Jan Frodesen University of California, Santa Barbara frodesen@linguistics.ucsb.edu Developing Paraphrasing Skills through Vocabulary Knowledge and Control TESOL, Long Beach, CA April 2, 2004 The Pedagogy Of Paraphrase: Practices And Problems Paraphrasing in the context of academic writing instruction Referencing source materials: The main “commandments” Problems L2 writers have in paraphrasing effectively Characteristics of unsuccessful paraphrases Using guided vocabulary exercises to develop paraphrasing skills Vocabulary Exercises For Developing Paraphrasing Skills A. Introducing references: Introductory phrases and reporting verbs Many paraphrase exercises that ask students to rewrite sentences in their own words do not also ask them to introduce the paraphrase. Some developing writers assume that unless they quote text, they do not need to introduce the author, so it’s a good idea to spend time showing how to introduce references before or after paraphrases and helping students understand the meanings of a range of reporting verbs. Since these verbs are also useful for brief summaries that typically include paraphrasing, reference is made to summary here as well. Introducing a paraphrase The following structures can be used to introduce an author’s ideas that you are going to paraphrase or summarize. Task 1: Put a check next to the structures that you have used in your own writing. (The verb states has been used for the examples, but others could be used as well.) ___a. According to (AUTHOR/ARTICLE), ____c. (AUTHOR) states that _______ ___ b. As (AUTHOR) states/has stated/stated, ____d. (AUTHOR) further states that ________ Which of the structures above require commas following them? Circle the commas. True or false? A comma should not be placed between a verb and the word that which introduces a paraphrase. Reporting verbs The following are verbs for introducing a paraphrase. They are called “reporting verbs” because you use them to cite another’s ideas, whether as a quote or a paraphrase. ___advise ___argue ___assert ___caution ___claim ___confirm ___contend ___declare ___deny ___emphasize ___indicate ___maintain ___mention ___note ___point out ___propose ___remark ___say ___speculate ___state ___stress ___suggest ___urge ___warn Task 1: Put an “X” in the blank next to all of the reporting verbs in the list whose meanings you are familiar with. The words not checked will represent those whose meanings you should look up in a dictionary. Task 2: Answer the following questions about reporting verb meanings by circling your choices. 1. Which three of the following verbs could introduce an author’s strong claims? argue assert claim note remark 2. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a weak or tentative claim? confirm maintain propose speculate suggest 3. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase that represents an important point the author wishes to make? contend emphasize mention say stress 3. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase that represents a point of lesser importance? assert mention note remark urge 4. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase in which the author offers advice to readers? caution deny indicate warn urge Task 3: Select three sentences or sentence pairs from your assigned reading to paraphrase. To introduce each paraphrase, choose three different reporting verbs from the list. Choose verbs that you have not used (or seldom used) before to get practice in using new vocabulary. Write your paraphrase; then introduce it with the author’s name or source’s title and the reporting verb. Note: You can make this exercise more challenging by not telling students how many verbs to choose or to include six rather than five choices. Also, see Swales & Feak, 199, p.118 and Hinkel, 2004, p. 234 for other categories of clustering reporting verbs (objective vs. evaluative, positive/negative/neutral). B. Distinguishing “unique phrasing” from “shared language” L2 writers, like other developing writers, sometimes have difficulty determining what words should be paraphrased. Instruction on paraphrase refers to these words in various ways, as “character words,” “the author’s distinctive voice,” “unique phrasing” and so on. These exercises are designed to raise consciousness about the kinds of words that the writer needs to replace with his or her own words or phrases. Longman’s Language Activator is a good source for creating word lists. Task 1: One word in each of the following lists has more of a distinctive character than the others and, if it were in a text, should most likely be paraphrased and not copied. Find the word and circle it. Then state in what context the word might be used. Use your dictionary to help you if you are not sure. 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. big polish off decrease odd hoodwink cavernous end nosedive strange fool large finish drop uncanny trick Task 2: Read the following sentences adapted from an article about the rise of Chinese language learning in Korea. Circle one word in each sentence that you think reflects the author’s distinctive voice. Then supply a synonym that fits the context. 1. After years of slogging through her English lessons, stumbling over impossible pronunciations and baffling rules of syntax, Chae Eun came up with a better idea. 2. South Korea is known as one of the United States’ staunchest allies and is host to 37,000 U.S. Troops. 3. In what might be a sign of things to come, China is the object of infatuation at the moment. 4. Chinese studies are booming throughout the world. 5. For most students, the motives are strictly mercenary: They believe that command of Chinese will give them an edge in the job market. 