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STYLE MASTERY exercise 1
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following exercises. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
1.
It’s Fall, one of the prettiest times of the year for the Heartland Arboretum, located on the Twain State University
Campus.
2.
Maintenance staff will plant nine new species in the arboretum this month, thanks to a $2,700 donation from
Mrs. John Spencer, outgoing president of the Twain State alumni association.
3.
Spencer selected the trees from a list of desired species maintained by forester Horace Martine.
4.
They include a Fraser Fir, Balsam Fir, Trident Maple, Sweet Birch, Monarch Birch, Chinese Pine, Quaking Aspen,
Serbian Spruce and English Walnut.
5.
Most of the stock is three years old, with heights ranging from four feet to seven feet tall.
6.
Martin said he is anxious to begin planting soon since the new trees will be a stunning compliment to current
varieties.
7.
“We’ve had cites selected for each of these trees for the past two years,” he said, adding that all trees on the
desired list are planted following the master plan.
8.
105 tree species make up the arboretum, and Martin considers the specific needs of each as well as esthetic
and practical criteria when planting them.
9.
The arboretum is divided into 3 carefully maintained locations: Huck Finn Glen, Mark Twain Trail and Tom
Sawyer Meadow.
10.
Tom Sawyer Meadow, the largest area, is located in the northwest corner of campus on eleven acres of rolling
hills while Huck Finn Glen is in the center of campus, and Mark Twain Trail is Southwest of Altman Stadium.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 2
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following exercises. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
1.
Cotton candy, 4 H exhibits, tractor pulls, sideshows, the Ferris wheel and Country music are all regular features
of county fairs.
2.
So, when the week-long Cooper County Fair opens July 11th in Heartland, visitors can expect to see all those
and more.
3.
Hilda Jo Boudoin, president of the Cooper County Fair Board of Directors, says this year’s line up is the best
yet.
4.
“Two thousand and ten was a great fair,” she explained, “but this year’s is premiere in every way imaginable.”
5.
A featured attraction for 2012 is the Sons of the Pioneers, in town for a one-night, special engagement from
their Branson, MO., theatre.
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6.
Admission to the fairgrounds is free, but admission to Big Grandstand entertainment is $8 for adults and $3 for
children under seven.
7.
Carnival rides, operated by Lewellen Amusements Inc. of Andover, KS., include a Ferris wheel, Tilt-A-Whirl,
Gravitron, Spider and more.
8.
For unlimited rides, visitors can purchase either single-night arm bands at $12 for adults and $8 for children or
run-of-fair arm bands at $50 for adults and $30 for children.
9.
A half dozen food booths—with favorites such as hamburgers, hot dogs, gyros, cotton candy, caramel apples,
chicken on a stick and ice cream—should offer plenty of choices to suit every palette.
10.
Hours for the fair are 10 A.M. to 11 P.M. Monday thru Sunday.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 3
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following exercises. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
1.
A 19-year-old Heartland boy died, and a New Franklin couple were injured Friday night at 9 p.m. in a two-car
accident north of the city.
2.
Edgar S. Black Jr., of 2618 Faraon Street, was killed, and David and Cyndi Smith received minor injuries.
3.
Firemen from the Cooper County Rural Fire Department in New Franklin used the Jaws of Life to extricate Black
from his vehicle.
4.
An ambulance transported him to Heartland Memorial Hospital where Cooper County coroner Dianne Weams
pronounced him dead.
5.
David Smith, 48 complained of neck injuries, and Mrs. Smith, 44, reported some bruises on her head and
arms.
6.
The accident happened on Missouri highway 87 about three miles northwest of the city.
7.
Black’s car collided with Smith’s car, which had stopped to turn east on County Rd. 342.
8.
Corporal Seth Vaughn, of the Missouri Highway Patrol, said that none of those involved in the accident were
wearing seat belts.
9.
Cooper County Deputy Sheriff William Birdsong said, “Since this is the 3rd accident at this junction during the
past two years, we’re going to ask Highway Engineers to consider installing warning lights.”
10.
Black, the son of Mr. and Mrs. Edgar S. Black Sr., was a sophomore majoring in biology at Twain State
University.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 4
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following exercises. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
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1.
The Twain State University River Raiders win over the Northwest Mo. State University Bearcats Saturday set a
new school record.
2.
The Raiders are 9 and 0 on the season following their 24-to-21 win, beating their previous best season of 8–1,
set in 1997.
3.
The two teams had come into the contest nationally ranked, with the Raiders at No. 12 and the Bearcats at
number five.
