Teachers Only
• The point of this slideshow is to give you a lesson to help your
students make the most of the district essay. This lesson will take
approximately 50 minutes to complete. Students will be led through
the prompt, rubric, and anchor essays to help them develop a better
understanding of why they received the score they did and how they
can improve in the future.
• Every instance where students are asked to do write something
down or respond you will see a highlighted area.
• This slideshow doesn’t write down every comment word for word.
There are several instances where you will have the opportunity to
discuss concepts as a class.
• Any questions or comments you have to improve this would be
appreciated. Please send these to jmanley@cnusd.k12.ca.us .
Students please do the following…
1. Get out a blank piece of paper and your district essay.
2. Read your district essay.
3. On a blank sheet of paper answer the following
questions:
a) Why do you think you received the score you did?
b) How could you have done better?
4. Hopefully, by the end of this presentation you will have
a much clearer answer to both of these questions.
First let’s take another look at
the Writing Task just to make sure
everyone understands exactly what
they were supposed to write about.
PLEASE FIND THE WRITING TASK
LABELED ON YOUR DISTRICT ESSAY.
Here is the Writing Task:
Based on the selection from Mitch Albom’s
Tuesdays with Morrie, write an essay
responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and death
through conversations with Morrie? How
might you apply Morrie’s advice on growing
older to your own life?
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
2. Now circle specific terms that you must
understand and write what you think each
term means.
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
2. Now circle specific terms that you must
understand and write what you think each
term means.
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
Author’s
Tone:
The author’s
attitude
toward the
subject
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
2. Now circle specific terms that you must
understand and write what you think each
term means.
Let’s take a closer look at the writing task…
Based on the selection from Mitch
Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie, write an
essay responding to the following:
How did the author’s tone change after
encountering the theme of aging and
death through conversations with
Morrie? How might you apply Morrie’s
advice on growing older to your own
life?
Author’s
Tone:
The author’s
attitude
toward the
subject
•
In order to succeed on an essay like this you
need to make sure you write about everything
that is required.
1. Go sentence by sentence and underline
everything you must accomplish in your essay.
2. Now circle specific terms that you must
understand and write what you think each
term means.
3. On your sheet of paper, please respond to the
following questions:
c.
d.
Think back to your essay: Did you address all of these
tasks?
Did you clearly show that you understood all of the
terms?
Now let’s take a closer look at the writing
Don’t just read!
task…
Remember our
From Tuesdays with Morrie, by Mitch Albom
Later that day, we talked about aging. Or maybe I should say the fear of
aging—another of the issues on my what’s-bugging-my generation list. On my
ride from the Boston airport, I had counted the billboards that featured young
and beautiful people. There was a handsome young man in a cowboy
hat,…two beautiful young women smiling over a shampoo bottle, a sultrylooking teenager…and a sexy woman in a black velvet dress, next to a man in a
tuxedo…
Not once did I see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five. I told Morrie I
was already feeling over the hill, much as I tried desperately to stay on top of
it. I worked out constantly. Watched what I ate. Checked my hairline in the
mirror. I had gone from being proud to say my age—because of all I had done
so young—to not bringing it up, for fear I was getting too close to forty and,
therefore, professional oblivion.
Morrie had aging in better perspective.
“All this emphasis on youth—don’t buy it,” he said. “Listen, I know what a
misery being young can be, so don’t tell me it’s so great. All these kids who
came to me with their struggles, their strife, their feeling of inadequacy, their
sense that life was miserable…
writing tasks:
• Author’s
Tone Change
about aging
• Lessons
about aging
you can
apply to your
own life
As you read
please highlight
text that you
could quote/cite
in your essay
that would
support our
writing tasks.
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
text that you
could quote/cite
From Tuesdays with Morrie, by Mitch Albom
in your essay
Later that day, we talked about aging. Or maybe I should say the fear of
aging—another of the issues on my what’s-bugging-my generation list. On my that would
ride from the Boston airport, I had counted the billboards that featured young support our
and beautiful people. There was a handsome young man in a cowboy
writing tasks.
hat,…two beautiful young women smiling over a shampoo bottle, a sultrylooking teenager…and a sexy woman in a black velvet dress, next to a man in a
tuxedo…
Not once did I see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five. I told Morrie I
was already feeling over the hill, much as I tried desperately to stay on top of
it. I worked out constantly. Watched what I ate. Checked my hairline in the
mirror. I had gone from being proud to say my age—because of all I had done
so young—to not bringing it up, for fear I was getting too close to forty and,
therefore, professional oblivion.
Morrie had aging in better perspective.
“All this emphasis on youth—don’t buy it,” he said. “Listen, I know what a
misery being young can be, so don’t tell me it’s so great. All these kids who
came to me with their struggles, their strife, their feeling of inadequacy, their
sense that life was miserable…
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
From Tuesdays with Morrie, by Mitch Albom
Later that day, we talked about aging. Or maybe I should say the fear of
aging—another of the issues on my what’s-bugging-my generation list. On
my ride from the Boston airport, I had counted the billboards that featured
young and beautiful people. There was a handsome young man in a cowboy
hat,…two beautiful young women smiling over a shampoo bottle, a sultrylooking teenager…and a sexy woman in a black velvet dress, next to a man in a
tuxedo…
Not once did I see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five. I told Morrie I
was already feeling over the hill, much as I tried desperately to stay on top
of it. I worked out constantly. Watched what I ate. Checked my hairline in
the mirror. I had gone from being proud to say my age—because of all I had
done so young—to not bringing it up, for fear I was getting too close to forty
and, therefore, professional oblivion.
Morrie had aging in better perspective.
