10/15/14
Freshman Compensation
• Florida State will be conducting a two day study of Valencia and would like to
speak with students about the need for developmental education
• Students will receive a $25 gift card for participating, plus they are able to voice
their opinions about the need for developmental education.
The focus group will take place on Tuesday Oct. 21,
• 1-2pm
• 2:15-3:15pm
• 3:30-4:30pm
• Location: West, Special events center (Building 8)
• Students will get a phone call reminder on Monday night Oct. 20.
Opportunity to Voice Your
Opinion
• Pass out Graded Assignments
• Pass out and Go Over Works Cited Partner Activity
– Clarify Correct Answers
• Complete Additional MLA citation practice exercise
• Peer Review of Draft of Definition Essay on
Courage
What to Expect
Go Over Works Cited Partner
Activity – Clarify Correct Answers
Two or Three Authors:
Rule: Format: First listed author's name, last name first, next listed author's name(s) in
normal form.
Full book title (italics). City of publication: Publisher's name, year of publication. Print.
Preziosi, Donald and Louise A. Hitchcock. Aegean Art and Architecture.
Oxford: Oxford University Press, 1999.Print
Issue 1: Citing sources with two authors
RULE:
Format: If there is an editor rather than an author, list the editor
first.
EXAMPLE:
Paula, Byers K., ed. Encyclopedia of World Biography. Detroit: Gale
Research, 1997. Print.
Finley, M.I., ed. Atlas of Classical Archaeology. New York: McGrawHill, 1977. Print.
Issue 2: Citing sources with editor
rather than author
RULE:
Format: Author's name, last name first. "Article title". Publication
title (Italics). Date of publication:
page numbers. Print.
Daly, Devin. "Sources of Disgust." Newsweek. 12 Nov. 2009: 40-42. Print.
Bertelsen, Ann and Daniel Gregory. “Palo Alto Idea House.” Sunset.
Sept 2002. 107-8. Print.
Issue 3: Citing magazine article
with two authors
RULE:
Format: The most basic entry for a journal consists of the author name(s),
article title, journal name, volume number, year published, page numbers,
and medium.
Last Name, First Name. "Article Title." Journal Name Volume Number(Year
Published): Page Numbers. Medium.
Rich, Tina, Rachel L. Allen and Andrew H. Wylie. “Defying death after
DNA damage.” Nature 407 (2000):777-83.
Print.
Issue 4: Citing journal article with multiple
authors
RULE:
Wikipedia MLA Citation Template
“Article Title.” Wikipedia: The Free Encyclopedia. Wikimedia Foundation,
Inc., date last updated
(DD Month YYYY). Web. Date accessed (DD Month YYYY). <URL>
(URL is optional)
“Amaranth.” Wikipedia, The Free Encyclopedia. Wikipedia Foundation. 5 Jan
2014. Web. 10 Jan 2014
Issue 5: Citing a Wiki
RULE:
The Social Network. Dir. David Fincher. Perfs. Jesse Eisenberg, Andrew
Garfield and Justin Timberlake. Columbia
Pictures, 2010. Film.
Issue 6: Citing a Film
More Practice –
• Pass out MLA Citation Resource
• Complete Works Cited Practice
Activity
• Exchange with Partner -Works Cited
Practice Activity
• Go over answers
• Take a look at Your Works Cited
Page in Your Definition Essay
• Make any corrections in pencil or
pen, based on your additional
understanding of MLA
Determining Credibility of
Sources (Online)
Why is it Important to
Evaluate Credibility?
• When a writer uses a book or published article as a source in a
research paper, there are not many questions to ask about the
credibility of that source. Many editors have gone through the
evaluation process before publication. Using books and the
library databases as your first line of research options is a good
strategy.
• The Web, however, is different. Anyone can put any
information on the Web, and sometimes information looks
more credible at first glance than it is on closer inspection.
• Ask yourself, "Is this source credible?" every time you
choose a Web source. This is especially true of sources with
no author or organizational affiliation. You will likely have to
navigate to the homepage of the site to judge its credibility
Why is it Important to
Evaluate Credibility?
Checklists available:
http://www.lib.umd.edu/binaries/content/assets/public/usere
ducation/evaluating-web-sites-checklist-form.pdf
Determining Credibility of
Online Sources
How do you determine if a source is credible? You can evaluate the
reliability and scholarship of information you find both online and in
print by using these guidelines:
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URL
Authorship
Publisher
Accuracy and objectivity
Timeliness
Sponsorship
Determining Credibility of
Online Sources
• Pass out Handouts on Determining Credibility of
Online Sources including Sample Checklist
Guidelines
• What is the URL?
