William Shakespeare’s “A Great big fuss over not a lot’
Or ‘Much Ado about Nothing’
What is your first impression of these people?
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Introduction to ‘Much Ado’
Goal: To understand basic aspects of character upon which to build an
understanding of the text.
Look at the poster on the following slide. Using your deep and
perceptive intellect, make an intelligent guess about what the play
might involve.
Fear
Not!!!
Copy to symbols from the whiteboard – each is an introduction to an
aspect of character. Try to decode them.
Now read these lyrics from a song included
in the play – this gives further clues as to
the nature of the action. What else might
you gleam from these?
Text allocation and collection.
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Posters – impressions????
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"Sigh No More, Ladies...“
(From "Much Ado about Nothing")
Sigh no more, ladies,
sigh nor more;
Men were deceivers ever;
One foot in sea and one on shore,
To one thing constant never;
Then sigh not so,
But let them go,
And be you blithe and bonny;
Converting all your sounds of woe
Into. Hey nonny, nonny.
Sing no more ditties, sing no mo,
Or dumps so dull and heavy;
The fraud of men was ever so,
Since summer first was leavy.
Then sigh not so,
But let them go,
And be you blithe and bonny,
Converting all your sounds of woe
Into. Hey, nonny, nonny.
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Much ado – Unit structure
Starter:
 Set aside a page and create a table of
contents for your notes with a heading
from each box


