Name: _______________________________________________________ Block: _____ Date: __________________ Argument’s Body Paragraph: Elaboration Your body paragraphs must include A clearly stated reason At least ________________ pieces of evidence from the text ___________________________________! What information can we use for good, supportive EVIDENCE? Facts – evidence that is proven to be ________________________ Research Studies – any research done that supports your reasoning Anecdotes - _____________________________________________________________________________ Statistics – a numerical value that emphasizes an amount of something Quotations – exact words from a ______________________________ individual What is Elaboration? Elaboration: ____________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________________________________ Elaboration involves you _______________________________________________________________to further support your argument. Tie-Back / Elaboration Sentence Starters: Example Body Paragraph – Identify the reason, evidence and elaboration First, music is an important elective that should not be taken out of schools because it can help students beyond the classroom. For example, Michael Gellman, an eighth grader, has played piano since he was four. When he wrote a personal essay last year, he realized how important his playing had been. His memoir revealed how it had helped him cope with his parents’ divorce and the death of a piano teacher (“Music is Always Power”). Music can be therapy for students like Michael and help during difficult times. Taking this class away from students also takes away an outlet that many students need during tough times in life. Types of Evidence FACTS RESEARCH STUDY Further Elaboration ANECDOTE Thought provoking question STATISTICS If…then statements QUOTATION Compare and contrast Further Elaboration Thought Provoking Question – asking a question in your paper and directing towards the audience with no answer expected. ~ It’s purpose is to get the reader to wonder and ask ________________________________________. If…then statements - ____________________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________________________________ Comparison – to compare your reason to another subject, instance, or fact so that the reader may get a better understanding of your argument. Identify the elaboration and type of elaboration in the body paragraph below: Bulldogs are suffering. Because of the way they have been bred, those cute dogs have difficulty breathing, skin problems and joint pains from their stumpy legs. In addition, bulldogs are bred to have an undershot jaw which leads to teeth problems. But bulldogs have not always had these problems. It is because of the breeding that has developed as a result of the breeding. Therefore, is it preventable? Can these issues be reversed and actually be bred out of the dogs? These types of struggles seem to only occur with household pets. What if it was a horse? If there was a horse who struggled with breathing, eating, or exercising, there would be a major concern in the equine world. So why is it not being taken care of with the bulldog? Reread Selena’s body paragraph. Underline all of the components of her body paragraph (reason, type of evidence, elaboration, transitions If the breeding standards for bulldogs do not change, it could lead to future deformities in other breeds of dogs. According to the article “Is the Bulldog Doomed?” in history dogs were working animals, bred to herd sheep or hunt. Now, dogs are bred just for their appealing looks rather than what they do. If this has occurred with the bulldog, then it will occur with other breeds if something is not done. According to Kirsten Theisen of the Humane Society of the Unites states, “People wanted to own the cutest dog on the block; the breeders began selecting for traits without regard for the health consequences for the animals.” Breeders breed dog so that they can appeal to the buyer and the trend. However, breeders are not always responsible. If the standards for the bulldog change so that they promote a healthier dog, then breeders will want to meet those healthy standards not just for the bulldog but for other dogs as well.