HOW TO WRITE GOOD SENTENCES Arif Suryo Priyatmojo 2012 THEORY Cohesion Cohesion is the resources within language that provide continuity in a text, over and above that is provided by clause structure and clause complexes. Halliday and Hasan (1976) in Coulthard (1974) claims that cohesion is formed by the formal ties, which bind one sentence to another. There are five headings of cohesion based on Halliday and Hasan (1976). They are reference, substitution, ellipsis, conjunctin and lexical cohesion. 1. Reference Reference is one kind of cohesive ties in texture. Reference refers to how the speaker or writer introduces participants and then keeps track of them once they are in the text (Eggins, 1994:95). Its elements establish semantic relationship between them, in which one of the elements provides the other with the meaning. According to Halliday and Hasan (1976) there are two basic types of reference. Reference (situational) Exophora (textual) Endophora (to preceding text) (to following text) Anaphora Cataphora Table 1 Types of reference Source: Halliday and Hasan (1976: 33) On the one hand, exophoric reference contributes to the creation of text, in that it links the language with the context of situation, but it does not contribute to the integration of the passage with another so that the two together form part of the same text. On the other hand, endophoric reference is only considered cohesive due to its contribution to the integration of the text. Meanwhile, Eggins (1994: 96-97) states that the identity of a presuming reference item may be retrievable from a number of different contexts. They are from the general context of culture, the immediate context of situation and elsewhere within the text. Only the third context contributes to the cohesion of the text. It is similair with the endophoric reference propossed by Halliday and Hasan. There are two different ways in which reference items can function within a text. Anaphoric reference means that the subsequent items can only be interpreted with reference to the initial phrase of the first sentence. Typically, anaphoric reference refers to a participant mentioned nearby (one or two sentences previously), but sometimes it may refer back to an item mentioned many pages before. Cataphoric reference points the reader foward, it draws us further into the text in order to identify the elements to which the reference items refer (Nunan: 1993: 22). The followings are the example of exophoric reference (situational) and endophoric reference (textual). (1). Child : Why does THAT one come out? Father : That what? Child : That one Father : That what? Child : That ONE! Father : That one what? Child : That lever there that you push to let the water out. (2). a. A beautiful lady, a beautiful lady See how she walks ! see how she walks b. Mr. Bambang went to Jakarta last week. He went there to meet his client In the first example, we can not assume what is presupposed by the reference ‘THAT’ and ‘ONE’ because they are not found in the text. It did not occur to the child that he could point to the object in question, presumably because it did not occur to him what was in his focus of attention was not also in everyone else’s, a limitation that is characteristic of the interaction. Exophoric reference is one form of contextdependence since without the context we cannot interpret what is said (Halliday & Hasan, 1976: 34-35). In the second example, we can identify what are presupposed (a) she refers to a bautiful lady; he refers to Mr. Bambang. These items are directives indicating that information is to be retrieved from elsewhere. So much they have in common with all cohesive elements. Moreover, they do not depend on the context of situation like the exophoric reference. What is essential to every instance of reference whether endophoric (textual) or exophoric (situational) is that there is a presuppotion that must be satisfied; the thing referred to has to be identifiable somehow (Halliday & Hasan, 1976: 33). There are several lingusitic items which can create reference cohesion. Halliday and Hasan (1976: 37-39) devide reference cohesion into personal reference, demonstrative reference and definite article and comparative reference. Personal reference is reference by means of function in the speech situation through the category of person. Nunan (1993: 23) states that personal reference items are expressed through pronouns and determiners. They serve to identify individuals and objects that are named at some other point in the text. It relates to Halliday and Hasan (1976: 48) that the third person is only herently cohesive, in that a third person form typically refers anaphorically to a preceding item in the text. First and second person forms do not normally refer to the text at all; their referents are defined by the speech roles of speaker and hearer. Semantics category existential Grammatical function Head Class Noun Person: I me Speaker (only) Addressee(s), with/without other person. You Speaker and other person(s) We, us Possessive modifier Determiner Mine My Yours Ours Your Our Other person, male He, him His His Other person female She, her Hers Her Other person; object They ,them Theirs Their Object; passage of text Generalized person It One (its) Its One’s Table 2 Types of personal reference Source: Halliday and Hasan (1976:38) (3). Mr. John