6. “The interest in Chinese does reflect some antipathy to U.S. hegemony and arrogance,” said Suh Jin Young, an international relations professor at Korea University in Seoul. (From: Who Needs English? B. Demick, Los Angeles Times, March 29, 2004, Column One) C. Working with key vocabulary to use in paraphrases In many cases “key vocabulary” in a text can be considered a subset of the category “unique phrasing” though sometimes key words might be technical and cannot be paraphrased. Background: One of the ways to begin paraphrasing a sentence or group of sentences is to identify key words that are not technical. Then, find a synonym for the key words. Original: The notion that one can purge one’s emotions by expressing them has been labeled “the catharsis hypothesis”. Freudian psychologists, of course, applauded this idea. Paraphrase: The _________ that one can _________ one’s emotions by expressing them has been _________ “the catharsis hypothesis”. Freudian psychologists, of course, __________ this idea. Task 1: Begin paraphrasing each of the sentences below by finding a synonym for the italicized words or phrases. NOTE: You can delete words from the original sentence as long as you don’t change the writer’s intended meaning. 1. In that sense, some merit can be attached to the claim that “violent emotional expressions” may have some benefits. 2. Repressed emotions such as fear and anger are discharged by laughing and crying. 3. Sometimes an expression of anger helps clear the air; but often, the direct expression of anger is self-indulgent—it begets more anger and aggression. 4. What is probably important is not whether people express anger or withhold it in a single instance, but whether they use their anger to change things that upset them in the first place. 5. When frustrated subjects were able to aggress either physically or verbally against the source of their frustration, their blood pressures and heart rates returned to normal with surprising rapidity. 6. The victim must get the retaliation deserved, nor more and no less. If one goes overboard, one may feel guilty later. 7. Other research warns that when people express their angry, aggressive feelings, they often get themselves so worked up that the situation may become worse than it was before. (Exercise created by Christine Holten, UCLA TESL/Applied Linguistics) Task 2: For each of the sentences below about defining intelligence, underline two key words or phrases. Then write a synonym for each of the words/phrases you selected. Your synonym could be a word or a phrase. 1. Definitions of intelligence often reflect cultural values. 2. The closest Mandarin equivalent, for instance, is a Chinese character that means good brain and talented. 3. Chinese people often associate this with traits such as imitation, effort and social responsibility. 4. Such traits do not constitute important elements of intelligence for most mainstream Americans. From: People: Psychology from a Cultural Perspective, David Matsumoto (1994) Another way to work with key words in pre-paraphrase tasks is to ask students to create word family charts. Writers can then use different forms of the words to start a paraphrase. Task 3: The following words are from readings in this unit. Using a dictionary, look up the meaning of each word. Provide the missing members of each word family. The first has been done for you. If the word does not have members in one or more classes, write X in the blank. WORD FAMILIES Verb associate Noun association combination Adjective associative Adverb associatively Intelligent imitate comparison precisely D. Paraphrasing descriptive adjectives/adverbs commonly found in academic writing Vocabulary selected for paraphrase exercises like the following should be relatively contextindependent, using common abstract nouns or, in the second exercise, adjectives. Though common in academic writing, some of these may not be words in the students’ active vocabulary. Task 1: For each of the following phrases, underline the adjective that describes each noun. Then write a word that could replace it in the space provided. The first has been done as an example. 1. an important finding _significant __ 2. potential problems ____________ 3. obvious differences ____________ 4. pragmatic solution __________ 5. a rudimentary step ___________ 6. a trivial objection ___________ 7. a rational excuse ____________ 8. a novel approach _____________ Adapted from an exercise in Hinkel (2004), p. 235 Task 2: Now do the same for the adverbs in the phrases below: Underline the adverb and write a word that could replace it in the space provided. The first has been done as an example. 1. perpetually changing __constantly___ 2. tentatively approved _______________ 3. approximately as fast ____________ 4. vitally important _______________ 5. radically different ___________ 6. fundamentally wrong ___________ 7. subtly different ____________ 8. vastly superior ___________ E. Condensing and expanding vocabulary in original text In the following pre-paraphrasing tasks, writers practice condensing phrases into one word and, conversely, expanding words into phrases (i.e., “circumlocution” ).For exercises such as this, you can extract vocabulary from assigned readings or present general vocabulary that would be useful for many paraphrasing tasks. Task 1: Rewrite each of the phrases, changing the underlined modifier phases to one word. The word you choose should not be a word form of the original. Make word order changes as appropriate. The first has been done as an example. 1. delayed for the time being temporarily delayed 2. more or less the same 3. a well thought out plan 4. an outcome that couldn’t be guessed 5. an act that was not cowardly 6. an achievement that no one could believe 7. an answer that did not beat around the bush 8. an argument that is beside the point Note: To make this exercise more challenging, ask students to write a synonym for the word being modified, e.g. 1) temporarily postponed. Be careful to choose words that can be somewhat easily replaced (e.g., the same would not be easy to replace in 2.). As illustrated above, making modifiers negative helps to keep the writer from paraphrasing using words in the phrase. This would be a good group task since it could draw on students’ knowledge of idioms. The instructor might need to give some clues if students cannot access a word to substitute for an idiom such as “beside the point”. Task 2: Now rewrite each of the phrases below. Changing the underlined adjective to a phrase that will follow the noun. Write a synonym for the noun. Make other changes as necessary. Use a dictionary such as Collins Cobuild to help you if necessary. The first has been done as an example. 