions of dialogue and conventions of dialogue which convey these functions (refer to
Handout 3).
The teacher elicits and preteaches background information about the film.
Viewing Strictly Ballroom:
- look at the purpose of the film
- discuss how visual, sound and language elements of dialogue reveal characters, relationships,
Handout 7 A and B
Listening text from
Guido Hatzis Album
(Radio Triple M)
Available on www.google.com.au
Students listen to text and analyse how dialogue reveals relationships.
Essay structure.
Sample of an essay response adapted from
BOS English ESL
Standards Package CD,
2002
Handouts 8, 9 and 9 B
Matrices to use for the analysis of different scenes from Strictly
Ballroom.
Prescribed text: Film
Strictly Ballroom , produced by Baz
Lurhmann
Intellectual Quality:
Metalanguage
Deep understanding
Substantive communication
Quality Learning
Environment:
Engagement
Explicit quality criteria
High expectations
Significance:
Cultural knowledge
Connectedness
Knowledge integration
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the details of text in order to develop a considered and informed personal response by:
9.3 composing extended arguments supported by textual evidence
12. A student draws upon imagination to transform experience and ideas into text, demonstrating control of language by:
12.2 experimenting with ways of transforming experience into texts in different contexts for specified audiences
Structure and language features of different analytical and creative responses (eg. essay, speech, interview, feature article).
Formats of different dialogues and interviews
– revision. and themes.
How are the characters and their relationships represented through dialogue?
How are themes represented through dialogue.
(Teachers can choose other functions of dialogue.)
Activity 10 (H.10 A and B)
Sample HSC questions. Students discuss different exam questions, choose one and write their own response.
They compare their extended responses with model responses and edit their own work.
Activity 11 (H. 11)
Assessment task.
Revisit the text formats required for the task and elements of dialogue students need to consider in their creative writing.
Discuss the writing criteria.
Students complete the formal assessment task independently.
Teacher gives feedback using marking guidelines sheet.
Handout 10 A and B
10.A
Examples of questions from past
HSC exam papers.
10.B
samples of different analytical responses.
Handout 11
Assessment task instructions.
Deep knowledge
Deep understanding
Higher order thinking
Quality Learning
Environment:
Explicit quality criteria
Engagement
High expectations
Significance:
Cultural knowledge
Knowledge integration
Connectedness
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HANDOUT 1
READ THE MONOLOGUES AND COMPLETE THE GRID.
So I told her azaleas won’t work in this spot it’s too hot ’ere and they’ll be burnt to crisps in the summer like when her rhodos carked it in that hot spell in ’68 how could she forget it that’s what I want to know well she says in her plummy voice I want azaleas in this corner and you just do what I say Spade remembering that
I’m your boss and you’re just a worker here what choice does a man have when he has to work for ‘is bread and butter not to mention jam ha ha
I hate Bruce. You should’ve seen what he did to me today at kindy. I was just swinging on the swing when he came and pushed me right off and I got into trouble because it was his turn on the swing. Well I thought it was a good trick telling him it was snack time so when he ran in, I jumped on the swing.
I hate my teacher too. Mrs. Ryan. She told me I had to go and sit in the corner for stealing the swing when it wasn’t my turn and now I can’t have a cake at snack time. I only get crackers and water. It’s not fair. All those goody-goody girls that stand next to her all laughed at me when I got into trouble. I hate them too.
I hate my mum. She said I can’t watch TV at all today because I tipped my corn flakes on my little baby sister this morning. I only did it to stop her crying so much but it didn’t work.
I hate my little sister, she always has pooey nappies, she smells horrible, and she always cries. After she eats her stinking food she throws up.
So now I have to sit here in the corner and stare at the wall until Mrs.
Ryan says I can go. I hate looking at the wall. And I’m not eating my crackers and water at snack time either. I think that after I go home from here, I will go and beat up those goody-goody girls because I hate them.
Mate, it has been the worst game I’ve ever played in my life. Things ain’t easy when you’ve got the coach on your back.
Funny how they’re your mates when you’re kicking ‘em good, but it all changes when you’re not…
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HANDOUT 1 (continued)
They’re looking at me. I can feel it. Staring at me. I bet they feel sorry for someone like me. I was always a chubby child. Always teased. Fatso they would yell. I hated all those skinny girls. Flat stomachs, thin long legs, small pearshaped fa ces. That was never me. Of course I tried losing weight. It’s too hard.
If I had a dollar for every time I ate something with more than ten grams of fat, I would be rich. I’ve always wanted to be thin. They’re still looking at me. I can feel it. It is so humiliating being in a fabric shop and asking for five metres of material just to make a skirt. They’re still looking at me. They look away quickly, but as soon as I turn my back they’re staring again.
I used to have a real handbag you know , a soft one made of leather, it wasn’t always plastic bags from Sydney. You wouldn’t think it to look at me though. I suppose you wouldn’t believe I was pretty once either, never beautiful mind you, but I didn’t look like this. Now the council’s trying to get me to move on. Young councillor come up to me the other day, smarmy young fellow, told me this is a posh suburb, they don’t want people like me around, think we might spoil the tourists’ view. Don’t know where I could go though. Besides I’ve got a right to stay here, I was born in that big house there. You don’t believe me do you? I’ve lived here longer than any of the councillors on that stupid council. Now you’re walking away from me. Why? Do you think I’m senile? Just a crazy old hag?
(Source of monologues unknown)
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TEXT 1
TEXT 2
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WHO IS THE
SPEAKER (age, gender, social background)?
WHAT IS THE
SPEAKER’S
SITUATION
(context)
WHAT LANGUAGE DOES
THE SPEAKER USE and
HOW DOES IT REVEAL
THEIR AGE, GENDER AND
CONTEXT?
WHAT IS THE
SPEAKER’S
PURPOSE
(Why is he speaking?
WHO IS THE
SPEAKER’S
AUDIENCE?
(Who is the speaker talking to?)
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AN INSPIRING FILM
It was nearly dark as I stepped out of the picture theatre into noisy peak-hour traffic. Turning left, I walked slowly along the street, engrossed in thoughts of the film I had just seen.
“That guy was terrific …. imagine killing a fly with a peashooter, blindfolded …. fighting twelve guys at once and not even creasing your pants
– what a beauty!” were the thoughts that filtered through my mind.
I sat down at the bus stop and was asked the time by a kindly old man also waiting there.
“Watch it, pop – I’ll have you on the ground in a Chinese death-hold before you take your next breath,”
I thought, mentally flexing my muscles.
“The time? – ten past five,” I said soberly.
The bus arrived and I nonchalantly boarded it, only to be stopped by the driver.
“Hey, son, what about your fare?”
