Of Mice and Men John Steinbeck Introduction To read closely and carefully in order to form judgements of characters Lennie He walked heavily, dragging his feet a little the way a bear drags its paws George Small and quick… dark of face with restless eyes and sharp, strong features First Reading PP3-4 1. What impression of the setting is created during the opening of the novel? 2. How is the atmosphere changed by the entry of George and Lennie Enter George and Lennie 1. Name three ways in which the appearances of the men differ 2. Which two animals is Lennie compared to? What impression does this create of him? 3. Look at the characters first interactions on page 5 - 6. What do you notice about their relationship? (Challenge yourself for an excellence answer) 4. Why do you think Lennie keeps the dead mouse? What does it suggest about his personality? 5. Look at the way George and Lennie interact on Page 10. What do you think George thinks of Lennie? Why do you think the two travel together? Character Contrast: Use either a mind-map, T-Chart or bullet points to show 3 –8 contrasts between George and Lennie Introducing Themes: Dreams •Goal: To be aware of how the novel introduces and begins to explore these key themes • Starter: What does ‘Theme’ mean? • Reading: From ‘George snapped his fingers sharply’ to ‘And then he looked ashamedly at the flames.’ Discussion: 1. What did Lennie do in Weed? 2. Why did he do it? 3. What happened as a consequence? 4. How does this add to our understanding of Lennie? ‘Live off the fatta the lan’ Read until: ‘George gestured with his spoon. “What you gonna say tomorrow when the boss asks you questions?” Dreams are a key theme in the novel. Steinbeck is interested in exploring what dreams mean to us, and whether they’re attainable. S.E.X.Y. Paragraph • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts Dreams are a key theme in ‘Of Mice and Men’. The most significant dream is ….……………… ………………………………. George describes this as ‘………………….……………………….. ………………………………………………………. This dream is important to the men because ……………………………………………………… ………………………………………………………… S.E.X.Y Paragraphs • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts Dreams are a key theme in ‘Of Mice and Men’. The most significant dream is Lennie and George’s ‘dream farm’ George describes the dream of having, ‘a little house an a couple of acres and a cow and some pigs…’ where they can ‘Live of the fatta the lan.’ This dream is important to the men because it offers them hope of a home with some stability. S.E.X.Y Paragraphs • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts Dreams are a key theme in ‘Of Mice and Men’. The most significant dream is Lennie and George’s ‘dream farm’ George describes the dream of having, ‘a little house an a couple of acres and a cow and some pigs…’ where they can ‘Live of the fatta the lan.’ This dream is important to the men because it offers them hope of a home with some stability, where they can have some freedom and an easier life than their present, drifting existence. S.E.X.Y Paragraphs • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts Dreams are a key theme in ‘Of Mice and Men’. The most significant dream is Lennie and George’s ‘dream farm’ George describes the dream of having, ‘a little house an a couple of acres and a cow and some pigs…’ where they can ‘Live of the fatta the lan.’ This dream is important to the men because it offers them hope of a home with some stability, where they can have some freedom and an easier life than their present, drifting existence. Additionally, it offers them some safety, as Lennie would be more easily managed, if he were kept away from people who didn’t understand him, such as the girl in Weed. End of chapter one • Read the novel until the end of this chapter. • Prediction Task: What do you think is going to happen to George and Lennie when they reach the farm? At the Ranch • Goal: To read closely to keep track of who’s who of the minor characters • Starter : ‘A guy on a ranch don’t never listen nor don’t ask no questions.’ Discussion – what sort of an existence is this? • Reading P19 – 25 1. The Boss – what’s he like? The authority figure of the novel – what sort of authority does he wield? Reading up to P31 ‘Candy: ‘Know what I think? … Curley’s married a tart’ 1. Curly – What’s his problem? Minor Characters • Create either a mind – map or series of subheadings with bullet points for each of the following Candy, The Boss, Crooks, Curley, Curley’s Wife, Slim. Support each point with a quotation • You may not be able to add much so far, but leave room, we’ll add more as we progress Theme: Violence What examples of violence, or the threat of violence have you seen so far? What seems to be the men’s attitude towards violence – think about Candy’s comments. How does the violence contribute to the atmosphere? Slim and Curley’s Wife • Goal: To be able to identify how Steinbeck manipulates our judgements of these characters Candy: ‘Know what I think? … Curley’s married a tart’ • Starter: What is foreshadowing? • Could this be an example of it? ‘I don’t like this place George.’ This ain’t no good place. I wanna get outta here.’ • Reading: From, ‘P31 – 36’ • Questions (See next slide) • Reading ‘P36 – end of chapter. • SEXY Paragraphs: ‘How does Steinbeck manipulate the reader’s opinion of Curley’s Wife and Slim. Curley’s Wife Comprehension Questions Regular Questions: • What does Candy think of Curley’s wife? • What impression is created of Curley’s wife by the description of her appearance beginning, ‘She had full, rouged lips …’ • In what ways is her behaviour a little flirtatious? • Why is George so worried about Lennie’s fascination for Curley’s wife? Challenging Question (Answer in as much detail as possible): • What do you make of the quotation, ‘I don’t like this place George.’ This ain’t no good place. I wanna get outta here.’ after seeing that it follows the introduction of Curley’s Wife ‘How does Steinbeck manipulate the reader’s opinion of Curley’s Wife and Slim. • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts Steinbeck manipulates us into thinking Curley’s wife is ………. He presents her as ………………………………………… We can see this when she is described as ………………………………………………. This is significant because ………………. Homework: Add to your notes on the minor characters from yesterday’s lesson Lesson Five: Candy’s Dog To analyse a key moment of the text to explore what it shows about the theme of loneliness Starter: Homework • Be prepared to feedback one additional comment you added to your character map. Exploring Slim: • Read from the start of the chapter until: ‘Well – let him. He ain’t doing no harm out there.’ Regular Task: Write a diary entry from Slim’s perspective, about his conversation with George. Starter: Dear Diary, A couple of new guys showed up today – George and Lennie Challenging Task: Rewrite the most important parts of this incident in the first person, narrated from Slim’s perspective. Be sure to make his thoughts and opinions clear. Optional starter: I thought it was odd, George and Lennie travelling around together – most guys don’t seem to give a damn about no one. I asked George … Candy’s Dog • Reading until: ‘The men looked quickly at the old man. Every man turned toward him.’ 1. What similarities are there between Lennie and George and Candy and his dog? What does this incident suggest about the empathy (Understanding) of the other characters? How do you think the men’s attitude towards Candy’s dog has been influenced by their lonely lifestyle? Should Candy have shot his own dog, if it had to be put down? 2. 3. 4. Key quotation for today: ‘I seen the guys that go on the ranches alone. That ain’t no good. They don’t have no fun. After a long time they get mean. They get wantin’ to fight all the time.’ Lesson Six: Dreams come true Goal: To further explore Steinbeck’s exploration of the theme of dreams. Starter: This is an excerpt from the poem from which Steinbeck took his title. What do you make of it? But, Mousie, thou art no thy lane, In proving foresight may be vain; The best-laid schemes o' mice an 'men Gang aft agley, An'lea'e us nought but grief an' pain, For promis'd joy! Steinbeck’s Women • Reading from: ‘George shuffled the cards noisily and dealt them.’ until ‘Andy’s in San Quentin right now on account of a tart.’ Discussion: What are the men’s attitude towards women like? What do you think about this? Do you think Steinbeck might be sexist? The best laid plans … Reading until: ‘I ought to have shot that dog myself George. I oughtn’t a let no stranger shoot my dog.’ Who thinks that the men will attain their dream? Who’s not really sure one way or the other? Who’s convinced they won’t? Conclusion: S.E.X.Y paragraph: How does the dream farm link to the theme of loneliness? If you still need sentence starters, look at the sexy paragraphs we wrote last week, and adapt them to this question. Lesson Seven: Fight! Goal: To understand how a key turning point helps to reveal things about key characters. Starter: G/W: What have all of the following got in common? ‘…The way a bear drags its paws.’ ‘…snorting like a horse …’ ‘…strong as a bull…’ ‘…his fist lost in Lennie’s big paw.’ Reading: Until the end of the chapter Either Answer the following questions 1. What starts this conflict? 