Outline, Thesis Statement &
Quotation
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Outline and Thesis Statement
Separate QUOTATION
Integrated QUOTATION
Using ellipsis
2005/10/25
Ref. http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/research/documentation.html
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Outline
Thesis Statement
Quotation: Purposes
Separated, but not indented.
Separated, and indented.
Integrated.
Practice:1, 2, 3, 4.
Ellipses
References
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社
 The thesis: Accomplishment needs
cooperation to fulfill.?
 Slogan:
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愛情需要兩個人百分之百合作，
和平需要跟對手百分之百合作，
成就需要跟努力百分之百合作，?
健康需要跟身體百分之百合作．?
百分之百的時候到了，番茄合作社．
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 -Outline
Ideas of polarization
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Status of characters are designed to be
the opposite situations?
Color
Movement of characters?
Scene design
Music?
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 –Outline (2)
Ideas of cooperation –Why here?
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Love needs cooperation from each
genders
Peace needs two sites’ cooperation
Award needs one’s hard work (?)
Health needs the unification with the
body(?)
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 –Outline (3)
The suggestive meaning –Why here?
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100% means accomplishment though the
original condition is not harmonious; the
ingredient is definitely pure.?
Complement can make the situation
different.?
“Cooperative association” has the
meaning of cooperation and also it is a
selling place, to sell foods, to sell health
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 –Revised
Thesis
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To sell the ideas of 100% and
cooperation, the CF shows the
apparently opposing things working
well together, though neither their
opposition is real nor the idea of
cooperation.
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Text: 100% 番茄合作社 –Revised
Structure
Key words: 100% and cooperation, false
opposition.
Opposition
false opposition:
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diligence and “I” 100% diligent?,
health and I  100% healthy bodies?
Cooperation
1. Cooperation, friendship,
2. Cooperation  company, corporation
 a happy world of tomato juice?
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Thesis Statement (2)
 Thesis statement: to express there are too
many unnatural things on the world, and
people almost forget the original and true
side of everything, including the affections.
  The song expresses both through the
lyrics and the melody that modern people
are exhausted by all kinds of artificial
things they use, put on themselves, turn
themselves and their love into.
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3. Quotation: Purposes
Purposes: avoid plagiarism, increase credibility
by giving evidence or support, for close
analysis.
 Kinds: paraphrase and direct quote (further
divided into: separated and integrated)
 Things to Consider:
 Whether the quotes are supportive or
distractive. (Don’t let the quotes to speak
for you.)
 Punctuation & format;
 Smoothing the syntax with transitions, etc.
 USING ELLIPSES and other alterations of
sources.
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3-1. Separated Quotation
 St. Paul declared, "It is better to marry
than to burn."
 In his first epistle to the Corinthians, St.
Paul commented on lust: "It is better to
marry than to burn.“ (a separate unit of
the sentence.)
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3-2. Separated and Indented
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As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible Woman
locates her vital position in Canadian literature.
[transition] For Atwood, "literature is a means to cultural
and personal self-awareness. … In her opinion, Canada's
central reality is the act of survival: Canadian life and
culture are decisively shaped by the demands of a harsh
environment. Closely related, in Atwood's view, to this
defining act of survival is the Canadian search for territorial
identity"([who said it?] 21). Thus in Atwood's novels, the
characters, especially the female protagonists, are the
representation of seeking for survival and quest for selfidentity.
(The quote 1) should be more than four lines and thus put
in a separate paragraph with indentation; 2) is too long.)
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3-2. Separated and Indented –
Correction
 As for the novels, Atwood's debut The Edible
Woman locates her vital position in Canadian
literature. [transition] For Atwood,
“[. . .] Literature is a means to cultural and
personal self-awareness. […] Canada's central
reality is the act of survival: Canadian life and
culture are decisively shaped by the demands of
a harsh environment. Closely related, in
Atwood's view, to this defining act of survival is
the Canadian search for territorial
identity.“ ([who said it?] 21)
Thus in Atwood's novels, the characters, especially
the female protagonists, are the representation of
seeking for survival and quest for self-identity.
(The quote still is too long, and the paragraph not coherent.)
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3-3. Separated -Correction
 (getting a topic sentence; reducing irrelevant
parts)
In Atwood's novels, the characters, especially the
female protagonists, seek for survival and self-identity.
For Atwood, "Canada's central reality is the act of
survival: Canadian life and culture are decisively
shaped by the demands of a harsh environment.
Closely related, in Atwood's view, to this defining act of
survival is the Canadian search for territorial
identity"(Name 21). For instance, Atwood's debut, The
Edible Woman, deal with a woman’s attempt to
survive in a city where humans are ‘eating’ up one
another. (More on this novel, or the other novels by
Atwood. )
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3-4. Integrated Quotations
 Separated:
 As ~ points out, “For Mrs. Warren to be a prostitute
and want her daughter to be respectable would be
hypocritical only if her original motive for entering the
‘profession’ had been an innate love for it, rather than
a realization that solid material foundations are the
precondition for any hope of a better life” ﹙74﹚.
