Grayson, I wanted to circle back, I wasn’t sure if my initial feedback was sufficient in
covering the topics Dr. Girardi laid out for this discussion post. So, here’s a more indepth evaluation. It was clear that due to the nature of your citations and you spoke at
length how technical writing is used in the military. You touched on field manuals,
technical manuals, and army regulations, which are all great examples of different types
of technical writing. I couldn’t find anything in your report that was unclear. You did a
good job organizing your thoughts and then exploring them more deeply. You did reflect
on your current abilities and how you plan to improve moving forward. You could expand
on alternative strategies to improve but already covered those principles. So, anything
more would just be extra. You had good visuals. The counseling/evaluation report was a
great addition to help further define types of technical writing in the Army. Also, the
example of the writing process that you provided is a great resource that any writer
could utilize. You did an amazing job providing details from your research. It was evident
from your citations that you did an extensive job learning about writing in the military.
Lastly, I believe you structured your report excellently and explored each section clearly
and concisely.
Hannah, I wanted to circle back, I wasn’t sure if my initial feedback was sufficient in
covering the topics Dr. Girardi laid out for this discussion post. So, here’s a more indepth evaluation. Hannah, your report did go over how technical writing is used in your
career field. You did a good job conveying how technical writing is used in social media
posts, emails, and the like. Your report was clear and easy to read through. You were
able to make topics relating to your career field understandable to individuals with little
or no experience. I also felt like you didn’t need any more explanation for the things that
you covered. You clearly reflected on your abilities and how you’re working to improve. I
feel like there is always an option to further expound on how to improve, but that you
didn’t need to. I thought your visuals were interesting and that you did a decent job
emphasizing what you were talking about. I do think that you have an opportunity to add
more though. From what I understand a significant part of modern journalism is visual
medium, which provides you with a great opportunity to highlight that aspect. I thought
the information that you gleaned from your interview with Barabra was insightful. It was
interesting to hear about how journalism impacts her life, and the ways she is able to
use technical writing in her career. Additionally, I believe you were able to do in-depth
research on your topic, I would have liked to see where you cited this research though.
Your report was written in a concise and clear manner, so I feel like you have a solid
grasp of what is expected for technical writing.
Tori, I felt like my original post wasn’t sufficient in covering the topics Dr. Girardi laid out,
so here’s a more in-depth evaluation. Your report was very clear, and it was captivating
to see how many places technical writing is used in your career. You did a thorough job
explaining where each style of writing was used and what they were used for. Your
examples provided a clear understanding of technical writings across the medical
industry. You clearly meet the criteria for self-reflection on your current abilities and how
you plan to improve. I believe there’s always an opportunity to expand more, but
keeping to the theme of being concise, I feel like what you provided was sufficient. I
touched on all the APA issues I saw above. I found your visuals interesting and fit well
into your report. You clearly took something away from our lessons on design principles.
Additionally, your supplemental document helped provide context to the content of
different documents you’ll be working on in your career. It was formatted well, and in a
way that was easy to follow. You did a good job providing information from the
pharmacist that you interviewed, the only thing I would like to see more from the
interview is more direct testimonials or comments. I feel like you were able to balance
that out though with the information you provided from your scholarly research.
Paraphrasing Darby Faubion (RN, BSN, MBA) helped provide a more tangible context
for the subjects being discussed. Overall, I believe, based on your report, that I you
have a solid understanding of technical writing.
Gavin, you clearly read the assignment and met the expectations for covering how
technical writing is used in your career field. You provided clear references to what
documents you will be writing in the future and different ways they relate to Geographic
Information Systems (GIS). Overall, I couldn’t find anything that was conveyed in a way
that made it hard to understand. For your reflection you did touch on your current
abilities and how you wanted to expand on them. I touched on a couple formatting
issues I saw when it came to APA style. There were other ones, but you made it clear
that you were aware of the issues. I thought your visuals were okay. Your memo was
good, but I felt that your figure 1. was lacking a bit of visual context making it had to
understand its relation to the report as a whole. I think there is an opportunity here to
find alternative or additional visual aids. Taking a deeper look at your supplemental
document. It was a good representation of what you would be writing on your day-today and the types of information you’d be conveying. I didn’t see anything directly
referencing your interview, so if you could emphasize it with a quote or something to
draw attention to the information you received, that would be helpful. I felt like you had a
solid understanding of the information that you were discussing which implies that you
did thorough research. To sum up my review, while you do have some things you could
work on, you demonstrate an ability to write in a style that fts technical writing and is
presented clearly and concisely.