“All this emphasis on youth—don’t buy it,” he said. “Listen, I know what a
misery being young can be, so don’t tell me it’s so great. All these kids who
came to me with their struggles, their strife, their feeling of inadequacy, their
sense that life was miserable…
text that you
could quote/cite
in your essay
that would
support our
writing tasks.
Author’s
Tone
Morrie’s
Lesson
Now let’s take a closer look at the writing
Please highlight
task…
“And, in addition to all the miseries, the young are not wise. They have very
little understanding about life. Who wants to live when you don’t know
what’s going on? When people are manipulating you, telling you to buy this
perfume and you’ll be beautiful, or this pair of jeans and you’ll be sexy—and
you believe them! It’s such nonsense.”
Weren’t you ever afraid to grow old, I asked?
“Mitch, I embrace aging.”
Embrace it?
“It’s very simple. As you grow, you learn more. If you stayed at twenty-two,
you’d always be as ignorant as you were at twenty-two. Aging is not just
decay, you know. It’s growth. It’s more than the negative that you’re going to
die, it’s also the positive that you live better life because of it.”
Yes, I said, but if aging were so valuable, why do people always say, “Oh, if I
were young again.” You never hear people say, “I wish I were sixty-five.”
He smiled. “You know what that reflects? Unsatisfied lives. Unfulfilled lives.
Lives that haven’t found meaning. Because if you’ve found meaning in your
life, you don’t want to go back. You want to go forward. You want to see
more, do more. You can’t wait until sixty-five.
text that you
could quote/cite
in your essay
that would
support our
writing tasks.
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
“And, in addition to all the miseries, the young are not wise. They have very
little understanding about life. Who wants to live when you don’t know
what’s going on? When people are manipulating you, telling you to buy this
perfume and you’ll be beautiful, or this pair of jeans and you’ll be sexy—and
you believe them! It’s such nonsense.”
Weren’t you ever afraid to grow old, I asked?
“Mitch, I embrace aging.”
Embrace it?
“It’s very simple. As you grow, you learn more. If you stayed at twenty-two,
you’d always be as ignorant as you were at twenty-two. Aging is not just
decay, you know. It’s growth. It’s more than the negative that you’re going to
die, it’s also the positive that you live better life because of it.”
Yes, I said, but if aging were so valuable, why do people always say, “Oh, if I
were young again.” You never hear people say, “I wish I were sixty-five.”
He smiled. “You know what that reflects? Unsatisfied lives. Unfulfilled lives.
Lives that haven’t found meaning. Because if you’ve found meaning in your
life, you don’t want to go back. You want to go forward. You want to see
more, do more. You can’t wait until sixty-five.
text that you
could quote/cite
in your essay
that would
support our
writing tasks.
Author’s
Tone
Morrie’s
Lesson
Now let’s take a closer look at the writing
task…
“Listen. You should know something. All younger people should know
something. If you’re always battling against getting older, you’re always going
to be unhappy, because it will happen anyhow.
“And Mitch?”
He lowered his voice.
“The fact is, you are going to die eventually.”
I know.
“But hopefully,” he said, “not for a long, long time.”
He closed his eyes with a peaceful look, then asked me to adjust the
pillows behind his head. His body needed constant adjustment to stay
comfortable. It was propped up in the chair with white pillows, yellow foam,
and blue towels. At a quick glance, it seemed as if Morrie were being packed
for shipping.
“Thank you,” he whispered as I moved the pillows.
No problem, I said.
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
“Listen. You should know something. All younger people should know
something. If you’re always battling against getting older, you’re always
going to be unhappy, because it will happen anyhow.
“And Mitch?”
He lowered his voice.
“The fact is, you are going to die eventually.”
I know.
“But hopefully,” he said, “not for a long, long time.”
He closed his eyes with a peaceful look, then asked me to adjust the
pillows behind his head. His body needed constant adjustment to stay
comfortable. It was propped up in the chair with white pillows, yellow foam,
and blue towels. At a quick glance, it seemed as if Morrie were being packed
for shipping.
“Thank you,” he whispered as I moved the pillows.
No problem, I said.
text that you
could quote/cite
in your essay
that would
support our
writing tasks.
Author’s
Tone
Morrie’s
Lesson
Now let’s take a closer look at the writing
task…
“Mitch. What are you thinking?”
I paused before answering. Okay, I said, I’m wondering how you don’t
envy younger, healthy people.
“Oh, I guess I do.” He closed his eyes. “I envy them being able to go to
the health club, or go for a swim. Or dance. Mostly for dancing. But envy
comes to me, I feel it, and then I let it go. Remember what I said about
detachment? Let it go. Tell yourself, ‘That’s envy, I’m going to separate from
it now.’ And walk away.”
He coughed—a long scratchy cough—and he pushed a tissue to his
mouth and spit weakly into it. Sitting there, I felt so much stronger than he,
ridiculously so, as if I could lift him and toss him in any other way.
How do you keep from envying…
“What?”
Me?
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
text that you
could quote/cite
“Mitch. What are you thinking?”
I paused before answering. Okay, I said, I’m wondering how you don’t in your essay
that would
envy younger, healthy people.
“Oh, I guess I do.” He closed his eyes. “I envy them being able to go to support our
writing tasks.
the health club, or go for a swim. Or dance. Mostly for dancing. But envy
comes to me, I feel it, and then I let it go. Remember what I said about
detachment? Let it go. Tell yourself, ‘That’s envy, I’m going to separate from
it now.’ And walk away.”
He coughed—a long scratchy cough—and he pushed a tissue to his
mouth and spit weakly into it. Sitting there, I felt so much stronger than he,
ridiculously so, as if I could lift him and toss him in any other way.