“Listen, punk. I ought to break you into little pieces and scatter you in the gutter
– show a bit of respect!”
The words boomed in my ears.
“All right, here’s ten cents. I sometimes forget. You know how it is,” I said sheepishly and walked to the back of the bus.
I was home by five thirty and was just in time for tea.
“I know you’re trying to poison me, but it’ll do you no good – I’ve got so many stomach fluids that even if I drink a gallon of poison I’ll burp. No one gets the better of me,”
I thought and ate the meal confidently.
“How was the picture, dear?” Mum asked, gazing at me thoughtfully.
“Listen, you old bag – don’t push me about. I talk to you – you don’t talk to me.”
“Oh, it wasn’t too bad, Mum.”
Anthony Breman (15)
1. How does th e boy’s language shape his relationships with the people around him?
2. How would his internal dialogue shape his relationships with the people around him? (What would have happened to him if he had actually said what he had imagined?)
3. What do both dialogues reveal about the boy?
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HANDOUT 2
What is dialogue?
There are a number of definitions including:
conversation between two or more people
conversation between characters in a novel, film, film script, etc
an exchange of ideas or opinions on a particular issue, including radio or TV interviews
literary work in the form of a conversation, eg. a play
In the texts you will study as a part of this elective you will encounter communication through one or more forms of dialogue as outlined in the definitions above.
Dialogue involves both speakers and listeners who exchange ideas with one another. A speaker may be both the writer of the text and the persona (character) created by the writer. The listeners can also be the audience, either directly or indirectly.
In order to communicate ideas effectively speakers must be aware of their audience and they must use a register (degree of formality of language) appropriate to their content (what they are speaking about) and their audience (who they are speaking to).
The level of language they use ( formal or informal register ) and vocabulary tell us a lot about:
the speaker
the listener
the immediate circumstances
the social, cultural, political, and historical context
(Cathy Sly of Barrenjoey High School, http://hsc.edu.au’english/standard/experience/dialogue/1222dialogue.htm, modified by Bozena Szymanska, MaryMacKillop College, Wakeley)
Re-read Monologue 5 and write two conversations:
the first one between the homeless woman and a young councillor
the second one between the same woman and a police officer who interrogates her at a police station
Discuss with another student the register and language you will use in both conversations. Before you write your own conversations, read and analyse some examples of dialogues.
(Examples of dialogues/ interviews can be taken from: On Purpose, Studying
Written, Oral and Visual Language in context by Janne Schill, Heinemann 2003, or
On Track Working With Texts and On Track, Creating a Text For A Purpose by
Janne Schill, Heinemann 2003.
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HANDOUT 3 A
FUNCTIONS OF DIALOGUE
Dialogue fulfills many functions (has many uses or purposes).
It can reveal characters, their personalities, their attitudes to other characters and the purposes of their conversations.
It can reveal relationships between characters, who is in control and who is silenced.
It can reveal conflict between characters.
It can cause complications and thus advance action.
It can provide background information about characters, about the context of the situation, about past events, etc.
It can reveal themes.
All the above functions of dialogue are conveyed through conventions of dialogue, namely through verbal and non-verbal aspects (elements) of dialogue (refer to the next page).
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CONVENTIONS OF DIALOGUE (VERBAL AND NON-
VERBAL ASPECTS/ELEMENTS OF DIALOGUE)
In studying Dialogue you need to look at:
Conventions of dialogue
Its interpersonal nature
Who controls the conversation
Whether certain voices are silenced
The differences between spoken and written language
The following conventions of dialogue (aspects of language) should be considered:
A. Verbal elements of dialogue such as:
Vocabulary: word selection, word placement, jargon and circumlocution
aspects of grammar and sentence structures
colloquialisms: conversational language, use of slang words or phrases including: expletives, clichés, ellipsis
devices to suggest or create humour: satire, irony, sarcasm, connotations
B. Verbal signals:
tone, pitch and stress conveying the speaker’s feelings towards the listener, volume and accent, pace or fluency, intonation, enunciation, pauses, interjections and exclamations
C. Non-verbal signals:
facial expression, eye contact, stance, gestures: arms, hands, head
Things to consider in your studied texts:
1. How has the composer structured the scene?
2. Which character controls the scene? How do you know it?
3. What are the characters like? How do you know it?
4. What does the audience learn about the relationship between the characters from the language they use?
5. What ideas/values/themes/ are conveyed by the character/composer?
6. What is your view of the characters from this scene? How has the composer used the elements of dialogue and spoken language to shape your response?
(LIG 2001 English Workshop materials, modified by Bozena Szymanska,
Mary MacKillop College, Wakeley)
DISTINCTIVE FEATURES OF DIALOGUE (optional)
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formal/colloquial language (register)
precise punctuation/slang
modulated rhythm/unregulated speed
serious tone/light-hearted tone
main words emphasised/monotonous voice
clear/unclear
short and to the point
slow/quick pace
How does a person persuade using dialogue?
emotional appeal
enthusiasm
How does speech show agreement/disagreement?
agreeable manner
silence
disinterested voice
fillers (eg ‘uh-huh’)
How to maintain control in a dialogue?
cutting another speaker off
arguing against another view
disapproving comments, ”not really”
tone (patronising, overbearing)
How to manage another speaker?
positive/negative tone of voice, choice of words
colder tone/cutting the speaker off
praise
changing speech, tone to empathise
arguing out
having the last word
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HANDOUT 3 B
Verbal and Non-Verbal Conventions (Elements) of Dialogue.
Activity: Match the following features of dialogue to their meaning.
Term Definition
1.Body language
2.Circumlocution
3.Clarity
4.Cliché
5.Colloquialism
6.Connotation
7.Dialect
8.Ellipsis
9.Eye contact a. idea which a word makes one think of in addition to the main meaning, e.g. b. a form of mockery in which the speaker implies the opposite of what is actually said. c. very informal words or phrases considered unsuitable for formal occasions. d. is a select use of speech peculiar to a certain district or class and differing from the standard use of the language. e. the movement in language created by the weight, sound and pace with which individual words in a line/s are said. f. the process of communicating through conscious or unconscious gestures and poses. g. the speed at which one is speaking. h. technical or specialized words that relate to a particular group or field of interest. i. use of many words to say something that can be said in a few words.
10.Facial
11.Gesture
12.Interjection
13.Intonation
14.Irony
15.Jargon j. a break in speaking. k. a type of language e.g. colloquial, formal, literary. l. the state or quality of being clear, esp. of sound or expression. m. phrase or idea which is used so often that it has become stale or meaningless, e.g. trials and tribulations. n. when a statement is expressed in the form of a question although it expects no answer, nor requires any. o. a range of words known to an individual.
