THE SYNTAX OF TOPIC ORGANISATION IN ENGLISH AND GREEK* Philip King: University of Birmingham * This paper is based on a presentation originally made at the Fourth International Symposium on the Description/Comparison of English and Greek, held by the English Department, Aristotle University of Thessaloniki in April 1990. Abstract: Although formal comparisons between the grammar and syntax of English and Greek are relatively readily available, there has been less work done with a functional focus at the discourse level. However, dissertation drafts produced in English by Greek students show errors in topic signalling which can be traced back to a conflict between the permissible patterns of English academic writing and those of Greek. The present study considers and compares two features in particular: how the sentence-initial topic is incorporated into the syntax of the sentence, and the function of the -ing clause, comparing the latter with the function of -όντας clauses in Greek. Illustrative data are taken from academic and technical sources for both English and Greek, while examples to highlight mismatches are taken from samples of student writing. It is shown that, although similarly structured patterns occur in both languages, there may be functional or conventional discourse restrictions on their occurrence in English in particular which make the establishment of equivalence complex, and account at least in part for the errors made in producing English academic discourse. 1. BACKGROUND: The motivation for this paper arises out of my work at the University of Birmingham, where I am one of a small group of lecturers constituting the English for Overseas Students Unit, which as one of its principal duties provides English language and study skills support to such students. It was in the course of working with a Greek student on the English of his PhD that I became aware that, while at the larger rhetorical discourse level (Connor & Kaplan 1987, Houghton 1990) his writing was well-structured, and while his vocabulary, grammar and syntax were generally accurate, there were some problems with his English which could be seen as possibly due to the fact that he was employing constructions which were in general possible both in English and in Greek, but which were not appropriate at the particular points in his writing because they had the effect of highlighting the wrong information. Taking data from the student's draft as a basis, and drawing on further data from academic and technical writings in both Greek and English, this paper compares the syntax and function of two structures in Greek and their equivalents in English. I am not concerned with the philosophical problem of the nature of equivalence; I take it as established in the minds of teachers and learners, or as indicated in the dictionary. The interesting question is, where we have an apparent grammatical or translation equivalence, to what extent are things in fact really "the same" and where if anywhere do things diverge? As will be shown, there appear to be important respects in which the equivalence does not hold. Also, the fact that "things went wrong" at this level in the process of composing the thesis suggests that the structures may be perhaps carrying different messages in English and Greek. The structures in question are, firstly, topicalising phrases like όσον αφορά, όσο για and so on in Greek and as for, as far as X is concerned, and the like in English; and secondly clausal uses of the -όντας form in Greek compared with clausal uses of the ing form in English. The corpus from which the Greek examples are taken consists of a few articles from Οικονομικός Ταχυδρόμος (of which the Economist is the nearest equivalent in English), the book Η Ελλάδα προς το 2000, a collection of papers by economists and social scientists, and the journal Γλώσσα, which covers topics in applied linguistics. The search was conducted by eye. For English, the corpus comprises computer-held files of New Scientist, various academic papers principally in Engineering and Plant Biology, and some economics text. This was searched using a concordancing program developed by my colleague Tim Johns (1986). The student's thesis is on a 19th century Greek poet. There is thus a match between the three corpuses only at a very general level, that of academic and technical writing. This clearly limits the strength of any claims that can be made; on the other hand there are serious practical difficulties in the way of achieving a tight match between the Greek, English and student's corpuses while maintaining a size of corpus which enables these particular phenomena to be studied statistically. More detailed work, in particular the building up of large computer-held corpuses would in the long term provide us with a better quality of information. 