Expository Essay
Expose: verb—make (something)
visible, typically by uncovering it.
Question: How do themes emerge in the crucible, and how are
they shaped and refined by actions and images?
Thesis—Rough Draft:
In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one
another is developed throughout the text.
What is missing in the thesis according to the question?
•Talk to a partner
•1 minute.
Question: What themes are introduced in The Crucible and how
are the themes developed over the course of the text?
Thesis—Rough Draft:
Thesis Revision: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller,
the theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have
towards one another is developed throughout the text by.
by the actions of the characters.
•The previous thesis was missing the “how are they shaped
and refined by actions.”
Write your own rough draft of a thesis.
Take out a piece of paper.
Title it “Rough Draft Thesis.”
Question: How do themes emerge in the crucible, and how are
they shaped and refined by actions and images?
•Use this template to write your own thesis:
Thesis: In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme
of ______________________________________is developed
throughout the text by (through plot, character, language,
image).
(If you don’t like this template, feel free to be creative and
write your own! Just make sure you answer the essay
prompt.)
• What are your first steps in starting an essay?
What is a thesis?
• A thesis is an answer to a question.
– How did hip-hop change popular
culture?
Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.
General Statement
“Sweet Spot”
Too Narrow
Hit the “Sweet Spot” with a thesis.
THESIS
Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture?
General Statement: Hip hop changed the culture in
many ways.
“
Sweet Spot”: Hip hop influenced popular culture through
dress, language and attitude throughout the country,
specifically with the youth.
Too Narrow: Hip hop drastically altered Jessica’s dress and
speech, her enormous hoop earrings sparkling in the sun,
her apple bottom jeans accentuating body parts while she
strutted through Poway, Oceanside, bopping her head,
Thesis
Question: How did hip-hop change popular culture?
Too broad: Hip hop changed the culture in many ways.
Too Narrow: Hip hop drastically altered Jessica’s dress and speech, her
enormous hoop earrings sparkling in the sun, her apple bottom jeans
accentuating bulbous body parts while she strutted through Poway,
Oceanside, bopping her head, grooving to some internal music by 50 (Fiddy)
Cent.
Sweet Spot: Hip hop influenced popular culture through dress, language and
attitude throughout the country, specifically with the youth.
F.A.T.T. Thesis
Include “F.A.T.T.” in your thesis.
•Focus: What is the main idea?
•Author: Author’s full name
•Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”
•Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?
F.A.T.T. Thesis
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Focus: What is the main idea?
Author: Author’s full name
Title: Poems and short stories use “quotations”
Text: what type of text is it? Short story? Poem?
In the article(Text), “Rap the World”(Title) by Dean Young(Author)
(Focus) hip hop influenced popular culture through dress,
language and attitude throughout the country, specifically with
the youth.
Thesis: Expository Essay
• Write an essay in which you determine a theme of the literary
work you’ve been studying, and analyze, in detail, its
development over the course of the text. Be sure to explain
how the theme emerges and how it is shaped and refined by
specific details. Use relevant facts, concrete details,
quotations, and/or other information to develop your ideas.
How are the themes in The Crucible developed over the text?
Identify themes in The Crucible.
Track how they are developed over the text.
Introductions
• In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller,
the theme of paranoia diminishing the
charity people have towards one another is
developed throughout the text by the
actions of the characters.
• What is the subject matter of this thesis?
– Example: “The subject matter of this thesis
is________________.”
• Talk to a partner.
• 1 minute
Introductions
• Interesting Statement of Fact
– Start introduction with a compelling fact.
– Tone of introduction is factual, objective, and
scientific.
– Writer is telling reader, “I’m not messing with
feelings. It’s all facts, baby.”
– Good for writing that is heavily leaning on
logic
• Research papers
• Expository papers
Introductions
• Take out ANOTHER piece of paper.
• Write “interesting fact” on this paper.
• Crucible (noun)
• a ceramic or metal container in which metals
or other substances may be melted or
subjected to very high temperatures.
a place or occasion of severe test or trial.
"the crucible of combat”
Could you use this for your “Interesting
statement of fact?”
Introductions
• Interesting Statement of Fact
• Look up an interesting fact about the
subject matter of your thesis. My
subject: Paranoia weakens bonds
• On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor.
• When Ebola was discovered in Libya, the citizens were treated like
cattle and rounded up in tents.
• Students come up with one:
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
• As a class, get me from the first sentence to the thesis:
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor.
In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one
another is developed throughout the text by the actions of
the characters.
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor.
So what?
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time
an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the
threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the
nation.
So what?
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time
an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the
threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the
nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional
scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps.
So what?
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time
an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the
threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the
nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional
scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised
because of a vast paranoia.
So what?
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time
an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the
threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the
nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional
scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised
because of a vast paranoia. This erosion of charity appears throughout
American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant
because of religious paranoia.
