What is Revision
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 Re-Vision-looking at something already seen, but
from a new perspective.
 Ex: When Hollywood likes to remake a film, the
intention is to see it from a new pair of eyes
potentially making it better
 Re-Vision is looking at what we’ve put on paper, but
trying to make it better.
Breaking Down Revision
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 A. Content
 B. Structure
Do we understand what each paragraph is
trying to do?
Is your paper easy to follow?
Does each paragraph build off of the thesis
statement?
Part of revision is re-evaluating the content of
our papers; what is and isn’t necessary?
During the revision process, it’s important
that our papers are structurally sound; the
arguments in your body paragraphs build off
of your thesis statement, but the paper has to
be coherent and easy to follow
Examples of Content & Structure
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 Thesis Statement: Obesity is the leading health issue in the United States.
 1st Paragraph Sentence Error: Obesity is defined as being immensely
overweight.
 Note: We are not trying to define obesity; we are only trying to prove why it’s
major health issue.
 1st Paragraph Sentence Correction: People do not pay attention to what they
are eating.
 Note: This revised idea works, because it’s an argument branched off of the
thesis statement.
C. Grammar/Punctuation
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 After solidifying our arguments, it’s important we go back and
fix our grammatical errors.
 Ways to Self-Edit:
 Say your sentences out loud—great trick for wordiness.
 Break Grammar Down into Categories: Commas, Spelling
Errors, Passive Voice, etc.
 DO NOT RELY ON SPELL CHECK!!!!!!!!