Luke,
Going over your report it was evident that you did thorough research that supports the
different types of technical writings related to welding. Additionally, you went over
different styles of writing related to your career and what the purpose of some of those
are. In your report you had some great visuals. The only thing I would request to be
improved is the size of some of them. I can’t exactly make out the content which limits
what they add to your report. You provided good insight from your interview which
helped emphasize the theme of the report. I felt like the information you provided from
the interview was enough, especially since you had additional sources that you
researched to support your points. In your reflection section you laid out where you
believe your abilities lay, and how you plan to improve moving forward. Your
supplemental document also provides context to the types of documents that you’ll be
filling out in the future. One note that I have is you could create a mock document to
provide a more in-depth look at what you will be writing about. Overall, I feel like you did
a good job. I added a list of some APA issues that I saw while reading your report.
Dylan
The visuals you added livened up your report and added helpful context to the types of
writing you went over. I liked the supplemental document that you provided, it was
simply enough to understand its purpose at glance, you framed in a way that it provided
good context to the types of documents data scientists write. What you mentioned from
your interview provided great information to support your points. While you did mention
who you interviewed in your reflection section, I believe it would help provide more
context if you explained who you interviewed when you introduced the information that
they provided. Also, a note about your reflection, you were able to outline the
importance of technical writing related to data science, but you missed a couple topics
like your current abilities and how you plan to improve. Ultimately, you were able to
create a solid report about the technical writing you’ll do and the how they relate to your
field. It’s evident that you did research into the topic. Another thing that I didn’t see
though is in-text citations. While I can tell you did research, I can’t tell what information
was from was from your scholastic research. I think you did a good job, and that you
have a good grasp on technical writing. Your report was very clear and relatively
concise. The last thing that I want to mention is a couple issues relating to APA.
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The last items in your report should be the appendix
Your citations should consist of overhanging indentations
Your citations are missing some information like authors, data, institutions, etc.
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Images usually aren’t included in an abstract
Beaudelson
You did a good job explaining what types of technical writing is used in mechanical
engineering and how they are used. You demonstrated a good understanding of what is
expected in technical writing. Additionally, you had good scholastic sources to support
the points you made in your report. Unfortunately, there are a couple topics that are
missing from this report. I didn’t see a reflection section going over where you evaluate
your writing ability today and how you plan to improve in the future. I also didn’t see the
information that was provided to you from your interviews. I know you mentioned that it
was within a segment of your report, but I couldn’t identify what portion of the
information was from research and what was from your interviews. Those were the only
two things that were unclear to me. I did want to emphasize your visuals and
supplemental document. I believe you did a fantastic job with both of those. They
provided great context for the documents that you referenced. Altogether, I believe you
have a solid understanding of technical writing and were able to illustrate that by
providing a very concise report. The last couple notes that I have relate to APA
formatting.
The last names on your title page are capitalized.
The first and last citations in your reference section are missing the overhanging
indentation.
Erin,
You did a fantastic job formatting your report. You clearly outlined the types of technical
writing that individuals in your field encounter and the how they’re used. The visuals
were skillfully done providing quality context to your report and adding to the overall
design out how the information was laid out. To say that your report was researched
would be an understatement. Not only did you provide extensive sources to highlight
your talking points, but the information also provided was refined and fit well into the
surrounding sections. Your interview also added excellent first-person data to your
report to help underline the importance of technical writing in forensic psychology. In
your reflection you went over how you performed relating to your current ability relating
to technical writing and how you plan to improve. I couldn’t find any mistakes in the APA
format. Moreover, your supplemental document was fascinating. It was interesting to
see what goes into evaluating a person and creating a risk assessment. I have nothing
more to add other than you’re clearly very capable of creating a clear and concise report
using the principles of technical writing.