2. Why does Curley go after Lennie? 3. What makes Lennie fight back? 4. How does Slim react to Lennie’s actions? 5. How does Slim ensure Curley doesn't get George and Lennie canned? Turning Point and Character G/W: Write 4 SEXY paragraphs about what this turning point shows us about important characters. Each group member is to select a different character. Discuss what each person might write, then each write the paragraph. Feedback in groups Feedback to whole class. George • Statement / Explanation / eXample / Your Thoughts The turning point of the fight between Lennie and Curley reveals some subtle points about George’s character. The way he allows Lennie to fight back, without intervening himself, suggests he is sometimes somewhat reckless in his role of Lennie’s carer. George shouts, ‘Get him Lennie!’, resulting in Curley’s hand being crushed, and ‘Every bone in his hand [being] bust.’ George's decision to let Lennie fight back himself has dire consequences. Curley’s punishment is severe at least, and doesn’t fit his crime. This implies that George, whilst thinking he is acting in Lennie’s best interests, sometimes puts Lennie into a position where he is likely to get in serious trouble. George wishes to look after Lennie well, but doesn’t always make the right choices. Lesson Eight: Crooks • Goal: To understand the effects loneliness has had on Crook’s character. Starter: What do the following words mean? 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Relent Evokes Corrosive Vulnerability Disempowered Reading: Up to P85 Read the following notes on Crooks Crooks is a lively, sharp-witted, black stable-hand, who takes his name from his crooked back. Like most of the characters in the novel, he admits that he is extremely lonely. When visits him in his room, his reaction ReadLennie the following reveals this fact. At first, he turns Lennie away, hoping to prove a point that notes on Crooks, if he, as a black man, is not allowed in white men’s houses, then whites are not allowed in his, but his desire taken for company from ultimately wins out and he invites Lennie to sit with him. ‘WWW.sparknotes.com’ Like Curley’s wife, Crooks is a disempowered Summarise the character who turns his vulnerability into a weapon to attack those who are even weaker. He plays main points aim to George is gone for good. a cruel game with Lennie, suggesting to –him that Only when Lennie threatens him physical Takewith down all theviolence does he relent. Crooks exhibits the corrosive effects that loneliness can have on a important points person; his character evokes as the origins of his cruel behaviour Insympathy the least possible are made evident. Perhaps what Crooks wants more than anything else is amount words such as the right to enter a sense of belonging—to enjoy simpleof pleasures the bunkhouse or to play cards with the other men. This desire would explain why, even though he has reason to doubt George and Lennie’s talk about the farm that they want to own, Crooks cannot help but ask if there might be room for him to come along and hoe in the garden. Reading: Lennie and Crooks 1. Stepping into Steinbeck’s shoes. Write a letter from Steinbeck’s point of view, explaining why he included the character Crooks in his novel. Include: What Crooks is like. Why he is like that. How he helps to show the theme of loneliness Optional Starter: Dear Dad, If you want a challenge, jump to the last bullet point and aim to write three paragraphs on it alone I wanted to tell you a little more about one of the characters in my new novel: ‘Crooks.’ Crooks is … Lesson Nine: Sympathy Goal: To explore how Steinbeck influences the reader’s attitude towards characters Starter: Who do you think said this? ‘Think I don’t like to talk to somebody once and a while?’ Do you feel any sympathy for Curley’s wife? Why/why not? Reading: ‘From Candy came in but he was still embarrassed’ – end of chapter Complete the following 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. What does Crooks do and say which makes you feel sympathetic towards him? What does Crooks say and do to stop you from feeling sympathy for him? How does Curley’s Wife feel about her husband? What does this make you think about her? What do you think makes Candy stand up to Curley’s Wife? Why do you think Crooks joins in? Start with the question With what does Curley’s Wife threaten Crooks? you find the most interesting. Aim for quality and detail – rather than finishing every question Character sympathy • G/W: In group roles. • Rank each of the four characters out of 10 for the amount of sympathy you feel for them after this episode. Give a detailed and thoughtful justification for