is an English teacher. All of his students like him very much. The word his and him in the second sentence refer to Mr. John. The word his is a personal reference which refers to the third person singular. The certain person that is Mr. John is followed by its pronoun, so that it is called as anaphoric reference that is the implicit encoding device follows its reference. Demonstrative reference is reference by means of location, on scale of proximity. It is essentially a form of verbal pointing. The speaker identifies the referent by locating it on a scale of proximity. The system is as follows. Neutral The near near: far: far (not near) singular this that Selective Participant plural these those Circumstance place time here now there then Table 3 Types of demonstrative reference Source: Halliday and Hasan (1976: 57) These demonstratives occur extensively with anaphoric function in all varieties of English. The demonstratives have some relevance to cohesion, in that they partially determine the use of these items in endophoric (textual) reference. (4). My family got frightened when we saw an accident in our trip. That was the most terrifying accident I’ve ever seen. (5). While my parents were having lunch, my brothers and I walked around to see some lions and elephants. Those are my brothers’ favorites animals. (6). I spent my holiday in my uncle’s house in Bali. I do like staying there. The word that in example (4) is demonstrative reference which demonstrates the first sentence. Then, the word those in example (5) refers to some lions and elephans. Finally, the word there in example (6) refers to my uncle’s house in Bali. These can also be called as anaphoric references. It is because they presuppose some items in the previous sentence. The demonstrative reference is also called locational reference (Eggins, 1994: 98). It does not involve the identification of a participant in a text (a person or thing), but the identification of a location in time or space. Locational referents to nearby time or space (e.g. here, now, these days, at the moment, above, below) are frequently retrieved exophorically, while locational items refering to distant time or space (e.g. there, then) are often endophorically retrieved. Comparative reference is indirect reference by means of identity or similiarity. With comparative reference, the identity of the presumed item is retrieved not because it has already been mentioned (or will be mentioned) in the text, but because an item with which it is being compared has been mentioned (Eggins, 1994: 98). The system is as follows (Halliday, 1976:76): general (deictic) comparative particular (nondeictic) Numerative : more fewer less further additional; soas- equally- + quantifier, e.g: so many Ephitet : comparative adjctive and asverbs, eg: better; so- as- more – less – equally- + comparative adjectives and adverbs, eg: equally good Table 4 Types of comparative reference Source: Halliday & Hasan (1976:76) (7). The most tragic accident that I have ever seen was the accident happened last year. The phrase the most tragic accident in the above sentence is comparative reference (in superlative degree). Any comparison includes as least two things that are being compared and any comparative attached to one entity or concept thus implies the existence of the other entity or concept. Thompson (1996: 151) explains that comparison happens not only in the text but also out of context (situational). It is called exophoric reference. Nevertheles, references which have contribution to the integration of the texts considered cohesive. 2 Substitution A substitution is the replacement of a word (group) or sentences segment by a “dummy” word. The reader can fill in the correct element based on the preceding sentences (Rankema, 1993: 37). Substitution is replacement of language element into others in a bigger composition in order to get clearer difference, or to explain some certain language elements. It is an item or items replaced by another item or items. There is a distinction between substitution and reference in which subtitution is a realization in the wording rather than in the meaning. Substitution is a relation between linguistic items such as words and phrases in the level of lexicogrammar (Halliday and Hassan, 1976: 89). It resembles reference in being potentially anaphoric and constituate a link between parts of a text. They also explain that since substitution is a grammatical relation, a relation in the wording rather than in the meaning, the different types of substitution are defined grammatically rather than semantically. There are three types of substitution: nominal, verbal and clausal substitution. The followings are the examples of each. (1). There are some new tourism resorts in Indonesia. These ones’ve become the most attracting places to visit. From the sentence above, we can see that the word ones is substitution of new tourism resorts. This substitution is considered as nominal substitution. (2). John : Bill says you went to Bali last week. Brown : So did you! The clause did is substitution because the complete sentence actually you went to Bali. The word did is presupposed by certain verb went. It belongs to verbal substitution. (3). Smith : Are father and mother going to have vacation to East Java? Brown : I think so In the sentence above, the word so presupposes the whole clause Father and mother are going to have vacation to East Java. The word so above belongs to clause substitution. 