So What?
Introductions
• Start first sentence with interesting fact
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the first time
an enemy had attacked American soil since the Revolutionary War, and the
threat of this enemy approaching our shores set of a paranoia throughout the
nation. The foaming paranoia within the population grew to an institutional
scale, allowing a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps. The American values of empathy and charity were compromised
because of a vast paranoia. This erosion of charity appears throughout
American history, even during the early stages when witch-hunts were rampant
because of religious paranoia. In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the
theme of paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one
another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the characters
Finding Quotes to support your thesis
• Take out a piece of paper.
• Hamburger-Hotdog a regular piece of
paper.
• Write your thesis in the middle diamond.
• Choose two quotes to support your thesis
on the two halves.
Hamburger Hotdog Paper
Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim
Quote #1
Author: Arthur Miller
Title: “The Crucible”
Quote #2
Author: Arthur Miller
Title: “The Crucible”
Say: That was long ago. Today neither of them
is alive, Not the hare, nor the man who made
the gesture.
Say: HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our
hearts break, we cannot flinch; these
are new times, sir. There is a misty plot
ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have
afoot so subtle we should be
seen my blood runnin’
criminal to cling to old respects and ancient
out! I have been near to murdered every day
friendships. I have seen too
because I done my duty
many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is
pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is
alive in Salem, and we dare
my reward? To be
not quail to follow wherever the accusing
mistrusted, denied, questioned like a—
finger points! (68)
In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
DANFORTH,
weakening. Child, I do not
paranoia diminishing the charity
people have towards
(Page Number )
one another is developed throughout the text by the
mistrust you—
actions of the characters.
ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her
arms about her as
though cold. I—I know not. A wind, a
cold wind, has come. . (1)
Introduction
• How do you find quotes to support your
thesis?
Outline (Do Steve Jobs Assignment)
• Choose two quotes to support your thesis.
Quote #1
•Say: HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts break, we
cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a misty plot
afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old respects
and ancient friendships. I have seen too many frightful proofs in
court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we dare not quail to
follow wherever the accusing finger points!
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in Salem.
MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):
Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s reckless and
cruel treatment of Rebecca Nurse, who was a stable
figure of goodness and piety, simply by conjuring our
most primal fears of the Devil.
Quote #2
•Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood
runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my
duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be
mistrusted, denied, questioned like a
•DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you—
•ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though
cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come.
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying
those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to
emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a
satanic wind.
MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):
In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the
judges and citizens for her own needs. .
Hamburger Hotdog Paper
Writer’s Name: Tommy Kim
Quote #1
Author: Arthur Miller
Title: “The Crucible”
Quote #2
Author: Arthur Miller
Title: “The Crucible”
SAY: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have
SAY: HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our
seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to
hearts break, we cannot flinch; these
murdered every day because I done my duty pointing
are new times, sir. There is a misty plot
out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be
afoot so subtle we should be
mistrusted, denied, questioned like a—
criminal to cling to old respects and ancient
DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust
friendships. I have seen too
you—
many frightful proofs in court—the Devil is
ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms
In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
about
herhave
as though
alive in Salem, and we dare paranoia diminishing the charity
people
towards cold. I—I know not. A wind, a
one another is developed throughout
the
text
the
cold wind, hasbycome.
. (1)
not quail to follow wherever the
accusing
actions of the characters.
finger points! (68)
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in
Salem.
MATTER (How does this matter to the
thesis?):
Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s
reckless and cruel treatment of Rebecca
Nurse, who was a stable figure of goodness
and piety, simply by conjuring our most primal
Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by
betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding
the court, and to emphasize her power, she then
pretends to be swept by a satanic wind.
MATTER (How does this matter to the
thesis?):
In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia
of the judges and citizens for her own needs. .
Introduction
• Take out your introduction (Statement of fact and
scene)
• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog
paper
Introduction
• Take out your introduction
• Take out your thesis
• Take out your say-mean-matter hamburger/hotdog
paper
• Take out your 13 moves list
Introduction
• Write your thesis and transition into your thesis
after your introduction:
• Example:
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the
first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the
Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our
shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming
paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing
a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps. The American values of empathy and charity were
compromised because of a vast paranoia. (Move #1) This erosion of
charity appears throughout American history, even during the early
stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia.
(Move #2) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one
another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the
characters.
Introduction
• Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”
by Tommy Kim.
Introduction
• Writing can be reduced to a series of moves. Let’s see
what kind of moves Mr. Kim has!
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Expository Essay Moves
Take out the essay “Fear and Loathing in
Salem” by Tommy Kim.
You will highlight each move
I will call on you
Read the first three words of the sentence
for each move.
Expository Essay Moves
Underline and number each of these moves:
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
Expository Essay Moves
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
7.
8.