each of your rankings • Group Reporter to share ideas with neighbouring group. • Feedback • Homework: S.E.X.Y Paragraph: Explain how The Character of Curley’s Wife helps to show the corrosive effects of loneliness. Lesson Ten: The Penultimate Chapter • Goal: To appreciate how selected details lead up to a key event. • Starter – What happened in Weed? Jot down a few bullet points about this incident from before Lennie and George arrived at the Tyler ranch. Reading until: ‘He looked down on her…’ How has Steinbeck led us up to this event? What warnings have there been that this would happen? Find and copy quotations from throughout the book which have hinted that something terrible was going to happen between Lennie and Curley’s wife. MUST: 3 Quotations Should: 5 Quotations Could: 7 Quotations For each one, explain how it foreshadows (hints at) this outcome. Reading: Until the end of the chapter Discussion: What next – what should George do? What would you do? Write a final prediction of how the book will finish. Include a reference to the dream farm. If you know already, think of an alternate ending. Lesson 11: The ending Goal: To respond thoughtfully to a text Starter: ‘Hurt’ by Johnny Cash Reading: The end of the novel. Feedback ‘Hurt’ by Johnny Cash What have I become? My sweetest friend Everyone I know Goes away in the end And you could have it all My empire of dirt I will let you down I will make you hurt In what ways could these lyrics have been written about George and Lennie? How do they link to the themes of the novel? Reading Response Very brief summary (3 – 5 lines only) • One specific thing that happened or detail that was mentioned. • What you thought about it • Why you thought that • A second specific thing that happened or detail that was mentioned. • What you thought about it • Why you thought that • A third specific thing that happened or detail that was mentioned. • What you thought about it • Why you thought that Lesson Twelve: Key Review • Goal: To consolidate your understanding of the aspects of the text you need to be familiar with, in order to succeed in the exam. • Starter: Quotation Quiz – see next slide What might you be asked to write about in the exam? (See the next slide) Main Characters/Minor Characters/ Themes/Setting/Turning Points/Techniques Exemplar Analysis: What are the strengths of this example? Why did it not achieve Excellence? Overview: How to keep a record of the most significant aspects of the text? Teacher modelling. Complete your overview. • Starter: Quiz – Who said each of the following? Answers in books – GO! 1 ‘All right. But don’t try to put nothing over, ’cause you can’t get away with nothing. I seen wise guys before.’ 2 ‘You know how the hands are, they just come in and get their bunk and work a month, and then they quit and go out alone. Never seem to give a damn about nobody. It jus’ seems kinda funny a cuckoo like him and a smart little guy like you travellin’ together.’ 3 ‘If you got idears, you ought to come in town with us guys to-morra night.’ 4 ‘You’re yella as a frog belly. I don’t care if you’re the best welter in the country. You come for me, an’ I’ll kick your goddamn head off.’ 5 ‘I remember when I was a little kid on my old man’s chicken ranch. Had two brothers. They was always near me, always there. Used to sleep right in the same room, right in the same bed – all three. Had a strawberry patch. Had an alfalfa patch. Used to turn the chickens out in the alfalfa on a sunny morning. My brothers’d sit out on a fence rail an’ watch ’em – white chickens they was.’ 6 ‘God damn you ... Why do you got to get killed? You ain’t so little as mice.’ 7 ‘You god-damn tramp ... You done it, di’n’t you? I s’pose you’re glad. Ever’body knowed you’d mess things up. You wasn’t no good. You ain’t no good now, you lousy tart.’ 8 ‘OK, Machine. I’ll talk to you later. I like machines.’ 9 ‘You crazy bastard. You ain’t fit to lick the boots of no rabbit. You’d forget ’em and let ’em go hungry. That’s what you’d do.’ 10 ‘I tol’ you, “Min’ George because he’s such a nice fella an’ good to you.” But you don’t never take no care. You do bad things.’ 11 ‘This ain’t no good place. I wanna get outa here.’ 12 ‘But I’ll be on our own place, an’ I’ll be let to work on our own place.’ 2007 Exam paper 1. Describe an important change that happened to ONE character or individual in the text. Explain why this change was important. 2. Describe an important event at (or near) the end of the text. Explain how this event helped you understand an idea (or ideas) in the text. 3. Describe an idea (or ideas) in the text that you found interesting. Explain why you found this idea (or ideas) interesting. 