Set out a page in your books with an
appropriate heading for notes on each of
the points
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I can understand the
plot and sub-plots
I can analyse the way love
and constancy is
presented and the way it
contributes to our
judgement of characters
I can appreciate
how humour is
created and its
purpose
I can analyse
the theme of
‘noting’ finding
examples and
comment on
their
significance
I am aware of the major
characteristics of Claudio,
and how they are constructed
I am aware of the major
characteristics of Hero, and
how they are constructed
How can I have
a comprehensive understanding of
the literary elements of Much Ado
I can appreciate
the importance
of honour and
slander to the
characters and
plot
I can analyse
the
presentation of
the theme of
deception and
its motivation
I am aware of the
major characteristics
of Beatrice, and how
they are constructed
I am aware of the major
characteristics of
Benedick, and how they
are constructed
Much Ado about Nothing: Character Exposition
Explore how Shakespeare constructs our first impressions of Beatrice
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1. Lines 1 – 20 The exposition of situation – what information are we given.
2. Enter Beatrice – what are your first impressions? What do we learn of her
relationship with Benedick?
3. What impression is gained of Benedick through
Beatrice?
4. Evidence of Beatrice’s wit – find the extended
simile
5. The key question – HOW does Shakespeare
influence our first impression of Beatrice?
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Character Exposition: Benedick
Goal: Explore how Shakespeare constructs our first
impressions of Benedick
Benedick’s first line – what is he implying? Is this
disrespectful?
Beatrice’s first comment TO Benedick – look out for the pattern!
The ‘Merry war’ of words.
Of what do each accuse the other? What do both profess to believe in? What evidence
is there of history between the two of them?
Much ado about noting: The second movement – The interchanges between Benedick
and his ‘sworn brother’ Claudio– How are each of these characters presented through
this?
Enter Don Pedro – why the change to verse? What motivates Claudio? Slide 6
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Much Ado - Claudio
Goal: To explore how Shakespeare introduces and
presents the character of Claudio
Much ado about noting: The second movement – The interchanges between Benedick
and his ‘sworn brother’ Claudio– How are each of these characters presented through
this?
Enter Don Pedro – why the change to verse? What motivates Claudio?
I.i The last movement – Don Pedro and Claudio – What impression do you get
of these two through this? What about Claudio’s question? Why do you think
that Shakespeare has switch to verse here?
I.i Review: What do we know at the end of this scene?
Plot / subplot Fact Golf Par = 10, Birdie = 15, Eagle = 20, Albatross = 25
Feedback
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First Essay
What techniques does Shakespeare use to
create impressions of the two pairs of
lovers in I.i?
Techniques? What are the choices?
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Much Ado About NOTING: I.ii, I.iii
Starter: Chinese Whispers game
‘On Tuesday, if the moon is full, the vulture will fly sideways.’
Reading I.ii:
What is noted during this scene? How does appearance differ from
reality?
Is all
deception
malicious?
?
Reading I.iii
Questions as above.
What is the difference between these two scenes
Homework: First essay – How does Shakespeare present Beatrice,
Benedick and Claudio in i.i? Two pages, due 4/11
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Much Ado about Essays
Goal: To have a thorough knowledge of characterisation
techniques, so as to be able to complete the essay below
What techniques do I use to
present my major characters
in Act One of ‘Much Ado about
Nothing’?
Part One: Essay Planning
Complete grid /mindmap on next slide
Part Two: Essay
Revision
Looking at your
handbooks
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Complete the following as either a mind-map or grid
(Choose the one you like!)
Character
Technique
Beatrice
Through her dialogue, first with
the messenger, then with
Benedick
Benedick
Through reactions to Claudio’s
adoration of Hero
Claudio
Through report of him in his
absence.
Don John
Through interaction with his
confidants
Effect
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Act Two Scene One: The Prelude
Goal: To understand the complex deceptions at play in this scene, and explore in
depth how our understanding of major characters’ is further informed.
The first movement:
1. What contrasts between Hero and Beatrice are
apparent here?
2. What does Beatrice envisage as the ideal man?
3. What new insights do you get about characters
from the beginning of this scene?
Enter the revellers
Beatrice and Benedick: Playful Deception
Find the line where Beatrice realises that it’s Benedick who she’s talking to. How
does she take advantage of this knowledge? Of what faults does she accuse
Benedick?
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Act Two, Scene One: Malicious Deception
Goal: To explore the nature of the foreshadowing
attempted deception of Claudio.
Starter (Start-uper) Re-cap what colour is Don
John’s feelings for Claudio? Why?
Reading and discussion: The remainder of the scene.
Claudio’s deception – what are your thoughts about the way he responds to Don
John? What does this incident reveal about Claudio’s character?
Happy Endings
What tasks does Benedick request? Why? Why else?
Can you detect a difference between Beatrice’s declaration about marriage here, and
that from 1.1?
What does Don Pedro offer Beatrice – how does she respond? WHY?
How would YOU get Beatrice and Benedick to marry??
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Movie time – hoorah!
Goal: To consolidate your understanding
of the plot so far, and understand
the conclusion of the different
storylines
1.
Homework – no homework, no film!
2.
Viewing – make notes, or complete
a timeline to make sure you
understand the plot as it develops.
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Summary 2.2
Summary: Act II, scene ii
The bitter and wicked Don John has learned of the upcoming marriage of
Claudio and Hero, and he wishes that he could find a way to prevent it. Don
John’s servant Borachio devises a plan. Borachio is currently the lover of
one of Hero’s serving women, Margaret. He suggests that Don John go to
Claudio and Don Pedro and tell them that Hero is not a virgin but a whore,
a woman who has willingly corrupted her own innocence before her
marriage and at the same time chosen to be unfaithful to the man she
loves. In order to prove this accusation, Don John will bring Don Pedro and
Claudio below the window of Hero’s room on the night before the wedding,
where they should hide and watch. On the balcony outside Hero’s room,
Borachio will make love to Margaret—whom he will have convinced to dress
up in Hero’s clothing. The watchers will then see a woman who resembles
Hero making love with Borachio, and will thus believe Don John’s claim that
Hero has been false to Claudio. Very pleased with the plan, Don John
promises Borachio a large reward if he can pull it off and prevent the
planned wedding.
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The Deception of Benedick and Beatrice
Goal: Show appreciation of the complex psychological appeals made which enable both
Bt and Bn to be deceived.
G/W: How manipulative are you? If you had to try to fool Benedick
into falling in love with Bt, how would you make sure he was convinced?
Benedick’s eavesdropping: Reading: Act 2, Scene 3 Ll 130 -180.
Find three different techniques the men use to manipulate Bn into swallowing their ruse
Benedick’s soliloquy: Why does he believe what he has heard? What is he worried
about? How will he defend himself should anybody ridicule him now?
Enter Beatrice: How does dramatic irony work here? What one line is especially
ironic?
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Act Three, Scene One: Mirror Images and Parallels
Goal: Appreciate the structural similarities between this scene and the previous one.
Hero and Ursula: What differences do you see in Hero in this scene? Why might this
be?
Enter Beatrice: What metaphor continues to run through this scene?
Of what faults do they accuse Beatice?
What compliments do they pile upon Benedick?
How else do they manipulate Bt?
What similarities are the techniques used in this scene, and the one prior to this.
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Much Ado About Marking
Goal: to be aware of the assessment criteria for AS, and apply these to you own work.
Essay returns – they have been marked, I have given feedback, It’s not on you essay>
Criteria and explanation
Self assessment – Grades
What are the
WWWs and CBBs
of your essay????
Self assessment – Target setting
Teacher assessment
Where do YOU think the ABCDE boundaries go???
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Act 3, Scene 2: A scene of two halves
Goal: To appreciate the sudden change in mood in this
scene, and appreciate how it explores the fickleness of
men.
Lines 1 – 58.
How do the men tease Bn? How does he respond? How
does this part of the scene explore fickleness?
Lines 59 – 100
How does the mood change here? What are your
thoughts about Claudio’s reaction to DJs slander? What
is the significance of Honour here? How does this part
of the scene explore fickleness?
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Timed Essay
Explore how Claudio is
presented up to Act 3, scene
2 of Much Ado about Nothing