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Guidelines
Who is the Author?
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Guidelines
Sites that appear to be news media but aren't
• Examiner.com - the content is by amateur writers and lacks editorial
oversight (not to be confused with the San Francisco Examiner) (see
1, 2, 3)
• Associated Content (not to be confused with the Associated Press)
• Articlesnatch.com
• The Onion - in a few high profile incidents this satirical news site
was mistaken for news media by non-English countries
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Guidelines
Scholarly journals
Scholarly journals are normally reliable sources, but some journals have a reputation
for bias or unreliability. QuackWatch has a list of non-recommended periodicals,
however, a short list of journals which should be used with extreme caution include:
• Journal of American Physicians and Surgeons (JPandS), publishes from an
unscientific, right-wing viewpoint
• Rivista di Biologia, edited by Giuseppe Sermonti, noted for publishing fringe
theories
• Medical Hypotheses, non-peer reviewed and known for unscientific content
• Energy & Environment, edited by and published in by climate change skeptics
• Medical Veritas: The Journal of Medical Truth, published by Medical Veritas
International Inc., listed by Quackwatch as a "questionable organization".[1]
• Mankind Quarterly
Determining Credibility of Online Sources
Let’s practice determining whether the sources on the
next series of slides are credible.
Topic: Leonardo da Vinci’s Mona Lisa
Credibility Practice
Source 1
http://www.metmuseum.org/toah/hd/leon/hd_le
on.htm
Source 1
http://www.metmuseum.org/toah/hd/leon/hd_le
on.htm
http://www.academia.edu/5656292/_Whats_Behind_the_Mona
_Lisa_in_the_Walters_Art_Museum_
Source 2
Source 2 (continued)
Source 2 (continued)
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mona_Lisa
Source 3
Source 3 (continued)
• http://www.nbcnews.com/science/science-news/mona-lisaresearchers-work-find-woman-behind-famous-painting-n93491
Source 4
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Source 4 (continued)
http://www.nbcnews.com/science
/science-news/mona-lisaresearchers-work-find-womanbehind-famous-painting-n93491
https://answers.yahoo.com/
question/index?qid=100605
2329267
Source 5
Pass Out and Review
Lessons Learned on
Descriptive Essays
The Guitarist - Picasso
Harriet Tubman and the
Underground Railway by Paul
Collins
1925 Los Angeles by Leonardo
Afremov
At Eternity’s Gate
Van Gogh
1925 Los Angeles by Leonardo
Afremov
Gettysburg – Paul Philippoteaux
Dances by Arthur
Bowen Davies
Alfred Eisenstaedt's Day
in Times Square
V-Day 1945
Cover of Album Dosage
by Collective Soul
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The Intellectual Primate
Life in the Early World
I Walk A Lonely Road
Pieces of Who I Am
Nature is Our Mother
The Freedom Warrior
This Poor Soul
A Land of Tomorrow
The Escape
Cool Titles
• Have you ever been in a place where you are different from everyone
else and feel as if you don’t belong there?....Looking at two children
holding hands can be interpreted many different ways in the early
1900s.
• How smart are primates compared to humans? At what rate is their
intellect increasing?
• What kind of art do you consider old?
• The barren leaves plummet one by one without muttering a word
each time they drop into the pool of utter emptiness. People walk by
ignoring me, turning their heads the other way just so they do not
have to face me. All I am asking for is love; to be noticed and
nurtured, but I just cannot seem to get anyone’s attention no matter
how much effort I put into it. ……
• Have you ever seen an image that is so unique it makes you want to
question its meaning more deeply?
Great Opening Lines
• When you look at a person from the outside, you see
nothing but what they want you to see. No one will ever
see the true person unless that person allows them to..
• Who are the culprits who left this polar bear and its cub
on a sheet of ice and snow in the middle of the ice-cold
ocean?
• What happens to us when we die?
• Imagine the stench of cannon sulfur mixed with the smell
of rotting flesh!
Great Opening Lines
• Put title of painting in quotation marks:
"Still Life with Geraniums" (Matisse, 1910) is one of the most
exquisite artisan paintings.
• When considering the title of your essay, don’t simply use the
title of the painting – tie the title into the meaning you feel the
work conveys
Lessons
Sentence Fragments
Lessons – Common Errors
A sentence must have a subject, verb, and complete
thought.
Andre practiced jump shots to impress
Coach Nelson.
Andre = subject,
practiced = verb,
and the thought =
complete, so you
have a sentence.