3. Ellipsis Ellipsis is the omission of a word or part of a sentence. It occurs when some essential structural elements are omitted from a sentence or clause and can only be recovered by refering to an element in the preceding text (Nunan, 1993: 25). Accoding to Halliday and Hasan (1976: 144) ellipses occur when something that is structurally necessary is left unsaid, there is a sense of incompleteness associated with it. The information is understood, but not stated. Like substitution, ellipsis is a relation within the text and in the great majority of instances the pressuposed item is present in the preceding text. Ellispsis is also normally anaphoric relation in the level of words and structures. The difference between substitution and ellipsis is that in the former a substitution counter occurs in the slot and the pressuposed item is replaced, whereas in ellipsis the slot is empty. It is often called as substitution by zero. Like the substitution, there are also three kinds of ellipsis: nominal, verbal and clausal ellipsis. Nominal ellipsis means the omission of a noun Head, for example: (1) My father likes to go to a crowded tourism place, but I like a peaceful. In the second sentence the word tourism place is not mentioned after the word a peaceful. However, any competent English speaker can easily retrieve the meaning of a peaceful as a peaceful tourism place. Then, the adjective a peaceful functions as Head. Verbal ellipsis involves the omission of the verb Head while the auxiliary element remains explicit. For example: (2). John : Have you been to Bali? Brown : Yes, I have The complete response must be Yes, I have been to Bali. In the dialogue, the speaker does not use long response. It is clearly understood that the speaker does not want to confuse to his/ her interlocutor. Clausal ellipsis represents the omission of a part or whole clause. For example: (3). John : Who will go shopping today? Brown : Mom In that example, the whole clause is omitted. The complete response should be Mom will go shopping today. In the spoken language the speaker does not need to use the complete clause when answering questions introduced by a question word. It has been explained above that ellipsis is the omission of a word or part of a sentence. The omission of a word or clause does not change the meaning of the sentences in the text. Ellipsis is a form of relation between sentences, which is an aspect of the essential texture. The relevance of ellipsis in the present context is its role in grammatical cohesion. 4. Conjunction According to Rankema (1994: 38) conjunction is a relationship which indicates how the subsequent sentence or clause should be linked to the preceding or the following (part of the sentence). Conjunction is quite different from the previous cohesive devices such as reference, substitution and ellipsis. It is not a device for reminding the reader of previously mentioned entities, actions and states of affairs (anaphoric relation). However, it is a cohesive device because it signals relationships that can only be understood through reference to other part of the text (Nunan, 1993: 26). Halliday and Hasan (1976) state that conjunctions relate to the inventory of connectors which link clauses in discourse. They connect sentences to each other, but excludes coordinating and subordinating linkers within sentences. Meanwhile, there are also some linguists, one of them is Martin (2001) who includes all connectors, whether or not they link clauses within or between sentences. Another explanation to the concept of conjunction comes from Baker (1992). He asserts that conjunction is a relationship which indicates how the subsequent sentence or clause should be linked to the preceding or the following sentence or clause by using cohesive ties which relate a sentence, a clause or a paragraph to each other. Further he explains that: Conjunction signals the way the writer wants the reader to relate what is about to be said to what has been said before. Conjunction expresses one of a small number of general relations. The main relations are ... additive (and, or, also, in addition, furthermore, besides, similiarly, likewise, by contrast, for instance), adversative (but, yet, however, instead, on the other hand, nevertheless, at any rate, as a matter of fact), causal (so, cosequently, for, because, under the circumstances, for this reason), temporal (then, next, finally, after that, on another occasion, in conclusion, an hour later, at last), and continuative (now, of course, well, anyway, surely, after all) (Baker, 1992: 191). The following are the examples of each type of conjunction: (1). My family likes to spend holliday by visiting some places and they also like to go fishing in the sea. The word and and also in the above sentence are conjunctions which connect the first and the second clause. Here and and also signal the presentation of additional information. These conjunctions are additive. (2). It was raining very hard yesterday. However, my classmates went to the exhibition. (3) I am afraid I’ll be home late tonight. Nevertheless, I won’t have to go in until late tomorrow. The relationships signalled by however and nevertheless