1. an expensive mistake an error that was costly 2. a fortunate encounter 3. a simple solution 4. an inconsistent performance 5. a valid excuse 6. an opposite view 7. a hostile reaction 8. a odd response F. Transforming sentence structure: Using word form cues to guide rephrasing To create a sentence transformation exercise like the one that follows, choose sentences from a text that the students have read carefully. Give students words and phrases to prompt a restructuring of the sentence. The amount of text you provide will depend on the proficiency levels of your students. The task below is based on a passage called Bystander Apathy by John Darley and Bibb Latane. For a detailed lesson plan I wrote that includes this exercise and a few more sentences for paraphrase with sample answers see the University of Calfornia Diagnostic Writing Service website. Task: Rewrite each of the sentences, using the words in parentheses. Look first for the part of the original sentence that will need to be replaced. Find the subject of any verbs—who is doing what? Make any other changes you think are needed. Refer to the entire passage to provide context when needed. 1. People trying to interpret a situation often look at those around them to see how to react. (base reactions on) 2. There are three things bystanders must do if they are to intervene in an emergency. (necessary) 3. In a crowd, then, each person is less likely to notice a potential emergency than when alone. (tends to....less) 4. Even if a person defines an event as an emergency...(decides) 5. ... the presence of other bystanders may still make each person less likely to intervene. (may feel less inclined) ________________________________________ Sample paraphrases for sentences using the cues: 1. People trying to interpret a situation often base their reactions on those around them. 2. Three things are necessary for bystanders to intervene in an emergency. 3. In a crowd, then, each person tends to notice a potential emergency less than when alone. 4. Even if a person decides that an event is an emergency... 5. ...each person may feel less inclined to intervene in the presence of other bystanders. G. Paraphrase analysis: Identifying synonyms in original text and paraphrase The exercise that follows asks students to examine both the original text and paraphrases of the text to determine how specific words and phrases have been reworded in the paraphrase. Although this is an analysis and not a production task, it is nevertheless quite challenging as the paraphrases also include transformed sentence structures. This exercise can be found on Norbert Berger’s website: www.ngberger.com/ex/elc2002/materials/paraphasing_task1.htm H. Paraphrasing practice using text-manipulation software Finally, methods that illustrate where key words appear and require synonym substitution for content words using text manipulation software such as Storyboard and Gapmaster can be found, among other places, on Oregon State University English Language Institute’s website. This website shows exercises created by Deborah Healy, with ideas from John Whitney. (http://oregonstate.edu/~healeyd/162/162paraphrase.html; accessed March 8, 2004) BIBLIOGRAPHY Teacher reference Hinkel , E. (2004). Teaching Academic ESL Writing: Practical Techniques in Vocabulary and Grammar. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Schleppegrell, M. J. (2004). The language of schooling. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Schleppegrell, M.J. & Columbi, M.C. (Eds.). (2002 ). Developing advanced literacy in first and second languages: Meaning with power. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Student textbooks Brinton, D., Frodesen, J., Holten, C., Jensen, L., Repath-Martos. (1997). Insights 2: A contentbased approach to academic preparation. White Plains, NY: Longman. Holten, C. and Marasco, J. (1998). Looking ahead: Mastering academic writing: Book 4 J. Reid and P. Byrd, Series Editors. Boston: Heinle & Heinle. Swales, J. M. & Feak, C. B. (1994). Academic writing for graduate students: A course for nonnative speakers of English. Ann Arbor: University of Michigan Press. _______. (2000). English in today’s research world: A writing guide. An Arbor: University of Michigan Press. Dictionaries and thesauruses Biber, D., Leech, G. Johansson, S. Conrad, S. & Finegan, E. (2000) Longman Grammar of Spoken and Written English. Longman Publications Group Collins CoBuild New Student’s Dictionary (1997). Glasgow: HarperCollins Publishers. Longman Language Activator: The Worlds’ First Production Dictionary. (1993). Essex:Longman Websites www.ngberger.com http://owl.english.purdue.edu http://oregonstate.edu/~healyd www.ucop.edu/dws/lounge/course-materials.htm. Jan Frodesen University of California, Santa Barbara frodesen@linguistics.ucsb.edu Developing Paraphrasing Skills through Vocabulary Knowledge and Control TESOL, Long Beach, CA April 2, 2004 The Pedagogy Of Paraphrase: Practices And Problems Paraphrasing in the context of academic writing instruction Referencing source materials: The main “commandments” Problems L2 writers have in paraphrasing effectively Characteristics of unsuccessful paraphrases Using guided vocabulary exercises to develop paraphrasing skills Vocabulary Exercises For Developing Paraphrasing Skills A. Introducing references: Introductory phrases and reporting verbs Many paraphrase exercises that ask students to rewrite sentences in their own words do not also ask them to introduce the paraphrase. Some developing writers assume that unless they quote text, they do not need to introduce the author, so it’s a good idea to spend time showing how to introduce references before or after paraphrases and helping students understand the meanings of a range of reporting verbs. Since these verbs are also useful for brief summaries that typically include paraphrasing, reference is made to summary here as well. A . Introducing a paraphrase The following structures can be used to introduce an author’s ideas that you are going to paraphrase or summarize. Task 1: Put a check next to the structures that you have used in your own writing. (The verb states has been used for the examples, but others could be used as well.) ___a. According to (AUTHOR/ARTICLE), ____c. (AUTHOR) states that _______ ___ b. As (AUTHOR) states/has stated/stated, ____d. (AUTHOR) further states that ________ Which of the structures above require commas following them? Circle the commas. True or false? A comma should not be placed between a verb and the word that which introduces a paraphrase. Reporting verbs The following are verbs for introducing a paraphrase. They are called “reporting verbs” because you use them to cite another’s ideas, whether as a quote or a paraphrase. ___advise ___argue ___assert ___caution ___claim ___confirm ___contend ___declare ___deny ___emphasize ___indicate ___maintain ___mention ___note ___point out ___propose ___remark ___say ___speculate ___state ___stress ___suggest ___urge ___warn Task 1: Put an “X” in the blank next to all of the reporting verbs in the list whose meanings you are familiar with. The words not checked will represent those whose meanings you should look up in a dictionary. Task 2: Answer the following questions about reporting verb meanings by circling your choices. 