How do you keep from envying…
“What?”
Me?
Author’s
Tone
Morrie’s
Lesson
Now let’s take a closer look at the writing
task…
He smiled.
“Mitch, it is impossible for the old not to envy the young. But the issue is to
accept who you are and revel in that. This is your time to be in your thirties. I
had my time to be in my thirties, and now is my time to be seventy-eight.
“You have to find what’s good and true and beautiful in your life as it is now.
Looking back makes you competitive. And, age is not a competitive issue.”
He exhaled and lowered his eyes, as if to watch his breath scatter into the air.
“The truth is, part of me is every age. I’m a three-year-old, I’m a five-year-old,
I’m a thirty-seven-year-old, I’m a fifty-year-old. I’ve been through all of them,
and I know what it’s like. I delight in being a child when it’s appropriate to be
a child. I delight in being a wise old man when it’s appropriate to be a wise
old man. Think of all I can be! I am every age, up to my own. Do you
understand?”
I nodded.
“How can I be envious of where you are—when I’ve been there myself?”
Now let’s take a(n) even closer look at the
Please highlight
writing task…
text that you
could quote/cite
He smiled.
in your essay
“Mitch, it is impossible for the old not to envy the young. But the issue is to
accept who you are and revel in that. This is your time to be in your thirties. that would
I had my time to be in my thirties, and now is my time to be seventy-eight.
support our
“You have to find what’s good and true and beautiful in your life as it is now. writing tasks.
Looking back makes you competitive. And, age is not a competitive issue.”
He exhaled and lowered his eyes, as if to watch his breath scatter into the air.
“The truth is, part of me is every age. I’m a three-year-old, I’m a five-yearold, I’m a thirty-seven-year-old, I’m a fifty-year-old. I’ve been through all of
them, and I know what it’s like. I delight in being a child when it’s
appropriate to be a child. I delight in being a wise old man when it’s
appropriate to be a wise old man. Think of all I can be! I am every age, up to
my own. Do you understand?”
I nodded.
“How can I be envious of where you are—when I’ve been there myself?”
Author’s
Tone
Morrie’s
Lesson
Question E
• The author’s tone changes from one attitude
at the beginning of the excerpt to another
attitude by the end. Explain his attitudes.
• Secondly, summarize Morrie’s advice.
Now you know what you
are supposed to write
about and you understand
the excerpt. Let’s take a
look at how you should
write your essay.
Passing Scores
Not Passing Scores
4 – Exemplary
3 - Proficient
2- Progressing
1- Beginning
•
Thoughtful,
comprehensive grasp of
text
Accurately/coherently
provides specific
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
Demonstrates clear
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•Comprehensive grasp
of text
•
Limited grasp of text
•
Minimal grasp of text
•Accurately/coherently
provides general
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•Demonstrates general
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•
Provides few, if any,
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•
May provide no
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•
•
Variety of sentence
types, precise,
descriptive language
Few, if any, convention
errors (first draft
nature)
•Variety of sentence
•
types, some descriptive
language
•Some convention
•
errors that do not
impede reader’s
understanding
•An awareness of
•
literary/stylistic devices
Demonstrates limited
or no understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, complexity
of text
Few, if any, types of
sentences, basic,
predictable language
Several convention
errors that may
impede reader’s
understanding
May demonstrate
awareness of
May demonstrate no
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
and complexity of
text
No sentence variety,
limited vocabulary
•
•
•
•
•
Clear awareness of
literary/stylistic devices
•
•
•
Serious convention
errors that do impede
reader’s
understanding
No awareness of
literary/stylistic
Passing Scores
Notice that
the same
concepts
are rated
from one
column to
the next.
There are
several
different
concepts
that are
being
graded.
Not Passing Scores
4 – Exemplary
3 - Proficient
2- Progressing
1- Beginning
•
Thoughtful,
comprehensive grasp
of text
Accurately/coherentl
y provides specific
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
Demonstrates clear
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•Comprehensive
grasp of text
•
Limited grasp of
text
•
Minimal grasp of
text
•Accurately/coherentl
y provides general
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•Demonstrates
general understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, complexity
of text
•
•
May provide no
textual details and
examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
May demonstrate
no understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, and
complexity of text
•
Variety of sentence
types, precise,
descriptive language
•Variety of sentence
types, some
descriptive language
•
•
Few, if any,
convention errors
(first draft nature)
•
•
Clear awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•Some convention
errors that do not
impede reader’s
understanding
•An awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
Provides few, if
any, textual details
and examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
Demonstrates
limited or no
understanding of
ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of text
Few, if any, types
of sentences, basic,
predictable
language
Several convention
errors that may
impede reader’s
understanding
May demonstrate
awareness of
stylistic/literary
devices
•
•
•
•
•
•
No sentence
variety, limited
vocabulary
•
Serious convention
errors that do
impede reader’s
understanding
No awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•
Passing Scores
Question F:
Reread your
essay. Please
write a one
sentence
explanation of
how you think
you did in each
category. You
should have a 6
sentence
response to this
question.
Explain why in
your answers.
