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Alex Wellman
Rothhasse
WRIT 1110
December 7, 2021
Analysis Paper
How would you describe the greatest on-going issues with this world? For this remix
assignment, I chose to remix an old text I had submitted back in high school. This piece of text
was more of an interview essay. I had to interview some people in my family and ask them what
they think are the world's greatest problems. After Interviewing everyone I would compare their
answers are go in detail about how age, lifestyle, social class may differentiate their answers
from one another. This is one my most favorable written texts because I loved hearing peoples
answers and how they were different from each other. It was interesting to me to write about this
topic and I found it more enjoyable than writing other boring texts. In my new text I still
interview my family but I dive into their answers much more, I then talk about their answers and
solutions to help. The remixed new text I have written goes much more into depth on the world's
problems and the answers from each one of my interviewees. I use my rhetoric tools as a writer
to my advantage to get the reader's attention, focus, feelings, etc. “In short rhetoric can be
understood as both a productive and inter-pretive enterprise.” (Selzer 280). There is more detail,
analysis and looks more like short story than a bland essay. I hope to broaden my horizon of
audience with my remixed text to people of all ages. The remixed text can be for anyone who is
interested in the worlds wellbeing to someone wanting to read an interesting text.
OLD TEXT
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One of the most important parts of my old text was how I showed Ethos throughout the
text. Especially since it is an Interview based text. My old text was based off primary sources of
answers that I received from own family members. This was my own personal experience and
because of this, the old text was trustworthy. A quote from my old text to back this up would be
as following.
“The first person I decided to interview about the world's problems were Emma
Wellman. She is 19 years old and is a female. She was born in Lakewood, Ohio, USA.”
(Wellman Old Text 1)
This quote is an example of how I introduced a member in my family right before I talked about
the questions, I asked her and her response. The quote shows me giving trustworthy information
of who she is.
In my old text there was also strong use of pathos. I used pathos through strong language and
tried to get the audience to relate and really understand the problems that were said and
described. The old text did an excellent job with this because it shows the reader problems that
they may be experiencing which may cause emotion to the readers. A quick example that I could
show is a sample of text from my old text that shows an issue being described that a lot of people
may relate to. “She had 3 great problems to discuss with me for this interview, one of which was
the problem with Covid-19. She thinks that the situation has gotten out of hand and...” (Wellman
old text 1). The quote then continued to talk about experiences many people have had to face
during the epidemic. This is a reason on as to how my old text showed Pathos.
Finally, in my old text the last element that I will be talking about is Logos. I feel like my old
text did a decent job with logos, I feel like there is still room for improvement but there were not
enough argumentative or persuasive standpoints in the text. This is my weakest element
compared to the remix version. My remix version will highlight this specific element making
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points and arguments with a persuasive tone on what can be helped and changed about the
current issues in the world. I use understandable language in the old text to make clear to the
audience of what I am writing about. I would clearly state how I am interviewing a certain
person in my family to make sure the audience knows what is going on. Right in the beginning
of my old text I jump straight away into the interviews which could cause confusion since there
is not a proper introduction included. This is how my old text utilizes logos and how the remixed
text will use it in a more effective manner.
NEW TEXT
Take a moment and think about what are the biggest issue of the world. My remixed text goes
into this with what you can do to help. My remixed text as a whole describes serious descriptions
of what is faulty about the world and how society deals with it presently today. The general
audience of this specific text are people that are interested in the topic and what they can do to
help and better the world community. I want people to read this text and conceivably better their
actions to overall improve life for everyone. The genre of the remixed text I have made could be
described as persuasive, or also a short story.
A great aspect of my remixed text is how I use the element of ethos. Just like my old text I base
the main base of my text from questions that I used to interview my family with. Since the
answers from my family are their opinion and the sources are primary to me, this makes me a
trustworthy author. I do not need to add anymore, this text is already credible with how I
interviewed my family members. An example of me using ethos in my remixed text would be as
following. “The last person I decided to get interviewed was my grandfather, Daniel. A little
about Dan is that he is 84 years old, he is also second generation from Germany.” (Wellman
remixed text 2). I give a little bit of background information about him to have the audience
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understand that the following info is credible and trustworthy. This is how my remixed text uses
ethos in a satisfactory manner.
Another great piece included in my remixed text was the way I used pathos. I did this by using a
lot of detail and description while discussing the problems that were discussed by my family
members. By using this strategy, it really can get the readers or audience to really understand and
feel the situation. This would make the audience think what it would be like if they were in the
opposite shoes or had to deal with the specific situation personally. Here is an example from the
text that shows use of pathos for the readers to view and understand upon.
“The first main problem that she would like to discuss with me was that there was an
increase in kidnappings / human trafficking. She understands how much pain a mother
would go through if they lost a child.” (Wellman remixed text 2)
The word choice in this quote can have readers think hard about what it would be like if they
were to experience and relate to the loss they would feel if they were in this situation. This is
how pathos was used inside of my new text.
Finally, the last main element that was used in my new text was logos. This was done by using a
strong scheme of asking the reader or audience what they can do in order to help the world and
to make it a better place. This is how the persuasive standpoint comes in to place, after reading
that specific part of the text, which was towards more of the end, they understand the point that is
trying to come across so they do not become confused. A quote that is similar to what I stated
goes as: “inventio (the finding or creation of information for persuasive acts and the planning of
strategies.” (Selzer 284). I also state at the beginning of each of my body paragraphs how I
interviewed the specific person of family that the actual paragraph is about. Such as “The next
person I decided to interview was my mother...” (Wellman remixed text 2). That is an example that shows
the reader a clear representation of what is happening and what is to come for the following section.
Logos is very important to the audience to stay tuned and to follow along.
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As a takeaway from my remix Text and my old text, I want my audience to understand
why I wrote about this specific topic. In my old text I really just jump straight into the topic and
do not really connect to the audience, the audience may have trouble relating or understanding
the point of my text compared to the remixed version. In the Remix version I go into more depth,
detail, and analysis of the topic. With the remixed version being read, I want the audience to
understand that the world has major problems going on in it and that there are ways to help.
Exposure to these problems can help because people could be more away of the situation. At the
end of the day the real and overall purpose of my finished remix text is to make the world a
better place even if it is a small step.
Works Cited
Bazerman, Charles, and Paul A. Prior. What Writing Does and How It Does It: An Introduction
to Analyzing Texts and Textual Practices. Routledge, 2009.
Wellman, Alex H. “The World's Greatest Problems. (Remixed Text)” 2021.
Wellman, Alex H. “Family Interview of the World. (Old Text): 2020.