Recognize a fragment when
you see one.
Andre
As
And
Andre
spun
spinning
spun
spun
the
theball
the
ball
the
to
ball
to
ball
show
show
totoshow
off
show
offhis
his
offoff
skills.
his
skills.
his
skills.
Now
Finally
there’s
! Ano
Yikes
Spinning
! Now≠the
a
subject, asoverb,
you
thought
is not
verb,
so you
have
and
stilla have
complete
a
a fragment
complete! !
fragment
thought! .
Recognize fused sentences and
comma splices.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court
court
unfortunately
coach’s
turned.
unfortunately the the
coach’s
backback
waswas
turned.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court,
court,
unfortunately
coach’s
turned.
unfortunately the the
coach’s
backback
waswas
turned.
Youcannot
cannot
You
run
join two
together
two
sentences with
sentences
with
noa punctuation!
comma!
Fix the error with a period
and a capital letter.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court.
court
Unfortunately,
the coach’s
turned.
unfortunately the coach’s
backback
was was
turned.
Swish
goes the
period!
Fix the error with a comma and
a coordinating conjunction.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court
court,
but
the coach’s
wasback
turned.
unfortunately
theback
coach’s
was turned.
Be my
FANBOYS —
for, and, nor,
but, or, yet,
and so.
Fix the error with a
semicolon.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court
court;
unfortunately,
the coach’s
turned.
unfortunately the coach’s
backback
was was
turned.
Use the
semicolon
sparingly — 3
to 4 times per
essay, max.
Fix the error with a
subordinate conjunction.
Andre sank a perfect basket from half court after
unfortunately
the
coach’s back
the was
coach’s
turned.
back was turned.
Reduce one
of the two
clauses to an
incomplete
thought.
Let’s Practice
A Maria wasn't watching her plate of barbecue very
carefully. B So Santana, the family beagle, snatched a
chicken leg hanging over the edge. C As baked beans and
potato salad slid onto Maria's new sandals.
Which one is Fragment?
C As baked beans and potato salad slid onto Maria's new
sandals.
How to Fix It:
Maria wasn't watching her plate of barbecue very carefully so Santana,
the family beagle, snatched a chicken leg hanging over the edge. Baked
beans and potato salad slid onto Maria's new sandals.
Fragment and Fix
A Ever since Andre peeked at Melissa's paper during the
biology exam. B Guilt has consumed him. C Even the
blueberries floating in his cereal bowl seem like the
accusing eyes of Dr. Gregory, his microbiology instructor.
Which one is Fragment?
A Ever since Andre peeked at Melissa's paper during the biology
exam.
How to Fix It:
Ever since Andre peeked at Melissa's paper during the biology exam,
guilt has consumed him.
Fragment and Fix
A James opened the door of his cluttered refrigerator. B Which
caused a pint of blueberries to fall to the floor. C The fruit bounced and
rolled everywhere in an explosion of indigo.
Which one is Fragment?
B Which caused a pint of blueberries to fall to the floor.
How to Fix It:
James opened the door of his cluttered refrigerator which caused a pint
of blueberries to fall to the floor.
Fragment and Fix
C But was too shy to raise her hand and volunteer an answer.
She understood the fragment practice that Mrs. Markham was going
over in class but was too shy to raise her hand and volunteer an answer.
Fragment and Fix
A Head down, Lela stared at the textbook on her desk. B She understood
the fragment practice that Mrs. Markham was going over in class. C But
was too shy to raise her hand and volunteer an answer.
Which one is Fragment?
Complete Practice Exercise on Fragments,
Comma Splices and Fused Sentences
Exchange with a Partner and grade
Completed Practice Exercise on
Fragments, Comma Splices and Fused
Sentences
The dogs drooled while we ate slices of hot
The dogs drooled
drooled
whilewe
weate
ateslices
slicesofofhot
hot
Awhile
pizza but the catAfeigned nonchalance even
pizzaBbut
pizza
butthe
thecat
catfeigned
feignednonchalance
nonchalance
even
C even
B we knew that she wanted aCpepperoni.
though
though we knew that she wanted a pepperoni.
A. drooled. While
A.
While
B. drooled.
pizza, but
B.
but
C. pizza,
nonchalance.
Even
C.
Even
D. nonchalance.
No change is necessary.
1 is necessary.
D. Item
No change
Item 2
Mary Ellen screamed,
screamed,her
herroommate’s
roommate’spet
pet
tarantula crawled out of the bag of popcorn.