4. Describe an important character or individual in the text. Explain why he or she was important in the text. 5. Describe at least TWO techniques used to make a character or individual in the text interesting. Explain why these techniques made the character or individual interesting. Note: “Techniques” could include language, structure and / or narrative point-of-view. 6. Describe an important aspect of setting in the text. Explain how it helped you understand a key idea (or ideas) in the text. Note: “Setting” may refer to time and / or place. Exemplar: Part One It is the purpose of this essay to describe a memorable setting in the novel “Of Mice and Men” by John Steinbeck and explain how it helped me understand an idea in the text. The memorable setting in this text is the ranch in California during the 1930s where the main protagonists, George Milton and Lennie Small, worked during this novel. The idea that it helped me to understand is loneliness, the dominant theme in this novel. The following essay will discuss this setting in detail and explain how it helped me to understand the idea of loneliness. A memorable setting in the novel “Of Mice and Men” was the ranch where George and Lennie worked. The ranch in California, America, was isolated from the nearest town of Soledad, which ironically means “loneliness”. This isolation of the ranch was exemplified when, in the first section of the text, George became exasperated at the bus driver who dropped them off in Soledad, saying that the ranch was “Jes’ a little stretch down the highway” when it turned out to be a lot longer. The solitude of the ranch is confirmed when it was the only location in the novel. The characters were described as having gone “into town” but the plot is never set there. Essay: Part 2 The time period in which this novel was set is also important. Although it was not directly mentioned, the Great Depression of the 1930s was full of hardships, financially and socially. Many men, including George and Lennie, and most of the characters in the novel, had to travel around as itinerant workers, trying to get enough “jack” to build the foundations for the American dream. Because they did not stay at each ranch for a long period of time, they could not bond with any other men because they would just have to leave again. Therefore, people became lonely and emotionally isolated from others. The setting in “Of Mice and Men” of the Californian ranch in the 1930s, helped me to understand the idea of loneliness. This idea is important is the novel when most of the characters that Steinbeck has developed gave some indication of the loneliness and isolation they felt. For George and Lennie, their relationship was built on the fear of being alone. Lennie, a cumbersome man who had the mind of a child, looked to George for guidance, and George had Lennie for company. Their relationship was special because they had companionship in their lives, unlike most other people at the ranch and in the 1930s. Part 3 George often said, “We’ve got a future, we got somebody to talk to who gives a damn about us.” They would travel around together to earn money to own their own farm with crops and animals, and to ultimately have independence and control over their lives. Candy, the old “swamper” at the ranch, had companionship in his life too until one day he had to make the decision to have his dog shot. This was a prophetic scene, given the choice that George had to make in the climax of the novel to shoot his only friend Lennie. After this, they realised that such paradises of freedom, contentment and safety are not to be found in this world. The setting helped one to understand this idea of loneliness which was equivalent to the loneliness that the characters felt. In conclusion, “Of Mice and Men” the setting of the ranch in California, America, in the 1930s helped me to understand the idea of loneliness. This theme has been woven throughout the setting, relationships and character, of which we have seen examples. The setting in “Of Mice and Men” is an important aspect of the text. Why didn’t it achieve Excellence? Next Steps The student could • pay more attention to the word ‘memorable’ in the question. Use quotation more frequently to provide more precise evidence • explain more clearly what he/she learnt about loneliness – the ‘idea of loneliness’ is rather vague Lesson 13 Essay Planning: Character • Goal: To be able to plan essays on character, as required in the examination • Starter: G/W: A & B Complete ABCD character profiles for George C & D ditto for Lennie (As grid, list or mind-map) • Swap ideas Lennie Small Appearance Huge, describe