Writing Assessment Foci
CW
Writing a Horror Story: Introduce a problem
Wednesday 17th October 2012
17/10/12
Learning Objectives:
1. To be able to use the conventions of dialogue in our own
writing.
STARTER: List as many different ways of saying “said” as you can
• yelled
•whispered
Learning outcomes
Core
Extension
To be able to list
synonyms for
“said”
To be able to use
synonyms for
“said” to reflect
an emotion or
action
Write down
the underlined
words in bold!
Killer
To be able to
create an
atmosphere
through
appropriate use
of dialogue
All-write-round-robin
List as many different ways of saying “said”
Consider different emotions.
STAND UP TO SHARE
On your whiteboards: What is happening and
how is the character feeling?
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
“Who’s there?” she whispered.
“But it’s only early yet,” she pleaded
“You need to leave now!” he yelled.
“It’s beautiful!” she cried.
“There’s somebody following us,” John
muttered.
Fill in the missing word
1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
“Why are you late?” Miss O’Connor _______.
“I need to get to London,” Sophie _________.
“Chocolate is my favourite treat,” Jack _____.
“Look at the end of the garden!” Sam _____.
“Wait, it’s almost finished,” Beth ________.
Begged
Sighed
Demanded Announced
Murmured
Asked
Wailed
Laughed
Learning outcomes
Core
Extension
To be able to list
synonyms for
“said”
To be able to use
synonyms for
“said” to reflect
an emotion or
action
Killer
To be able to
create an
atmosphere
through
appropriate use
of dialogue
Golden Rules of Dialogue
1. All dialogue must be
contained in quotation
marks.
2. Before the end of the
quotation marks, you
must punctuate ( , ! ? . )
3. Include dialogue tags –
who said what and how
4. New speaker, new line
‘Who’s there?’ Mark
whispered desperately.
‘Your worst nightmare!’
replied the figure in a
low, menacing voice.
‘Please, I just want to go
home,” he begged.
APPLYING THE SKILLS
Write three – four lines of
dialogue to show either:
1. Two people alone in an
abandoned house.
2. Two people caught in a
thunderstorm.
3. Two people lost in a
forest.
Peer Assess:
1. All dialogue contained in
quotation marks.
2. Punctuated before the
end of the quotation
marks ( , ! ? . )
3. Include dialogue tags –
who said what and how
4. New speaker, new line
WWW:
EBI:
Learning outcomes
Core
Extension
To be able to list
synonyms for
“said”
To be able to use
synonyms for
“said” to reflect
an emotion or
action
Killer
To be able to
create an
atmosphere
through
appropriate use
of dialogue
Example of a problem paragraph
How can we improve it? (VCOP)
Walking towards the old door, I felt scared, but I knew we had to go in.
“Hurry up!” Sarah said. “It’s our only choice.”
Squeezing the handle, I pulled down and walked in. A light from a
candle was burning in the corner of the room. I felt for a light
switch, but could feel nothing but wet walls. I held Sarah’s hand.
Walking forward, we stopped.
“Can you hear that?” I said.
“Don’t be silly, there’s nothing there,” Sarah replied.
The light flickered more intensively and then out it went. We were
placed into darkness...
Success Criteria
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WRITING YOUR PROBLEM PARAGRAPH
Self Assessment: Red Pen Plenary
Core
Extension
To be able to list
synonyms for
“said”
To be able to use
synonyms for
“said” to reflect
an emotion or
action
Killer
To be able to
create an
atmosphere
through
appropriate use
of dialogue
WWW: I am happy because I have used ....
EBI: Next time I need to ....