Name:
Category
4
Distinguished
3
Proficient
2
Needs Improvement
1
Unsatisfactory
Ideas and
Content
(X 8)
-Insightfully addresses event,
emotions/reactions regarding
the event
-Focuses on 1-2 minute event
-Excludes unrelated details
-Seamlessly integrates dialogue
with tags and emotions
-Purposeful inner dialogue
provides insight into narrator
-The event is “shown” through
specific and visual description
of the five senses appropriately
and flawlessly
- Flawless, creative similes and
metaphors that are not cliched,
mixed
-Sufficiently addresses event,
emotions/reactions regarding the
event
-Story attempts to focus on a 1-2
minute event
-Few unrelated details
-Integrates dialogue with tags and
emotions, some problems with
clarity and emotion qualifiers
-Inner dialogue used, needs more
purpose and insight
- The event is “shown” through
description of the five senses,
moments of “tell” could be
converted to “show” moments
- Similes and metaphors
attempted but mixed or cliched
-Inconsistently addresses event,
emotions/reactions regarding the
event
-Story focus is too broad or lengthy
to effectively narrate
-Many unrelated details
-Integrates dialogue with few tags
and little emotion
-Inner dialogue has little purpose
and insight
-Little visual description of event,
needs more “show” moments
-Use of similes and metaphors
attempted
-Does not address event,
emotions/reactions regarding the
event
-Story lacks a specific focus
-Mostly extraneous details
-Little to no dialogue
-Little to no inner dialogue
-“Tell” is used to describe the
events rather than “show”
-No similes or metaphors seen
Organization
(X 6)
-Effortless direction
-Clear opening and closing of
story with exposition and
resolution
-Appropriate transitional phrases
allow reader to follow
-General direction
-Attempts to effectively and
clearly expose and resolve story
-Appropriate transitional words
allow reader to follow
-Needs direction
-Exposition and resolution unclear,
may lead to confused reader
-Some transitional words attempt to
help reader follow
-No direction
-Lacks an exposition and/or
resolution to frame the story
-No transitional words, flow
choppy
Written
Expression
(X 7)
-Varied, accurate and appropriate
word choice
-Effective use of combined
sentences
- Reader questions do not exist
as the necessary information is
provided and clear
-Accurate, appropriate word
choice
-A variety of combined sentences
attempted
-Reader develops a few questions
while reading but none deter
from meaning
-Lack of variety in word choice,
often overused or repetitive
-Choppy, rambling or awkward
sentence structure; few combined
sentences
-Reader develops questions while
reading that writer does not
adequately anticipate
- incorrect or inappropriate word
choice
-Distracting amount of choppy,
rambling or awkward sentences;
no combined sentences
-Reader is confused and unclear
due to the writer’s inability to
anticipate questions
Mechanics,
Grammar,
Usage,
Formatting
(X 4)
-Punctuation for dialogue is
accurate, appropriate and allows
for easy fluency
-Commas, semi-colons and
colons are used appropriately for
combined sentence structure
-Does not need another revision
-Punctuation for dialogue is
appropriate but at times incorrect
or unclear, mostly fluent to the
reader
-Commas, semi-colons and
colons are used mostly correct
-1 revision away from
distinguished
-Variety of mistakes and incorrect
dialogue punctuation, hinders with
fluency
-Correct use of commas, semicolons and colons attempted
-More than 1 revision away from
distinguished
-Dialogue punctuation is incorrect
and lacks fluency
-Punctuation for combined
sentences not clear or correct
-Many revisions away from
distinguished
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