2. AS FOR ΟΣΟ ΓΙΑ: SENTENCE TOPIC In both Greek and English, the beginning of the sentence is held to have an importance in the information structure of the discourse. Thus Tzartzanos (1963, II, 273) says apropos of Greek word order: Γενικά σε μια πρόταση αυτοτελή και ανεξάρτητη ένας όρος της που τονίζεται ιδιαιτέρως, ήτοι που εκφέρεται με έμφασι ή αντιδιαστολή, παίρνει συνήθως θέση στην αρχή της προτάσεως (σπάνια στο τέλος). Η μεσαία θέσις είναι συνήθως θέσις του όρου της προτάσεως, ο οποίος εκφέρεται χωρίς καμιά έμφαση. Σε μια σειρά πάλι σχετικών προτάσεων μιάς περιόδου ο κάθε όρος κάθε προτάσεως παίρνει θέσι προς την αρχή της, καθόσον σχετίζεται με τα προηγούμενα, και προς το τέλος, καθόσον σχετίζεται με τα επόμενα. (In general, in an independent clause, an item which is stressed, ie which is uttered with emphasis or is contrastive, generally goes at the beginning of the clause, rarely at the end. Middle position is occupied by an item receiving no particular emphasis. In a series of clauses in a sentence, an item goes at the beginning of its clause if it relates to the previous context, at the end if it relates to a following one.) For the general picture with regard to English, see Brown and Yule (1983, 70) and Halliday (1985, 38) for discussion. For Halliday, the initial element of the clause is what he calls the theme, and topic is then part or all of the theme. The theme is "the element which serves as the point of departure of the message; it is that with which the clause is concerned". In writing, "a well-chosen theme has to fulfil two criteria: it must take up an idea that has already been introduced, and it must have enough importance in the developing text to deserve its favoured position" (Pereira 1984, 249, talking of the development of children's writing). In this paper, I use topic to mean that constituent of the clause which occurs as first item, and make no further distinction between topic and theme. For a writer, the problem is twofold: (i) choice of topic, and (ii) how to link it grammatically to the rest of the sentence. Impressionistically, students encounter fewer problems with the former than with the latter, perhaps because as is clear from Tzartzanos (op cit), what is important in some way comes at the beginning, and this is common to English and Greek (as well as other languages, cf Li and Thompson (1981, 15) on the position with regard to Chinese), and as writers who have advanced some way beyond the stage of competence noted by Perera, research students will have a preformed, and perhaps language-independent notion of topic (in the Hallidayan sense of "theme" quoted above). The second problem however is language-specific. Both Greek and English can front different constituents of the clause, but will differ in the readiness (verifiable statistically, in principle) with which they do so. Thus, English can for instance front objects ("this you must see!") and even verbs ("knocked me right out, it did!"). Nothing is ever quite impossible. However, the similarity between English and Greek ends here; what is normally possible in Greek may not be normally possible in English; what is normally possible in one genre in Greek may not be quite so normally possible in the corresponding genre in English, and vice versa. It is important to note that we are not concerned in this paper with "what is possible in the language" or "what the language allows" at a grammatical level so much as with what constitutes an acceptable written product at a discourse level, within a particular, broadly defined, genre. The "as for" construction announces the theme explicitly (Halliday 1985, 40). Halliday says that the theme "is then picked up later in the clause by the appropriate pronoun", giving as an example: "As for my aunt, the duke has given her that teapot". My data from technical and academic English suggest this view needs some modification; in fact this view is in some ways an expression of the problem. In passing I would note that the use (Halliday is not alone in this) of examples which are either made up or very short or relate to a particular variety of the language can often give rise to difficulties. Picking up by a pronoun may work in speech in English, but if it is done in academic writing, the feeling is often that the sentence would have been better rewritten; a large number of examples in English do not have any grammatical pick-up, thus: (1) As for the huge variability in the number of contradictory results, Moore says that NCI