using animal imagery – ‘snorting like a horse’ hands like ‘bear’s paws’ Slow moving, hulking Behaviour Character Dialogue Model Essay Plan 4. Describe an important character or individual in the text. Explain why he or she was important in the text. • • • • Step One: What are the key words in this question? Step Two: Planning – teacher modelling Step Three: The introduction – HURRY! Step four: The essay proper. Describe Lennie and explain why he was important Planning options: Mind-Map Or List Or Grid The right one is the one that’s right for you Teacher Modelling Listen and copy down the example of an essay plan. You can choose any style of planning that you like, as long as it addresses all parts of the question. Model introduction Model S.E.X.Y (Or S.X.Y) paragraph. Lesson 14: Theme Questions • Goal: To consolidate your understanding of the themes of the novel, and how to plan and write essays. Starter: How do the following quotations link to the ideas or themes of ‘Of Mice and Men’? 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. ‘I seen the guys that go around on the ranches all alone. That ain’t no good. … After a while they get mean.’ ‘Think I don’t like to talk to somebody once and a while?’ ‘But I’ll be on our own place, an’ I’ll be let to work on our own place.’ ‘Live of the fatta the lan’ ‘I think I knowed from the very start we’d never do her.’ Group Planning Describe an idea (or ideas) in the text that you found interesting. Explain why you found this idea (or ideas) interesting. • Discussion – what are the key words of this question? How would you approach it? • Group plan: Recorder to note down group’s ideas • Review from yesterday’s lesson: How do I introduce my essay? • S.E.X.Y (Or S.X.Y. or P.E.A. essay time) Write the introduction and first two paragraphs of your essay • Group assessment – can whose essay does the best job of addressing the question, and adds the most thoughtful and detailed ‘your analysis’ Lesson 15: Consolidating essay planning and writing • Goal: To be able to produce excellent quality exam plans and essays, under timed conditions. • Starter: Group discussion – how does the time the novel was set, help to reinforce the ideas of loneliness and dreams? Your Turn: • Plan an answer to the following question – you have exactly 10 minutes and are looking to provide the basis for 4 SXY paragraphs. Describe an important aspect of setting in the text. Explain how it helped you understand a key idea (or ideas) in the text. Note: “Setting” may refer to time and / or place. Now write the introduction and first paragraph of this essay. Hint: You have a sample essay on this topic: steal some ideas from it if you need to. Your Turn: • Plan an answer to the following question – you have exactly 10 minutes and are looking to provide the basis for 4 S.E.X.Y (Or SXY) paragraphs. 2. Describe an important event at (or near) the end of the text. Explain how this event helped you understand an idea (or ideas) in the text. Now write the introduction and first paragraph of this essay. Hint: Comment on how the ending reinforces the two main themes of the text. Homework Complete ONE A4 page of revision notes for Of Mice and Men. You will be able to use this in your mock examination TOMORROW. You may include anything you wish, including quotations and notes on how to write essays. Lesson 16: Assessment • Goal: To write an examination essay the best shows your understanding of the text. • Starter: Critical vocabulary spelling test Achievement Criteria Achievement Show understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Achievement with Merit Achievement with Excellence Show convincing understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Show perceptive understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Vocabulary and phrases for ‘Your Analysis’ 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. Suggests Implies connotes emphasises Reinforces Strengthens the idea of This creates a sense of Creates an image of Contrasts with Helps to characterise … Instructions • Choose ONE topic. Make sure you understand both parts of the topic before you start writing. • Complete the box at the top of page 3. • Write ONE essay of at least 250 words for your answer. • Make sure you answer both parts of the topic. Each part is equally important to help you show understanding of the text. • Support your points with specific details and quotations from the text. TOPICS (Choose ONE) 1. Describe a choice made by a character or individual in the text. Explain how this choice brought about a change in that character or individual. 