Not Passing Scores
4 – Exemplary
3 - Proficient
2- Progressing
1- Beginning
•
Thoughtful,
comprehensive grasp
of text
Accurately/coherentl
y provides specific
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
Demonstrates clear
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•Comprehensive
grasp of text
•
Limited grasp of
text
•
Minimal grasp of
text
•Accurately/coherentl
y provides general
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•Demonstrates
general understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, complexity
of text
•
•
May provide no
textual details and
examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
May demonstrate
no understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, and
complexity of text
•
Variety of sentence
types, precise,
descriptive language
•Variety of sentence
types, some
descriptive language
•
•
Few, if any,
convention errors
(first draft nature)
•
•
Clear awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•Some convention
errors that do not
impede reader’s
understanding
•An awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
Provides few, if
any, textual details
and examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
Demonstrates
limited or no
understanding of
ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of text
Few, if any, types
of sentences, basic,
predictable
language
Several convention
errors that may
impede reader’s
understanding
May demonstrate
awareness of
stylistic/literary
devices
•
•
•
•
•
•
No sentence
variety, limited
vocabulary
•
Serious convention
errors that do
impede reader’s
understanding
No awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•
Passing Scores
Question F:
Reread your
essay. Please
write a one
sentence
explanation of
how you think
you did in each
category. You
should have a 6
sentence
response to this
question. Explain
why in your
answers.
Start with grasp
of text…did you
get a 4, 3, 2, 1?
Why?
Not Passing Scores
4 – Exemplary
3 - Proficient
2- Progressing
1- Beginning
•
Thoughtful,
comprehensive grasp
of text
Accurately/coherentl
y provides specific
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
Demonstrates clear
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•Comprehensive
grasp of text
•
Limited grasp of
text
•
Minimal grasp of
text
•Accurately/coherentl
y provides general
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•Demonstrates
general understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, complexity
of text
•
•
May provide no
textual details and
examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
May demonstrate
no understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, and
complexity of text
•
Variety of sentence
types, precise,
descriptive language
•Variety of sentence
types, some
descriptive language
•
•
Few, if any,
convention errors
(first draft nature)
•
•
Clear awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•Some convention
errors that do not
impede reader’s
understanding
•An awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
Provides few, if
any, textual details
and examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
Demonstrates
limited or no
understanding of
ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of text
Few, if any, types
of sentences, basic,
predictable
language
Several convention
errors that may
impede reader’s
understanding
May demonstrate
awareness of
stylistic/literary
devices
•
•
•
•
•
•
No sentence
variety, limited
vocabulary
•
Serious convention
errors that do
impede reader’s
understanding
No awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•
Passing Scores
Question F:
Reread your
essay. Please
write a one
sentence
explanation of
how you think
you did in each
category. You
should have a 6
sentence
response to this
question.
Explain why in
your answers.
Start with thesis
…then make
your way to
details
… and so on
Not Passing Scores
4 – Exemplary
3 - Proficient
2- Progressing
1- Beginning
•
Thoughtful,
comprehensive grasp
of text
Accurately/coherentl
y provides specific
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
Demonstrates clear
understanding of
ambiguities, nuances,
complexity of text
•Comprehensive
grasp of text
•
Limited grasp of
text
•
Minimal grasp of
text
•Accurately/coherentl
y provides general
textual details and
examples to support
thesis and main ideas
•Demonstrates
general understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, complexity
of text
•
•
May provide no
textual details and
examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
May demonstrate
no understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances, and
complexity of text
•
Variety of sentence
types, precise,
descriptive language
•Variety of sentence
types, some
descriptive language
•
•
Few, if any,
convention errors
(first draft nature)
•
•
Clear awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•Some convention
errors that do not
impede reader’s
understanding
•An awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
Provides few, if
any, textual details
and examples to
support thesis and
main ideas
Demonstrates
limited or no
understanding of
ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of text
Few, if any, types
of sentences, basic,
predictable
language
Several convention
errors that may
impede reader’s
understanding
May demonstrate
awareness of
stylistic/literary
devices
•
•
•
•
•
•
No sentence
variety, limited
vocabulary
•
Serious convention
errors that do
impede reader’s
understanding
No awareness of
literary/stylistic
devices
•
ANCHOR PAPERS
• The upcoming slides are actual student essays. An
example of a 4, 3, 2, and 1 will be shown.
• The point of showing these essays is to help everyone
understand further what elements are good to include
and not good to include in an essay.
• As we read through these essays, compare them to your
own and respond to the following:
– Question G: What did you learn from each of the students
essays? Please include at least one sentence for each of the
essays. You should have a minimum four sentence response.
• At the end of each anchor paper you will be reminded to answer this
question.
4
As a person starts growing older and older, there are certain misgivings that
may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates
the change of the author after conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be
applied on my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He admits that his fear
of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’s-bugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie
that “he was already feeling over the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and
the consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly feels the social
norms of his society about aging because he worries about the many ways that he tries to do in
even order to stay younger.
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing Morrie talk about
“aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the material parts of life, Morrie thinks on
a more philosophical point of view, and scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does
not seem to envy the downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding about life” due to
their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that although older people do envy the
youth, but the old can accept who they are. After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so
the youth ought to be envious old, not the other way around.
In my life, similar to the author, I feel very much affected by what my society thinks of
aging. From aging, I am expected to be more responsible and to become prepared for my future,
which involves preparation for my future college and career. Like what Morrie said, once “[I’ve]
found meaning in [my] life, [I] [won’t] wan’t to go back.” I earnestly believe that I found meaning in
(cont.)
4
(cont.)
my life, enough to set aside all the difficulties and conflicts that come with youth, so that I “can’t wait
until [I am] sixty-five”. By accepting what age I am, and not become so negative with the troubles of
my present age, I can live my life in a more fulfilling way.
After the author talks to Morrie, he comes from a depressed into a more hopeful and
optimistic view of aging. By embracing age and becoming more aware of what benefits aging can
bring, it is possible to see how aging is not as abstruse and conflicting as it may seem to be.