A. screamed her
B. screamed; because, her
C. screamed
screamed as
asher
her
D. No change is necessary.
Running late with dinner,
dinner,Elizabeth
Elizabethfussed
fussedwith
with
A
seasonings and
seasonings
andwiped
wipedspots
spotsoff
offthe
the
B
glasses. While
glasses.
Whilethe
thefamily
familystared
staredatattheir
theirempty
empty
CC
plates.
A. dinner; Elizabeth
B. seasonings, and
3 while
C.Item
glasses
glasses
while
D. No change is necessary.
Item 4
Everyone scrambled off the lakeside patio.
patio. When
When
the 10-foot alligator lumbered onto shore.
A. patio
patio when
when
B. patio; when
C. patio, when
D. No change is necessary.
The glass of iced tea promised thirst-quenching
refreshment Roseanne,
refreshment
Roseanne,however,
however,
had
had
to to
beat
beat
A
BB
Maria to the refrigerator
refrigeratoras
asthey
theyraced
racedthrough
through
C
the front door.
A. refreshment.
refreshment. Roseanne
Roseanne
B. however; had
5
C.Item
refrigerator;
as
D. No change is necessary.
Item 6
Warren wanted to make a good impression on
Melody but
Melody
butthe
thesoda
sodaexplosion
explosionthat
thatsoaked
soakedhis
his
shirt ruined their first meeting.
A. Melody; but, the
B. Melody;
Melody; however,
however,the
the
C. Melody, however, the
D. No change is necessary.
Item 7
Because of the hot sun,
sun, ice
icecream
creamran
randown
downthe
the
A
cone and
cone
andcoated
coatedRandall’s
Randall’sfingers,
fingers,his
his
tongue
tongue
B
CC
couldn’t keep up.
A.
B.
C.
D.
sun; ice cream
cone, and
fingers, for
fingers,
forhis
his
No change is necessary.
Item 8
Wanda took a deep breath and got ready to yell.
yell.
Because Paul
Because
Paul was
was about
about to
to explain
explain why
why his
his half
half of
of
the rent would be late again.
A. yell, because
B. yell
yell because
because
C. yell for
D. No change is necessary.
After Simon bought roses for Emily,
Emily, he
hespotted
spotted
A
Derek’s car in her driveway
drivewayand
andrealized
realizedthat
thatthis
this
B
gesture would not repair the relationship
relationshipororwin
win
C
back her love.
A. Emily. he
B. driveway. And
9
C.Item
relationship;
or
D. No change
changeisisnecessary.
necessary.
Item 10
Since Larry had studied for hours;
hours;he
hewas
was
relieved to find a big red A at the top of his
grammar quiz.
A. hours he
B. hours. He
C. hours,
hours, he
he
D. No change is necessary.
Peer Review – Definition
Essay
Peer
Peer
Devon Unterbrink
Lindsie Landrigan
Julian Scott
Nicole Mackey
Greggory Madaffari
Nicholas Ronan
Daniel Herrera
Jose Mejia Piovesan
Greggory Madaffari
Sanquanita Jones
Erica Harold
Ke Xu
Isabel Torres
Jaime Williams
Dia Shelton
Andrew Tyler
Krystin Watkins
Martin Mejia Piovesan
Daniel Boyd
Alan Zamudio
Martin Mejia Piovesan
Antonio Parkinson
Ryan Grimes
Angelol Dorcena
Peer Assignments
"Courage." Dictionary.com. Dictionary.com, n.d. Web. 13
Oct. 2014.
Examples of Citations
Examples of Citations
2 Name of Website
3 Date (in this case n.d.)
1 Word you looked up
(this is same as title of
article”
5 Date you accessed site
What do I need for the cite?
4 Medium (Web)
2 Name of Website
4 Date (in this case n.d.)
3 Publishing Org (Xplore)
5 Medium (Web)
6 Date you
accessed
site
Citing Courage Quotes by
Others
1 Author of Quote
(this is same as title of
article”
Citing Courage Quotes by Others
http://www.notable-quotes.com/c/courage_quotes.html
Citing Courage Quotes by Others
Citing Courage Quotes by Others
• Complete Final Draft of Definition Essay
• Make packet including
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Rough Draft
Peer Review Sheet
Summary of Changes You Made
Final Draft
Homework
• 75 Readings Plus
Comparison and Contrast
• Bruce Catton “Grant and Lee: A Study in Contrasts”
• Mark Twain’s “Two Views of Mississippi”
• Suzanne Britt “Neat People vs. Sloppy People”
• Bharati Mukherjee “Two Ways to Belong in America”
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