Peer Writing
We have accomplished:
How to write a thesis statement
How to make an argumentation
How to appeal egos, pathos and logos
How to gather information and do library research
Today: How to edit our papers
 Workshop: Peer editing
 Book Discussion on Identity Part 1: Kayla and Kristen
 Background Information about the examples
Maalouf uses in his book.
 Annotated Bibliography
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Born in 25 February 1949 in Beirut
 A Lebanese journalist and author
 Lives in France since 1976
 Maalouf’s website:
http://www.aminmaalouf.org/english/
 An interview:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kagj
l0uBxX4
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Identity is what makes us unique: our
background, our race, our language,
our gender, our religion etc.
 One identity and several affiliations , or
as he calls, a number of allegiances
 Reality: taking all the allegiances and
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His main aim is: “to try to understand why so many people
commit crimes nowadays in the name of religious, ethnic,
national or some other kind of identity,” how what he calls
“identities that kill” are made and sustained.
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Us and them distinction—it can lead people to the
worst kind of extremities
It is good if you have multiple national allegiances
and can live them altogether. Yet some are
pressed hard to choose one side and be part of
one or the other. Those German-Turk, FrenchAlgerian, etc…
MAIN QUESTION: We want to try to understand
why so many people commit crimes nowadays in
the name of religious, ethnic, national or some
other kind of identity?
Former Yugoslavia
 Lebanon
 Rwanda
World is unfortunately full of such
examples. Maalouf specifically focus on
Middle East and Balkans.
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After WWII Yugoslavia dissolved into
Croatia, Macedonia, Bosnia and
Herzegovina, Serbia, Kosovo
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During the Cold War, the Yugoslav
government allied with the Soviet Union
However, despite an early alliance of
the Yugoslav communists with the
Soviet Union, Stalin distrusted Tito and
the two leaders did not agree with
each others' methods. Frustration
between Tito and Stalin grew after Tito
refused to link Yugoslavia's economy
with that of the Soviet Union and the
rest of Eastern Europe. The relations
between Tito and Stalin came to an
end in 1948
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It is bordered by Syria to the north
and east, and Israel to the south. It
is close to Cyprus through the
Mediterranean Sea.
Before the Lebanese Civil War
(1975-1990), the country enjoyed
a period of relative calm and
prosperity, driven by the tourism,
agriculture, and banking sectors
of the economy. It was widely
known as the "Switzerland of the
East" due to its financial power
and diversity.
Lebanon attracted large
numbers of tourists to the point
that the capital Beirut became
widely referred to as the "Paris of
the East.”
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Two groups in Rwanda
While the Hutu are
generally recognized
as the ethnic majority
of Rwanda, in racialist
ideology the Tutsi were
identified as a foreign
race, as opposed to
an indigenous minority.
The largest conflict
related to this tension
was the 1994
Rwandan Genocide
 mass killing of
hundreds of thousands
of Rwanda's Tutsis by
the Hutu militia.
 A must-see
movie:“Hotel Rwanda”
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Proposals due next Tuesday (October 28th)
 Read Part 1 AND 2 of “In the name of Identity”
 Moving with our research projects: Writing
Annotated Bibliography—See the next slides.
1) Find two resources that are relevant to your
research projects.
2) Post a short annotated bibliography (A short
summary and reflection of the articles). If it is a web
resource copy and paste it in your entry. If it is a
journal article make sure that you cite them
properly.
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A bibliography is a list of sources (books, journals, websites,
periodicals, etc.) one has used for researching a topic.
Bibliographies are sometimes called "references" or "works
cited" depending on the style format you are using.
An annotation is a summary and/or evaluation.
Therefore, an annotated bibliography includes a summary
and/or evaluation of each of the sources. Depending on
your project or the assignment, your annotations may do one
or more of the following:
Adapted from OWL Purdue. For more information go to http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/614/01/
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Summary: What are the main arguments? What is
the point of this book or article? What topics are
covered? If someone asked what this article/book
is about, what would you say? The length of your
annotations will determine how detailed your
summary is.
Reflection: Once you've summarized a source, you
need to ask how it fits into your research. Was this
source helpful to you? How does it help you shape
your argument? How can you use this source in
your research project? Has it changed how you
think about your topic?
Identity Part 2
 Class blog: Looking at your annotated
bibliographies.
 Evaluating your sources
 Research in Progress: Writing a Research
Proposal.
 Proposals are due next Tuesday. Late
papers will NOT be accepted.
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Bibliographic citations usually include
three main components: author(s), title,
and publication information.
