Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
5-6
7-8
9 - 10
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
You have used a variety of
language.
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
Teacher’s comment:
Level of achievement:
There is some attempt to
Different sentence styles
use different sentence
have been used.
styles.
Frequent errors in grammar
makes the diary entry
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
difficult to understand.
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Student’s reflection:
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
5-6
7-8
9 - 10
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
You have used a variety of
language.
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
There is some attempt to
Different sentence styles
use different sentence
have been used.
styles.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
You have written a lovely diary entry, full of
emotion, memories and your experiences. You have
used language well to create pictures for the
readers and we could get a sense of your feelings
through your writing. I enjoyed when you were
Student’s reflection:
Why I chose my topic…
Nicolai
descriptive in your writing. It helped me imagine
where you were. a very good diary entry Nicolai.
Level of achievement: 8
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
5-6
7-8
9 - 10
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
You have used a variety of
language.
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
There is some attempt to
Different sentence styles
use different sentence
have been used.
styles.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
A fantastic diary entry Yuki, full of emotion and
your thoughts and feelings. You used adjectives
well to build excitement for the reader and
described your journey in a very engaging and
entertaining manner.
The structure of your writing is organized and
informative. I enjoyed your use of language and the
variety of sentence styles. Well done.
Student’s reflection:
Why I chose my topic…
Yuki
Level of achievement: 10
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There is some attempt to
use different sentence
styles.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
5-6
You have used a variety of
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used.
7-8
9 - 10
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
Your diary entry is personal and includes your
thoughts and feelings. It is written in an informal
way, which helps hold the attention of the reader.
You have used paragraphs to organize your writing,
and tried to include adjectives to describe your
Student’s reflection:
Why I chose my topic…
Leticia
experiences and thoughts. Well done, Leticia.
Level of achievement: 7
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There is some attempt to
use different sentence
styles.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
5-6
You have used a variety of
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used.
7-8
9 - 10
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
Your diary entry is entertaining and full of your
thoughts and experiences. You have used paragraphs
to organize your ideas; we can work on your
sequencing of ideas in your next piece of writing.
Student’s reflection:
Why I chose my topic…
Markus
I enjoyed the personal aspect of your writing and
how you used adjectives to help the reader picture
what you were writing about.
Level of achievement: 7
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There is some attempt to
use different sentence
styles.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
5-6
You have used a variety of
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used.
7-8
9 - 10
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
Frequent errors in spelling
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
make the diary entry
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
difficult to understand.
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
You have written an honest and personal account of
your first few weeks in middle school. You have
Student’s reflection:
Why I chose my topic…
Mia
captured the style of a diary entry and included
thoughts and feelings. I would like to see you use
more sophisticated vocabulary in your writing, as
you do when you are speaking. It is interesting to
read about your frustrations and successes.
Level of achievement: 7
Diary Entry – Personal Writing
Criterion C: Style and Language Mechanics
1-2
3-4
A limited range of language
has been used.
There is some attempt to
experiment with language
A limited range of sentence
styles has been used.
There is some attempt to
use different sentence
styles.
There are very frequent
errors in grammar.
Your diary entry lacks the
relevant aspects: personal,
informative, a descriptive
narrative
There are very frequent
errors in punctuation.
There are very frequent
errors in spelling.
5-6
You have used a variety of
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used.
7-8
9 - 10
You have used a variety of
precise and sophisticated
language.
Different sentence styles
have been used
successfully.
You have used a wide
variety of precise and
sophisticated language
Different sentence styles
have been used effectively.
Frequent errors in grammar
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate in
Grammar is accurate
makes the diary entry
some of the writing.
most of the writing.
throughout the writing.
difficult to understand.
Your diary entry is
Your diary entry has some of Your diary entry has most of
Your diary entry is a
reasonable in regards to it
the relevant aspects:
the relevant aspects:
personal, informative,
being personal, informative, personal, informative, and
personal, informative, and
descriptive narrative.
and a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
a descriptive narrative
Frequent errors in
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
Punctuation (full stops,
punctuation make the diary
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
commas, question marks)
entry difficult to
has been used throughout
has been used accurately
has been used effectively
understand.
the diary entry.
throughout the diary entry. throughout the diary entry.
There are frequent errors
Spelling is accurate
Spelling of complex words is Spelling of complex words is
in spelling .
throughout the writing.
accurate in most of the
accurate throughout the
writing.
writing.
Teacher’s comment:
You have included your thoughts and feelings in
Student’s reflection:
Anastasia
your diary entry, which is great. You have used
adjectives to describe your emotions. I enjoyed
reading your honest and personal account of your
first few days at school. You are learning English
so quickly! Good work Ana.
Level of achievement: 5
Why I chose my topic…