2.23 Planning a Draft
Objectives:
 Draft a thesis statement.
 Plan a well-organized style analysis essay by
completing a content frame for comparison of text.
DN 38: Please sit in movie groups
Agenda:
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Cinematic Techniques/Effects
Check HW: Analytical Paragraph
Review end of film
Embedded Assessment overview
Graphic Organizer – 3 movies
Thesis
Statement Paragraph Essay
Outline
HW: Midterm tomorrow.
THESIS: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to make
strange characters seem lovable.
BLOCK 1:
Jaziah: Different cinematic techniques help Burton to show emotional reactions between characters.
Raquel: Burton uses varied cinematic techniques to let the audience know that certain characters are
evil.
Xavier: Tim Burton’s cinematic techniques help to set a mysterious mood in his films.
Danny: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to demonstrate that characters are not what they seem at
first.
Ysabella: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to scare the audience.
Tazaiya: Burton utilizes certain cinematic techniques to make the audience feel that they are a part of the
action of the characters.
Benny: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to show that people misunderstand other characters.
Sandel: Burton employs different cinematic techniques to show the protagonist’s innocence.
Dayvon: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to create suspense.
Brendan: Burton utilizes cinematic techniques to make the audience feel sad about situations in his
films.
Brisa: Tim Burton’s different cinematic techniques to make the audience initially feel repulsed by his
characters.
Dagnes: Burton makes the audience feel more sympathetic towards his characters using different
cinematic techniques.
Alex: Creepy characters become kind as a result of Tim Burton’s cinematic techniques.
Carlos: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to show the importance of key decisions that characters
make.
BLOCK 2:
Marlenny: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to create suspense.
Tory: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to show similarities between characters.
Giavanna: Burton employs different cinematic techniques to show the protagonist’s innocence.
Bennett: Burton uses varied cinematic techniques to let the audience know that certain characters are
outcasts.
Naomi: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to make the audience feel empathy with his
characters.
Evonya: Burton makes the audience feel more sympathetic towards his characters using different
cinematic techniques.
Kobey: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to show that people misunderstand other characters.
Trey: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to show the importance of key decisions that characters
make.
Winno: Burton utilizes cinematic techniques to make the audience feel sad about situations in his films.
Drequan: Burton uses varied cinematic techniques to let the audience know that certain characters are
evil.
BLOCK 3:
Manny: Burton uses cinematic techniques to make events more dramatic.
Ifeanyi: Different cinematic techniques help Burton to show fearful reactions between characters.
Jeniya: Burton makes the audience feel more sympathetic towards his characters using different
cinematic techniques.
Citlalli: Tim Burton uses cinematic techniques to create suspense.
Javen: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to make the audience feel empathy with his
characters.
Myra: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to show similarities between characters.
Lizzie: Creepy characters become kind as a result of Tim Burton’s cinematic techniques.
Yamilet: Tim Burton uses different cinematic techniques to make the audience feel fear.
Najelie: Burton utilizes certain cinematic techniques to make the audience feel that they are a part of the
action of the characters.
Yorleny: Tim Burton’s cinematic techniques demonstrate that characters are excited.
Style Analysis Essay
Think about the Tim Burton films that you have viewed and analyzed.
Choose three or four stylistic devices (cinematic techniques) that are
common to these films. Write an essay analyzing the cinematic style of
director Tim Burton. Your essay should focus on the ways in which the
director uses stylistic techniques across films to achieve a desired
effect.
Required components (8 sheets):
 4 section sheets for Edward Scissorhands
 Technique sheet (5 columns) for Edward Scissorhands
 Technique sheet (2 columns) for The Corpse Bride
 Triple Film technique sheet
 Graphic Organizer or Outline
Essay guidelines:
 Essay should be 5-6 paragraphs
 Body paragraphs should include 2-3 pieces of evidence each
 Essay must be typed
 Heading in top left corner of first page
 Times New Roman or Arial font, 12 point
Essay Deadline: Wednesday, February 11 on Turnitin.com (typed and uploaded)
Rubric is on the reverse side
Name:
Block:
Style Analysis Essay Scoring Guide
Scoring
Criteria
Exemplary
Proficient
Ideas
The essay
The essay
The essay
The essay
 clearly identifies and  clearly identifies  The writer shows  summarizes the
analyzes Burton’s
and describes the
limited
plot with little
style, uses evidence
director’s style,
understanding of
attention to
from multiple films,
using support
the director’s
elements of style
and provides
from more than
style; support is  does not show
insightful
one film
insufficient or
an
commentary
inaccurate
 displays a clear
understanding of
 displays in-depth
understanding of  confuses how the
the director's
understanding of
the effect of the
director achieves
cinematic
cinematic techniques director’s
an intended effect choices and their
and how they create
cinematic choices. and/or may
intended effect.
specific effects.
include a plot
summary rather
than an analysis.
Structure The essay
The essay
 is logically organized  is well-organized
 introduces the topic  introduces a clear
clearly and develops
thesis, uses
a strong thesis; body
detailed body
paragraphs develop
paragraphs, and
the topic with
provides a
examples and details
conclusion that
leading to a
supports the
perceptive conclusion explanation
 uses transitions
 uses transitions to
effectively to clarify
create clarity and
ideas and create
cohesion.
cohesion.
Emerging
Incomplete
The essay
The essay
 is not well is confusing
organized
and/or missing
key parts
 may have an
unfocused thesis,  omits the thesis
undeveloped body or does not
paragraphs,
develop it
and/or inadequate  uses no
conclusion
transitions to
 uses few, if any,
create clarity or
transitions to
cohesion.
create clarity or
cohesion .
Use of
The essay
The essay
The essay
The essay
Language  uses a formal style
 maintains a formal  uses informal or  shows little use
and demonstrates a
style and
inappropriate
of the vocabulary
precise and
demonstrates
diction and
of literary and
sophisticated use of
correct use of film demonstrates
style analysis
terminology to
and literary
limited use of film  contains multiple
knowledgeably
vocabulary to
vocabulary to
errors in
discuss cinematic
discuss style
discuss style
language and
style
 is generally error  contains errors
conventions that
 has few or no errors
free.
that distract from
interfere with
in standard English
meaning.
meaning.
usage.
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