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16.Pace
17.Pause
18.Pitch
19.Pronunciation
20.Register
21.Rhythm
22.Rhetorical question
23.Sarcasm
24.Satire
25.Slang
26.Stress p. the degree of highness or lowness of a tone. q. example of leaving out a word of a sentence when the meaning can be understood without it, e.g. ‘He is dead and I alive’. r. quantity or power of sound. s. word or phrase used as an exclamation, e.g.For goodness sake! t. accentuation; emphasis laid on a syllable or word. u. the way in which a word is pronounced. v. the depiction of feeling shown on one’s face. w. attacking foolish or wicked behaviour by making fun of it. x. modulation of the voice; accent. y. refers to the attitude presented by the speaker towards his/her subject and audience. z. expression suitable for normal conversation but not for formal speech or writing.
27.Stance
28.Tone
29.Vocabulary
A2. bitter remarks intended to wound one’s feelings.
B2. person’s position or way of standing, deportment.
C2. looking directly into another person’s eyes.
30.Volume D2. expressive movements of a part of a body, especially the hand or head.
Answers: 1-f, 2-i, 3-l, 4-m, 5-z, 6-a, 7-d, 8-q, 9-C2, 10-v, 11-D2, 12-s, 13-x,
14-b, 15-h, 16-g, 17-j, 18-p, 19-u, 20-r, 21-e, 22-n, 23-A2, 24-w, 25-c, 26-t,
27-B2, 28-y, 29-o, 30-r.
Now Place all the terms under the following two headings:
Verbal verbal
Non-
(Josephine Pecorella, All Saints Catholic Senior College, Casula)
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HANDOUT 4
1. CHOOSE ONE MONOLOGUE AND CONSTRUCT TWO SEPARATE
DIALOGUES BETWEEN THE CHARACTER AND TWO OTHER
CHARACTERS.
For example, Monologue 1 – between the gardener and his employer (the landlady), and another one between the gardener and his mate; or
Monologue 5 – between the homeless woman and a young councillor, and between the homeless woman and a police officer at a police station. The events are the same, but modify your language (register) to suit the circumstances.
2. Analyse your own dialogues using the matrix below; write which elements of dialogue you’ve used and what effect they have:
Elements of dialogue Quote
Eg. slang
Effect
“her rhodos carked it.” To show the gardener’s social background
HANDOUT 5
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Read the following scene.
(Away by Michael Gow, Act 2, Scene 3)
Roy and Coral
Roy: Two things!
Coral: Two. Yes?
Roy: Listen to me.
Coral: The whole world is listening to you.
Roy: Just two things.
Coral: Why don’t you help me choose an evening dress to take?
Roy:
I’m getting sick of this act.
Coral: This one?
Roy: Two things. One. My position at school. I can’t go on turning up at school functions with you if you’re going to behave like a ghost. You wander around with that smile, staring into the distance, not seeing anyone, ignoring people.
Coral: I don’t ignore anyone.
Roy: Just let me speak. You ignore people
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Coral: I don’t.
Roy: You stare at them like there’s something wrong with them , just stare and smile and say nothing.
Coral:
But I’m not ignoring them. I can’t think of anything to say. I would never ignore anyone.
Roy: Don’t split hairs, Coral. I don’t care how you justify it, you behave in a way that’s too … weird for my liking. I can feel people watching us walk away thinking, how much longer before he has to lock the poor ratbag wife up?
Coral:
People don’t think like that.
Roy:
Well, you’re even weirder than I thought if you think like that. It has to stop. I can’t keep moving school to stop you going over the edge.
There’s only so much compassionate ground the Department can keep giving me. You’ll have to take stock, come back to reality.
Coral: I mightn’t like it there.
Roy: Try it for a week, for Christ’s sake. Two. Second thing. I miss the boy too. I feel it. I suffer for it. Will you allow me that? Could you let me in on the sadness just a little? Because Christ I feel it.
Coral: It’s everywhere, isn’t it? In the air we breathe.
Roy: But. But. We are not the only ones. We are not the first people in the history of the world to lose a son in war. There is a time for being griefstricken, there’s a time for weeping and wailing and carrying on and beating your breast, but it comes to an end. It has to. Otherwise the whole world would simply stop. Jesus, Coral, in the last war practically every family lost someone or knew someone who died. They managed. They picked themselves up and went on. That’s what history is, people picking themselves up, pulling themselves together and going on. We can’t stop.
Coral: Do you still think I look like Kim Novak?
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Roy: Jesus Christ.
Coral: You did once.
Roy: There’s no point packing clothes. We won’t go.
Coral: We need a break. We need a change.
Roy:
I don’t need a break with you. I can stay home and read a book and be more relaxed. I’m not wasting time and money on airfare and room service if you’re going to spend all your time staring at people.
Coral:
I’ll be good! I’ll improve. Watch me get better.
Roy: I can’t take it, Coral.
Coral: I won’t think about death, about –
Roy: I’m not asking you to forget, I won’t forget.
Coral: I’ll be calm, interested, aware of people. I’ll look after myself. I’ll get up at a proper time. I’ll have fun.
Roy: You can sit by a pool all day if you like. But like a normal human being.
Coral: We won’t mention helicopters, or jungles, or mines –
Roy: I’ll tear up the tickets. I’ll give them away. I’ll send someone else who’ll enjoy it.
Coral: I’ll be silent on all controversial topics. Will that do? I won’t bring up anything upsetting or worrying. Death, war, loss –
Roy: Be reasonable. Give it a rest.
Coral: I won’t blame anyone.
Roy: Please, please, stop doing it to me. I didn’t send him. He had to go.
Would you rather not pay the price for the life we have? We could just lie down in the street, defenceless, and let whoever wanted to come and take what we have. Would that have been better for you? Would you have been happy then? Jesus, Coral, you’re too selfish. We were picked out to pay. I can’t help that. We’ve paid. I can’t bring him back.
So we have a duty to go on with what we have. Maybe we should even be proud? We’re living in a country with one of the highest standards of living on earth and we have shown ourselves willing to defend that standard.
Coral: Shhhh, Roy …Shhhh, relax. We need a break. A rest. Rest and recreation. Let’s get away. Just the two of us.
Roy: Coral .. be like you were.
Coral: I will, I will.
Roy: Smile.
Coral:
I will. I’ll be as good as gold. I’ll be like Kim Novak. I’ll purr like a kitten.
Roy: Sweetheart …
Coral: I don’t think this dress is the right one.
Roy:
Coral …
Coral: I know.
Roy: Look at me.
Coral: There.
Roy: You remind me of Kim Novak.
Coral: You remind me … but I mustn’t say.
(silence) We’ll have a wonderful, wonderful time.