1. Which three of the following verbs could introduce an author’s strong claims? argue assert claim note remark 2. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a weak or tentative claim? confirm maintain propose speculate suggest 3. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase that represents an important point the author wishes to make? contend emphasize mention say stress 3. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase that represents a point of lesser importance? assert mention note remark urge 4. Which three of the following verbs could introduce a paraphrase in which the author offers advice to readers? caution deny indicate warn urge B. Distinguishing “unique phrasing” from “shared language” L2 writers, like other developing writers, sometimes have difficulty determining what words should be paraphrased. Instruction on paraphrase refers to these words in various ways, as “character words,” “the author’s distinctive voice,” “unique phrasing” and so on. These exercises are designed to raise consciousness about the kinds of words that the writer needs to replace with his or her own words or phrases. Task 1: One word in each of the following lists has more of a distinctive character than the others and, if it were in a text, should most likely be paraphrased and not copied. Find the word and circle it. Then state in what context the word might be used. Use your dictionary to help you if you are not sure. 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. big polish off decrease odd hoodwink cavernous end nosedive strange fool large finish drop uncanny trick Task 2: Read the following sentences adapted from an article about the rise of Chinese language learning in Korea. Circle one word in each sentence that you think reflects the author’s distinctive voice. Then supply a synonym that fits the context. 1. After years of slogging through her English lessons, stumbling over impossible pronunciations and baffling rules of syntax, Chae Eun came up with a better idea. 2. South Korea is known as one of the United States’ staunchest allies and is host to 37,000 U.S. Troops. 3. In what might be a sign of things to come, China is the object of infatuation at the moment. 4. Chinese studies are booming throughout the world. 5. For most students, the motives are strictly mercenary: They believe that command of Chinese will give them an edge in the job market. 6. “The interest in Chinese does reflect some antipathy to U.S. hegemony and arrogance,” said Suh Jin Young, an international relations professor at Korea University in Seoul. (From: Who Needs English? B. Demick, Los Angeles Times, March 29, 2004, Column One) C. Working with key vocabulary to use in paraphrases In many cases “key vocabulary” in a text can be considered a subset of the category “unique phrasing” though sometimes key words might be technical and cannot be paraphrased. Background: One of the ways to begin paraphrasing a sentence or group of sentences is to identify key words that are not technical. Then, find a synonym for the key words. Original: The notion that one can purge one’s emotions by expressing them has been labeled “the catharsis hypothesis”. Freudian psychologists, of course, applauded this idea. Paraphrase: The _________ that one can _________ one’s emotions by expressing them has been _________ “the catharsis hypothesis”. Freudian psychologists, of course, __________ this idea. Task 1: Begin paraphrasing each of the sentences below by finding a synonym for the italicized words or phrases. NOTE: You can delete words from the original sentence as long as you don’t change the writer’s intended meaning. 8. In that sense, some merit can be attached to the claim that “violent emotional expressions” may have some benefits. 9. Repressed emotions such as fear and anger are discharged by laughing and crying. 10. Sometimes an expression of anger helps clear the air; but often, the direct expression of anger is self-indulgent—it begets more anger and aggression. 11. What is probably important is not whether people express anger or withhold it in a single instance, but whether they use their anger to change things that upset them in the first place. 12. When frustrated subjects were able to aggress either physically or verbally against the source of their frustration, their blood pressures and heart rates returned to normal with surprising rapidity. 13. The victim must get the retaliation deserved, nor more and no less. If one goes overboard, one may feel guilty later. 14. Other research warns that when people express their angry, aggressive feelings, they often get themselves so worked up that the situation may become worse than it was before. (Exercise created by Christine Holten, UCLA TESL/Applied Linguistics) Task 2: For each of the sentences below about defining intelligence, underline two key words or phrases. Then write a synonym for each of the words/phrases you selected. Your synonym could be a word or a phrase. 1. Definitions of intelligence often reflect cultural values. 2. The closest Mandarin equivalent, for instance, is a Chinese character that means good brain and talented. 3. Chinese people often associate this with traits such as imitation, effort and social responsibility. 