Sample Essay #11
Abortion is the most controversial issue having no grounds of
agreement among two polar aspects. The argument is life and death though
the uncertainty of complication makes it difficult. I don’t believe in abortion
because it’s murder we are not the ones that can decide whether the person
that a woman gives birth to should live or die. Abortion is a life or death
matter, having equal supporters on both sides. Yet those supporters have
one goal in common: decreasing the number of abortions and making
abortion safer. Abortion is defined as the “removal of the embryo or fetus
from the uterus in order to end a pregnancy” (Dictionary.com). Abortion is
surrounded by many questions such as: Does the constitution defend a right
to abortion? Does this include confidentiality? Is a developing fetus a being?
Should the law allow abortions for rape or incest?
The Constitution permits abortion legalization. It’s not in the Bill of
Rights or the Constitution, but the right to privacy and reproductive rights is
an “enumerated right.” “The Supreme Court in 1973, Roe vs. Wade,
legalized abortion in the first trimester. Since then, over 35 million women
have had legal abortions”. Twenty-four percent of pregnancies are aborted
and forty-one percent of the abortions are teenagers in America. Just
because abortion is legal doesn’t mean it’s okay. Slavery was legal over 150
years ago but that didn’t mean it was right.
When a fetus starts living can’t be determined but according to facts,
the heart beats after 16-25 days and the brain works after 40 days. Some
people think that after conception you become a person whereas others
think otherwise. But suppose you have 50 pills on a table and one is
poisonous. Would you randomly swallow a pill not caring if it’s is a normal
pill or poison? No, you value your life so why not a fetus? The fetus could be
alive and abortion could be murder. Because abortion is legal, whether or
not the fetus lives to be born depends on people and whether the unborn are
protected by rights.
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Modified from http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20081130193305AAHUtKY
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Abortion for rape is another controversial topic. Babies born of this act
are not intended since the sexual act is forced. Many say killing these babies
is okay but is it? Pro-life is a group that goes against abortion. They claim
human life begins at conception. They believe the unborn deserve life. Even
for rape, they believe the child shouldn’t be punished for a wrong act.
Abortion may be legal in the US but Pro-Lifers hope to make an
amendment. They also support adoption. A strong base for the Pro-Life
group is religion. Most of the Pro-Lifers are Christian and statistics show that
the less religious a person is, the more likely they are to be Pro-Choice.
Pro-Choice believes women have the freedom to choose abortion. This
group believes abortion is a personally protected choice. They think if
abortion is illegal, it will increase in “back alley” abortions, or self abortions
or worse, the mother may kill the baby, as some young mothers have. They
believe the fetus is a “mass of tissue” (Wilke, 1) instead of human. ProChoice believes personhood begins after birth. They think kids should be
wanted and reducing unwanted children will lower child abuse. They also
believe the world is way overpopulated. But since when does a person’s life
depend on the amount of people in the world?
Rubric Application
GRAMMAR:
.25
LOGIC:
.5
RHETORIC:
1.25
Total =
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Explanation:
Grammar: Sentence structure ranges from awkward to incoherent and grammatically
incompetent. Clear lack of editing.
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Logic: No clear thesis statement. The arguments of this essay aren’t clearly developed and seem
not to have any logical order. Many generalized assumptions are made without explanation or
justification. Terms aren’t explained or clarified.
Rhetoric: Rhetorical devices are present, but very clumsily executed. Transitions between
paragraphs aren’t clear. Sources are utilized and quoted, but not very effectively or gracefully
(and without clear citation). The introduction doesn’t clearly present the paper’s overall purpose
and there is no actual concluding paragraph to the essay.
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