Answer the following questions:
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1.
What does the reader learn about Roy and Coral’s past from their conversation?
2. What type of conflict is presented in this dialogue?
3. Have Roy and Coral resolved their problems at the end of the scene?
4. With a partner discuss how Roy expresses his frustration; look at the dialogue again and come up with suggestions regarding verbal (tone and pace of voice, interjections) and non-verbal (facial expression, gestures, body language) signals he uses.
5. How does Coral convey her detachment through her tone and pace of voice, her facial expressions and body language?
6. Re-write part of the scene, adding stage directions and instructions for the actors to convey their relationship and conflict.
(The following are suggestions only; teachers may need to add to the list.)
Roy verbal signals - tone of voice: impatient, angry, frustrated, depressed, annoyed,
sad, resigned
- pace: slow, quick, interjects
non-verbal signals - facial expression: resigned facial expression,
- body language: gesticulates, throws up hands in
frustration, looks away
Coral verbal signals – tone of voice: soft, detached, disinterested, sad, uncertain,
defensive, exaggerated, excited, pleading, persuasive non-verbal signals – looks away, stares in front of her, looks helplessly around, the
smiles unconvincingly, faces Roy, looks him straight in
eyes
(Teachers can choose any scene from this or any other play.)
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HANDOUT 6
Read the following scene.
(From Norm and Ahmed by Alex Buzo.)
Midnight on a summer night at a Sydney bus stop. Norm stops a passing
Pakistani, Ahmed, to ask him for a light.
Norm:
Ahmed: rude …
My name’s Norm Gallagher, what’s yours?
My name is Ahmed. (Moving away) Well, I don’t wish to seem
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Pleased to meet you, Ahmed.
He offers his hand.
(shaking hands) How do you do?
Pakistan. Now that’s an interesting place. I’ve never been to
Pakistan. I was in Egypt during the war, but we never went anywhere else. How do you like Australia?
It is a very nice place. Naturally I tend to get a little homesick at times, but I quite like it out here. The people are very friendly.
It’s good to hear that, Ahmed. You feel you’re settling down all
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm: right?
Yes, I think so. One always experiences difficulties when one is seeking to adjust to an alien environment. But once the initial period of adjustment is over, it is easier to acclimatise oneself.
That’s very true.
Yes. Now if you excuse me, I’ll –
Do you know what? You’re insulting me, do you know that? Eh?
You’re insinuating that I am some kind of drunken pervert.
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Ahmed:
Norm:
Oh, no, you have misconstrued my actions. I think nothing of the kind.
Then why do you keep backing away, eh? Answer me that.
Well … I mean … it’s late. It’s late at night.
I know it’s late. That’s no reason. You think you’re a bit above me.
You don’t want to talk to me. I’m insulted. If you think I’m a drunken perv, why don’ you say so? Why don’t you come right out and say it?
I’m very sorry if you think that. Perhaps I have shown bad manners. I offer my humble apologies.
Never been so insulted in all –
Please! Believe me. I did not mean to be rude.
You sure?
Of course I’m sure.
Well, all right then, don’t worry about it. Just a bit of misunderstanding, that’s all. No hard feelings. Jees. I tell you what, Ahmed, you really looked scared there for a minute.
He laughs.
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1. Analyse the language both characters use. What social backgrounds do these two characters come from? Substantiate your answer with textual evidence.
2. Ahmed is afraid of Norm. Find examples from the text which substantiate this statement.
3. Imagine you are to direct a dramatic presentation of this extract. What advice would you give to the actors for acting the roles of Norm and
Ahmed so that their presentation clearly conveys the characters’ relationship? Think of all the verbal signals and non-verbal elements of dialogue.
(Teachers can choose any other scene from this play or from any other play.)
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LIST OF “TONE” WORDS
Tone refers to the “sound” of the written or spoken piece. It is achieved through the careful selection of words and phrases, and it can be a powerful device. It can convey attitudes, it can convey who controls the conversation and who is silenced, it can create atmosphere; it can shape the responder’s attitude towards a character or an issue, it can persuade.
Below is a list of different “tone” words:
* matter-of-fact critical
discouraging
* contemptuous
* sarcastic ironic impatient patronising angry annoyed condescending
* authoritative
* scared questioning bullying frightened threatening
* serious
* exaggerated sad depressed frustrated enthusiastic passionate excited menacing encouraging
supportive
* happy sympathetic joyful
(The following web site contains “A Bank of Tone Words” and a number of activities: www.gaston.k12.nc.us/highland/class/baron/tonewords.htm
)
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HANDOUT 7 A
Listening Task
Guido Hatsis CD (Triple M)
Students will listen to the eight scenarios of the Guido Hatsis CD recording and answer the following questions identifying the distinctive elements of dialogue (verbal and non verbal).
Question 1: What are the distinctive elements of dialogue in each scenario?
Question 2: What is the relationship between the speakers?
Question 3: Who is controlling the conversation? How?
Question 4: How does the dialogue engage the audience?
Question 5: What does the audience learn about the relationship between the speakers from the language they use?
Consider the following aspects of language:
Vocabulary, word selection, word placement, jargon, and circumlocution
Aspects of grammar and sentence structure
Colloquialisms
– conversational language, use of slang words, or phrases including: expletive, clichés, ellipsis
Non-verbal language
– facial expression, stance, gestures – arms, hands, head
Tone – expression, intonation, volume and accent.
Pace – fluency, pronunciation, enunciation, pauses, interjections and exclamations
Devices to suggest or create humour: satire, irony, sarcasm, connotation, eg. Sexual innuendo, corollary of laughter, audience response, interaction, effect of ‘canned laughter’.
(Students may also use Handout 3 to assist them with this task).
(Guido Hatzis’ CD available on: www.goggle.com.au
, Guido Hatzis Album)
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Scenario1:
Scenario 2:
Scenario 3:
Scenario 4:
Scenario 5:
Scenario 6:
Scenario 7:
Scenario 8:
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Suggested answers.
Scenario1:
- Guido uses a patronising tone; heavy accent, pauses, limited word selection
Scenario 2:
- Tony has a fluent pace, interjects, frustrated tone of voice.
Scenario 3:
- Guido has condescending tone, informal register: slang. He is overbearing and always wants to have the last word.
Scenario 4:
-
Guido’s use of sarcasm is very apparent. Uses offensive language.
Frequent use of imperative eg. You speak to me now.
Scenario 5:
- Concierge has a very professional and respectful tone and manner
- Guido is very offensive. Language is very vulgar.
Scenario 6:
- Guido has a slow paced tone
- Concierge remains polite however is angry and is sarcastic
Scenario 7:
- Guido has a high-pitched voice
Scenario 8:
-Very repetitive.