4. Such traits do not constitute important elements of intelligence for most mainstream Americans. From: People: Psychology from a Cultural Perspective, David Matsumoto (1994) Another way to work with key words in pre-paraphrase tasks is to ask students to create word family charts. Writers can then use different forms of the words to start a paraphrase. Task 3: The following words are from readings in this unit. Using a dictionary, look up the meaning of each word. Provide the missing members of each word family. The first has been done for you. If the word does not have members in one or more classes, write X in the blank. WORD FAMILIES Verb associate Noun association combination Adjective associative Adverb associatively Intelligent imitate comparison precisely D. Paraphrasing descriptive adjectives/adverbs commonly found in academic writing Vocabulary selected for paraphrase exercises like the following should be relatively contextindependent, using common abstract nouns or, in the second exercise, adjectives. Though common in academic writing, some of these may not be words in the students’ active vocabulary. Task 1: For each of the following phrases, underline the adjective that describes each noun. Then write a word that could replace it in the space provided. The first has been done as an example. 1. an important finding _significant __ 2. potential problems ____________ 3. obvious differences ____________ 4. pragmatic solution __________ 5. a rudimentary step ___________ 6. a trivial objection ___________ 7. a rational excuse ____________ 8. a novel approach _____________ Adapted from an exercise in Hinkel (2004), p. 235 Task 2: Now do the same for the adverbs in the phrases below: Underline the adverb and write a word that could replace it in the space provided. The first has been done as an example. 1. perpetually changing __constantly___ 2. tentatively approved _______________ 3. approximately as fast ____________ 4. vitally important _______________ 5. radically different ___________ 6. fundamentally wrong ___________ 7. subtly different ____________ 8. vastly superior ___________ E. Condensing and expanding vocabulary in original text In the following pre-paraphrasing tasks, writers practice condensing phrases into one word and, conversely, expanding words into phrases (i.e., “circumlocution” ).For exercises such as this, you can extract vocabulary from assigned readings or present general vocabulary that would be useful for many paraphrasing tasks. Task 1: Rewrite each of the phrases, changing the underlined modifier phases to one word. The word you choose should not be a word form of the original. Make word order changes as appropriate. The first has been done as an example. 1. delayed for the time being temporarily delayed 2. more or less the same 3. a well thought out plan 4. an outcome that couldn’t be guessed 5. an act that was not cowardly 6. an achievement that no one could believe 7. an answer that did not beat around the bush 8. an argument that is beside the point F. Transforming sentence structure: Using word form cues to guide rephrasing Task: Rewrite each of the sentences, using the words in parentheses. Look first for the part of the original sentence that will need to be replaced. Find the subject of any verbs—who is doing what? Make any other changes you think are needed. Refer to the entire passage to provide context when needed. 1. People trying to interpret a situation often look at those around them to see how to react. (base reactions on) 2. There are three things bystanders must do if they are to intervene in an emergency. (necessary) 3. In a crowd, then, each person is less likely to notice a potential emergency than when alone. (tends to....less) 4. Even if a person defines an event as an emergency...(decides) 5. ... the presence of other bystanders may still make each person less likely to intervene. (may feel less inclined) H. Paraphrasing practice using text-manipulation software Finally, methods that illustrate where key words appear and require synonym substitution for content words using text manipulation software such as Storyboard and Gapmaster can be found, among other places, on Oregon State University English Language Institute’s website. This website shows exercises created by Deborah Healy, with ideas from John Whitney. (http://oregonstate.edu/~healeyd/162/162paraphrase.html; accessed March 8, 2004) BIBLIOGRAPHY Teacher reference Hinkel , E. (2004). Teaching Academic ESL Writing: Practical Techniques in Vocabulary and Grammar. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Schleppegrell, M. J. (2004). The language of schooling. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Schleppegrell, M.J. & Columbi, M.C. (Eds.). (2002 ). Developing advanced literacy in first and second languages: Meaning with power. Mahwah, NJ: Lawrence Erlbaum Associates. Student textbooks Brinton, D., Frodesen, J., Holten, C., Jensen, L., Repath-Martos. (1997). Insights 2: A contentbased approach to academic preparation. White Plains, NY: Longman. Holten, C. and Marasco, J. (1998). Looking ahead: Mastering academic writing: Book 4 J. Reid and P. Byrd, Series Editors. Boston: Heinle & Heinle. Swales, J. M. & Feak, C. B. (1994). Academic writing for graduate students: A course for nonnative speakers of English. Ann Arbor: University of Michigan Press. _______. (2000). English in today’s research world: A writing guide. An Arbor: University of Michigan Press. Dictionaries and thesauruses Biber, D., Leech, G. Johansson, S. Conrad, S. & Finegan, E. (2000) Longman Grammar of Spoken and Written English. Longman Publications Group Collins CoBuild New Student’s Dictionary (1997). Glasgow: HarperCollins Publishers. Longman Language Activator: The Worlds’ First Production Dictionary. (1993). Essex:Longman Websites www.ngberger.com http://owl.english.purdue.edu http://oregonstate.edu/~healyd www.ucop.edu/dws/lounge/course-materials.htm. Paraphrasing Steps and Examples by Deborah Healey http://oregonstate.edu/~healeyd/162/162paraphrase.html Step 1: Understand what you are reading. If you don't understand it, you can't paraphrase it correctly. That's guaranteed. Step 2: Think about the ideas, especially how the ideas may relate to your specific topic. Step 3: Not looking at the original, write down the ideas. Step 4: Look back at the original to see if you have changed the grammar and vocabulary. If not, change them now. Sample: Original: Named for James Brady, the White House press secretary who was shot and wounded by John Hinckley Jr. during the attempted assassination of President Ronald Reagan in March 1981, the Brady Bill