 You need to determine relevance and
authority. This is one of the most
important research skills in the research
process.
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1. Authority
What are the author's qualifications?
Is the document written on a topic in the author's area of expertise?
Is the author affiliated with an institution?
2. Accuracy
Does the article cite its sources?
Are the conclusions justified and supported by evidence?
Is the information reliable and free of error?
3. Comprehensiveness
Are the topics explored in depth?
Does the information appear to be valid and well-researched?
Does the work update other sources?
Is the information useful or repetitious?
4. Validity
Does the author inform or persuade?
Is the language free of emotion-rousing words or bias? Does the author
express a particular point of view?
5. Ease of use
Is the resource organized logically?
Are the main points clearly presented?
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Tentative Title
Research questions and Thesis Statement
The significance and purpose of this research: Why
is this important to you and to your audience?
Discuss your interest and prior experience with this
topic.
Methods: What research methods will you be using
to explore your topic? What are your primary and
secondary resources?
Audience
Primary research: collecting a data of
your own. Observations, interviews,
photos, survey questions
 Secondary Research: reading the
research results of others.
 Both
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See the handout on Kira’s research
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Read Li’s research proposal.
Discussion Questions:
Can you clearly tell what Li Chen’s research question is? If
you think it needs clarification, what suggestions would you
make?
What is the author’s purpose in researching this topic?
Where does the author discuss the purpose, and what
recommendations would you make for clarifying the
purpose
Who does the author intend to address with the final
research process? What suggestions would you make to
clarify the intented audience?
Proposals due on Tuesday, October 28th
 Read Identity part 3
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Identity Part 3
 Presentations: Scott, Jake, Karel
 What is Globalization?—Class discussion
on globalization.
 Data collection methods--REVISION
 Talking about your Research Proposals
 What is a Literature Review?
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A group of American tourists arrived in Italy
not long ago. “Amazing!” one said to their
tour guide, a friend of mine: “You have
pizza here too.”
A group of Japanese Boy Scouts landed in
Chicago. “Amazing!” they told their troop
leader. “They have McDonald’s here too.”
http://magma.nationalgeographic.com/2000
/culture/global/main.html
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Write down your definition of
globalization
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ljbI363A2Q
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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iWzx
BkszN8k&feature=related
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Literature review is a collection of materials on a
topic.
A literature review can be just a simple summary of
the sources, but it usually has an organizational
pattern and combines both summary and
synthesis.
A summary is a recap of the important information
of the source, but a synthesis is a re-organization, or
a reshuffling, of that information
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Adapted from various online and paper based resources
Literature reviews provide you with a
handy guide to a particular topic.
 Literature reviews can give you an
overview or act as a stepping stone in
your research.
 Comprehensive knowledge on the topic
is necessary as you write your research
papers.
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Introduction: You should give a quick idea of the topic of
your literature review, such as the central theme.
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Body: In this section of your paper, you should discuss your
sources. You can organize your sources either
chronologically, thematically, or methodologically
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Conclusion: Conclusions/Recommendations: Discuss what
you have drawn from reviewing literature so far. Where might
the discussion proceed?
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http://owl.english.purdue.edu/media/pd
f/20070515025950_667.pdf
Use quotes sparingly
 Remember to summarize and synthesize
 Keep your own voice
 Be careful when paraphrasing a source.
 Revise, revise, revise…
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Final Research paper (60)
I) Research Proposal (1-2 pages): 5 points
II) Literature Review (4-5 pages): 20 points
III) Research Paper (7-10 pages): 35 points
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(also, your book reviews are worth of 15
points in total—see the syllabus for more
information)
Finish Identity
 Expand your resources (find current
academic articles written on your topic)
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Don’t vote video:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0vtHwWReGU
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Book Review due on Tuesday
Writing Center workshop. We are meeting in Eicher
Hall 218. Bring your resources with you!
Writing Center’s website:
http://www.wc.iup.edu/contactus.htm
Presentations on the last part of Identity.
Talking about Literature Review
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The genre of the book was very appropriate, because he
used narrative examples to get the reader understand what
he was going through.
I feel that UN should read Covering. Not just to benefit them
for work, but as an American citizen.
Marks true self was revealed when he found love
Save me was an intriguing film that kept the audience
interested through out the film
See this website:
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/grammar/g_comma
.html
Book reviews are due next Tuesday
(November 4th)
 Find sources for your research and bring
them with you next Tuesday.
 Make sure that your absences are not
excessive. See me next week if you are
worried about your grade so far.
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