(Teresa Baroni, All Saints Catholic Senior College, Casula)
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HANDOUT 7 B
SAMPLE QUESTION:
What have you learned about Dialogue through the study of this module?
Support your response by reflecting upon the ideas and features of your prescribed text and one other related text of your own choosing.
SAMPLE RESPONSE:
Dialogue can be defined as a conversation between two or more people who are exchanging ideas or opinions on a particular issue. While it can be said that dialogue is most effective when both or all parties have an equal say, this is a rare occurrence. Many factors can influence the balance of power within a dialogue and various techniques are used to assume control; the purpose of dialogue, status of people involved in a conversation and context, all influence the outcomes of dialogue. The issue at hand is often unclear until these aspects have been identified. Dialogue reveals that there is more than a spoken word to a conversation; other verbal elements such as tone, volume, pace, pauses, etc, and non-verbal elements, eg. body language, facial expression, gestures, are also its important components.
The following texts, ………………….. and GUIDO HATZIS radio conversations with unsuspecting listeners, exemplify the above, and they help the responder to understand better how characters can dominate each other through dialogue.
In ………………………………………………………………………………………
…………………………………………………………………………………………
…………………………………………………………………………………………
…………………………………………………………………………………………
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Another text, the comic routine (audio conversation) Do n’t talk over me
is an example of one party trying to dominate another one. Guido Hatzis (a radio comic) plays pranks on people, calling them and pretending he wants to do business with them. His interlocutors think he is a prospective customer and they engage in a conversation which is supposed to lead to a business deal.
They are in a vulnerable position, because they do not have all the information and they do not know the real purpose of the conversation. In this particular conversation, a tow truck driver adopts a business-like tone and sounds confident, shown through his polite factual vocabulary and his own short, sharp questions, eg. ………………….Guido’s ridiculous responses, eg.
…………….. confuse him. His control of the conversation is quickly eroded as it occurs to him that Guido could be playing a prank, “…all right I’ll go along with the joke.”
As the conversation progresses, his tone becomes confused, then impatient and finally frustrated. Guido’s purpose in this dialogue (unknown to the driver)
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“my friend’ in addressing the driver projects an arrogant tone and his exaggerated accent is condescending (patronising) and sarcastic. A few times the driver attempts to regain control of the conversation by resorting to businesslike exchanges, eg. …………., yet to no avail.
Because this is an audio-text, emotions can only be expressed verbally. A greater emphasis is placed on the spoken word and its expression. Shifts in volume and tone and attempts to speak over the other person are evidence of the driver’s state of mind. Verbal violence and insults, eg. ……………, are used by Guido in the third phone call in an attempt to provoke the driver into anger. The driver’s tone of voice is showing increasing signs of frustration and confusion at this stage of the conversation as he is often silenced before finding something to say back to his unknown attacker. Threats aimed at
Guido, eg. ……………….., are reversed into a putdown and are thrown back at the truck driver, eg. ……….. This is how Guido resumes control and assumes a powerful position in order to achieve his purpose. The driver’s frustration and confusion come out in his increasing volume and pauses where he is lost for words. As using silence and mimicked insults, eg.
………….., cannot reverse his weak position, he uses loud volume to regain control, but it is not successful. He lacks the opportunity to have an equal say, because he does not have all the information.
(adapted from the 2002 HSC student’s response, available in the English Package
CD)
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HANDOUT 8 – STRICTLY BALLROOM
Dialogue can convey much more than what is actually spoken about. It can fulfill many functions (roles) such as giving us information about what the characters are like (their personality) and about their relationships; it can give us background knowledge about the characters, the context of their situation and past conflicts; dialogue can advance action and show future conflicts.
And, finally, dialogue can reveal themes.
All these functions of dialogue are revealed to the responder through the different aspects of dialogue (conventions of dialogue).
Conventions of dialogue include verbal and non-verbal elements.
Verbal conventions (elements) of dialogue include:
Vocabulary: word selection, word placement, jargon, colloquialisms, slang, etc
aspects of grammar and sentence structures
verbal signals: tone, pitch, volume, pace of voice conveying the speaker’s attitude towards the listener or towards the issue, intonation, pauses, interjections
Non-verbal elements include:
stance, body language, eye contact, facial expression, gestures
In the following activity we will concentrate on the characters and their relationships. What the characters say and how they say it reveals a lot about them, the context of their situation and their relationships.
Analyse the following scenes filling in the grid.
Scene What does this scene reveal about the characters and their relationships?
How do you know it?
Analyse the characters’ dialogue and its verbal and non-verbal features (refer to the above explanation)
Scene1
Shirley and
Doug are being interviewed on
TV (pages 1-9 of the film script).
Scene 2
Dialogue
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21-24)
Scene 3
Conversation between Shirley and Fran regarding Scott’s new partner
(pages 37-40)
Scene 4
Shirley talks to
Fran about
Scott, persuading her not to dance with him (page 43)
Scene 5
Conversation between Rico and Scott (pages
48-51)
Scene 6
Shirley, Scott and Doug in their kitchen (p.
51-52)
What does this scene tell us about the three
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Scene 7
Conversation between Scott and Barry
(pages 60-64
Scene 8
Doug explaining to Scott
(pages71-75) what has happened in the past. What does this conversation reveal about
Barry?
Teachers can choose different scenes and analyse them, using the grid above.
Page numbers refer to a screenplay Strictly Ballroom by Baz Luhrmann and
Craig Pearce adapted from a screenplay by Baz Luhrmann and Andrew
Bovell, Currency Press, Sydney, 2002
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Examples of Responses.
Scene
Scene1
Shirley and
Doug are being interviewed on
TV (pages 1-9 of the film script).
Scene 2
Dialogue between Scott and Fran (pages
21-24)
What does this scene reveal about the characters and their relationships?
* Shirley is a middleaged ballroom dance instructor.
* She is cartoon-like, nearly a caricature.
* She is highly competitive, is obsessed with her son winning.
* She adheres to the rules and regulations of the Ballroom Dancing
Federation unquestionably and has a deferential attitude towards Barry Fife.
* Doug is portrayed as insignificant, he does not say anything, and the viewer realises
Shirley does not respect him.
* Scott is a talented , handsome rebel who wants to dance his own steps.
* Initially he dominates the conversation, he is arrogant towards Fran and does not treat her seriously. He is taken aback by Fran’s determination to dance with him and surprised by her outburst.
* Fran is shown as an ugly duckling, a clumsy, unattractive character with no dancing partner.
She is nervous to
How do you know it?
Analyse the characters’ dialogue and its verbal and non-verbal features (refer to the above explanation)
* Her make-up, hair, costume
(too bright colours), smiles and facial grimaces are exaggerated.
