Writing a Letter To Suggest A
Healthy Change
•You are going to write a letter to a
school, restaurant or market.
•The letter is going to make a suggestion
on how the school, restaurant or market
can make a change so their customers
can have healthier choices.
•Your letter will need to be written in
standard letter format.
Standard Letter Format
Must Include
Name and address of the writer
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
Date of the letter
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2010
Name & title of who the letter is being
written to (recipient)
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Name and address of business/school
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Salutation with a colon:
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2012
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Dear Ms. Smith:
Body of the letter- 1 paragraph
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
April 10, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Dear Ms. Smith:
*5 things to address after introducing yourself. 1) Write one good
thing about the business/school. 2) Write one concern you have.
3) Write one change that could be made. 4) Write one reason why
the change would make the business/school healthier. 5) Write a final
statement to persuade the business/school to make the change.
*Note: You will be handwriting your letter so you can indent the
first sentence of your paragraph. Generally business letters are
typed and not indented, but use a block paragraph style.
Closing
Words like ‘Thank you’ or ‘Sincerely’
followed by a comma,
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
April 10, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Dear Ms. Smith:
5 things to address . 1.write one good thing about the company/school. 2. write one concern you have. 3. write one change that could be
made. 4. write one reason why the change would make the company/school healthier. 5. write a final statement to persuade the
company/school to make the change.
Thank you,
Writers Signature
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
April 10, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Dear Ms. Smith:
5 things to address. 1.write one good thing about the company/school. 2. write one concern you have. 3. write one change that could be
made. 4. write one reason why the change would make the company/school healthier. 5. write a final statement to persuade the
company/school to make the change.
Thank you,
Sally Student
2 spaces between each part of
the letter
2 spaces
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
2 spaces
January 26, 2012
2 spaces
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
2 spaces
Dear Ms. Smith:
2 spaces
6 things to address. 1) Introduce yourself to the reader 2) Write one good thing about the company/school.
3) Write one concern you have. 4) Write one change that could be made. 5) Write one reason why the
change would make the company/school healthier. 6) Write a final statement to persuade the
company/school to make the change.
2 spaces
Thank you,
2 spaces
Sally Student
sample letter
Name and
address of
writer
Date
Name and title
of addressee
Name and
address of
company or
school
Salutation
Introduce self
1 good thing
1 concern
1 change
1 reason for
change
1 persuading
sentence
Closing
Signature
Sally Student
1234 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2010
Mary Smith, Manager
Taco Tree
246 Work St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
Dear Ms. Smith:
My name is Sally Student and I brought my children to Taco Tree yesterday. The food was
great. I am concerned because the only thing on the menu to drink was soda. I think you
should have milk and water available also. Soda is full of sugar and unhealthy for us, but
milk and water are good, nutritional choices. Your food is great and I hope that you will add
healthier beverage choices to your menu soon!
Thank you,
Sally Student
sample letter
Tina Teacher
975 First St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2012
George Diaz, Manager
Jon’s Market
246 Cochran St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
Dear Mr. Diaz:
My name is Tina Teacher and I come to your store often because it is close to my house.
I enjoy shopping at Jon’s Market because all of the workers are so helpful and nice.
My concern is that often your produce is not fresh. I suggest you check your produce a
few times a day for freshness. Fruits and vegetables are so good for my family, but they
need to be fresh. I hope that you will take my suggestion so that I can continue shopping
in your store.
Sincerely,
Tina Teacher
Tina Teacher
975 First St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
January 26, 2012
George Diaz, Manager
Jon’s Market
246 Cochran St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
Dear Mr. Diaz:
My name is Tina Teacher and I come to your store often because it is
close to my house. I enjoy shopping at Jon’s Market because all of the
workers are so helpful and nice. My concern is that often your produce is
not fresh. I suggest you check your produce a few times a day for
freshness. Fruits and vegetables are so good for my family, but they
need to be fresh. I hope that you will take my suggestion so that I can
continue shopping in your store.
What is the date of the letter?
Who wrote the letter?
What is her address?
Who is the letter written to?
What company/school is the letter
written to?
What is the address of the
company/school?
What is the salutation?
What is the closing?
What is one good thing about
the company?
What is the concern?
Sincerely,
What change could be made?
Tina Teacher
Why would the change help make
the company/ school healthier?
What is the persuasive sentence?
sample letter
Shaun Green
567 Base St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
March 1, 2010
Sue Smith, Principal
Simi Middle School
369 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
Dear Ms. Smith:
My children go to your school and I really like the teachers because my children
are learning so much! I am concerned because the food that the students can buy at lunch
has a lot of sugar and fats. I suggest you add a salad bar and some fruit to the cafeteria
choices. Foods high in sugar and fats contribute to obesity, and too many children are
overweight. I hope that for the health of the children you will consider making changes
in your cafeteria food.
Sincerely,
Shaun Green
Shaun Green
567 Base St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93065
What is the date of the letter?
Who wrote the letter?
What is his address?
March 01, 2010
Sue Smith, Principal
Simi Middle School
369 School St.
Simi Valley, Ca. 93063
Dear Ms Smith:
Who is the letter written to?
What company/school is the letter
written to?
What is the address of the
company/school?
What is the salutation?
My children go to your school and I really like the teachers because
my children are learning so much! I am concerned because the food
that the students can buy at lunch is full of sugars and fats. I suggest
you add a salad bar and some fruit to the cafeteria choices. Foods high
in sugar and fats contribute to obesity, and too many children are
overweight. I hope that for the health of the children you will consider
making changes in your cafeteria food.
What is the closing?
What is the good thing about
the company/school?
What is the concern?
What change could be made?
Sincerely,
Shaun Green
Why would the change help make
the company/ school healthier?
What is the persuasive sentence?
letter Ideas
Ask the manager of your local convenience store to offer
1% or skim milk instead of only whole milk.
Let your child’s school know that the new USDA
guidelines state that ½ of our plate (1 meal) should
consist of fruits and vegetables.
Write to your favorite restaurant and suggest they
include more low-fat menu items.