are adversative because the information in the second sentence of each text moderates or qualifies the information in the first. (4). Chinese tea is becoming increasingly popular in restaurants, and even in coffee shops. This is because there is belief that tea has several health-giving properties. In this type of conjunction, the relationship is one of cause and consequence. Here, the word because signals the causal and effect relation. The first sentence shows the effect and the second is as the cause. (5). I went over to my friend’s house and I said ‘We’ll go for a walk’. And we went far away and I said ‘I don’t know our way home. And then we kept on walking and we were very hungry. After that we saw a village and we went to talk to them and we said ‘We’re hungry’. Then, they gave us some food and we thanked them and we went walking off. And then we stopped and sat down. And then we saw a giant and I sreamed ‘Cooee’. (source Butt et al. 1994: 94) Temporal relationship exist when the events in a text are related in terms of the timing of their occurrance. Here the temporal conjunction and then, then and after that. (6). When my father said that we would end our vacation, I felt so sad, after all I could understand that it was not good time to stay any longer in case of bad weather. There is continuation in the above sentence. It uses after all to signal the continuative matter. 5. Lexical Cohesive Device The types of cohesion we have discussed so far all involve grammatical resource/ items (conjunction, reference items, substitutes items) and grammatical structure. Cohesion also operates within the lexical zone of lexicogrammar by choosing of lexical items. Lexical cohesive devices refer to the role played by the selection of vocabulary in organizing relation within a text (Baker, 1992: 202). It does not deal with grammatical and semantic connection but with the connection based on the words used. Meanwhile, Nunan (1993: 28) says that lexical cohesion occurs when two words in a text are semantically related in some way. They are related in terms of their meaning. There are two kinds of lexical cohesion: reiteration and collocation. In general reiteration is devided into five types. They are repetition, synonym, hyponym, metonym and antonym. Repetition is a word or words which has been stated, and then it is repeated again. We can tie sentences or paragraphs together by repeating certain key words from one sentence to the next or one paragraph to the next. It is in the case of the clearness of the main idea of the writing (Kilborn and Kriesi, 1995). Synonym is the relationship between two words which have the same meaning. Hyponym is defined as a sense relation between words (sometimes longer phrases) such that the meaning of one word (or phrase) is included in the meaning of the other (Hurford & Heasley, 1983). It is a semantic relation between specific and general meaning, between general class and its sub-classes. The item referring to the general class is called super-ordinate and those referring to its sub-classes are called hyponym. Antonym is an opposite in meaning while metonym is a term used to describe a part-whole relationshiop between lexical items. The second type of lexical cohesion, collocation, deals with the relationship between words on the basis of the fact that these often occur in the same surrounding (Rankema, 1993: 39-40). The followings are examples of each type of lexical cohesion. (1). A conference will be held on national environmental policy. At this conference the issue of sanitation will play an important role. In the sentences above the word conference occurs twice as the indication that they are repeated. (2). A conference will be held on national environmental policy. This environmental symposium will be primarily a conference dealing with water. In the first sentence, the word conference is repeated in the second sentence with its synonym symposium (3). My father went to a furniture exhibition last night. He wanted to buy an antique table. Furniture is the superordinate word for the word table as its subordinate. (4). At its six-month checkup, the brakes have to be repaired. In general, however, the car is in good condition. Brake is as the part of car as the whole (5). The front rows are available for old men and women. Young boys and girls are seated in the back rows. Here, the word old is the opposite of young. 5. Halliday and Hasan Taxonomy In addition to the taxonomy that allows cohesive ties to be classified according to function, Halliday and Hasan introduce a second taxonomy. This second taxonomy allows cohesive ties to be classified according to the amount of text spanned by the presupposed and presupposing elements of a given tie. Halliday and Hasan term four such “text-span” classes. Membership in a class is determined by the number of Tunits a given cohesive tie span. Taken together, the two taxonomies Halliday and Hasan present are classified in two different ways, one according to function and one according to distance. The four “text span” classes contained in Halliday and Hassan’s second taxonomy are illustrated in the following paragraph: Text Span Classes (Immediate, Mediated, Remote, Mediated-Remote) 1. The last word ended in a long bleat, so like a sheep that Alice quite started. 