East Coast Torrent
I woke up early with ants in my pants that day. Since the night
before, my cousin had come to spend the night at my house for today’s
trip. We were planning to go for an overnight stay at a seaside hotel near
the east coast with my uncle’s family. We brushed our teeth, carried all
our luggage, which we had packed the night before, and left the house in
a hurry. Outside, luckily, we got a taxi in just a few minutes.
While we were on the taxi to the hotel, the sky was seemingly
clear. However, when we arrived at the hotel, it was already apparent
that it would be raining soon. We chose to have our lunch at the
restaurant in the hotel. After filling our stomachs, we decided to go to the
beach out of excitement, although the first few drops of rain were
already falling.
Suddenly, the sky became covered by gigantic, black clouds and
the stormy wind started to howl. The wind became so strong, my
umbrella flew out of my hand and landed far in the sea. As the
merciless rain beat down in torrents on, boats were sent flying to
shore. Tree branches broke off and hit the ground. People were
screaming and shouting. We turned back and ran towards the hotel for
shelter.
Even in the hotel, the conditions were disheartening. The
windowpanes were rattling from the extreme wind and heavy thunder.
Many of the windows were being shattered one by one by flying debris,
sending sharp fragments everywhere. Injured people were brought into
the hotel by the hundreds while they were waiting for medical
assistance. In the end, the hotel was crowded with too many people. It
seemed as if it would be very noisy until night because of the cleaning
effort to remove the wreckages. Worst of all, the lights were out, making
moving around even harder, and causing unnecessary injuries.
As we did not think that it was a good idea to stay in the hotel
anymore, we cancelled our stay there and made up our mind to go
home. When the squally weather subsided, we took a long walk in the
abating rain from the hotel to the nearest taxi stand. There, we waited for
more than an hour just to get a taxi. It was a great relief to get home.
Once we reached home, I immediately took a long, hot shower. It was a
horrible day. I have learnt that sometimes unexpected things happen in
life, and you just must be ready for it, physically, and mentally.
ORIGINAL – 4 TH GRADE ESSAY
FOR LITTLE RED DOT KIDS NEWSPAPER COMPETITION
East Coast Torrent
I woke up early feeling excited today. Since last night, my cousin
came to sleep at my house for today’s trip. We were planning to go for
an overnight stay at a hotel near the east coast with my uncle’s family.
We brushed our teeth, carried all our luggage, which we had packed the
night before, and left the house in a hurry. Outside, luckily, we got a taxi
in just a few minutes.
While we were on the taxi to the hotel, the sky seemed to be clear.
However, when we arrived at the hotel, it was already raining slightly
and windy. We chose to have our lunch there. After lunch, we decided to
go to the beach even though it was raining.
Suddenly, the sky became dark, and the stormy wind started to
howl. The wind became so strong, my umbrella flew out of my hand and
landed far in the sea. As the merciless rain beat down in torrents on,
boats were sent flying to shore. Tree branches broke off and hit the
ground. People were screaming and shouting. We turned back and ran
towards the hotel for shelter.
Even in the hotel, the conditions were disheartening. The
windowpanes were rattling from the extreme wind and heavy thunder. A
few windows were cracked by flying debris. Injured people were brought
into the hotel while they were waiting for medical assistance. In the end,
the hotel was crowded with too many people. It seemed as if it would be
very noisy until night because of the cleaning effort to remove the
wreckages. Worst of all, the Wi-Fi was out.
As we did not think that it was a good idea to stay in the hotel
anymore, we cancelled our stay there and made up our mind to go
home. When the squally weather subsided, we took a long walk in the
abating rain from the hotel to the nearest taxi stand. There, we waited for
more than an hour just to get a taxi. It was a great relief to get home.
Once we reached home, I immediately took a long, hot shower. It was a
horrible day. I have learnt that sometimes unexpected things happen in
life, and you just must be ready for it, physically, and mentally.
(outline)
1.
Preparing. Character wakes up with a start. Went in car grab.
2.
While driving to hotel, sky seemed to be a bit cloudy. When arrived at the hotel, it
was raining slightly. Decided to have lunch there.
3.
After lunch, goes to the beach with umbrella. Things go horribly wrong. Sky turns
black. Wind gets very strong.
4.
Wind gets terrifyingly strong. Character’s umbrella flies out of his hand.
. Rain horizontal. Tree branches breaking off. Boats flying. Character dodges a boat flying
towards him.
Conclusion