ENC 4212: Professional & Technical Editing
ASSIGNMENT 1 (20% of grade) - Due Sep 7, 2015, 6 p.m.
Fall 2015 / USF Sarasota-Manatee • Instructor: T. E. Roberts
(Instructions revised and re-posted 25 Aug 2015)
Topic of Assignment: Editing for Content and Clarity
DIRECTIONS. You are working as a salaried, full-time editor for a social services agency. An executive has provided
you a draft of his writing that you need to convert into clear, concise English which a funder can understand. This
document, known as a one-page “Letter of Intent,” will be submitted to a U.S. government agency as part of a $1.5
million proposal to deliver mental health services for the agency’s clients.
You need to ask questions and perform research to clarify any words, phrases, or concepts that are unclear to you.
Your main task is to revise language and awkward sentence structure that block meaning and replace them with
smooth-flowing, lucid prose that meets the reader’s needs. Its length may not exceed 300 words. (The funder will
automatically reject anything longer.)
To get started, open a blank MS Word document and then copy and paste the two-column table beginning on page
two below as a simple template for your work. Save the new document as Lastname_4212_1.docx. Then add your
changes and remember to save the document as you do your work (you can also set MS Word preferences to save
your work automatically at user-set intervals).
This format will allow me to compare the original and your edited results at a glance. As you will see, the current
original is now more than twice as long as what the funding agency will accept, so one of your key tasks will be to
shorten the existing document. You will also need to make it as concise as possible. Note that “concise” is not a
synonym for “brief.” “Concise” means packing the maximum meaning into minimum length as measured by
word count. “Brief” means merely “short.”
List all sources consulted at the end of the document in conventional MLA format (see
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/01/ for guidance).
SUBMISSION INSTRUCTIONS. The submission is due via Canvas on Mon, Sept. 7, 2015, 6 p.m. with audio codes
for the Week 1 and 2 lectures. Name your file Lastname_1_4212.docx if you want just a grade posted on Canvas. If
you want a detailed markup and are willing to send me a thorough revision within one week after the submission is
graded and returned, label it Lastname_1_4212_markup.docx. (The revision does not result in any change of grade
unless you submit it late, and then it results in a penalty to the grade. See syllabus for details.)
All your work must be your own. It is subject to being shared with all students in the class. If you have a question as
you work on this assignment, please contact me by email (tr@sar.usf.edu). Note, however, that I do not have time to
review a student’s draft before submission, nor will you find that most clients or employers allow such a review. Do it
right the first time!
ABC AGENCY - LETTER OF INTENT
Proposal for Delivering Case Management Services
ORIGINAL TEXT (434 words)
ABC AGENCY intends to implement a Wraparound System
of care, shown to be highly effective in promoting excellence
in service delivery while promoting positive system of care
changes for populations served, through provision of high
quality coordinated case management support services
maximizing organizational and natural (formal and informal)
supports for participants of the POWER Program. A
nationally acclaimed consultant for the Wraparound process
will provide training and guidance through collaborative
efforts related to other ABC AGENCY projects. In the event
ABC AGENCY shares case management responsibilities with
other POWER partners, ABC AGENCY will invite partners to
Wraparound trainings provided by the national consultant.
The Wraparound process will be driven by the following ten
key principles: Participant and Family Voice and Choice;
Natural Supports; Individualized Service; Strengths
Based; Persistence; Cultural Competency; Team Based;
Collaboration and Mutual Commitment to Team Goals;
Community Based; and Outcome Based. The training and
implementation of the Wraparound process for POWER
participants will be a novel approach to helping POWER
participants and their support system to reach their life goals.
ABC AGENCY desires to expand the model for case
management services previously provided to help ensure
participants are more fully engaged, supported and positively
transitioned during their recovery journey resulting in not only
sobriety but the realization of their personal and family goals
resulting in the highest possible quality of life throughout the
challenging process of recovery. The end result of the
process will be the participant’s integration in to the Recovery
Community that will sustain the person without services and
supports from the POWER Program.
ABC AGENCY believes given the complexity of the cooccurring nature of the people referred to the POWER
program a combination of Master level trained and Bachelor
level social workers are required to deliver required
counseling and case management services for the people
served and their formal and informal support system. Two
Master level trained social workers will be employed to
provide co-occurring counseling services and wraparound
case management services if the initial assessment indicates
an integration of counseling and wraparound case
management services are required and the participant
wishes to engage in both counseling and wraparound
services. These individuals will be provided counseling and
case management supports in accordance with the State of
Florida Outpatient Substance Abuse Counseling guidelines,
assessed Mental Health Counseling requirements and
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Wraparound case management guidelines. Two Bachelor
level wraparound staff will be employed to provide
Wraparound services and supports for individuals who do not
wish to receive or are not assessed to need counseling
services. All participants will receive services in accordance
with applicable Florida State and Council On Accreditation
standards.
Sources Consulted
See http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/01/ for guidance on MLA format.