I love summer! It’s my favorite time of the year. There are just so
many things to do. My three favorite summertime activities would have to
be Sewanee tennis, seeing my friends, and being free. Sewanee tennis camp
is right now the only place I want to be. I get to see my friends a lot more
often than I do during the school year. Relaxing and just being able to do
what I want to do all the time is one of my favorite things.
I just started going to Sewanee Tiger Tennis Camp and it is already my
favorite place to be! Just imagine tennis 8 hours a day with your best friends
and amazing food and at night bowling, or a dance that was crazy, or casino
night and even going to the movies. It’s like a dream to me. Rooming with
my best friend was m favorite part. The best tennis coaches are there to help
us. We only got to stay for a week though. Sewanee is up in the mountains so
it was very peaceful and not too many cars. Tennis is one of my three
favorite activities.
I absolutely love seeing my friends over the summer! Theres no stress
and I can be so much more social in the summer. One of my favorite things
to do with my friends over the summer is go to the Lake House and just
swim and hangout and drive the boat. Another thing I like is having a few
friends over and having a bonfire. I love going to the pool with friends we
always have an amazing time.
My last favorite summer activity is just being free. I love waking up
each morning at like eleven and going down stairs to watch tv and no one
telling me to do my homework, such a great feeling. There is no stress over
the summer, there’s some but not much. Being able to do what I want all day
is like heaven to me.
I could keep going on and on but Sewanee tennis, friends, and being
free are my top three favorite summer activities! Summer is the only time
that can do all three of these things, that’s why it is my favorite season too.
CARTER- THIS IS SUPPOSED TO BE A DESCRIPTIVE ESSAY. WHERE ARE THE DETAILS? YOU
HAVE THE IDEAS ABOUT WHICH YOU CAN DO THIS. FOR EXAMPLE, WHEN YOU SPEAK OF
GOING TO THE LAKE HOUSE, WHY NOT DESCRIBE THE SCENERY? WHAT CAN YOU SEE?
SMELLS? FOODS- DO YOU GRILL OUT? GET SUNBURNED? THERE ARE PLENTY OF THINGS TO
WRITE ABOUT IN DETAIL. KEEP THIS IMPORTANT THING IN MIND: YOU WANT TO MAKE THE
READER FEEL AS IF SHE IS THERE WITH YOU. MAKE WHAT YOU ARE DOING AND ENJOYING
APPEALING TO THE READER.
By tomorrow, Tuesday, May 21, I want you to make corrections as outlined above and what is
written in red. From there, we will move to the grammar, but you will have to fix these things
first. You will be using this same paper to work on grammar. I need to see these corrections
first.
Turn this paper in to me between 7-9 tomorrow night as well. Work hard on this since we
must use it for further instruction. Don’t just jot something down and move on.