establishes a national waiting period and background check for the purchase of a handgun. (Bender, 1995: 137) Phrases to avoid from the original are in bold: Named for James Brady, the White House press secretary who was shot and wounded by John Hinckley Jr. during the attempted assassination of President Ronald Reagan in March 1981, the Brady Bill establishes a national waiting period and background check for the purchase of a handgun. (Bender, 1995: 137) Ideas: Brady bill = named for White House press secretary James Brady Brady was shot during an assassination attempt on President Reagan Brady bill provisions = people who want to buy handguns have a waiting period and check on their backgrounds Changing the order of ideas, grammar, and vocabulary: Bender (1995) explains that people who want to buy handguns in the US now have a waiting period and a background check as a result of the Brady Bill. The bill was named after White House press secretary James Brady, who was wounded during an assassination attempt on President Reagan. (137). Notice how the grammar and vocabulary have been changed wherever possible in the paraphrase. Exercise 1. Look at the following quotation. On a piece of paper, write down the phrases that you need to avoid. Downlut believes the Brady bill trespasses on the rights of law-abiding citizens, and is therefore inconsistent with the Constitution, because it imposes a waiting period on exercising the right to own guns. (Bender, 1995: 137) 2. Now on your piece of paper list the ideas that you will include. 3. Next, cover up the original and write a paraphrase. 4. Check for the underlined words, ideas, and a change in vocabulary and grammar. 5. Check your work with the model. How did you do? http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/research/r_paraphr.html Learn to borrow from a source without plagiarizing. For more information on paraphrasing, as well as other ways to integrate sources into your paper, see the Purdue OWL handout Quoting Paraphrasing, and Summarizing. For more information about writing research papers, see our workshop on this subject. Purdue students will want to make sure that they are familiar with Purdue's official academic dishonesty policy as well as any additional policies that their instructor has implemented. Another good resource for understanding plagiarism is the WPA Statement on Plagiarism. A paraphrase is... your own rendition of essential information and ideas expressed by someone else, presented in a new form. one legitimate way (when accompanied by accurate documentation) to borrow from a source. a more detailed restatement than a summary, which focuses concisely on a single main idea. Paraphrasing is a valuable skill because... it is better than quoting information from an undistinguished passage. it helps you control the temptation to quote too much. the mental process required for successful paraphrasing helps you to grasp the full meaning of the original. 6 Steps to Effective Paraphrasing 1. Reread the original passage until you understand its full meaning. 2. Set the original aside, and write your paraphrase on a note card. 3. Jot down a few words below your paraphrase to remind you later how you envision using this material. At the top of the note card, write a key word or phrase to indicate the subject of your paraphrase. 4. Check your rendition with the original to make sure that your version accurately expresses all the essential information in a new form. 5. Use quotation marks to identify any unique term or phraseology you have borrowed exactly from the source. 6. Record the source (including the page) on your note card so that you can credit it easily if you decide to incorporate the material into your paper. Some examples to compare The original passage: Students frequently overuse direct quotation in taking notes, and as a result they overuse quotations in the final [research] paper. Probably only about 10% of your final manuscript should appear as directly quoted matter. Therefore, you should strive to limit the amount of exact transcribing of source materials while taking notes. Lester, James D. Writing Research Papers. 2nd ed. (1976): 46-47. A legitimate paraphrase: In research papers students often quote excessively, failing to keep quoted material down to a desirable level. Since the problem usually originates during note taking, it is essential to minimize the material recorded verbatim (Lester 46-47). An acceptable summary: Students should take just a few notes in direct quotation from sources to help minimize the amount of quoted material in a research paper (Lester 46-47). A plagiarized version: Students often use too many direct quotations when they take notes, resulting in too many of them in the final research paper. In fact, probably only about 10% of the final copy should consist of directly quoted material. So it is important to limit the amount of source material copied while taking notes. After reviewing this handout, try an exercise on paraphrasing. On a separate piece of paper, write a paraphrase of each of the following passages. Try not to look back at the original passage. 1. "The Antarctic is the vast source of cold on our planet, just as the sun is the source of our heat, and it exerts tremendous control on our climate," [Jacques] Cousteau told the camera. "The cold ocean water around Antarctica flows north to mix with warmer water from the tropics, and its upwellings help to cool both the surface water and our atmosphere. Yet the fragility of this regulating system is now threatened by human activity." From "Captain Cousteau," Audubon (May 1990):17. 2. The twenties were the years when drinking was against the law, and the law was a bad joke because everyone knew of a local bar where liquor could be had. They were the years when organized crime ruled the cities, and the police seemed powerless to do anything against it. Classical music was forgotten while jazz spread throughout the land, and men like Bix Beiderbecke, Louis Armstrong, and Count Basie became the heroes of the young. The flapper was born in the twenties, and with her bobbed hair and short skirts, she symbolized, perhaps more than anyone or anything else, America's break with the past. From Kathleen Yancey, English 102 Supplemental Guide (1989): 25. 