Section 3 Creating danger • I am exploring ways of creating tense, exciting action in a story • I need to practice the skill of planning and writing stories • I can successfully plan and write a tense, exciting action in a story Conflict (bell-ringer) Explain what is happening in this picture and state was type of conflict is being shown. Conflict A man is on trial for some sort of crime he committed. Man vs. Society • • • • • • • • • • • Breaker’s yard Shock wave Buckle Eggshell Graze Trickle Yank off Tilt Guillotine Metalwork Fumes piston a place where old cars are taken apart and the parts are sold breaker’s yard Wreck yard ‘The explosion caused a shock wave of flames like ripples in the water when a stone is cast in.’ A sharp change of pressure in a narrow region travelling through a medium, especially air, caused by explosion or by a body moving faster than sound. Shock wave side effect Bend and give way under a weight or force. ‘The pain was almost unbearable as they continued to apply pressure and his knees buckled under the strain.’ buckle become warped Used in similes and metaphors to refer to the fragile nature of something. ‘the truck would crush his car like an eggshell’ eggshell Scrape and break the surface of the skin of (a part of the body) ‘she fell down and grazed her knees’ graze scrape (of a liquid) flow in a small stream. ‘a solitary tear trickled down her cheek’ trickle drip ‘her hair was yanked, and she screamed’. ‘her hair was yanked, and she screamed’ yank jerk to (cause to) move into a sloping position: He tilted his chair backward and put his feet up on his desk. tilt lean to pour something from one place or container into another tip something into/onto etc. something He tipped the juice into our glasses. tip ‘Harry made British medical history in 1999 by becoming the first eight-finger replant after his hands were caught in a hydraulic paper guillotine.’ A device for cutting that incorporates a descending or sliding blade, used typically for cutting paper, card, or sheet metal. guillotine lean the metal part of something: Rust has damaged the metalwork of the bicycle. metalwork a long, narrow container without a lid that usually holds water or food for farm animals: Cows at the feeding trough trough ‘Besides leaving salt deposits, rusting internal parts and causing valve damage, water in an engine also makes short work of pistons and cylinders.’ piston a short, solid piece of metal that moves up and down inside a cylinder in an engine to press the fuel into a small space and to send the power produced by it to the wheels: Activity 1 • 1 Being found by the men and being crushed inside the car. • 2 Because the men haven’t found him. • 3 The car is picked up by a huge crane with three metal prongs and tilted up in the air. Alex is thrown into the back and his head is grazed by the metal fingers. • 4 The graph should show a steady incline, following the rise in tension and suspense. Activity 2 • “A shadow fell across the window” (Tell the reader what is happening) • “It was going to be put inside the crusher.” (Tell the reader what is going to happen soon) • “Alex tried to fight back his sickness and despair” (Tell the reader how the main character is feeling) • “He could feel nothing.”; “dust and diesel fumes punching into his nose and eyes”; “he could see the huge steel head of the piston”; “The back window exploded”; “managed to pound on the back window” • 2 Telling the reader what is about to happen is used most often. • 3 Telling the reader how the main character is feeling is used least often. Skills Boost: Word classes • 1) I can see the sky; point; trees; value; books. • 2) She has bought a blue; new; small; enormous; racing car. • 3) I ran; sang; whistled; skipped; roared in the park. • 4) He did his homework speedily; lazily; happily; enthusiastically; methodically. Activity 3 – compare the following words • ‘break’ and ‘destroy’, ‘run’ and ‘race’, and ‘worry’ and ‘panic’. Activity 3 – compare the following words • ‘break’ and ‘destroy’, ‘run’ and ‘race’, and ‘worry’ and ‘panic’. • Their extremity makes these more dramatic. Activity 3 – • 1a buckled; tore; exploded; showered; punching • 1b I find the verb “punching” most dramatic because it conveys the power of the toxic smells as they impact with such force that it is like a physical hostile punch. • 2a The metal fingers and the skin of the car are compared with a fork and an eggshell. • 2b This simile suggests that the car is very fragile compared with the strength and power of the car crusher. Activity 4 • Your writing should: • be planned • contain two paragraphs • include dramatic verbs • include a slight dip in tension before danger heightens it again • tell the reader what is happening, what is going to happen, how the main character is feeling and what he or she is experiencing through their senses. Planning • 1) • What is happening? • What is going to happen soon? • How is the main character feeling? • What is happening to the main character’s five senses: Writing