 Integrated: (syntax smoothed)
 Mrs. Warren is not hypocritical in wanting her
daughter to be ‘respectable,’ since her motivation for
going into the business of prostitution is not, as ~ put
it, “an innate love for it” but “a realization that solid
material foundations are the precondition for any
hope of a better life” ﹙74﹚.
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3-4.
Integrated
 As a professor of history, Tony tells her
students, “history is a construct,…any point of
entry is possible and all the choices are
arbitrary”(4).
Correction: As a professor of history, Tony
tells her students that “history is a construct,
[. . .] ,any point of entry is possible and all the
choices are arbitrary”(4).
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3-4. integrated
…it points out in Critical that “it was inevitable that
Humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics should
also produce a new kind of English tragedy”(221).
Corrections:
 Critical Reader points out that “it was inevitable that
Humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics should
also produce a new kind of English tragedy”(221).
Emphasis placed on a certain idea:
Critical Reader points out that with contemporary
humanist interest in the Latin and Greek classics,
producing a new kind of English tragedy was
“inevitable”(221).
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3.5 Practice (1)
c. the “broken man who she live with”—
A plastic surgery doctor who has
suffered burning and part of him is
polystyrene
d. the “narrator” himself—
*unnecessary
A man who loves “She” in the lyrics but
confusing whether she is real or not.
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3.5 Practice (2)
c. The young man hysterically asks him,
“Is it because we’re all going to die?”
He answers, “No, you don’t know
what you ask of me.” However, finally,
he tells them why he is lying down
there, and, after knowing the answer,
all of them do so.
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3.5 Practice (3)
c.Lyrics:
A green plastic watering can
For a fake chinese rubber plant
In the fake plastic earth
That she bought from a rubber man
In a town full of rubber plans
To get rid of itself
It wears her out, it wears her out
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3.5 Practice (3)
Quotation:
All the world, the lyrics shows, is filled with
plastic objects; such as, a plastic watering
can, a rubber plant and the “fake plastic
earth.” Even human beings can be made of
rubber and a town can be full of rubber
plans, which the town uses “[to] get rid of
itself.”
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3.5 Practice (4)
Lyrics: “Just” by Radiohead
You do it to yourself, you do
And that's what really hurts
Is that you do it to yourself
Just you and no one else
You do it to yourself
You do it to yourself
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3.5 Practice (4)
Quotation 1:
A man may fall on his slippery liferoad
and hope to get sympathy. However,
he might be intended to fall though
he already knows there is an obstacle
ahead as the lyrics of the band
Radiohead puts it, ‘you just do it to
yourself.’ (Sentence Structure)
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3.5 Practice (4)
Quotation 1: --Correction
In life a man may fall on a slippery road
and expect to get sympathy from
others. However, he may intend to
fall, although he already knows there
is an obstacle ahead. As the lyrics of
“Just” (by Radiohead) puts it, ‘you just
do it to yourself.’
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3.5 Practice (4)
Quotation 2:
In Radiohead’s lyrics, people
misunderstand what they are afraid
of uncertain things come from outside,
but instead “you do it to yourself, you
do and that’s what really hurts,’ which
indicated these uncertain things
comes out of ourselves. (Run-on S)
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3.5 Practice (4)
Quotation 2:Correction
In Radiohead’s lyrics, people thought
that what they are afraid of came
from outside, and it is hurting to
realize that “[they] do it to
[themselves].” (Run-on S)
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3.5 Practice (4) --Good!
Quotation 3: (The blue parts have been corrected.)
By repeating the words, “you do it
yourself,” Radiohead illustrates the
idea that we often suffer from the
consequences that are actually
caused by ourselves, because it is
‘just you and no one else” that have
brought about such consequences.
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3.6 Ellipsis
 Improper: Besides, in “this is my
greatest performance and all of the
actresses who won my parts will say….”
The life for women is like to play a role
for performance; life is an image for
others. Even when one of the women
disappears, there are still many women
eager to take her role.
 Meaning incomplete (like some email
writings. )
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Ellipsis -revised
 Another source of constraint in this
woman’s life is that of playing roles, of
which even her death is one. Upon
her death, the other “actresses” who
will take over her role praise it by
saying: “how wonderful to let yourself
go that mad, how wonderful
[. . .] ,“ as if it were a matter of
performance on the stage.
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Reference: Quotation
 Types of quotation & punctuation:
http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/con&com_
databank/Marguerite/SSW3.htm
 Verbs to use; proper format and
varying sentence structure.
http://www.eng.fju.edu.tw/con&com_
databank/Marguerite/SSW2.htm
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