Essay Review
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Review of Jane Schaeffer Model
5 paragraph model: introduction, 3 body
paragraphs, conclusion
 Introduction: Hook, state author and title,
and THESIS STATEMENT
 Body Paragraphs: topic sentence, concrete
detail lead in, concrete detail (QUOTE),
commentary.
 Conclusion: restate thesis, make real
world connection
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***Make sure you have two chunk
paragraphs!!!***
Thesis Statements
 Goes
at end of introduction
paragraph
 Restates question
 Lists what each of your body
paragraphs will be about
 Ex: What is your favorite food?
– My favorite food is pizza because it
tastes delicious, you can put lots of
toppings on it, and it can be healthy.
Topic Sentence
 Mini
thesis statement: simply tells
what the paragraph is going to be
about
 EX: (BAD) One topping you can put
on pizza is jalapenos.
(GOOD) Pizza is amazing because
you can put lots of different toppings,
such as jalapenos, pickles, pepperoni,
and mushrooms.
Low Scores
Summarizing! All the teachers have
already read the story; we don’t need you
to re-tell it to us!
– Easiest way to avoid summarizing is to
use quotes!
 Not having a thesis statement or topic
sentences
 Not finishing (have all 5 paragraphs, even
if they are not the best)
 Only 1 chunk paragraphs
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Sample
 Prompt:
Who is responsible for the
tragedy in Macbeth?
 You can either pick 3 characters and
write one paragraph on each
character
OR
Pick one character and discuss 3 traits
MAKE AN OUTLINE
Thesis: The three characters responsible for the tragedy in Macbeth
are Macbeth, Lady Macbeth, and King Duncan.
Macbeth is
responsible
because he kills
many characters
and is super
paranoid
Quote #1
Quote #2
Lady Macbeth is
responsible
because she
convinces
Macbeth to kill
Duncan, and she
helps him cover up
his crimes
Quote #1
Quote #2
King Duncan is
responsible
because he
promotes
Macbeth, and is
too trusting
Quote #1
Quote #2
MAKE AN OUTLINE
Thesis: Macbeth is responsible for the tragedy in Macbeth because he
is ambitious, paranoid, and easily manipulated
Macbeth is too
ambitious because
he wants to be King
and he doesn’t want
anyone to threaten
his power
Quote #1
Quote #2
Macbeth is paranoid
because he doesn’t
trust anyone and kills off
all his allies who he
thinks might threaten
him
Quote #1
Quote #2
Macbeth is easily
manipulated by both
Lady Macbeth and the
3 witches
Quote #1
Quote #2
Make Sure You…
 Don’t
summarize!
 Have 2 chunk paragraphs!
 Finish all 5 paragraphs
 Have a thesis statement and topic
sentences!
3 day outline
 Tuesday:
read the story and create
an outline
 Wednesday: write out your rough
draft
 Thursday: re-write rough draft with
any editing for your final draft