Chronological structure is
most sensible

Find 3 – 4 significant extracts
and focus on these.
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Act Three, Scene Three – malapropisms and madness!
Goal:
To appreciate how comedy is constructed through characterisation by
language use and twisted logic.
To begin to have an awareness of the use of scenes with juxtaposed
moods
Reading: Ll 1 -94. What sorts of instructions do the watch receive? What do
you notive about DBs vocabulary? What about his use of proverbs? His
logic? Why have this scene now, after a very serious and sinister turn of
events?
Reading: L 95 –
What is the purpose of this movement in the
scene? Why have it now? What do we find
out? What do we hope might now happen?
Why doesn’t it? How does this affect the
pathos of Hero’s Slander?
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Act Three, Scene Four
Recap – what happened in 3.2?
How does this scene parallel 3.2? What differences can you notice in Hero’s
character? Margaret – what do we know about her thus far? How is her
earlier behaviour / tendencies reinforced in this scene?
AO3 Focus: Double entendre – find and annotate a few examples.
Act Three Scene Five
What is the purpose of this scene? How does Shakespeare use language to
present Dogberry here? How does it contribute to the tragedy?
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Act Three, Scene Five – The Dramatic Climax
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Reading: The Climax.
Reading and annotation
AO3: How does Claudio use language to hurt? How does Shakespeare present his
characters here?
Discussion – What do the actions and reactions of characters reveal about their true
natures in 3.5?
Critical reading – model essay from course-book.
Your TURN – the BEST essay paragraph you can write.
How does the response of Beatrice / Benedick present aspects of their character?
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How does the response of Beatrice / Benedick present
aspects of their character?
WRITE A LOT ABOUT A LITTLE!!!!!!!!!!
Useful connectives: moreover, additionally, however, furthermore
Can you use more than one brief quotation to show you’ve synthesized?
Can you cross reference to earlier quotations to show a wider understanding?
Can you evaluate: comment on how a particular technique is effective
Embed your quotations
Use a formal register
Useful critical vocabulary: connotes, implies, suggests, emphasizes, reinforces,
creates an image of, develops the audience’s awareness of
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Act 4, Scene ii
Why does ‘Sirrah’ offend Borachio? Why whould Dogberry be excited about this
opportunity? What evidence of his excitement can you find?
‘forget not that I am an ass!’ What does Dogberry mean?
Why comedy now? How does if assist the development of the plot and effect the
tension level?
Act V Scene 1
The first movement – why Leonato’s change? Interchanges between Claudio and Leonato – violence of
language
Key Line: ‘We had t have our two noses snapped off
with two old men without teeth.’ Does Claudio find
this funny? Some directors have seen this thus.
The challenge – is Benedick fickle?
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Act 5, Scene One Continued
Goal: Explore the development of key themes
Starter: Translate Dogberry’s speech (191 - 194)
Borachio’s confession – is there any honour in him? (See also Ll297 – 300)
Leonato’s accusations – fair and reasonable?
Claudio’s reaction – does he redeem himself?
How does this scene further explore the themes of deception and honour???
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Homework
Devise 3 possible essay topics for your
coursework
Due: Wednesday
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Act Five Scene Two
Goal: Explore the presentation of the
Relationship between Bt & Bn
Margaret and Benedick – what is the tone of
this conversation – find examples to illustrate
your claims.
Bn & Bt – what parallels do you notice here with their earlier interchanges?
How does it differ?
Lines 78-79 – why is this humorous?
What does this scene suggest about the nature of the love between Beatrice
and Benedick?
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Act Five Scene Three
Claudio’s redemption
To what extent does this scene …
1. Show Claudio’s sincere sorrow for his actions?
2. Show a change in his character?
3. Redeem him?
AO3 – what's the most striking image in the
lament / song? Justify your choice
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Act Five, Scene Four
Reading and annotation
-How are all the loose
ends tied up?
Extended writing – whom do you believe will have
the more successful marriage?
Being Nasty - How would you punish Don John?
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Much Ado about Exams

