Eliot, Art and Modern Life:
Revising for Clarity and Meaning
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Unrevised Text 1
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
subjective experience of a person and the
objective reality. He reflects on the fragmented
alienation from the physical reality as he
challenges the limits of one’s consciousness.
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Main Trouble Spots:
(I Do; You Watch)
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Syntax and Explanation
Pronouns
Key Ideas
Key Verbs
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TS1 – Syntax & Explanation
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
subjective experience of a person and the
objective reality. He reflects on the fragmented
alienation from the physical reality as he
challenges the limits of one’s consciousness.
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TS1 – Syntax & Explanation
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
subjective experience of a person and the
objective reality.
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
mind’s subjective experience of itself a person
and the objective reality; that is, the poem
represents the workings of the mind as it
reflects upon itself and the world.
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TS2 – Pronouns
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
subjective experience of a person and the
objective reality. He reflects on the fragmented
alienation from the physical reality as he
challenges the limits of one’s consciousness. By
experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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TS2 – Pronouns
He reflects on the fragmented alienation from
the physical reality as he challenges the limits of
one’s consciousness.
He The poem reflects on the fragmented
alienation from the physical reality as he it
challenges the limits of one’s consciousness.
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TS3 – Key Ideas
The poem reflects on the fragmented alienation
from physical reality as it challenges the limits
of consciousness.
The poem reflects on the fragmented the mind’s
experience of alienation from physical reality. as
it This alienation challenges the limits of
consciousness individual’s capacity to make
meaning in a meaningless world and leads to a
fragmented sense of self.
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TS4 – Key Verbs
The poem reflects on the mind’s experience of
alienation from physical reality. This alienation
challenges the individual’s capacity to make
meaning in a meaningless world and leads to a
fragmented sense of self.
The poem portrays on the mind’s experience of
alienation from physical reality. This alienation
challenges the individual’s capacity to make
meaning in a meaningless world and leads to a
fragmented sense of self.
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Unrevised Text 1
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
subjective experience of a person and the
objective reality. He reflects on the fragmented
alienation from the physical reality as he
challenges the limits of one’s consciousness.
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Revised Text 1
Preludes (1917), a poem by T.S Eliot, portray the
mind’s subjective experience of itself and
objective reality; that is, the poem represents
the workings of the mind as it reflects upon
itself and the world. The poem portrays the
mind’s experience of alienation from physical
reality. This alienation challenges the individual’s
capacity to make meaning in a meaningless
world and leads to a fragmented sense of self.
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Unrevised Text 2:
(I Do; You Help)
By experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S. Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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TS1 – ?
By experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S. Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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TS2 – ?
By experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S. Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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TS3 – ?
By experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S. Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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Unrevised Text 2
By experimenting and pushing the boundaries of
the traditional language used, T.S. Eliot suggests
that modernism can create confusion about
one’s identity.
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Revised Text 2
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Unrevised Text 3:
(You Do; I Help)
In “Preludes”, Eliot establishes a removed
subconscious mind viewing a modern world.
Through this relationship, it gives the impression
that although the modern world is filled with
objects, it does little to touch on the deeper
workings of the mind. This reflects on a greater
sense of uncertainty arising from a fragmentation
of identity, another experience reflected
“Preludes”.
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In “Preludes”, Eliot establishes a removed
subconscious mind viewing a modern world.
Through this relationship, it gives the impression
that although the modern world is filled with
objects, it does little to touch on the deeper
workings of the mind. This reflects on a greater
sense of uncertainty arising from a
fragmentation of identity, another experience
reflected “Preludes”.
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In “Preludes”, Eliot establishes a removed
subconscious mind viewing a modern world.
Through this relationship, it gives the impression
that although the modern world is filled with
objects, it does little to touch on the deeper
workings of the mind. This reflects on a greater
sense of uncertainty arising from a
fragmentation of identity, another experience
reflected “Preludes”.
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In “Preludes”, Eliot establishes a removed
subconscious mind viewing a modern world.
Through this relationship, it gives the impression
that although the modern world is filled with
objects, it does little to touch on the deeper
workings of the mind. This reflects on a greater
sense of uncertainty arising from a
fragmentation of identity, another experience
reflected “Preludes”.
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Unrevised Text 3
In “Preludes”, Eliot establishes a removed
subconscious mind viewing a modern world.
Through this relationship, it gives the impression
that although the modern world is filled with
objects, it does little to touch on the deeper
workings of the mind. This is done through
contrasts between tangible and intangible
objects and actions. This reflects on a greater
sense of uncertainty arising from a
fragmentation of identity, another experience
reflected “Preludes”.
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Revised Text 3
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