Thoughtful,
comprehensive
grasp of text
This is why it is a 4
As a person starts growing older and older, there are
certain misgivings that may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays
with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates the change of the author after
conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be applied on
my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He
admits that his fear of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’sbugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie that “he was already feeling over
the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and the
consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly
feels the social norms of his society about aging because he worries about the
many ways that he tries to do in even order to stay younger.
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing
Morrie talk about “aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the
material parts of life, Morrie thinks on a more philosophical point of view, and
scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does not seem to envy the
downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding
about life” due to their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that
although older people do envy the youth, but the old can accept who they are.
After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so the youth ought to be
envious old, not the other way around.
(cont.)
Thoughtful,
comprehensive
grasp of text
This is why it is a 4
In my life, similar to the author, I feel very much affected by what my
society thinks of aging. From aging, I am expected to be more responsible and
to become prepared for my future, which involves preparation for my future
college and career. Like what Morrie said, once “[I’ve] found meaning in [my]
life, [I] [won’t] wan’t to go back.” I earnestly believe that I found meaning in
my life, enough to set aside all the difficulties and conflicts that come with youth,
so that I “can’t wait until [I am] sixty-five”. By accepting what age I am, and not
become so negative with the troubles of my present age, I can live my life in a
more fulfilling way.
After the author talks to Morrie, he comes from a depressed into a
more hopeful and optimistic view of aging. By embracing age and becoming
more aware of what benefits aging can bring, it is possible to see how aging is
not as abstruse and conflicting as it may seem to be.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
Accurately
provides
specific textual
details
As a person starts growing older and older, there are
certain misgivings that may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays
with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates the change of the author after
conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be applied on
my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He
admits that his fear of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’sbugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie that “he was already feeling over
the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and the
consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly
feels the social norms of his society about aging because he worries about the
many ways that he tries to do in even order to stay younger.
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing
Morrie talk about “aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the
material parts of life, Morrie thinks on a more philosophical point of view, and
scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does not seem to envy the
downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding
about life” due to their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that
although older people do envy the youth, but the old can accept who they are.
After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so the youth ought to be
envious old, not the other way around.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
In my life, similar to the author, I feel very much affected by what my
society thinks of aging. From aging, I am expected to be more responsible and
to become prepared for my future, which involves preparation for my future
college and career. Like what Morrie said, once “[I’ve] found meaning in [my]
life, [I] [won’t] wan’t to go back.” I earnestly believe that I found meaning in
my life, enough to set aside all the difficulties and conflicts that come with youth,
so that I “can’t wait until [I am] sixty-five”. By accepting what age I am, and not
become so negative with the troubles of my present age, I can live my life in a
more fulfilling way.
After the author talks to Morrie, he comes from a depressed into a
more hopeful and optimistic view of aging. By embracing age and becoming
more aware of what benefits aging can bring, it is possible to see how aging is
not as abstruse and conflicting as it may seem to be.
(cont.)
Accurately
provides
specific textual
details
This is why it is a 4
Demonstrates
clear
understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of
text
As a person starts growing older and older, there are
certain misgivings that may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays
with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates the change of the author after
conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be applied on
my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He
admits that his fear of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’sbugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie that “he was already feeling over
the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and the
consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly
feels the social norms of his society about aging because he worries about the
many ways that he tries to do in even order to stay younger.
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing
Morrie talk about “aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the
material parts of life, Morrie thinks on a more philosophical point of view, and
scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does not seem to envy the
downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding
about life” due to their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that
although older people do envy the youth, but the old can accept who they are.
After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so the youth ought to be
envious old, not the other way around.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
Demonstrates
clear
understanding
of ambiguities,
nuances,
complexity of
text
In my life, similar to the author, I feel very much affected by what my
society thinks of aging. From aging, I am expected to be more responsible and
to become prepared for my future, which involves preparation for my future
college and career. Like what Morrie said, once “[I’ve] found meaning in [my]
life, [I] [won’t] wan’t to go back.” I earnestly believe that I found meaning in
my life, enough to set aside all the difficulties and conflicts that come with youth,
so that I “can’t wait until [I am] sixty-five”. By accepting what age I am, and not
become so negative with the troubles of my present age, I can live my life in a
more fulfilling way.
After the author talks to Morrie, he comes from a depressed into a
more hopeful and optimistic view of aging. By embracing age and becoming
more aware of what benefits aging can bring, it is possible to see how aging is
not as abstruse and conflicting as it may seem to be.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
Clear
awareness of
literary devices
As a person starts growing older and older, there are
certain misgivings that may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays
with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates the change of the author after
conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be applied on
my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He
admits that his fear of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’sbugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie that “he was already feeling over
the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and the
consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly
feels the social norms of his society about aging because he worries about the
many ways that he tries to do in even order to stay younger.
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing
Morrie talk about “aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the
material parts of life, Morrie thinks on a more philosophical point of view, and
scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does not seem to envy the
downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding
about life” due to their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that
although older people do envy the youth, but the old can accept who they are.
After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so the youth ought to be
envious old, not the other way around.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
Clear
awareness of
literary devices
In my life, similar to the author, I feel very much affected by what my
society thinks of aging. From aging, I am expected to be more responsible and
to become prepared for my future, which involves preparation for my future
college and career. Like what Morrie said, once “[I’ve] found meaning in [my]
life, [I] [won’t] wan’t to go back.” I earnestly believe that I found meaning in
my life, enough to set aside all the difficulties and conflicts that come with youth,
so that I “can’t wait until [I am] sixty-five”. By accepting what age I am, and not
become so negative with the troubles of my present age, I can live my life in a
more fulfilling way.