Goal: To be aware of the patterns to be found in
the shorter exam questions and how to respond
to these.

Previous and Possible Questions
Shared Planning
 Individual Planning
 SXY Paragraph Time

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•Previous Questions – What patterns
do you notice???
2. To what extent is manipulation central to the play as a whole?
3. Life can be a comedy for those who think and is full of tragedy
for those who feel.
Use Much Ado About Nothing to focus a discussion on the extent to
which this is true.
Using detailed supporting evidence, discuss the significance in the play
of ONE of the following:
disguise
melancholy
comedy
Or: Option 3(b)
Using detailed supporting evidence, discuss the extent to which
ONE of the following is a central theme or motif in the play:
Social Criticism
Gender Roles
the Pastoral
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•Possible Questions
2. To what extent is deception central to the play as a
whole?
Or: Using detailed supporting evidence, discuss the
significance in the play of ONE of the following:
Eavesdropping
Slander
Honour
Or: Using detailed supporting evidence, discuss the
extent to which ONE of the following is a central
theme or motif in the play:
Love and Marriage The battle of the sexes
Jealousy
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To what extent is deception central
to the play as a whole?
The fundamental significance of deception to Much Ado
about Nothing can be seen through the fact that both
the main and subplots revolve around this theme. In the
Claudio/Hero plot, Don John’s malicious deception
provides the obstacles to the lovers’ happiness, leading
to Claudio deciding, ‘where I should wed her, there I will
shame her. In the sub-plot of the play, the
Beatrice/Benedick story, deception is also critical.
Having been deceived into believing they were
eavesdropping, both these characters ‘soften’ in a sense,
reversing their past sentiments against love and stating,
‘When I said I would die a bachelor, I did not think I
would live until I were married.’ in Benedick’s case, and,
‘Love on – I will requite thee’, in Beatrices. Thus,
deception is a vehicle for uniting and deviding lovers in
Much Ado about Nothing, and given that the plot and
subplot revolve around this, it is therefore of central
importance to the play as a whole.
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And at level two …
Analyse how the beginning of the text created a strong
impression of at least ONE character or individual.
2. Analyse how at least ONE setting helped develop an
important theme.
3. Analyse how surprise and / or humour helped the
writer communicate an important message.
4. Analyse how the writer created impact in ONE
important section.
5. Analyse how internal and / or external conflict were
important to the text.
Note: “internal conflict” means conflict within a character /
individual, and “external conflict” means
conflict between different characters / individuals or
groups.
6. Analyse how the writer influenced you to think
differently about an important idea or issue.
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Extract Questions

