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Euro Studies 3.09.15
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Today’s Learning Objectives:
 I can understand how to
revise my thesis
statement and methods
of outlining.
Today’s Agenda:
 Thesis
Statements
 Outlining
HW:
Sophomore
Project
Sophomore Research Project
Thesis Statements: The
good, the bad, & the ugly
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A strong thesis statement takes some sort of stand.
Remember that your thesis needs to show your conclusions about a
subject. For example, if you are writing a paper for a class on fitness, you
might be asked to choose a popular weight-loss product to evaluate.
– There are some negative and positive aspects to the Banana Herb
Tea Supplement.
2. A strong thesis statement justifies discussion.
Your thesis should indicate the point of the discussion.
– My family is an extended family.
3. A strong thesis statement expresses one main idea.
Readers need to be able to see that your paper has one main point. If your
thesis statement expresses more than one idea, then you might confuse
your readers about the subject of your paper.
– Companies need to exploit the marketing potential of the Internet,
and Web pages can provide both advertising and customer
support.
4. A strong thesis statement is specific.
A thesis statement should show exactly what your paper will be about, and
will help you keep your paper to a manageable topic
– World hunger has many causes and effects.
What do you think???
• The Renaissance sparked in European minds
the transformation of artists into individual
achievers and artwork into a form of expression.
• The Black Death was an extremely influential
part of Europe’s history which negatively
impacted the economic, religious, and personal
aspects of Europe and its people.
The Bad…
• The Renaissance sparked in European minds
the transformation of artists into individual
achievers and artwork into a form of expression.
• The Black Death was an extremely influential
part of Europe’s history which negatively
impacted the economic, religious, and personal
aspects of Europe and its people.
Too broad…get specific
What do you think???
• The public’s demand for the destruction of the
Berlin Wall led to the eventual reunification of
Germany.
• The pentathlon event was one of the original
events from the Ancient Olympics and remains
as a part of the Modern Olympics representing,
as it has changed over time, the change in what
society thinks is most important in athletics.
The Bad
• Too specific—you need to find a balance…might
be great for a BODY THESIS STATEMENT…
• The public’s demand for the destruction of the
Berlin Wall led to the eventual reunification of
Germany.
• The pentathlon event was one of the original
events from the Ancient Olympics and remains
as a part of the Modern Olympics representing,
as it has changed over time, the change in what
society thinks is most important in athletics.
What do you think???
• The French Revolution was an epoch of
progression and downfall which is
progressively reflected in governmental
aspects of France throughout history.
The Bad
• Too obvious—if you get to the end, and
there’s no new information…
• The French Revolution was an epoch of
progression and downfall which is
progressively reflected in governmental
aspects of France throughout history.
What do you think???
• The bombing of Pearl Harbor indirectly caused the Cold
War because it drew America into WWII, creating two
superpowers that split Europe between two new factions.
• The modifications made to the Olympics throughout
history fostered its purpose by establishing peaceful
relations among European nations, which consequently
improved their economy.
• As the industrial revolution progressed, and with the
protection from governments in place recognizing the
plight of women, women in the workforce began to feel
empowered and their lives became more manageable.
The Ugly
• Un-provable—hypothetical, inaccurate, or dealing with
feelings are not provable arguments…
• The bombing of Pearl Harbor indirectly caused the Cold
War because it drew America into WWII, creating two
superpowers that split Europe between two new factions.
• The modifications made to the Olympics throughout
history fostered its purpose by establishing peaceful
relations among European nations, which consequently
improved their economy.
• As the industrial revolution progressed, and with the
protection from governments in place recognizing the
plight of women, women in the workforce began to feel
empowered and their lives became more manageable.
What do you think???
• The injustice in Lenin’s life paralleled the
conditions in Russia, fueling Lenin to lead the
revolution that would change the face of Russian
politics.
• The Continental System, in combination with
events of the Napoleonic Wars, proved to be a
key factor that would eventually help Britain to
lead the way in the Industrial Revolution.
• The fall of the Berlin Wall, optimistically foreseen
as the final step of German unification, proved to
be in reality the beginning of an arduous
struggle for the two nations to economically and
socially unite.
The Good
• Specific and provable
• The injustice in Lenin’s life paralleled the conditions in
Russia, fueling Lenin to lead the revolution that would
change the face of Russian politics.
• The Continental System, in combination with events of
the Napoleonic Wars, proved to be a key factor that
would eventually help Britain to lead the way in the
Industrial Revolution.
• The fall of the Berlin Wall, optimistically foreseen as the
final step of German unification, proved to be in reality
the beginning of an arduous struggle for the two nations
to economically and socially unite.
OUTLINING
• The purpose of outlining is to get all of your ideas
organized before you start writing the actual paper.
– This should help ensure that:
•your main ideas are clear and connected
•your arguments are supported with evidence
•you are writing in logical order
• An outline is the structure the BODY of your paper. Do
not outline your introduction or conclusion.
• Your research question and thesis statement must be
at the TOP of your outline. Every part of your outline
must connect back to your thesis statement.
General Outlining Format
• All outlines should have the thesis as the first component.
– Without the main thesis present, the rest of the outline has
little meaning.
• Introductions and conclusions are not a part of a formal MLA
outline
– You will only outline the BODY of the paper.
• A formal outline has complete sentences for the thesis statement
and the topic sentences
– The other components of the outline should be complete
pieces of information, but do not necessarily have to be in
sentence structure.
The Format, a three-level outline
Research Question
Thesis
Title
I. First Level (body thesis)
A. Second Level (general evidence - cited)
1. Third Level (further specific evidence and/or connection of evidence
to body
thesis – ie: analysis – cited if necessary)
B. Second Level
1. Third Level
2. Third Level
C. Second Level
II. First Level
A. Second Level
1. Third Level
2. Third Level
B. Second Level
1. Third Level
2. Third Level
 Every subordinate level must directly support the level above it.
Full Sentence Outlines
• At the Roman numeral level of your outline
(level one), you will have a full sentence
– The Roman numeral levels of your outline are
your body theses
– These may or may not correspond to the
paragraphs of your paper
• You may have more paragraphs than Roman
numerals this is because some body theses lend
themselves to more than one paragraph of
information
• The only complete sentences you must have are
your body theses and your thesis statement.
• Your body theses must be an argument point.
They also must have a DIRECT and CLEAR
connection to your thesis.
• Remember you are outlining the ARGUMENT
POINTS of your paper not necessarily the
paragraphs of your paper.
– EACH ROMAN NUMERAL WILL NOT
AUTOMATICALLY EQUAL ONE PARAGRAPH.
THINK OF THEM AS SECTIONS OR TOPICS
WITHIN YOUR THESIS…
What’s EXPECTED
You will have a typed THREE level outline. Include the following
in your typed outline:
1) Full MLA Heading, Title, Research Question, Thesis at the top of the
outline
2) Level One - Roman Numerals: Body Thesis (a complete sentence
and be absolutely sure that this sentence directly relates to
your thesis)
3) Level Two - Capital Letters: Think Evidence/Support/Facts (and be
absolutely sure that the evidence relates to your body thesis)
4) Level Three—Arabic numbers: think analysis that supports your
evidence relating back to the thesis
Notes:
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Outlines do not need to be double spaced
For all researched information – cite the source in your outline as
though you are citing in an essay
You may include a works cited page for feedback, this will be a
requirement when your final paper is turned in. RECOMMENDED…