After the author talks to Morrie, he comes from a depressed into a
more hopeful and optimistic view of aging. By embracing age and becoming
more aware of what benefits aging can bring, it is possible to see how aging is
not as abstruse and conflicting as it may seem to be.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 4
As a person starts growing older and older, there are
certain misgivings that may pass a person’s mind. The selection from Tuesdays
with Morrie by Mitch Alborn demonstrates the change of the author after
conversing with Morrie on the theme of aging, and how this can be applied on
my own life as I begin to grow older.
At first, the author feels very despairing of the concept of aging. He
admits that his fear of aging is just one of his fears that is on his “what’sbugging-[his] generation list”. He tells Morrie that “he was already feeling over
Question G
the hill”, and the author is very much depressed about his age and the
(cont.):
consequences that he feels will happen once he grows old. The author keenly
How can this
feels the social norms of his society about aging because he worries about the
essay
many ways that he tries to do in even order to stay younger.
help you to write
However, the author starts thinking about age differently after hearing
a
Morrie talk about “aging in better prespective.” Rather than worrying about the
better essay?
material parts of life, Morrie thinks on a more philosophical point of view, and
scorns how the youth worry about materialism, and does not seem to envy the
downsides of youth. Morrie insists that “aging is not decay”, but the growth of
knowledge, added on year after year. The youth have “very little understanding
about life” due to their inexperience as well. Morrie points out to the author that
although older people do envy the youth, but the old can accept who they are.
After all, the old has gone through the age of youth, so the youth ought to be
envious old, not the other way around.
(cont.)
3
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the topic of aging and
death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people, and did not “see anyone who would
pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to fret his growing age and death. When he converses this
with Morrie, Albom’s tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who read his words to live
their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about their age to feel better about growing
older.
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and death with Morrie,
who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems surprised at his positivity about this
questioning Morrie about whether Morrie feared growing old or not or if he envies young people.
Morrie admits embracing age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will
“feel it” then “let it go”.
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why Morrie is as positive
as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing how to simply let go of envy, Albom
claims he “felt so much stronger than [Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him
any other way”. This sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
Those who read Tuesdays with Morrie can also benefit from Morrie’s advice on growing
older. His positive and somewhat enthusiastic way of describing the positive outlook on life can
raise self-esteem. For example, when he explains that growing older gives people more knowledge
and understanding of life can help the reader feel confident about leading a better life. He also can
help readers realize that listening to others telling you certain “jeans will make you look skinny”
shows ignorance and those complaining about their lives are unsatisfied.
(cont.)
3
(cont)
Not only Albom can say he benefits from this advise, because readers can as well.
Although Albom questioned Morries ways at first, but soon, he comprehended Morries outlook on
life and grew positive about aging. Readers can as well when they read Morrie’s amazing view on
growing old.
Comprehensive
grasp of text
This is why it is a 3
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the
topic of aging and death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people,
and did not “see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to
fret his growing age and death. When he converses this with Morrie, Albom’s
tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who
read his words to live their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about
their age to feel better about growing older.
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and
death with Morrie, who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems
surprised at his positivity about this questioning Morrie about whether Morrie
feared growing old or not or if he envies young people. Morrie admits embracing
age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will “feel
it” then “let it go”.
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why
Morrie is as positive as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing
how to simply let go of envy, Albom claims he “felt so much stronger than
[Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him any other way”. This
sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
(cont.)
Comprehensive
grasp of text
This is why it is a 3
(cont.)
Those who read Tuesdays with Morrie can also benefit from Morrie’s
advice on growing older. His positive and somewhat enthusiastic way of
describing the positive outlook on life can raise self-esteem. For example, when
he explains that growing older gives people more knowledge and understanding
of life can help the reader feel confident about leading a better life. He also can
help readers realize that listening to others telling you certain “jeans will make
you look skinny” shows ignorance and those complaining about their lives are
unsatisfied.
Not only Albom can say he benefits from this advise, because readers
can as well. Although Albom questioned Morries ways at first, but soon, he
comprehended Morries outlook on life and grew positive about aging. Readers
can as well when they read Morrie’s amazing view on growing old.
This is why it is a 3
General textual
details
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the
topic of aging and death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people,
and did not “see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to
fret his growing age and death. When he converses this with Morrie, Albom’s
tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who
read his words to live their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about
their age to feel better about growing older.
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and
death with Morrie, who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems
surprised at his positivity about this questioning Morrie about whether Morrie
feared growing old or not or if he envies young people. Morrie admits embracing
age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will “feel
it” then “let it go”.
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why
Morrie is as positive as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing
how to simply let go of envy, Albom claims he “felt so much stronger than
[Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him any other way”. This
sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 3
(cont.)
Those who read Tuesdays with Morrie can also benefit from Morrie’s
advice on growing older. His positive and somewhat enthusiastic way of
describing the positive outlook on life can raise self-esteem. For example, when
he explains that growing older gives people more knowledge and understanding
of life can help the reader feel confident about leading a better life. He also can
help readers realize that listening to others telling you certain “jeans will make
you look skinny” shows ignorance and those complaining about their lives are
unsatisfied.
Not only Albom can say he benefits from this advise, because readers
can as well. Although Albom questioned Morries ways at first, but soon, he
comprehended Morries outlook on life and grew positive about aging. Readers
can as well when they read Morrie’s amazing view on growing old.
General textual
details
This is why it is a 3
Some
convention
errors that do
not interfere
with reader’s
understanding
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the
topic of aging and death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people,
and did not “see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to
fret his growing age and death. When he converses this with Morrie, Albom’s
tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who
read his words to live their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about
their age to feel better about growing older.