9.
Transition INTO thesis.
Thesis
Introduction to quote
Say #1
Mean#1
Matter#1
Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
Say #2
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Expository Essay Moves
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Expository Essay Moves:
Copy these moves and check them off as
you write.
1. Transition INTO thesis.
2. Thesis
3. Introduction to quote
4. Say #1
5. Mean#1
6. Matter#1
7. Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8. Introduction to quote (Moves 7 & 8 could be the same sentence)
9. Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Introduction
• Take out your introduction (scene/statement of
fact)
• Take out your say-mean-matter
hamburger/hamburger paper
• Take out my essay “Fear and Loathing in Salem”
• Take out your 13 moves list (we just copied them
down)
Essay
Take out the following and begin your essay:
• Introduction (interesting statement of fact)
•Hamburger/Hamburger paper
•My rubric, paragraph by paragraph
1.Transition INTO thesis.
2.Thesis
3.Introduction to quote
4.Say #1
5.Mean#1
6.Matter#1
7.Transition from matter #1 to next paragraph
8.Introduction to quote
9.Say #2
10.Mean#2
11.Matter#2
12.Transition into last paragraph
13.Restatement of thesis
Move #1
• Write a transition from your introduction into your
thesis.
• Sample you can steal: “This example of
__________ was evident throughout American
plays like The Crucible.
Move #1 and 2
• Write your thesis after your transition into your
thesis.
• Example:
On December 7th, 1941, Japan attacked Pearl Harbor. This was the
first time an enemy had attacked American soil since the
Revolutionary War, and the threat of this enemy approaching our
shores set of a paranoia throughout the nation. The foaming
paranoia within the population grew to an institutional scale, allowing
a law to relocate Japanese American citizens into concentration
camps. The American values of empathy and charity were
compromised because of a vast paranoia. (Move #1) This erosion of
charity appears throughout American history, even during the early
stages when witch-hunts were rampant because of religious paranoia.
(Move #2) In the play The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, the theme of
paranoia diminishing the charity people have towards one
another is developed throughout the text by the actions of the
characters.
MOVE #3, PARAGRAPH #2!
• Introduce quote “move”
• Use the following templates:
– The theme of ___________ is first encountered when
__________________, “(Quote)”.
– (Character’s name) first demonstrates the theme of
___________________ when he/she_______________.
Quote #2
•Say: ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I have seen my blood
runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day because I done my
duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my reward? To be
mistrusted, denied, questioned like a
•DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you—
•ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though
cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come.
Mean (What does the quote “mean”?):
Abigail argues that she is the virtuous one, that by betraying
those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court, and to
emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a
satanic wind.
MATTER (How does this matter to the thesis?):
In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of the
judges and citizens for her own needs. .
Move #4 - 6
•
(Move # 4) HALE, pleading. Nurse, though our hearts
break, we cannot flinch; these are new times, sir. There is a
misty plot afoot so subtle we should be criminal to cling to old
respects and ancient friendships. I have seen too many
frightful proofs in court—the Devil is alive in Salem, and we
dare not quail to follow wherever the accusing finger points!
(Move # 5) Hale proclaims that the devil is spreading in Salem.
(Move # 6) Ultimately, Hale is justifying the court’s reckless
and cruel treatment of Rebecca Nurse, who was a stable
figure of goodness and piety, simply by conjuring our most
primal fears of the Devil.
Move #7 & 8
• Transition “move” into paragraph #3
• Use the following template:
Not only does themes of (theme) occur
____________, it also occurs
during_______________________.
Paragraph #3: Moves 9-11
Move 9 (Say): ABIGAIL. I have been hurt, Mr. Danforth; I
have seen my blood runnin’ out! I have been near to murdered every day
because I done my duty pointing out the Devil’s people—and this is my
reward? To be mistrusted, denied, questioned like a
DANFORTH, weakening. Child, I do not mistrust you—
ABIGAIL, looking about in the air, clasping her arms about her as though
cold. I—I know not. A wind, a cold wind, has come.
Move 10 (Mean) Abigail argues that she is the virtuous
one, that by betraying those who trusted her she is actually aiding the court,
and to emphasize her power, she then pretends to be swept by a satanic
wind. Move 11 (Matter) In this case, she is manipulating the paranoia of
the judges and citizens for her own needs. .
Paragraph #4: Moves 12-13
Both examples in The Crucible reveal how the themes
of(theme) can developed over the text. This them can also
occur (Reference the interesting fact from introduction, and
connect it to a larger statement about the world)
Essay Rubric
• If you are finished, turn in the following,
stapled:
1. Your Essay
2. The rubric, graded by your partner (attach the
paper your partner WROTE on)
Finish!
1. Turn in your rough draft in the back tray.
2. If you are not done, finish the essay this weekend or come into
tutoring Tuesday morning. 15 week is fast approaching.