applies only the most stringent criteria to their decisions: a significant tumour response to a given dose in two species or two sexes. (2) As for the Blue Skies criteria, we may imagine that a better understanding of photosynthesis either may lead to, say, better synthetic devices, or to new insights into control engineering, leading say to advances in the control of complex fermentation processes. (3) As for the physical appearance of the people who left behind their stone tools and food refuse, Singer and Wymer can say little because, compared with animal bones, there are few human remains in the deposits and they are mostly fragments of skulls and jawbones and teeth. Indeed, it is not possible without some knowledge of the subject in each case to see what the relationship is between the "as for" adjunct and the rest of the sentence; if anything, the relationship appears to be between some general, superordinate notion introduced by "as for", and some detail aspect, comprising the rest of the sentence. But there seems to be an inference that can be supplied: in (1) for example there is possibly a denial of culpability; in (2) the argument is that photosynthesis research could have practical payoff (so either it is not simply blue skies research or alternatively blue skies research should be supported). Only in (3) is there a clear direct paraphrasable connection (Singer and Wyman can say little about the physical appearance). There are however examples which do have the pick-up: (4) As for the conversion of mass into energy, this does affect stars ... (5) As for Vivian (Lord) Bowden, I can only report that he once offered me ... These however appear to come rather more from technical journalism, and it should also be noted that (4) is marked (... does affect ...), anticipating a reader's objection. In (5) the pronoun pick-up is embedded in a report clause. In the context of PhD writing, which has to be of publishable standard (5) in particular, has a number of inappropriate features. The sentences from the PhD draft which seem less acceptable are those in which the topic noun group is in fact picked up by a pronoun. Although the field (Greek literature) is distinct from the fields in the examples above, this does not seem to affect the point at issue. The pick-up pronoun is underlined. STUDENT PRODUCTION: LESS ACCEPTABLE TOPICALISATION: (6) Regarding the evaluations of Kalvos's work, either by foreign scholars or by native critics who, for one reason or another expressed them in another European language, one can establish that they do not diverge from those which have been described in the previous chapters of the present part. (7) Finally as regards the Anthologies of Modern Greek Poetry between the years 18301880, it must be noted that several of them contain excerpts from Kalvos's poems, and not the complete Odes. (8) A parallel phenomenon to Kalvos, as regards the reception of his work, is C P Cavafy who was initially known as a poet of the hellenic diaspora. These sentences were initially (and independently of each other) felt to be less acceptable because there seemed to be a clearer way of putting them. Note that the student does not have any grammatical problems in the traditional sense, and that the vocabulary is also appropriate. What seems to be happening is that at a rhetorical level collocations are being assembled in a manner appropriate to Greek (... do not diverge from ...), and, of more concern to us here, the topic is being grammatically detached from within a sentence when there is in fact another mechanism for getting across what the writer wanted to convey. It is as if the writer has a good but not extensive enough repertoire of means of grammaticalising the topic, and is forced to compensate by recourse to the last resort of the explicit topicalising phrase. A possible rewrite of (6) could be: (6') Evaluations of Kalvos's work, whether by foreign scholars or by Greek critics who for one reason or another expressed themselves in other languages, can be shown to put forward the same views as those which have been described in the previous chapters of the present part. This is deliberately a minimal change, to show the effects of removing the topicalising phrase; other changes might be argued for, but they are beyond the scope of this paper. MORE ACCEPTABLE TOPICALISATION: (9) As to Kalvos's compiled Grammar of Modern Greek, it was to be published in F Nolan's manual, A Harmonical Grammar of the principal Ancient and Modern Languages. (10) As regards the debates on the Greek language and the quarrels between the Demoticists and the supporters of katharevousa, it is clear that the poems of