* “Scott won most of the trophies in this room
– you see that’s the tragedy, my son was a champion.” “Have I failed as a mother?”+ contorted facial expression conveying her despair, + exaggerated, emotional tone of voice, hesitations conveying how difficult it is for her to cope with what has happened.
* “We never imagined he’d
(Scott) do such a thing in front of …. Barry Fife!”
* During the interview, Doug sits leaning backwards in the lounge while Shirley leans forward. Yet, each time he disagrees with her, he squirts his mouth with breath freshener.
* His words, body language and tone of voice show his arrogant attitude towards Fran. He looks down at her, he repeats questioningly in a dismissive tone what Fran says to show her how ridiculous she is, “You want to dance my way at the
Pan Pacific?” Sarcastically he says, “Oh, I see, that’s you (the right partner”.
His patronising attitude is conveyed through his tone of voice and words
, “Look, what are you carrying on about?
You’ve never had a partner.
You’ve been dancing with a girl
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Scene 3
Conversation between Shirley and Fran regarding Scott’s new partner
(pages 37-40)
Scene 4
Shirley talks to
Fran about Scott persuading her not to dance with him (page 43)
Scene 5
Conversation between Rico approach Scott, submissive and anxious to please. Annoyed by
S cott’s patronising tone of voice, she gathers her courage and lashes out at him, regaining control of the conversation. for two years, haven’t you?”
Finally, he boasts openly, “A beginner has no right to approach an open Amateur.”
* Fran’s shyness and insecurity is conveyed through her body language, facial expression and her submissive tone of voice.
She does not look him in the face, her shoulders stoop and she uses a lot of pauses, hesitations and repetitions.
When Scott asks her, “What are you doing here?”, she stammers , “I uh, I, I, just ..”
When Scott continuously rejects her proposal, she expresses her anger and regains the control of the conversation, “… you’re just really scared to give someone new a go, because you think … they might just be better than you…. You are pathetic, ….. you are just a gutless wonder.”
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Barry?
Scene 8
Doug explaining to Scott
(pages71-75) what has happened in the past. What does this conversation reveal about and Scott (pages
48-51)
Scene 6
Shirley, Scott and Doug in their kitchen (p.
51-52)
What does this scene tell us about the three characters and their relationship?
Scene 7
Conversation between Scott and Barry
(pages 60-64
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HANDOUT 9 – STRICTLY BALLROOM
This is an alternative worksheet which provides descriptive vocabulary portraying characters. Students need to look at some scenes and provide textual evidence (verbal and non-verbal conventions of dialogue) that supports judgment about the characters.
Characters
Scott Hastings
Look at the different scenes where Scott talks to the other characters and explain how conventions of dialogue convey that Scott is:
rebel of the film who wants “to dance his own steps”
boastful and patronising towards Fran
changing his attitude towards Fran
disrespectful of his father
Shirley Hastings
she is a likeable caricature, a cartoon-like, middle-aged ballroom dance instructor
all her life she has followed the rules and regulations of the Ballroom Dancing
Federation
she is obsessed with her son winning the Pan Pacific Competition
very competitive
often denigrates Doug
manipulative (in scenes with Fran)
Doug Hastings
lives in the shadow of his wife and son
quiet, unassuming
becomes assertive in the closing scene of the film
Fran
unattractive, clumsy in the beginning of the film
dominated by Shirley and by Scott (initially)
has an underlying strength of character
changes from a submissive character into an assertive one who is determined to follow her dream
Barry Fife
a caricature of an aging ex-ballroom dancing champion, pretentious
loud and domineering
patronising attitude towards all, disdainful towards some characters
manipulative
resorts to lies to achieve his goals
When you analyse the persona’s character traits, you must refer to specific scenes and analyse the verbal language they use (Barry – pretentious vocabulary, eg. ….., exclamations, eg. …., patronising tone of voice – describe the scene in detail) and non-verbal elements of dialogue, eg. exaggerated gestures.
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WORKSHEET 9B
Character Analysis of Scott Hastings
Brainstorm: Find examples from the film where Scott portrays the following qualities.
1. Confident
2. Passionate
3. Rebellious
4. A conformist
5. Ambitious
6. Cowardly
7. Confused
8. Fearful
9. Rule
– breaker
10. Crowd
– Pleaser
11. Courageous
12. Charming
13. Dominant
14. Honorable
When he breaks with the conventions and expresses his individuality on the dance floor.
When he plays by the rules of the ballroom – dancing world.
Allowing his mother and his coach Les dictate his life.
Initially, Scott will not go against the rules for fear of losing.
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WORKSHEET 9B (continued)
Scott’s character traits are interesting. Through his use of dialogue we can track Scott’s journey through the film.
We see him move from being a coward, manipulated and confused, to being courageous, passionate and free in expressing his individuality.
* Using the above Character Analysis Table , find examples of dialogue that reinforce the qualities that depict him. [Use the screenplay if necessary].
Qualities
1. Confident
2. Passionate
3. Rebellious
4. A conformist
5. Ambitious
6. Cowardly
7. Confused
8. Fearful
9. Rule-breaker
10. Crowd-pleaser
Examples
‘Vivir con miedo, es como vivir a miedas.
(pg. 23). The Spanish culture/language shows passion and influences Scott to overcome this fear. Fran suggests that
Scott cannot truly live because of his fear.
‘I’m not dancing with you till you dance like you’re supposed to (pg. 11). Liz is angry with Scott’s rebellious dance moves!
“You just pretend to be in love, it’s not real.” It points out
Scott’s inability to dance with feeling at this early stage in the film. He’s having to conceal his true self.
(i) Fran’s cutting remark to Scott about his lack of courage. ‘I’m sure you will win’. (pg.41)
(ii) …..you’re just really scared. (pg.23). Scott fearful to be an individual and to be free from the authority of the ballroom world.
‘You can dance any steps you like, but that doesn’t mean you’ll … win (pg. 10). Barry’s authority and control affects
Scott’s inability to question the authority of those in control.
11. Courageous
12. Charming
13. Dominant
14. Honorable
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HANDOUT 10 A
‘DIALOGUE’ ESSAY QUESTIONS
1. How does dialogue reveal relationships between characters? In your answer refer to at least two characters from the film Strictly Ballroom and to characters from one other text of your own choosing. (HSC 2001)
Or: How is dialogue used to reveal relationships between characters? In your answer refer to the following extract from Strictly Ballroom and at least, one other scene from the film.
Examiners’ comments: “Candidates who attempted this question were very familiar with the film, but once again many candidates retold the story. The better responses were able to focus on key scenes and draw out the connection between the elements of dialogue and how they were used to reveal relationships between characters.”
