Critique 2.doc - ESL 100

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Eric Sun
ESL 100D&E
Professor: Teddy Chocos
Feb 22 2015
Letter
Dear, Yifei,
I am Eric Sun. I read your essay about your hobby. I like it as well. When I was a
child, I also want to become a famous painter but my teacher cut off my dream. When
I take the pencil to draw a rabbit, it is a cartoon character. My teacher walks around
the classroom. She finds my picture and asks me that are you draw a pig? As you
know, I am very unhappy. Now, when I revive that thing, it is very funny. Maybe I do
not have that talent as you said. However, according to your article, I find that the
hobby can help us more as well. In my point of view, hobby can stimulate potential
and have a good attitude to life.
First of all, the main reason for me is that the hobby can stimulate potential. Take
me, for example; I also like cooking same as Kathleen. When I came to America, my
parents always worried about my daily because my mother take care my daily life.
They think that I do not have ability to live. However, I like eat some different food.
When I travel to a different city, I always want to eat some local food. That is amazing
feeling. Now, I can cook diverse food. I also share the food pictures with my friends.
They were shocked. I just want to say that something is not depend on you can or can
not, it depends on you want or you do not want to do it. Hobby helps me to familiar
with my potential. I love cooking, so I will try my best to do it. Thus, hobby can
stimulate potential.
Another aspect worth mentioning is that the hobby helps us to have a good
attitude to life. As you said, “Painting also makes me become an active person. I used
to sit on the sofa and watch television after school in the past; I’m getting lazier and
lazier in this lifestyle. Therefore, I learned painting and instead of watch television
during my leisure time”. I agree with you. From my perspective, if people do not have
their individual hobby, they will waste their life. People who do not have a hobby,
Maybe they would watch television to pass their leisure time, like a coach potato.
That attitude is very lazy to live. Additionally, nowadays, more and more people begin
to care about health. They are too engaged in their work or study. They lack time for
exercising bodies. In this situation, they will have some health problems such as
obesity and near-sightedness. If they have a hobby as me, they can go to different
landscape to take a photo. It is a good way to relax and exercise as well. Therefore,
hobby helps us to have a good attitude to life.
To sum up, I conclude that hobby can help us more as well. Specifically, it can
stimulate potential and have a good attitude to life. I hope everyone can choose a
hobby and stick to doing it.
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