Kalvos offered no ammunition for either side. (9) and (10), also produced by the same student, were felt to be more acceptable. Note that the argument for the acceptability of (9) depends on the extended context, while (10) has no pronoun pick-up. In summing up so far, it should be pointed out that, as usual with corpus-based or real-text analysis, we are not dealing with an all-or-nothing situation; this is not a grammatical error, but a question of how far a piece of writing conforms to a norm for its genre, a norm which may be in terms of frequency (more than a certain density of occurrence and a feature becomes obtrusive) or in terms of what we may loosely regard as collocation (is this feature patterning in a characteristic or noncharacteristic way?). The more it deviates from what is felt to be the norm, the more problematic it becomes. TOPICALISATION IN GREEK The citations below come from academic prose; all except (14) have a pronoun pick-up, which typically may be the following subject. I do not have a highly developed instinct in this regard, but would incline to say that there appears to be nothing wrong with this pick-up in Greek. In fact it would seem unnatural to me to omit the pronoun in (11) and (12): it should be remembered that the pronoun in the Greek system does not serve the same function as the English one in the English system; in particular in (12) the pronoun form αυτός makes it clear that grammatically reference is to πληθυσμός rather than μέγεθος. (The English translations of the Greek sentences from here on are provided to highlight the point at issue; they are not intended as accurate renderings on points of detail.) (11) Ιδίως όσον αφορά τα πανεπιστήμια και τα άλλα συναφή ιδρύματα, αυτά λειτουργούσαν λιγότερο ως φορείς επαγγελματικης εξειδίκευσης και περισσότερα ως κέντρα αναπαραγωγής στελεχών για τα κυρίαρχα κοινωνικά στρώματα (δημοσια διοίκηση, δικαιοσύνη, υπηρεσίες κ.λπ.) (In particular as far as universities and similar institutions are concerned, these functioned less as providers of professional specialisations and more as centres for turning out middle-class managers within the public administration, the legal system, public services, etc.) (12) Όσον αφορά το συνολικό μέγεθος τoυ φοιτητικού πληθυσμού στην τριτοβαθμιαία, αυτoς ενδέχεται για τoυς λόγους πoυ πρoαναφέρθηκαν να παραμείνει σταθερος ή να μειωθεί ελαφρά μέχρι το 2000. (As for the overall size of the student population in tertiary education, this [sc. population] is likely for the reasons already mentioned to remain steady or decline slightly up to the year 2000.) (13) Όσον αφoρά τους αποφoίτoυς των ΤΕΙ, αν τα ιδρύματά τους ανταποκριθούν εγκαίρως και πληρως στις ανοικτές ή λανθάνουσες ανάγκες της παραγωγής - ιδιαίτερα δε στον κρίσιμο τομέα των εφαρμογών -, αυτοί οχι μόνον θα απορροφηθούν απο την αγορά εργασίας, αλλά θα δημιουργήσουν και μια πρόσθετη, νέα ζήτηση γι' αυτούς. (As for the graduates from the technical colleges, if their institutions respond fully in time to the overt or latent needs of production, particularly in the critical area of applications - they will not only be absorbed by the labour market but will create a new additional demand for them [ie for more graduates].) (14) Όσον αφορά τις πολιτισμικές και εκπαιδευτικές δραστηριότητες, oι εκπαιδευτικoί oργανισμoί πoυ ασχολούνται με την αρχική ή συνεχή επιμόρφωση εκπαιδευτικών διαπιστώνουν μια αδράνεια ως προς την πρoσέλευση νέου κοινού. (As for cultural and educational activities, educational organisations involved with preservice or in-service training have noticed an inertia as regards bringing in newcomers.) 3. AS FOR -ING AND -ΟΝΤΑΣ The uses of the -ing and -όντας which are compared here relate to their clausal function. I am not concerned with postmodifying -ing as in "a book costing more than that". The status of -ing and όντας clauses can be seen as a matter of support for the main clause (or for a superordinate clause) in a sentence. The main clause sets out a proposition, or pushes forward the argument and, in Halliday's terms (op cit, 196), the secondary clause expands on it. The problem for the writer is to determine what constitutes the main information and what constitutes the subsidiary support or extension. In a traditional sense, "speaking at a meeting in Birmingham, she stressed the importance of the new policy" and "she spoke at a meeting in Birmingham, stressing the importance of the new policy", as pieces of sentence grammar, are equally acceptable. In discourse terms however, it is possible to make the wrong choice, so to speak. There will be a topic, in the broader sense of paragraph topic or discourse topic (Brown and Yule (op cit, 