Goal: To develop the skills with which to respond
to these sorts of questions

Starter – What do they look like?

Our turn – a planned response – Use this extract
as a starting point for a discussion about
Deception in the play.

Your Turn – Use this extract as a starting point
for discussion about the relationship between …
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Your Turn – Use this extract as a starting point for discussion about the
relationship between …
Of immediate note to the audience in this scene, is the ‘merry war’
between Beatrice and Benedick, which shows their wit and sharp
minds, establishing a clear parallel between the two. Each attempts to
turn the other’s words against them, in a bout of verbal ‘swordplay’
that includes such jibes as:
Benedick: ‘God keep your ladyship in such a mind so that
some gentleman … shall scape a predistinate scratched face’
Beartice: Scratching could not make it worse, twere such a
face as yours.
Here the ‘war of words’ shows them both equal to the others, wit.
Additionally, Shakespeare creates the suggestion of a hidden attraction.
Both are so similar, and so frustrated by the other, that the audience
might well wonder if they are destined to be united as the lay
develops.
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Context Test
Goal: Demonstrate your recall
and analytical skills.
Complete the context test for
‘Much Ado about Nothing’
Good Luck – keep a careful eye
on the clock!
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Much Ado about Contrast
Goal: Explore the contrast between the two sets of
lovers.
Starter – what would Shakespeare think of this song by
the Pixies?
My mistress' eyes are nothing like the sun;
Coral is far more red, than her lips red:
If snow be white, why then her breasts are dun;
If hairs be wires, black wires grow on her head.
I have seen roses damasked, red and white,
But no such roses see I in her cheeks;
And in some perfumes is there more delight
Than in the breath that from my mistress reeks.
I love to hear her speak, yet well I know
That music hath a far more pleasing sound:
I grant I never saw a goddess go,
My mistress, when she walks, treads on the ground:
And yet by heaven, I think my love as rare,
As any she belied with false compare.
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Much Ado about Contrast
Goal: Analyse examples of contrast between character
Starter: Who will have the most successful marriage? Justify your response?
The two contrasting pairs of lovers. What contrasts are there between them? In your
groups come up with a list of as many contrasts as you can think of between…
Each pair
Claudio and Benedick
Hero and Beatrice
Feedback – what did you
come up with?
Find a quotation for each
character that… capture
BOTH the essence of their
character and contrasts
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So what? The two pairs of lovers
contrast. Big deal …

How does this contrast enable Shakespeare to
provide social commentary? How does it help
him comment on the differences between true
love and an affectation of love?
Question: Using Beatrice and Benedick’s
acceptance of each others affection as a starting
point, discuss how Shakespeare presents love in
Much Ado.
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Much Ado about Deception
Goal: To be able to identify crucial examples of the presentation of deception and
explore the moral viewpoint of Shakespeare.
Starter: Deception Golf: Par 5, Birdie 7, Eagle 10, Albatross 12
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Categorise examples
of each type of deception,
and explain what the
motivation behind each is
Malicious
Deceptions
Think
motives
Think
context
Deceptions
Ambiguous
Deceptions
Constructive
Deceptions
Extended writing: What
is Shakespeare’s moral view
of deception?Slide 6
Socratic Listening / Oral Assessments (2 Lessons)
Goal: To speak clearly and persuasively and listen actively and
sensitively
Each group will have a different speaker to focus on. You are looking to make
notes on each speaker’s content so you are provide feedback, giving 3
W.W.Ws (What worked well) and 2 EBIs (Even Better if)
Providing sophisticated points
Supporting ideas with well chosen evidence
Analysing Shakespeare’s use of language
Exploring different possible interpretations
Using a formal, academic vocabulary and register.
A Listening is required by the audience. Your job is to …
Write down your speakers name and be ready to make notes so you
can accurately assess their performance
Create an atmosphere in which everyone can excel
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Much Ado about Honour

