英文作文教學與批閱 新竹女中 應惠蕙 FAQs • When? • What? • How? 得高分的秘訣 • • • • • Grammar無誤 Content新鮮 Structure正確 Diction難度提升 Pattern多變化 句子加長(一) The alligator eats. The green alligator eats. The green alligator eats quickly. The green alligator eats quickly in the pool. When: The green alligator eats quickly in the pool at 9:00 A.M. The green alligator eats quickly in the Why: pool at 9:00 A.M. because he is hungry. Who: What: How: Where: 句子加長(二) • + 對等連接詞 Mark was excited but nervous. • + 關係子句 Mark was invited by Tracy to sit at her table, where they shared a pot of coffee. • + 同位語 Mark, an extremely shy person around girls, was invited by Tracy to sit at her table, where they shared a pot of coffee. 句子加長(三) • + 副詞子句 After Mark had coffee with Tracy, he decided to ask her out for a date. • + 分詞片語 Mark, having butterflies in his stomach, did not know what to say. • + 獨立分詞片語 His eyes closed, Mark was thinking about Tracy. • Telescopic Translation • textbook 背佳句 comfortable, prosperous jobs matching rival • 百寶書: sentence patterns 1, 2, 3 • 句型 + 時事* • 佳作 1 寫作的基本概念 • • • • paragraph punch paragraph writing exercise OWL 普渡大學線上寫作教室 與課文相關的練習 (一) • • • • • • • • • • worksheets 1, 2, 3, 4 summary 1, 2, 3 prediction* letter of gratitude/apology change point of view B3U10 picture books 1, 2, 3, 4, 5 comic strips* video* 學生作品* 利用課本動詞或句型 與課文相關的練習 (二) • • • • • The Difficulty I Have Ever Encountered Describe a nervous situation My Favorite Corner of the Campus* Working Holiday The Person I Admire Most 分析學測作文題目 • • • • 題型 文體: Narration, Description 字數 評分標準 記敘文(Narration) • • • • • • • Beginning, Middle, End Who? When? Where? What? How? Why? 5 senses: see, hear, feel, smell, taste theme flashback Quotation Marks Imagery 常見的題目 • • • • • • A Memorable Event in Your Childhood An Unforgettable Trip My Ideal College Life A Nightmare/Dream The Thing I Treasured Most Writing Prompts 描寫文(Description) • • • • • an experience a person: appearance, personality, action* a place: clockwise, counterclockwise a memory an object Example • I grew tired after dinner. • As I leaned back and rested my head against the top of the chair, my eyelids began to feel heavy, and the edges of the empty plate in front of me blurred with the white tablecloth. Describing a Person • general appearance • top to down • clothing • a general statement http://everystockphoto.com/photo.php ?imageId=270544 Example of describing a person He has a potbelly and a squeaky voice. His arms and legs are as thin as sticks. He wears funny-looking red shorts with big white buttons, and he has big round black ears and a pointed nose. Describing a Place: Gathering Details • Sensory details my team running onto the field (sight) the crack of the bat (hearing) smooth wooden seats (touch) hot dogs cooking (smell) warm, buttery popcorn (taste) • Factual details • Figurative details • Thoughts and feelings Describing a Place: Organizing details • Spatial Order from top to down from left to right clockwise/counterclockwise • Order of Importance from least important to most important from most important to least important Example of describing a place Located about fifty kilometers off the coast of Taitung County, Orchid Island is a magical spot set in the deep blue Pacific Ocean. From the air, the mountains peak out from the clouds as you approach the island. As your airplane lands, you can see the green fields and woods along with the blue water. On arriving, you can catch sight of fishing and farming villages. From the mountaintops to the crashing waves on the rocky beaches, Orchid Island, a paradise waiting to be discovered, seems frozen in time. Another Example Moist and salty, a chilly breeze blows in across the swells, bringing with it the pungent smells of seaweed and fish and making me pull my jacket a little closer. Sea spray transforms into fiery prisms as the waves splash against the shore, catch the last golden rays of sun, and toss them up like liquid crystals. http://www.writeshop.com/blog/2010/02/23/choosingvocabulary-to-describe-a-place/ Description Topics • • • • • A Treasured Belonging My Favorite Book My Favorite Food My Ideal College Life Ten Years from Now Weather • • • • • • • one day one burning hot day one scorching day on a freezing cold day one foggy winter day one gloomy/dark/cold rainy day one beautiful sunny day Color • • • • • • • • + light/dark ruby red, bloody red emerald green, jade green sapphire blue, ocean blue, midnight blue rosy pink pitch dark -colored as red as blood, as white as snow emotions • I was happy... --> I was delighted with/by/at... --> I was overjoyed to... --> I was ecstatic about... --> I beamed with joy... --> I was thrilled at... --> I was on top of the world when... --> My heart leaped when... emotions • He was angry... --> He was furious at/about... --> He was outraged by... --> He lost his temper... --> He was red/hot with rage... --> He flew into a rage... --> He saw red... emotions • • • • • • • • • • He burst out crying/laughing. He burst into tears/laughter. He was green with envy. He was overwhelmed by grief. He trembled with fear/rage. He had butterflies in his stomach. He was struck dumb with fear. He was stunned with grief and anger. He was tongue-tied. He was like a cat on hot bricks. 看圖寫作的步驟 • • • • • • • • • narration & description Who? What? Why? When? Where? How? 5 senses emotions patterns: with + O + OC, 分詞構句: Adj, S + V 倒裝句: only when, not until imagery (like, as...as) quotation marks flashback* message 寫作拿高分的秘訣 • • • • • • • • • 文法正確 合主題 字數至少150字 不要只用簡單句 用一~二個分詞構句 用一個with + O + OC 擅用比喻 加一句引句,但注意標點 convey a message or teach a lesson 應避免的錯誤 • • • • • • • 時態 Every persons was early. Apple is good for health. She had his book in his hand. You eats lunch. 人稱換來換去 Edit Checklist http://jc-schools.net/write/checklist.pdf Expository • paragraph punch • brainstorm* • genres: giving examples/reasons, sequence, comparison, cause and effect, problem and solution, definition • 歷屆考題* • 佳作 批改的方式 • • • • • • • • 有交就100分 A+, A, A-, ... peer correction* 只改要改的地方 利用評分標準* 討論common errors 列出優點 佳作分享 說明文拿高分的秘訣 • 架構正確 • 有主題句、結論句及轉折詞 • 注意事項* Q&A