71), which will be better supported by one choice of prioritising rather than the other. In general, a reader will expect the features of the main clause to pick up preceding points, or adumbrate features which will in fact be picked up later, while the supporting clause information is on the whole not expected to reappear. The student examples 18 - 20 all run into problems of what is highlighted, while another problem, which affects 21 in particular is the question of clarity of relationship. The participial clause can often be glossed as temporal, causal, hypothetical, manner, concession, or final (Tzartzanos, op cit, I, 336, writing of -όντας, but the same point holds for English). However, there is a question of how easily the precise relationship can be recovered by a reader, or how much needs to be explicitly signalled by the writer in accordance with the conventions of the language in which the text is being composed. It is at least possible that since the relationship has to be inferred, the preferred inferences might be different in the two languages. (15) Gorgias, praising exuberantly the contribution of the Heptanesian School to Modern Greek Letters in a topical comment of his (1849), makes a reference to Kalvos. (16) Iosif de Kigalas deals with the poet in his book Σχεδίασμα κατόπτρoυ της Νεoελληνικής Φιλoλoγίας (1846), speaking about the Odes and Kalvos's religious translations of the Book of Common Prayer. (17) ... and they saw as an unfortunate event the fact that Kalvos's muse had stopped singing so rapidly, depriving Modern Greek literature of a quality poetry. Again, the initial, unanalysed response to these sentences was simply that they could be improved. The reasons are partly internal, partly with reference to the broader context. Thus, (15) suffers from the interposition between subject and verb of the -ing clause. (16) could be collapsed into one clause: "Iosif de Kigalas deals with Kalvos's Odes and translations of the Book of Common Prayer in his book Σχεδίασμα κατοπτρου της Νεοελληνικής Φιλολογίας (1846).", since the propositional content of "deals with" does not seem to be not sufficiently developed by "speaking about" One possible rewrite might be "In a paean of praise for the contribution .... Gorgias makes reference to Kalvos." (17) seems more natural if "depriving" is preceded by "thereby", stressing that this is result, not accompanying circumstances. (It is also improved by other changes to the form: "they saw it as unfortunate that ...", and "early" in preference to "rapidly".) I do not want to argue strongly that the participles here are simply the result of interference from Greek, and it is an almost impossible task to find closely parallel sentences in Greek academic writing. For comparison however, here are some sentences from academic or technical writing in Greek, many of which would have in English a more satisfactory rendering than a simple participle clause. In most cases one can probably keep the main - subordinate relationship, but in some, this will need revising; indeed in 18 the relationship could be reversed. (18) Συνεχίζoντας τo πoλύπλευρo αναπτυξιακό της έργo η Εμπoρική Τράπεζα, με τη συμβολή και της θυγατρικής της εταιρίας ΜΕΤΕΚ, παρoυσίασε πρoσφατα στη Βέρoια μια νέα ολοκληρωμένη μελέτη για τις αναπτυξιακές δυνατόυητες της Κεντρικής και Δυτικής Μακεδoνίας. (Continuing its extensive development work, the Bank of Commerce, with the assistance of its daughter company METEK recently presented in Veria a new integrated study on development possibilities in Central and Western Macedonia.) An English version might equally well be expressed as "The Commercial Bank, with the assistance of its daughter company METEK, has continued its extensive development work with the recent presentation in Veria of a new integrated study ..." (19) Παρoυσιάζοντας τη μελέτη oι κ.κ. ...... επισήμαναν oτι η κύρια επιδίωξη είναι η διερεύνηση των πρoϋποθέσεων πoυ υπάρχουν για την ενεργoποίηση τoυ παραγωγικού δυναμικού της περιοχής και η επεξεργασία συγκεκριμένων πρoτάσεων για ανάπτυξη επενδυτικής δραστηριότητας. (Presenting the study, Messrs ...... pointed out that the principal objective is to broaden the requirements for activating the productive potential of the region and to work out concrete proposals for the development of investment activity.) (19) shows a good functional match between the -ing and -oντας participles; indeed this pattern, of a brief introductory participle clause followed by a reporting verb seems to be a common one in both languages. Other Greek participle clauses do not map in the same way: (20) Λίγo αργότερα όμως o ίδιoς μαθητής χειρίζεται λανθασμένα την εν λoγω