2. Describe an important idea you learned about in the text. Explain why this idea was worth learning about. 3. Describe an experience or event that was important to a character or individual in the text. Explain why this experience or event was important to that character or individual. 4. Describe an important time or place in the text. Explain why this time or place is important in the text. 5. Describe a strong relationship between at least TWO characters or individuals in the text. Explain how this relationship helped you understand these characters or individuals. 6. Describe an important scene or event at (or near) the beginning of the text. Explain how this scene or event helped you understand an idea (or ideas) in the text. Planning Time I will be marking your plan. You may use your study notes for your planning and essay. Your plan will generate better marked for your essay. 10 Minutes – Go!!!! Essay Time • Go – you have 30 minutes – watch the clock closely – I won’t be giving you time checks – it’s your job to manage your time. Achievement Criteria Achievement Show understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Achievement with Merit Achievement with Excellence Show convincing understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Show perceptive understanding of specified aspect(s) of extended written text(s) using supporting evidence. Assessment Feedback WWW Responsive and thoughtful comments made Perceptive and original ideas offered A very good understanding of the text shown Very well structured SXY paragraphs Very good use of examples and quotations as evidence Excellent links to the major themes of the text Detailed analysis, exploring layers of meaning Good use of literary and analytical language Assessment Feedback WWW 1. Very good use of examples and quotations as evidence 2. A very good understanding of the text shown 3. Very well structured SXY paragraphs 4. Responsive and thoughtful comments made 5. Good use of literary and analytical language 6. Excellent links to the major themes of the text 7. Perceptive and original ideas offered 8. Detailed analysis, exploring layers of meaning Assessment Feedback EBI Be careful to be accurate when giving an example of an incident from the story Use quotations as evidence Avoid repeating phrases and vocabulary too much Develop the ‘you analyse’ part of sxy paragraphs more by using connectives such as ‘moreover’ to expand your comments Aim for at least three sxy paragraphs, as well as a brief intro and conclusion Read the question carefully and do exactly what it asks of you. Answer both parts of the question Avoid repeating quotations or ideas Try to make more links to the themes of the texts Strive to be perceptive – show that you understand how effective the writer’s techniques and ideas are Avoid lengthy summary of the story Manage your time more carefully. Make sure your choice of quotation suits the point you’re making Answer the question, rather than just writing down everything you know about a character Respond to the exact demands of the question – if it asks for ‘a’ challenge, write about one Explain your ideas fully Be sure to briefly explain what is happening in a quotation Make sure you are clear in answering the first part of the question Revise SXY paragraph structure and use it consistently Which of these comments apply Use a formal style when writing essays to your essay? Pick three. 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. 11. 12. 13. 14. 15. 16. 17. 18. 19. 20. Make sure your choice of quotation suits the point you’re making Answer the question, rather than just writing down everything you know about a character Respond to the exact demands of the question – if it asks for ‘a’ challenge, write about one Explain your ideas fully Be sure to briefly explain what is happening in a quotation Make sure you are clear in answering the first part of the question Revise SXY paragraph structure and use it consistently Use a formal style when writing essays Be careful to be accurate when giving an example of an incident from the story Use quotations as evidence Avoid repeating phrases and vocabulary too much Develop the ‘you analyse’ part of sxy paragraphs more by using connectives such as ‘moreover’ to expand your comments Aim for at least three sxy paragraphs, as well as a brief intro and conclusion Read the question carefully and do exactly what it asks of you. Answer both parts of the question Avoid repeating quotations or ideas Try to make more links to the themes of the texts Strive to be perceptive – show that you understand how effective the writer’s techniques and ideas are Avoid lengthy summary of the story Manage your time more carefully.