Final
Portfolio
Ethan Craig
Mr. Kelly
Writing 421 Alpha
January 27th, 2014
My Treasured
Object
Mr. Kelly’s Comments
“Great story! And
a fine tribute to
your Grampy.”
Why I Chose This Piece
I enjoyed being able to write about my Grampy
It is one of my best pieces of writing
It gave me time to think about my Grampy and
remember him
“I can’t quite remember when he
gave it to me, but I received this
object from my Grampy Frank. He
gave it to me so that I would have
a place to keep all of my loose
change, just like he did. The can
that he used to make the bank had
a crack in the side. So, he did what
any other male adult would do;
tear off a thin strip of duct tape
and wrap it around the top of the
can! He then used a black Sharpie
and scrawled “Ethan’s Bank” down
the side of it. It was perfect. I now
had my very own ‘bank’ just like
Grampy’s to keep my loose change
in.”
How I Wrote It
First I decided what each paragraph was going to be about
I proceeded to think about these ideas before writing down
as paragraphs
Proofread
Peer editing
Personal Analysis
You definitely do a better
job of something when
you enjoy doing it.
What if We Hadn’t Hit That Bird?
Mr. Kelly’s Comments
“Great conclusion. Maybe the
bird carried the ‘Avian Bird
Flu’ and you saved PEI
millions in healthcare and
thousands of lives. Pass my
gratitude on to Linda!”
Why I Chose This Piece
One of the most fun essays to write
It was my favourite topic this semester
ItMr.
made
meComments
think
Kelly’s
“It was the morning of the U14
PEI Basketball Provincials in
the spring of 2012. My mom
and I were driving into
Charlottetown for my team’s
first game. As we drove along
the Bedford road, a bird flew
right in front of the van and
collided with the windshield.
“Uh-oh. We may have killed
Mr.
Comments
thatKelly’s
bird, and
that would be a
bad omen,” my mother
explained. Not six hours later,
my left leg was in a cast and I
was watching my team from
the bleachers.”
How I Wrote It
I thought back to the current events at the time of my
injury
Played out scenarios in my head and wrote them down
Mr. Kelly’s Comments
Proofread
Peer editing
Personal Analysis
I feel that this piece is also one
of my best of the semester.
Again I feel that my
introduction and conclusion
are strong. This was the best
topic I have written about and
I wouldn’t change anything.
What I Learned From Writing Four
Two One
• Always write out numbers in words
• That I shouldn’t use ‘that’ so much that it seems
that the only word that I use is ‘that’
• Spend time writing a good introduction and
conclusion
• Run-on sentences are very bad things indeed and
there is no reason for them in any piece of writing
no matter what the topic or subject and there is
never any need to write a run-on sentence in any
situation good or bad and you should never do this
as the reader will be gasping for air trying to read
the entire sentence in one breath