4.
The American Football Coaches’ Association (AFCA) should release new figures for the Top 25 Division II Poll
tomorrow.
5.
Twain Head Coach Jerry Jarvis believes their performance against Northwest should push them up in the
standings, perhaps by as many as six spots—another record for the school.
6.
While both coach and team basked in the warmth of their win Sunday, it was business as usual on Monday as
Twain State prepared for Saturday’s game against another Mid-America Athletics Association team, Missouri
Southern State University.
7.
Raider quarterback Alan Newhart said both offenses started slow Saturday, but each found its groove mid-way
through the 2nd quarter.
8.
“When we face Southern,” Newhart said, “we’ll have to crank it up and come out scoring in the 1st quarter.”
9.
Though the Lions are unranked, Jarvis said it would be critical to hold them to less yards than they’ve wracked
up in their last three games.
10.
Amidst all the hoopla surrounding that dual, the game likely will settle any questions concerning the Raiders’
playoff potential.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 5
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following story. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
If you’re thinking about lighting up in Heartland after January
1, you’d better think again.
• City-owned parks and other outdoor recreational
facilities, except for stadiums, arenas or athletic fields.
A smoking ban in most public places becomes law Monday, and
City officials already have made signs to inform smokers, Mayor
Karl Shearin said. Just over 60% of voters OK’d the ban in June.
• Private offices equipped with ventilation and occupied
only by smokers unless the public and non-smoking
employees visit those areas.
The enabling ordinance, approved by the city council in
September, will prohibit smoking in public buildings accept in
the following areas:
Although the impending ban drew controversy earlier, Shearin
said opponents have been quite lately.
• Outdoor patios that restaurants, bars and other
commercial establishments have designated for smoking
as long as those areas have no more than two walls.
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“Haven’t heard a peep,” he said.
Heartland Moose Lodge Governor Marvin Pankiewitz agreed
that concerns over the ban have settled down. Officials have
notified bingo players that they must “obey to play,” he said.
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“They’ll either have to step outside or find another bingo
parlor,” Pankiewitz said.
probably will take months. Smokers will have to adjust their
habits.
Since the Moose Lodge has bingo scheduled for New Year’s
Day, he said, “we’ll be the first ones to test the ordinance.”
“I welcome it,” Sewell said. “It’ll be a good thing for Heartland.
There’s always going to be some grousing, but it’s the law
now.”
Barber Norman Wall, who runs a shop on the south side
of town, said he’s been unable to find a way to derail the
ordinance. He plans to allow a customer to smoke—if only the
two of them are in the shop.
“It’s anti-American!” Wall said. “It’s the principal of the
thing. The ones that’s put this on us, 90 percent just don’t
understand.”
Retired university Professor Sterling Sewell supports the
ban, though he believes widespread community acceptance
Police Chief Chris Anderson said he’s unsure what to expect
in terms of compliance with the ban. Officers will respond to
smoking complaints if people observe violations and call in.
Police will issue summonses to violators, though anyone
unaware of the law likely will receive a warning, he said.
Shearin said the impact of Heartland’s ban is translating to
other anti-smoking movements underway in cities across the
State.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 6
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following story. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
Shrieks fill the night air. Shrieks of “trick or treat,” that is.
Goblins, ghosts, princesses and superheroes crowd in, raising
their goodie bags for candy and sweets. Then, the Halloween
hoard is off, zipping to the next house.
though, adults should walk with their children. Heartland
Mall will have indoor trick-or-treating Thursday from 10 A.M.
to 9 P.M.
Halloween is upon us.
Hanson says to make sure your children know not to eat or
drink anything they receive until you have had a chance to
inspect it.
The trick to keeping the treat in Halloween, though, is for parents
to insure that their children are safe. Start with some tips from
Officer Gerald Hanson of the Heartland Safety Council.
“Most importantly, discourage your children from going into
people’s homes,” he cautions.
“It just takes common sense,” Hanson says, like trick-or-treating
only in your own neighborhood and going to homes of the
people you know. “Kids don’t need to travel clear across town
to have fun and gather goodies.”
Before sending your ghastly group out, host a warm-up party.
By eating before trick or treating, children will be less apt to
sample the treats they receive, he says. Some parents hold a
block party for the kids in their neighborhood.
Another safe option is taking your child to a place like a
shopping mall that has indoor trick-or-treating. Even there,
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Consider sending your goblins out early. Don’t let daylight
savings time be an excuse for children to travel streets an hour
later, he says.