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and
death with Morrie, who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems
surprised at his positivity about this questioning Morrie about whether Morrie
feared growing old or not or if he envies young people. Morrie admits embracing
age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will “feel
it” then “let it go”.
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why
Morrie is as positive as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing
how to simply let go of envy, Albom claims he “felt so much stronger than
[Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him any other way”. This
sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 3
(cont.)
Some
convention
errors that do
not interfere
with reader’s
understanding
Those who read Tuesdays with Morrie can also benefit from Morrie’s
advice on growing older. His positive and somewhat enthusiastic way of
describing the positive outlook on life can raise self-esteem. For example, when
he explains that growing older gives people more knowledge and understanding
of life can help the reader feel confident about leading a better life. He also can
help readers realize that listening to others telling you certain “jeans will make
you look skinny” shows ignorance and those complaining about their lives are
unsatisfied.
Not only Albom can say he benefits from this advise, because readers
can as well. Although Albom questioned Morries ways at first, but soon, he
comprehended Morries outlook on life and grew positive about aging. Readers
can as well when they read Morrie’s amazing view on growing old.
This is why it is a 3
Some
descriptive
language
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the
topic of aging and death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people,
and did not “see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to
fret his growing age and death. When he converses this with Morrie, Albom’s
tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who
read his words to live their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about
their age to feel better about growing older.
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and
death with Morrie, who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems
surprised at his positivity about this questioning Morrie about whether Morrie
feared growing old or not or if he envies young people. Morrie admits embracing
age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will “feel
it” then “let it go”.
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why
Morrie is as positive as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing
how to simply let go of envy, Albom claims he “felt so much stronger than
[Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him any other way”. This
sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
(cont.)
This is why it is a 3
(cont.)
Some
descriptive
language
Those who read Tuesdays with Morrie can also benefit from Morrie’s
advice on growing older. His positive and somewhat enthusiastic way of
describing the positive outlook on life can raise self-esteem. For example, when
he explains that growing older gives people more knowledge and understanding
of life can help the reader feel confident about leading a better life. He also can
help readers realize that listening to others telling you certain “jeans will make
you look skinny” shows ignorance and those complaining about their lives are
unsatisfied.
Not only Albom can say he benefits from this advise, because readers
can as well. Although Albom questioned Morries ways at first, but soon, he
comprehended Morries outlook on life and grew positive about aging. Readers
can as well when they read Morrie’s amazing view on growing old.
This is why it is a 3
In Mitch Albom’s Tuesday with Morrie, Albom and Morrie disscuss the
topic of aging and death. Albom sees billboards with young, beautiful people,
and did not “see anyone who would pass for over thirty-five”, causing Albom to
fret his growing age and death. When he converses this with Morrie, Albom’s
tone about growing older changes first by questioning and later is able to
understand Morrie’s ways of living. Morrie’s advise can also help those who
read his words to live their life as he explains to and allow those worrying about
their age to feel better about growing older.
Question G
At first, Albom stresses about growing older and talks about aging and
(cont.):
death with Morrie, who has a more positive outlook on giving life. Albom seems
How can this
surprised at his positivity about this questioning Morrie about whether Morrie
essay
feared growing old or not or if he envies young people. Morrie admits embracing
help you to write
age, for he becomes wiser, and when he does envy young people, he will “feel
a
it” then “let it go”.
better essay?
When Albom’s astonishment settles in, he begins to understand why
Morrie is as positive as he is, and starts to embrace life as well. After discussing
how to simply let go of envy, Albom claims he “felt so much stronger than
[Morrie] ridiculously so, as if [he] could lift him and toss him any other way”. This
sudden empowerment shows Albom’s understanding to embrace life and
comprehension of Morrie’s life values.
(cont.)
2
In the story “Tuesdays With Morrie” tells about how its good to age rather then staying
young forever because a you get older you learn more. Being the same age gets boring to, so its
just better to move on. Its better because moving on you can learn more and see more things.
The Authors Tone changed in a good way. It changed in a good way because they were
talking about how you should be proud to be your age. Also Morrie said “you won’t die for a long
time”. The authors tone made it sound happy and proud.
Coming from Morrie’s advice its ok to get older and I agree! Getting older means you
learn more stuff as we grow. Also it would be boring to be the same age and we wouldn’t act any
older when we stay young forever. For me I am proud to be my age and I’m looking forward to
moving on, well I am.
In Conclusion about the story “Tuesdays with Morrie” is about a girl names mitch who
does not like the age she is at but Morrie gives her advice to make her feel better.
Limited
understanding
of text
This is why it is a 2
In the story “Tuesdays With Morrie” tells about how its good to age
rather then staying young forever because a you get older you learn more.
Being the same age gets boring to, so its just better to move on. Its better
because moving on you can learn more and see more things.
The Authors Tone changed in a good way. It changed in a good way
because they were talking about how you should be proud to be your age. Also
Morrie said “you won’t die for a long time”. The authors tone made it sound
happy and proud.
Coming from Morrie’s advice its ok to get older and I agree! Getting
older means you learn more stuff as we grow. Also it would be boring to be the
same age and we wouldn’t act any older when we stay young forever. For me I
am proud to be my age and I’m looking forward to moving on, well I am.
In Conclusion about the story “Tuesdays with Morrie” is about a girl
names mitch who does not like the age she is at but Morrie gives her advice to
make her feel better.
This is why it is a 2
In the story “Tuesdays With Morrie” tells about how its good to age
rather then staying young forever because a you get older you learn more.
Being the same age gets boring to, so its just better to move on. Its better
because moving on you can learn more and see more things.
The Authors Tone changed in a good way. It changed in a good way
because they were talking about how you should be proud to be your age. Also
Morrie said “you won’t die for a long time”. The authors tone made it sound
happy and proud.