2. Analyse the use of dialogue in your prescribed text and in one other example of your own choosing. In you response, refer to at least two of the following aspects of dialogue:
uses and conventions of dialogue
the interpersonal nature of dialogue
how dialogue reveals relationships (HSC 2002)
(“ Uses of dialogue” means the purposes of dialogue.)
“Conventions of dialogue” means verbal and non-verbal language features.
Conventions of dialogue reveal different functions of dialogue, eg they reveal characters, relationships, themes; show conflict; advance action; cause complication; provide background knowledge. In this case you could choose which functions of dialogue you would like to analyse.
“Interpersonal nature of dialogue”
means the way dialogue shows communication between people. )
3. Dialogue is much more than the words that are spoken. Explain how this is true of Strictly Ballroom and one other text of your own choosing. (HSC 2003)
(Examiners’ comments: better responses demonstrated a good understanding of many of the conventions of dialogue such as tone, pitch, pause and pace, and nonverbal elements of dialogue such as body language, gestures and facial expression.)
4. You are a host of a panel discussion at the Sydney Festival of Arts. You are interviewing Baz Luhrmann and one other composer about the way they used dialogue in their texts. Write the script of the interview. In your script you must refer to Baz Luhrmann’s Strictly Ballroom and one other text of your own choosing. (HSC 2004)
How do your prescribed text and one other text of your own choice use the conventions of dialogue?
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Examples of other essay questions from different half-yearly,
yearly and trial exams
1. How does dialogue engage the audience in Strictly Ballroom and one related text of your own choosing?
2. “Effective dialogue evokes our response.” Explain how composers shape our responses to characters and their relationships through dialogue. Refer in detail to your prescribed text and support it with reference to one other text of your own choosing.
3. Explain how conventions of dialogue are used in your prescribed text and in one more text of your own choosing to promote viewers’ involvement. In your answer refer to specific scenes.
4. Dialogue is one of the most important ways of engaging the audience. Explain how dialogue has been used in your prescribed text and in one more text of your own choosing to make these texts interesting.
5. How do your prescribed text and one other text of your own choosing use the conventions of dialogue?
6. What has appealed to you most effectively in your prescribed text and in one more text of your own choosing?
Remember that even when the essay question does not refer directly to dialogue, or its functions and conventions (eg. Question 6), this is what you must discuss as it is the central element of your Module. A suggested response to Question 6 may start as below:
In both texts, dialogue is the most effective element that appeals to the audience.
Verbal and non-verbal conventions of dialogue are used very effectively to reveal characters and their relationships, and they shape the responder’s attitudes to the characters. Conventions of dialogue are also used to create conflict which promotes viewer’s involvement ….
You can decide yourself which functions of dialogue you are going to write about and you write in detail only about your chosen function(s) and how the conventions of dialogue that are used appeal to the audience.
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HANDOUT 10 B
How does dialogue reveal themes?
One of the most important themes in Strictly Ballroom is the theme of domination and control. Dialogue between different persona (characters) reveals how the characters manipulate each other, how they try to influence each other’s actions or how they attempt to ensure their own control over the other characters.
Shirley and Barry are the two strong characters with their own private agendas (goals) for whom the Ballroom Dancing Federation, its rules and regulations are the most important elements in their lives. They are prepared to do anyt hing to ensure the Federation’s authority.
Shirley is a very competitive person for whom winning is most important. She is not interested in what Scott, her son, wants; what counts most for her is for her son to become a champion. In the scene with Fran, Shirley resorts to emotional blackmail to ensure that Fran gives up the silly idea of dancing with her son. Fran is a very vulnerable person, in love with Scott, at least that’s what Shirley counts on. Shirley takes advantage of this and plays on Fran’s feelings. She cuts Fran off a few times to prevent her from expressing her feelings, “I don’t know what you two thought you were doing.” She plays a role of a good understanding mother who gives the friendly advice, “I think it would be best for everyone if you went home.” When Fran shyly protests, “Scott wanted …”, Shirley cuts her off again, but she uses a friendly tone of voice,
“(…) you don’t want to ruin his chances?” “Do you?” she adds pleadingly. This is clearly a manipulation. Shirley makes Fran feel badly about her decision.
When Fran hesitates, Shirley again uses a “friendly” tone of voice and addresses her as “Franny”, someone she cares about, and Fran can do nothing else but to agree with her. This scene clearly manifests Shirley’s domination over Fran.
Similarly, Barry dominates the other characters in different situations, resorting both to lies and emotional blackmail.
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HOW DOES DIALOGUE REVEAL RELATIONSHIPS BETWEEN
CHARACTERS?
In your answer refer to at least two characters from the film Strictly Ballroom and characters from one other text of your own choosing.
(HSC 2001 question)
Dialogue fulfils many functions; one of them is revealing characters and their relationships. This function of dialogue is achieved not simply by the words and sentences the characters exchange, but by a number of other verbal and non-verbal clues (elements) such as, for example, tone of voice, pauses, hesitations, repetition. All these elements expose the characters’ personalities and their relationships as they give a greater insight into how people function in a society. This is apparent in a number of scenes in “Strictly Ballroom” and in “…………”
One of the first main scenes in Strictly Ballroom portrays Scott, the main rebellious character, and Fran, an “ugly duckling” of the ballroom dancing scene. Their first conversation clearly conveys their personalities and the relationship between them. Fran is initially presented as a plain, unattractive and anxious to please. There is a big gap between her and Scott who is talented, handsome and the hero of the ballroom dance community. Fran’s frequent use of repetition, “I, uh, I, I, just …” and pauses, “…it’s um … I wanna try to …” creates an image of clumsiness and it indicates that she is nervous to approach Scott. Fran’s tone is submissive, although she does not give up in spite of Scott’s arrogance. Scott repeats what Fran says to show her how ridiculous she is, “You want to dance my way at the Pan Pacific?”
Sarcastically, he says, “Oh, I see, that’s you (the right partner).” His dismissive, annoyed tone of voice further conveys his condescending
(patronising) attitude towards her, “Look, what are you carrying on about?
You’ve never had a partner. You’ve been dancing with a girl for two years, haven’t you?” He dismisses her and insults her openly, “Go home.” “This is very embarrassing.” “You’re going to wake up tomorrow and feel like a real idiot about this.” Finally, he boasts openly, “A beginner has no right to approach an open amateur.”