2. She looked at the queen, who seemed to have suddenly wrapped herself up in wool. 3. Alice rubbed her eyes, and looked again. 4. She couldn’t make out what had happened at all. 5. Was she in a shop? 6. And was that really – was it really a sheep that was sitting on the other side of the counter. 7. Rub as she would, she could make nothing more of it (Halliday & Hasan, 1976: 330-340) In sentence (2), she refers to Alice in the first sentence. It relates to the sentence which immediately precedes it. It is called an immediate tie. The word she in sentence (4) also refers to Alice in the immediate sentence. She, in sentence (5) has the target of its presupposition another instance of she, that in (4) and in order to resolve it we have to follow this through to the occurence of Alice in sentence (3). This type is called a mediated tie. Remote ties, on the other hand, result when two elements of a tie are separated by one or more intervening T-units. It can be seen from sentence (6). In the sentence, there is no presupposing or presupposed item. Finally, a tie may be both mediated and remote. For example, the she in sentence (7) doesn’t have any presupposition in sentence (6) but refers back to sentence (5). Here, the tie is considered remote. At the same time the presupposed item in (5) is again she, which has to be followed through to the she in (4) and finally to Alice in (3), so it is also mediated. Coherence Coherence means to hold together. It means that texts have the right order with the clear process. In addition to unity, coherence plays an important role in making a text read well. A coherent text consists of interrelated sentences which move smoothly one for another. A writer needs to inform well about his/her composition. He needs to give clear information what the text is about. The readers need to know about the topic and the content about the text produced by the writers. Cohesion itself does not guarantee that the text read well. The writer needs to organize them in a good way. To organize any text to be coherent, the writers need to keep their readers well informed about what they are and where they are going (Butt et al. 1995: 90). Based on the Introduction to Functional Grammar, there are grammatical resources to signpost the way through clauses, clause complexes and paragraph, from beginning to the end of a text. According to Butt et al. (1995: 90), the first signpost must be at the beginning of a text, paragraph or clause. It tells the readers what the writer has in mind as a starting point. The writers use the first position in the clause to signal their readers what the message is about. In An Introduction to Functional Grammar (1994: 38), Halliday terms the signpost as theme and the rest of the clause rheme. 1. Theme and Rheme Theme and Rheme are two terms which represent the way in which information is distributed in a sentence. The definition of theme given by Halliday (1985: 38) is that theme is given information serving as “the point of departure” of a message. The given information is the information which has already been mentioned somewhere in the text, or it is shared or mutual knowledge from the immediate context. In other words, theme typically contains familiar, old or given information. It must include the whole of the first item in the experiential meanings. This experiential meanings can be participant, process and circumstance. Theme provides the settings for the remainder of the sentence (Rheme). Rheme is the remainder of the message in a clause in which theme is developed. The rheme contains unfamiliar or new information (Eggins, 1994: 275). New information is knowledge that a writer assumes the reader does not know, but needs to have in order to follow the progression of the argument. The boundary between theme and rheme is simple: Theme is the first element occurring in a clause; the remainder clause is rheme. The identification criteria for the rheme are simply everything that is not the theme is the rheme. The following is an example of the identification of theme and rheme. The man in the moon Mr. Smith and his rival On the first day of Lebaran On Sunday morning On a rainy day THEME came down too soon were fighting for the crown we went around to meet other people my love came to my house we invited our close friend RHEME We can identify three different types of elements of clause structure that can be theme based on the three dimensional metafunctional structure of the clause: topical (experiential) elements, interpersonal elements and textual elements (Eggins, 1994: 276). Topical Theme Eggins (1994, 276) states that an element of the clause to which a transitivity function (Actor, Behaver, Senser or Circumstance) can be assigned occurs in the first position in a clause, we describe it as a topical theme. An important principle is that every clause must contain one topical theme. After we have identified topical theme, the rest must be the rheme. I Actor Theme have been in Bali three times In Jakarta Circ. Loc Theme my colleagues and I spent our holiday Rheme Rheme Infants cry and fuss for a mean of 1 ¾ hr/ day at age 2 weeks Behaver Theme Rheme (Source: Eggins, 1994: 277) Simple theme usually contains only experiential/ topical theme. But, the topical theme in some clauses are also prefaced by other elements such as interpersonal and textual. When there are some other themes preceding the topical theme, it is said that the clause have multiple theme. It is of course, the whole nominal group, verbal group and adverbial group filling the first participant, process and circumstance function as theme. Theme includes all premodification, postmodification and all coordination (Butt et al., 1995: 92). 