Coming from Morrie’s advice its ok to get older and I agree! Getting
older means you learn more stuff as we grow. Also it would be boring to be the
same age and we wouldn’t act any older when we stay young forever. For me I
am proud to be my age and I’m looking forward to moving on, well I am.
In Conclusion about the story “Tuesdays with Morrie” is about a girl
names mitch who does not like the age she is at but Morrie gives her advice to
make her feel better.
Few textual
details
This is why it is a 2
Few sentence
types
In the story “Tuesdays With Morrie” tells about how its good to age
rather then staying young forever because a you get older you learn more.
Being the same age gets boring to, so its just better to move on. Its better
because moving on you can learn more and see more things.
The Authors Tone changed in a good way. It changed in a good way
because they were talking about how you should be proud to be your age. Also
Morrie said “you won’t die for a long time”. The authors tone made it sound
happy and proud.
Coming from Morrie’s advice its ok to get older and I agree! Getting
older means you learn more stuff as we grow. Also it would be boring to be the
same age and we wouldn’t act any older when we stay young forever. For me I
am proud to be my age and I’m looking forward to moving on, well I am.
In Conclusion about the story “Tuesdays with Morrie” is about a girl
names mitch who does not like the age she is at but Morrie gives her advice to
make her feel better.
This is why it is a 2
In the story “Tuesdays With Morrie” tells about how its good to age
rather then staying young forever because a you get older you learn more.
Being the same age gets boring to, so its just better to move on. Its better
because moving on you can learn more and see more things.
The Authors Tone changed in a good way. It changed in a good way
because they were talking about how you should be proud to be your age. Also
Morrie said “you won’t die for a long time”. The authors tone made it sound
happy and proud.
Question G
Coming from Morrie’s advice its ok to get older and I agree! Getting
(cont.):
older means you learn more stuff as we grow. Also it would be boring to be the
How can this
same age and we wouldn’t act any older when we stay young forever. For me I
essay
am proud to be my age and I’m looking forward to moving on, well I am.
help you to write
In Conclusion about the story “Tuesdays with Morrie” is about a girl
a
names mitch who does not like the age she is at but Morrie gives her advice to
better essay?
make her feel better.
(cont.)
1
Based on the selection from Mitch Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie Iv’e Read bout how this
lady goes to an airport and see’s all these good looking people and there all young and she say’s to
herself that she want’s to look good just like them but she can’t because she said sh’s to old. Then
Mitch tells the lady that your age doesn’t matter because she always here’s people always’s say
that they wish that they weren’t the age that they are because they don’t like there age. And why
complain about your age, It’s never gonna achieve nothing an age is a age so just keep it the way it
is. So what this story is trying to tell us is that when you complain it’s never gonna accomplish
anything, so just deal with whatever you were born with like in the story said if you buy a pear of
jeans it will make you look better, and that’s not true you choose what you want to were and how
you look. But although never look at anybody else and compare them with your self.
Minimal grasp
of text
This is why it is a 1
Based on the selection from Mitch Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie Iv’e
Read bout how this lady goes to an airport and see’s all these good looking
people and there all young and she say’s to herself that she want’s to look good
just like them but she can’t because she said sh’s to old. Then Mitch tells the
lady that your age doesn’t matter because she always here’s people always’s
say that they wish that they weren’t the age that they are because they don’t
like there age. And why complain about your age, It’s never gonna achieve
nothing an age is a age so just keep it the way it is. So what this story is trying
to tell us is that when you complain it’s never gonna accomplish anything, so
just deal with whatever you were born with like in the story said if you buy a
pear of jeans it will make you look better, and that’s not true you choose what
you want to were and how you look. But although never look at anybody else
and compare them with your self.
This is why it is a 1
Based on the selection from Mitch Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie Iv’e
Read bout how this lady goes to an airport and see’s all these good looking
people and there all young and she say’s to herself that she want’s to look good
just like them but she can’t because she said sh’s to old. Then Mitch tells the
lady that your age doesn’t matter because she always here’s people always’s
say that they wish that they weren’t the age that they are because they don’t
like there age. And why complain about your age, It’s never gonna achieve
nothing an age is a age so just keep it the way it is. So what this story is trying
to tell us is that when you complain it’s never gonna accomplish anything, so
just deal with whatever you were born with like in the story said if you buy a
pear of jeans it will make you look better, and that’s not true you choose what
you want to were and how you look. But although never look at anybody else
and compare them with your self.
Serious
convention
errors that do
impede
reader’s
understanding
This is why it is a 1
Based on the selection from Mitch Albom’s Tuesdays with Morrie Iv’e
Read bout how this lady goes to an airport and see’s all these good looking
people and there all young and she say’s to herself that she want’s to look good
just like them but she can’t because she said sh’s to old. Then Mitch tells the
lady that your age doesn’t matter because she always here’s people always’s
say that they wish that they weren’t the age that they are because they don’t
like there age. And why complain about your age, It’s never gonna achieve
nothing an age is a age so just keep it the way it is. So what this story is trying
Question G
to tell us is that when you complain it’s never gonna accomplish anything, so
(cont.):
just deal with whatever you were born with like in the story said if you buy a
How can this
pear of jeans it will make you look better, and that’s not true you choose what
essay
you want to were and how you look. But although never look at anybody else
help you to write
and compare them with your self.
a
better essay?
Almost done…
• On your paper you should have answered
questions A-G.
• Last assignment:
– Go rewrite your essay, but this time make it a
four! You can do it:
• You understand the writing task
• You understand what a great essay must have.
• Please turn in questions A-G stapled
behind your rewritten essay.