However, when Scott continues to reject her proposal, Fran expresses her anger; her changed angry tone of voice and the intensity with which she speaks reverses their relationship; now she establishes (gains) the control over (of) their conversation and Scott becomes confused. “You’re just like the rest of them (…) You’re just really scared to give someone new a go, because you think (
…) they might just be better than you (…). You are pathetic (…), you are just a gutless wonder!” Additionally, she vets her anger in Spanish which further confuses Scott, and it all changes her position from an insignificant, submissive character to becoming a partner who challenges
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Yet, Scott’s boastfulness does not stop there. In the scene at Fran’s place, when Rico, Fran’s father, challenges Scott to dance Paso double, Scott still thinks he is in control of the situation; he whispers to Fran, “Just keep up with me.” However, the loud increasing laughter of the whole company confuses him and makes him vulnerable.
Barry Fife is a very different character who is manipulative and hypocritical.
His relations with the other characters involve manipulation or bullying. Barry is portrayed as a caricature of a dominating president who uses lies to keep the status quo and the authority of his Federation. Angered by Scott’s lack of compliance with the Federation’s regulations, he attempts to turn Scott’s best friend, Wayne, against Scott, “You know, Scott is not the only one with a future to think about (…)” “One bad egg can rot the whole barrel.” Later on,
Barry manipulates Scott by telling him a false story about his father’s past. He uses overt lies, exaggerated, melodramatic tone of voice and an emotional blackmail to convince Scott to dance with Liz. In an emotional tone of voice with tears in his eyes, he begs Scott, “I’m begging you – dance with Liz and win the Pan Pacifics once, just once for Doug. He’s suffered enough.”
Barry’s manipulative and revengeful character is further revealed in his conversation with drunk Ken. In a boastful, ostentatious tone of voice he announces, ”I’ve set it up for you to win, no matter how you dance. (…) Your year, Ke n. Just get on the floor, go through the motions and it’s in the bag.”
His real goal is to make Scott lose the competition as a punishment for his rebellious nature. Barry’s manipulative approach to people has been long standing. He tells Les, “You’ve betrayed his father (Doug).” When Les protests, “But Doug wanted me to dance with Shirley – you told me that,”
Barry retorts maliciously, “Yeah, but it’s easy to believe what you want to hear,” which reveals he lied to Les about it as well and manipulated Les into dancing with Shirley.
Similarly to “Strictly Ballroom”, the characters and their relationships in “…..” are clearly portrayed through their dialogue.
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In conclusion, dialogue in Strictly Ballroom and in “…..”, its verbal and nonverbal elements, are vital in revealing characters and their relationships.
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HANDOUT 11
HSC ENGLISH ESL (Stage 6)
YEAR 12 ASSESSMENT TASK
MODULE / UNIT: Experience Through
Language
TASK TITLE: Composing Dialogue
CONTEXT: This module requires students to explore the uses and conventions of dialogue, its interpersonal nature, who controls the conversation and whether certain voices are silenced.
DATE / TIMING / SUBMISSION INSTRUCTIONS:
Students must write two drafts of their two dialogues and present them to the teacher with the final polished copy, displaying evidence of editing at the end of the unit (Week 7).
WEIGHTING:
COMPONENTS:
20 %
1. Writing
2. Speaking
10%
5%
3. Viewing/representing 5%
SYLLABUS OUTCOMES:
5. A student demonstrates understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts
7. A student analyses the effect of technology on meaning
8. A student adapts a variety of textual forms to different purposes, audiences and contexts in all modes
9. A student engages with the details of text in order to develop a considered and informed personal response
12. A student draws upon imagination to transform experience and ideas into text, demonstrating control of language
13. a student reflects on own processes of responding and composing
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TASK DESCRIPTION / SPECIAL
INSTRUCTIONS:
Part A – Imagine that you have just learnt you are going to visit your country for the first time since you had left it as a child. You are thrilled, but the next moment you learn about the real reason of your visit: you are to meet your future spouse. Write two dialogues:
either a dialogue you have with your parents when you learn about their plans for your future or a dialogue with your friend about it, after the conversation with your parents
a radio interview in which together with one other peer you discuss the issue of arranged marriages.
Remember to use the conventions of dialogue appropriate to the two situations. Decide who controls the conversation, whether some voices are silenced and how you are going to reveal relationships and conflict.
As an alternative, you may choose any other interesting, exciting, humorous or terrifying moment from your life or from someone else’s life and write two dialogues:
a dialogue between you and your parent or a friend
a radio interview
Each text should be of 300 to 500 words in length. You should do it by producing two solid working drafts and your third final polished copy to the teacher on the dates indicated in this assessment task. Your drafts should show evidence of editing.
Part B – Deliver a three to five minutes’ speech, explaining how you have used dialogue in your two conversations. Explain why you have used different dialogue conventions (its verbal and non-verbal elements) in each conversation and how you have used dialogue to convey who controls the conversation, to express feelings, to reveal relationships, conflict and future complications.
Part C – Choose two scenes from Strictly
Ballroom and explain how dialogue in these scenes reveals themes.
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(Regarding Part A - teachers can choose any other topic which they feel their students will relate to well. The more relevant the topic is to students’ interests, the better the creative responses.)
ASSESSMENT CRITERIA:
Better answers will demonstrate:
comprehensive understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and a highly developed ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
an ability to compose imaginatively with sustained precision, originality, and flair for a specific purpose and context
sustained reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure consistent and appropriate style in each text
excellent speaking skills
Average answers will demonstrate:
understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and a developed ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
an ability to compose imaginatively with a degree of control for a specific purpose and context
some reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure consistent and appropriate style in each text
good speaking skills
Poor answers will demonstrate:
elementary understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and a basic ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
elementary ability to compose imaginatively with little degree of control for a specific purpose and context
little evidence of reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure consistent and appropriate style in each text
elementary speaking skills
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MARKING GUIDELINES
Guideline Level Descriptions
comprehensive, highly developed understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and highly developed ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
highly developed ability to compose imaginatively with sustained precision, originality, and flair for a specific purpose and context
sustained reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure consistent and appropriate style in each text
excellent speaking skills
well developed understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and well developed ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
well developed ability to compose imaginatively with precision, originality, and flair for a specific purpose and context
well developed reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure consistent and appropriate style in each text
well developed speaking skills
reasonable understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and well developed ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
sound ability to compose imaginatively with some precision and originality for a specific purpose and context
satisfactory reflection on own processes of responding and composing to ensure appropriate style in each text
developed speaking skills
generalised understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and generalised ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
generalised ability to compose imaginatively for a specific purpose and context
some reflection on own processes of responding and composing
limited speaking skills
elementary understanding of how audience and purpose affect the language and structure of texts, and elementary ability to describe and analyse how dialogue conveys who controls the conversation and how it reveals relationships, conflict and themes
limited ability to compose for a specific purpose and context
limited reflection on own processes of responding and composing
few speaking skills
Mark
17 –20
13 -16
9 –12
5 –8
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