Goal: To explore the significance of honour to
the audiences attitudes about characters

Starter: Honour Hunt – how many references
can you find?

Honour – what is it – how can we define it?

Honour and Gender – what differences exist?
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Unpacking the question
To what extent is honour central to Much
ado about Nothing?
Shared planning
SXY Paragraph time.
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Coursework Planning
Topics – Setting your coursework in stone
Advice Sheets – how are we assessed?
Planning – step one – group discussion – what five incidents in the play are of
particular relevance to your topic – formulate then discuss with your group.
Planning – step two – suggested models.
Planning step three – sequencing using template
Planning – step four – conferencing and deadlines
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Dealing With ‘Presents’
Goal: To be confident with the concept of presenting character or
theme
It at a table with 2 other people focussing on the same type of
coursework question Either character based, or theme based.
On the paper, list as many different ways that themes or character can
be presented – with each, give an example from the text.
Jig sawing – one person from each group, visit another group to
compare and share.
Construct a presenting checklist, of things your essay should explore in
order for it to deal with the word ‘presents’ in the title.
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Exemplar Analysis
Goal: To read an exemplar critically and analytically


Yes, Tom and
Rhodri, it was
today that it
was due.
Deadline day – first page and plan please
Reading example essay – a live script from a student of two years age.

Groups to discuss and list strengths and weaknesses AND put it in a
band, and give it a mark .

Mark feedback, and the REAL grade.

Now find the weakest paragraph. Your challenge in pairs is to
write this paragraph, making it better than before.

Feedback.