3. Of the more than 1000 bicycling deaths each year, three-fourths are caused by head injuries. Half of those killed are school-age children. One study concluded that wearing a bike helmet can reduce the risk of head injury by 85 percent. In an accident, a bike helmet absorbs the shock and cushions the head. From "Bike Helmets: Unused Lifesavers," Consumer Reports (May 1990): 348. 4. Matisse is the best painter ever at putting the viewer at the scene. He's the most realistic of all modern artists, if you admit the feel of the breeze as necessary to a landscape and the smell of oranges as essential to a still life. "The Casbah Gate" depicts the well-known gateway Bab el Aassa, which pierces the southern wall of the city near the sultan's palace. With scrubby coats of ivory, aqua, blue, and rose delicately fenced by the liveliest gray outline in art history, Matisse gets the essence of a Tangier afternoon, including the subtle presence of the bowaab, the sentry who sits and surveys those who pass through the gate. From Peter Plagens, "Bright Lights." Newsweek (26 March 1990): 50. 5. While the Sears Tower is arguably the greatest achievement in skyscraper engineering so far, it's unlikely that architects and engineers have abandoned the quest for the world's tallest building. The question is: Just how high can a building go? Structural engineer William LeMessurier has designed a skyscraper nearly one-half mile high, twice as tall as the Sears Tower. And architect Robert Sobel claims that existing technology could produce a 500-story building. From Ron Bachman, "Reaching for the Sky." Dial (May 1990): 15. Practice In Paraphrasing: Possible Exercise Answers Brought to you by the Purdue University Online Writing Lab For information on paraphrasing sources, see the Purdue OWL handout Paraphrasing. For information on other ways to cite sources, see the Purdue OWL handout Quoting, Paraphrasing, and Summarizing. 1. According to Jacques Cousteau, the activity of people in Antarctica is jeopardizing a delicate natural mechanism that controls the earth's climate. He fears that human activity could interfere with the balance between the sun, the source of the earth's heat, and the important source of cold from Antarctic waters that flow north and cool the oceans and atmosphere ("Captain Cousteau" 17). 2. During the twenties lawlessness and social nonconformity prevailed. In cities organized crime flourished without police interference, and in spite of nationwide prohibition of liquor sales, anyone who wished to buy a drink knew where to get one. Musicians like Louis Armstrong become favorites, particularly among young people, as many turned away from highly respectable classical music to jazz. One of the best examples of the anti-traditional trend was the proliferation of young "flappers," women who rebelled against custom by cutting off their hair and shortening their skirts (Yancey 25). 3. The use of a helmet is the key to reducing bicycling fatalities, which are due to head injuries 75% of the time. By cushioning the head upon impact, a helmet can reduce accidental injury by as much as 85%, saving the lives of hundreds of victims annually, half of whom are school children ("Bike Helmets" 348). 4. Matisse paintings are remarkable in giving the viewer the distinct sensory impressions of one experiencing the scene first hand. For instance, "The Casbah Gate" takes one to the walled city of Tangier and the Bab el Aassa gateway near the Sultan's palace, where one can imagine standing on an afternoon, absorbing the splash of colors and the fine outlines. Even the sentry, the bowaab vaguely eyeing those who come and go through the gate, blends into the scene as though real (Plagens 50). 5. How much higher skyscrapers of the future will rise than the present world marvel, the Sears Tower, is unknown. However, the design of one twice as tall is already on the boards, and an architect, Robert Sobel, thinks we currently have sufficient know-how to build a skyscraper with over 500 stories (Bachman 15). Quoting, Paraphrasing, and Summarizing Brought to you by the Purdue University Online Writing Lab at http://owl.english.purdue.edu Also, see our handout on paraphrasing at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/research/r_paraphr.html. This handout is intended to help you become more comfortable with the uses of and distinctions among quotations, paraphrases, and summaries. The first part of the handout compares and contrasts the terms, while the second part offers a short excerpt that you can use to practice these skills. What are the differences among quoting, paraphrasing, and summarizing? These three ways of incorporating other writers' work into your own writing differ according to the closeness of your writing to the source writing. Quotations must be identical to the original, using a narrow segment of the source. They must match the source document word for word and must be attributed to the original author. Paraphrasing involves putting a passage from source material into your own words. A paraphrase must also be attributed to the original source. Paraphrased material is usually shorter than the original passage, taking a somewhat broader segment of the source and condensing it slightly. Summarizing involves putting the main idea(s) into your own words, including only the main point(s). Once again, it is necessary to attribute summarized ideas to the original source. Summaries are significantly shorter than the original and take a broad overview of the source material. Why use quotations, paraphrases, and summaries? Quotations, paraphrases, and summaries serve many purposes. You might use them to . . . provide support for claims or add credibility to your writing refer to work that leads up to the work you are now doing give examples of several points of view on a subject call attention to a position that you wish to agree or disagree with highlight a particularly striking phrase, sentence, or passage by quoting the original distance yourself from the original by quoting it in order to cue readers that the words are not your own expand the breadth or depth of your writing Writers frequently intertwine summaries, paraphrases, and quotations. As part of a summary of an article, a chapter, or a book, a writer might include paraphrases of various key points blended with quotations of striking