When it comes to costumes, make sure they’re flame retardant
and not so long that your child trips.
“Non-toxic face paint is better than a mask because it doesn’t
block vision,” Hanson says.
Trick-or-treaters also should carry flashlights or glow sticks so
drivers can see them.
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STYLE MASTERY exercise 7
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following story. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
Power outages and downed tree limbs from Thursday’s ice
storm created dangerous conditions in Heartland and the
region.
“It was 24 hours from hell,” said chief Jack Fenner of the
Heartland Fire Dept. “We haven’t had a day like this since the
winter of 94.”
The department responded to 103 fire calls, but no firefighters
were injured, he said.
Although most fire stations were without power all day, it
wasn’t a problem because fire crews were responding to
emergencies, including two major fires, Fenner said.
Shortly after 7 a.m. Friday morning, a fire started in the furnace
area of a house at 709 S. Noyes Boulevard. The homeowner,
Erma Smith, 68 and four dogs escaped the house.
No smoke detectors were in the one-story, wood-frame house,
said Floyd Paltrow, an inspector with the Heartland Fire
Department. Firefighters reported that a cat died.
The fire consumed the house, which was valued at $60,000,
Paltrow said.
Fire and smoke caused about $80,000 dollars in damage to a
split-level ranch house at 3805 Rolling Hills Dr. The fire started
in a water heater at about 9 a.m. and caused heavy smoke
damage, Paltrow said.
Owner Tura Davis said two adults and two children in the
home escaped. The family had smoke detectors, Paltro said.
The location was outside the city limits, and no hydrants were
available. Fire department personnel had to shuttle alot of
water.
Downed limbs and power lines often forced firefighters to find
secondary routes to reach emergency locations throughout
Heartland. Downed power lines also caused smaller fires and
damaged electrical equipment during the storm, Fenner said.
Throughout the city, street crews worked to clear fallen tree
limbs. Three-man teams cut limbs and pushed the mess to
the sides of the street so traffic could get through, said George
Arnold, city emergency services coordinator.
AmerenUE warned anyone who sees a downed power line
to stay clear. Instead, call the emergency line at (800)552–
7583.
STYLE MASTERY exercise 8
DIRECTIONS: Correct errors involving all aspects of AP style, including word choice and spelling, in the following story. Some
may be correct. No need to worry about punctuation, but check the spelling of all names in the Heartland Directory.
Copper thieves are gambling with they’re lives when they
decide to illegally enter electric substations or climb utility
polls.
“The worst thing about this is that somebody runs the risk
of getting hurt for so little benefit,” said Steve Kelley, utility
regional manager in Heartland.
AmerenUE, the electric utility serving the city, has noted an
increase in the national epidemic within Heartland and is
offering a $5,000 reward for information. Heartland police also
are probing two recent incidents at electric substations that
critically injured one man and killed another.
The substations, which act as a connector point for distribution
lines in Heartland, handle electricity levels that can reach up
to 345000 volts, he said. By comparison, a household outlet is
120 volts.
AmerenUE says their workers rely on years of training before
touching anything at a substation. Thieves play Russian
Roulette in deciding what is energized and what is not.
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The number of copper thefts have increased steadily as the
price of scrap metal has risen worldwide.
Some thieves steal copper pipes and air conditioning coils
from homes or businesses under construction. Others, State
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Regulator Wess Henderson said, have resorted to tampering
with railroad signaling wire that contains copper, thus
interfering with railroad traffic.
“But (companies are) starting to take more secure efforts to
try to keep their copper locked up more than they used too,”
said Henderson, who is the executive director of the Mo. Public
Service Commission.
Measures range from increasing patrols to concealing copper
wire to lighting and video monitoring, he said.
At one of the largest metal recyclers in Heartland, copper sells
between $2.50 and $2.90/lb. That is a historical high due in
part to demand from China, Central Missouri Iron and Metal,
Inc. Buyer Lenny Leonard said.
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“Less-industrialized countries need these raw materials to
industrialize, and it’s cheaper to get them from us,” he said.
With the increase in thefts in the past few years, the recycler
has joined aconsortium of regional scrapyards that alert one
another by email when there has been a large-scale copper
theft. They also photocopy driver’s licenses of sellers for all
small quantities, he said.
The large quantities typically come from known electricians
who save their copper wiring from jobs or private buyers who
collect copper in rural areas.
Leonard said smart thieves work with less-scrupulous
scrap buyers in town or travel to Saint Louis to sell their
copper.
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