Create your own checklist – ten things I need to do to raise
my grades in essays are …
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Research / Tutorial / Catch Up Time
Thou must
suspect the
responsibility I
have bestored
upon thee
Goal: To solidify your understanding of key aspects of the text in relation
to your essay question.
Option A:
If you are reasonably comfortable about what you are going to write
about, go to the library, and read some analysis of key parts of the play
which will help with your essay.
Make notes from what you find, you will need to show these to me at the
end of the lesson
Option B:
If you are still really worried about your essay plan, and think you need
some extra help at this point, wait behind, and talk to me!
Option C:
Complete your plan / first page and submit it for assessment.
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Static Images
Goal: To think in a different style to help
consolidate your understanding of the
concept your coursework is based
upon.
Starter – introduction to static images –
examples from previous group.
Drafting, with annotations, based on your
own coursework focus
Peer assessment 3 x WWW, 3 x CBB
(Think ideas not presentation)
Alternative version – how else might you
depict this character / theme?
Homework – A3 Paper – NO WHITE
SPACE!!!!
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In this story, Mr and Mrs Martins are preparing for death.
They live separately so they’ll get used to it before one of
them dies. This is Mr Martins’ idea and he forces it on his
wife.
In my static image the background of clocks with no hands
represents how time stands still and how they are preparing
to die before their time. The black gravestone represents
death and it has Mr Martins’ year of birth on it but he hasn’t
died yet.
The green path is the path of life. The green symbolizes
living, growing and doing things. The path is windy to show
that although it ultimately leads to death you don’t go
straight there; there are lots of challenges along the way. The
rough edges show that life isn’t easy and everyone has hard
times.
Mr Martins is older so he is further along the path of life. But
it is also because he is more accepting of death. He is grey
because although he is still alive he is inactive and might as
well be dead.
He is looking away because he has forgotten about his wife.
While he was preparing her for life without him, he failed to
realise that all she wanted was to be with him and cherish
the time they had left together.
Mrs Martins is hanging back because she still wants to enjoy
life. She is in colour because there is still some life left in her.
She is holding her hat and basket which shows there are still
things she wants to do. But when her husband says they
must prepare for death she doesn’t object and her head
down indicates her submissiveness.
The quote shows that they’re not dead yet but they’re not
making the most of the time they have left. “We” indicates
the two of them, “go on” refers to progress on the path of
life and “waiting” refers to the fact that they are preparing for
death.
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Drafting Time
Objective: Learn how to write introductions
Starter – how is this paragraph like an upside down triangle???
During traumatic times, one’s true nature is said to become apparent, as
facades disappear as one acts and reacts to stress. To a large degree this
phenomenon is observable in act four, scene one of Shakespeare’s ‘Much Ado
About Nothing’ as the various participants partake in, or react to the slander of
the innocent Hero. Perhaps more than revealing characters’ traits however, the
action of the scene merely confirms many characteristics which have been
developed through earlier interactions. We see more of Claudio’s insecurity
and tendency toward melodrama. Benedick’s admirable traits and Beatrice’s
unconventional tendencies are both confirmed. Hero’s response – or lack there
of also no great surprise – all the characters have been carefully crafted up to
this point, and all of them react in accordance to the way they have thus far
been presented.
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Deadline Day
On a piece of lined paper do the following:
Assess your own essay – marks for AO1 -4
Positive comments (3 WWWs)
3 Targets (CBBs)
Turn the paper over and give it to your neighbour
PEER assessment
Repeat this process with partner’s essay – including marks
and feedback
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Draft Feedback
Goal: To improve depth of analysis by interweaving language analysis
throughout my essay
To understand how to conclude
Essay feedback – WWW / CBB
Tom Waits – language analysis warm up – listen carefully and find the 3
metaphors.
What sorts of effects aim I
trying to create through
these metaphors?
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Language analysis
Use phrases like this to show you understand the effect:
For metaphorical language think about what impression is created by the comparison
…
 Or that it creates an image of ...
 Gives emphasis to the idea that …
For sound devices such as alliteration / onomatopoeia think about how you would
describe the quality of the sound, and how this contributes to the mood. Is it an
abrupt, soft, gentle, harsh, soothing, sharp, heavy, slow, etc etc.
For vocabulary features you can comment on what is suggested by a particular word
(try to use language terms like verb, adjective, adverb etc )and use words like …
 Connotes, suggests, implies, infers,
 Creates a …… tone, showing that ….

The same can be done for phrases – groups of words
For syntax features (Sentence structures) ask your self what function it has –
perhaps to – command/imperative (to persuade, show authority, increase a sense of
urgency or create a forceful tone), question/interrogative (Perhaps rhetorical for
emphasis), exclaim (Create a particular tone – perhaps excitement, joy, fear, urgency
…). Look also for short, simple sentences, which create emphasis, and very long,
complex sentences which build images.
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Your language analysis
Find and highlight 4 quotations in your
essay where you notice something about
the language.
Class analysis – exploring effect
Individual analysis.
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Model conclusion – summary of main
points, final emphasis to thesis.
One can therefore see that much is revealed about
characters by their actions in slandering Hero, or
reactions to this slander. Claudio demonstrates his
capacity for cruelty, fuelled by his jealousy and
insecurity. Leonato displays his scope for anger and a
degree of disloyalty to his daughter. Benedick and
Beatrice form an alliance, as others dissolve; the former
demonstrating his insight and honour; the latter her
frustration and loyalty. However more is confirmed
about characters than revealed. Many traits which have
been observed previously influence characters behaviour
in this scene. Thus the trauma does cause facades to
drop, but unsurprisingly the characters are not presented
in a way that differs from earlier in the play.
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