or suggestive phrases as in the following example: In his famous and influential work On the Interpretation of Dreams, Sigmund Freud argues that dreams are the "royal road to the unconscious" (page), expressing in coded imagery the dreamer's unfulfilled wishes through a process known as the "dream work" (page). According to Freud, actual but unacceptable desires are censored internally and subjected to coding through layers of condensation and displacement before emerging in a kind of rebus puzzle in the dream itself (pages). How to use quotations, paraphrases, and summaries Practice summarizing the following essay, using paraphrases and quotations as you go. It might be helpful to follow these steps: Read the entire text, noting the key points and main ideas. Summarize in your own words what the single main idea of the essay is. Paraphrase important supporting points that come up in the essay. Consider any words, phrases, or brief passages that you believe should be quoted directly. There are several ways to integrate quotations into your text. Often, a short quotation works well when integrated into a sentence. Longer quotations can stand alone. Remember that quoting should be done only sparingly; be sure that you have a good reason to include a direct quotation when you decide to do so. You'll find guidelines for citing sources and punctuating citations at our documentation guide pages. We have one guide for the format recommended by the Modern Language Association (MLA) for papers in the humanities (at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/research/r_mla.html) and another for the format recommended by the American Psychological Association (APA) for papers in the social sciences (at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/research/r_apa.html). Sample essay for summarizing, paraphrasing, and quoting So That Nobody Has To Go To School If They Don't Want To by Roger Sipher A decline in standardized test scores is but the most recent indicator that American education is in trouble. One reason for the crisis is that present mandatory-attendance laws force many to attend school who have no wish to be there. Such children have little desire to learn and are so antagonistic to school that neither they nor more highly motivated students receive the quality education that is the birthright of every American. The solution to this problem is simple: Abolish compulsory-attendance laws and allow only those who are committed to getting an education to attend. This will not end public education. Contrary to conventional belief, legislators enacted compulsory-attendance laws to legalize what already existed. William Landes and Lewis Solomon, economists, found little evidence that mandatory-attendance laws increased the number of children in school. They found, too, that school systems have never effectively enforced such laws, usually because of the expense involved. There is no contradiction between the assertion that compulsory attendance has had little effect on the number of children attending school and the argument that repeal would be a positive step toward improving education. Most parents want a high school education for their children. Unfortunately, compulsory attendance hampers the ability of public school officials to enforce legitimate educational and disciplinary policies and thereby make the education a good one. Private schools have no such problem. They can fail or dismiss students, knowing such students can attend public school. Without compulsory attendance, public schools would be freer to oust students whose academic or personal behavior undermines the educational mission of the institution. Has not the noble experiment of a formal education for everyone failed? While we pay homage to the homily, "You can lead a horse to water but you can't make him drink," we have pretended it is not true in education. Ask high school teachers if recalcitrant students learn anything of value. Ask teachers if these students do any homework. Quite the contrary, these students know they will be passed from grade to grade until they are old enough to quit or until, as is more likely, they receive a high school diploma. At the point when students could legally quit, most choose to remain since they know they are likely to be allowed to graduate whether they do acceptable work or not. Abolition of archaic attendance laws would produce enormous dividends. First, it would alert everyone that school is a serious place where one goes to learn. Schools are neither day-care centers nor indoor street corners. Young people who resist learning should stay away; indeed, an end to compulsory schooling would require them to stay away. Second, students opposed to learning would not be able to pollute the educational atmosphere for those who want to learn. Teachers could stop policing recalcitrant students and start educating. Third, grades would show what they are supposed to: how well a student is learning. Parents could again read report cards and know if their children were making progress. Fourth, public esteem for schools would increase. People would stop regarding them as way stations for adolescents and start thinking of them as institutions for educating America's youth. Fifth, elementary schools would change because students would find out early they had better learn something or risk flunking out later. Elementary teachers would no longer have to pass their failures on to junior high and high school. Sixth, the cost of enforcing compulsory education would be eliminated. Despite enforcement efforts, nearly 15 percent of the school-age children in our largest cities are almost permanently absent from school. Communities could use these savings to support institutions to deal with young people not in school. If, in the long run, these institutions prove more costly, at least we would not confuse their mission with that of schools. Schools should be for education. At present, they are only tangentially so. They have attempted to serve an all-encompassing social function, trying to be all things to all people. In the process they have failed miserably at what they were originally formed to accomplish. The following information must remain intact on every handout printed for distribution. 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