3 Textual Theme The writers often use experiential meanings with a group or phrase, the function of which is to connect the message to the previous text. In this case the writers create a coherent text where the connections between the message are well signposted. Conjunctions are more likely to occur at the beginning of clauses and they must be considered thematic. Eggins (1994, 281) states that textual themes are elements which do not express any interpersoal or experiential, but they have important cohesive work in relating clause to its context. She also points out that there are two main types of textual elements. They are continuity adjuncts and conjunctive adjuncts. The former relates to the use of expression commonly used in the spoken dialogue such as oh, well, yea and no. The latter is element which serves to link clause or sentences together. It can be achieved mostly by the use of conjunction. The followings are examples of each clause preceded by textual theme which connects its experiential meaning to the meanings of neighbouring clauses: And they went on their journey But I was still happy Nevertheles all students enjoyed the trip And so the teacher gave some assignment Textual Topical Rheme Theme The conjunctions are and, but, nevertheless, and so. They are thematic because they are used at the beginning of a clause to signpost the developmant of the text. 4. Interpersonal Theme Interpersonal themes are used when the writers begin clauses with interpersonal meanings indicating the kind of interaction. Butt et al. (1995: 94) defines the categories of interpersonal thems into finite in interrogative clause, initial vocatives, mood and common adjunct. The following examples have an interpersonal theme combined with a topical theme: May Assuredly Madam Could Probably Interpersonal Theme We We the team They Topical have some butter for the royal slice of bread? will grant for your request have beaten the grand finalists? Could Rheme Thematic Progression Thematic progression refers to the way the writers organise the texts. It can be achieved by picking up or repeating a meaning from a preceding theme or rheme. Eggins (1994: 302) states that the way the writers organize their composition/ texts is very important in case of its contribution that theme makes to the cohesion and coherence with how thematic elements succeed each other. He also elaborates three kinds of text development: theme re-iteration, the zig-zag pattern and the multipletheme pattern. 1. Theme re-iteation/ Constant theme It is regarded as the simplest pattern of text development since one basic way is to keep to a text focussed. It is simply to re-iterate an element. Repetition is considered as an effective means of creating a cohesive and coherent text. Having the same participant made theme on a regular basis provides the text with a clear focus (Eggins, 1994: 303). Nevertheless, this kind of text development in which the theme never varies will not only be boring to read, but will indicate a text is going no where. The following is the example of constant/ reiteration thematic pattern. Theme Rheme My friends and I went to Jakarta last holiday We visited some places there We also spent our holiday by visiting Ancol and Dufan My friends and I were very happy Table 2.5: Theme and rheme: A reiteration/constant theme (based on Butt et.al, 1995:99) Theme 1 Rheme 1 Theme 2 Rheme 2 Theme 3 Rheme 3 Theme 4 Rheme 4 Figure 2.1: Thematic Progression: Theme reiteration/constant theme. 2 A zigzag/linear theme pattern. Another thematic development is recognized as linear theme pattern/ a zig-zag pattern. In this thematic development, an element which is introduced in the rheme in the first clause gets promoted to become the theme of the second clause. Theme On Saturday night It Rheme my friends and I went to Lawang Sewu is well-known as the living place for ghost Table 2.6: Theme and rheme: A zigzag/linear theme pattern (based on Butt et.al, 1995:99) Theme 1 Rheme 1 Theme 2 Rheme 2 Figure 2.2: Thematic Progression: A zigzag/linear theme pattern 3 A multiple theme/split rheme pattern The development of the texts may also include re-iteration and zig-zag pattern. It is called multiple theme. In this pattern, the Theme of one clause introduces a number of different pieces of information, each of which is then picked up and made Theme in subsequent clauses (Eggins, 1994: 304).\ Theme On Saturday, We It The rooms The restaurants Rheme my colleague and I went to Jakarta. stayed at Ibis Hotel had lots of rooms and restaurants consisted of economical and luxuries even president suit class offered many kinds of menus from different countries Table 2.7: Theme and rheme: A multiple theme/split rheme pattern (based on Butt et.al, 1995:100) Clause1 T1 R1 On Saturday Clause2 T2 We Clause3 T3 It Clause4 T4 The room Clause5 T5 The restaurants my ... Jakarta R2 stayed ... Hotel R3 had ... restaurants R4 consisted ... class R5 offered ... countries Figure 2.3: Thematic progression: A multiple theme/split rheme pattern