λέξη συμπληρώνοντας πρόoταση άσκησης: Τα παιδιά κληροδοτούν (αντί κληρονομούν) τoυς γoνείς. (A little later on however the same pupil misuses the word in question, completing a sentence of an exercise: children bequeath to (instead of inherit from) their parents.) In Greek, the participle clause gives the grounds on which the assertion of the main clause is made. In English, the participle clause can do that, but seems to be fighting as well with an intentional interpretation (in order to make a mistake, he puts in such-and-such a word). The problem here may in fact be a lexical one: the phrase "completing a sentence" in English seems to draw a lot of attention to the nature of the exercise type or (wrongly executed) activity. More natural, since this is not an unusual phenomenon, might be to choose a semantically emptier word: "A little later on however the same pupil misuses the word in question, putting [or writing] 'children bequeath their parents'". What also seems to happen in Greek is that the -oντας participle may have an actor other than the subject of the main sentence. This practice is frowned on in English (the dangling participle) but has not as far as I know attracted any attention from the hosts of prescriptive grammarians who pronounce on Greek (but most traditional prescriptive grammarians of both languages, be it observed in passing, concentrate on particular bêtes noires, while ignoring many other problematic phenomena). (21) Εξάλλoυ γνωρίζoυμε, oτι o κυριότερoς ρόλoς των τραπεζών συνίσταται στην επαναφoρά των απoταμιευμάτων τoυ κoινού στo παραγωγικό κύκλωμα, πρoσφέρoντας μάλιστα και τoυς απαραίτητoυς μηχανισμούς για τo χρoνικό τoυς μετασχηματισμό. (In addition we know that the chief role of the banks consists in the bringing-back of the savings of the public into the production cycle, offering in particular the necessary mechanisms for their transformation over time.) Here it is the banks which offer the mechanisms, not the role. This basically additive relationship can only work as a participle clause in English if "banks" becomes the subject; alternatively in this particular case, "consists in" could be followed by two -ing forms, giving a parallelism in the English grammar which is implied in the Greek, thus: " ... the chief role of the banks consists in getting public savings back into the production cycle, and specifically in offering the necessary mechanisms ...". Possibly (and a subject expert could verify this), the relationship is causal: The chief role of the banks is to channel savings back into investment, and this they can do precisely because they possess the appropriate mechanisms. 4. AS FOR THE CONCLUSION The examples discussed here are only a small sample, but illustrate the complexities of attempting a functional matching of the two languages at a grammatico-syntactic level. Despite the apparent equivalence between the grammatical statements of Halliday and Tzartzanos, a comparison of the ways in which practised writers achieve their purposes in each language shows that no simple functional mapping of original Greek text and original English text is possible. Marmaridou's (1987) argument for semantico-pragmatic, language-neutral parameters of meaning might be a way of getting systematically at the matching problem, although as it stands it relates to source and target language pairs of texts, while my concern and my students' is with production of a single text in a foreign language (although it has been convenient in the present paper to translate certain Greek sentences in order to illustrate how English would be more likely to handle certain features). The examples also demonstrate the problems faced by students writing at an advanced level, who may well have a basic lexical and grammatical competence in English, but who are not fully aware of how these resources are exploited in constructing academic discourse. For them, a contrastive study of how native-language and foreign-language academic discourse operates, with attention drawn to differences in collocations, would clearly be beneficial. While matching pairs of texts are unlikely to be found, one approach would be to set up computer-held corpuses of English and Greek academic text, enabling statistical work to be done for example on grammatical and lexical features, and to a limited extent (at least directly) on functions. General and specialised corpuses exist for English at London, Lancaster and Birmingham Universities, and comparative computerbased research into English and French using concordancing has been started by Roussel (1991) at the University of Nancy. 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