Tomaz McNeil
UNIV101
LGBT
11/26/13
LGBT EVENT
Do you know what LGBT stands for? I did not either until I went to the LGBT workshop
required for my UNIV class. I found out that it stands for lesbian, Gay, Bi-sexual, and
Transgender which is what this event spent time talking about. Before attending this
LGBT event I had no discrimination what so ever towards the LGBT community. I also
had a pretty open mind when it came to “who they are”. My perception of people that
identify as LGBT did not change at all, no matter their sexual preferences or how they
identify they are still human and are loved by other people just like you and I are. From
this workshop I learned that of all the LGBT students bullied or harassed in high school
only about 30% of those students who were bullied end up attending a college or
university. Attending this event brought up both interesting and surprising facts but for
me the most surprising of them all had to be that so many students are being bullied
because of their sexual appearance or preference and it forces them the go as far as to not
attend a higher education course. I plan on using my new found knowledge to educate
others who are ignorant to the effects of bullying LGBT identifiers. I will also use this
knowledge to better myself on the understanding that they might have had a pretty hard
time going to school with all of the bullying going on so befriend them. I’m not saying
take pity on them, I’m saying that we should look at them as a person not as a confused
creature. I believe that students in college should be aware of the LGBT issues to get an
all around better understanding of what other LGBT students are going through at school
and to learn different view points on the issues to prevent bullying. I would definitely
recommend this work for other UNIV classes throughout the year. One reason is because
it provides great information on what LGBT actually is, gender roles, transgender
definitions and a lot more information is given to those who participate in the workshop.
Another reason I would recommend this class to other classes like it is because this event
gives students a very different outlook on the touchy subject of LGBT identifiers and
how they feel on the subject. It also tries to correct any rumors that you may have heard
about sexual intercourse, the contractions of STI( sexually transmitted Infections) etc.
this was just an overall educational, interesting workshop that I am glad I attended.
Mechanics
(5 points)
Sentence Fluency
and Word Choice
(5 points)
Organization
(10 points)
Personalization
(30 points)
Informative &
Reflective Content
(50 points)
Total Possible Points: 100
Excellent
The essay addresses all
the required informative
& reflective questions
AND makes connections
to other material from
class, thus enhancing the
overall reflective quality.
(50-45)
Good
The essay addresses all
the required
informative &
reflective questions.
(44-40)
Demonstrates fresh,
original thought and
ideas. Point of view is
thoroughly explored and
clearly expressed. (3027)
Essay shows
thoughtful reflection.
Writer’s point of view
is apparent. (26-24)
Organization enhances
the main ideas.
Supporting information is
presented logically, with
no extraneous details.
Transitions are smooth.
(10-9)
Organization is
generally good, but
there may be some
extraneous details or
unclear transitions. (8)
The writing flows and
shows a high level of
sophistication. Strong and
specific words are used to
convey meaning. (5-4.5)
Generally applies
standard English usage
and appropriate word
choices. Sentences are
grammatical, but
sometimes stiff or
choppy. (4.4-4)
Proofreading is thorough.
Correct spelling and
punctuation throughout.
(5-4.5)
Contains occasional
spelling, punctuation,
and typographical
errors, but the errors
are not overly
distracting. (4.4-4)
Unsatisfactory
The essay does
NOT address
SOME of the
required
informative &
reflective
questions of the
assignment. (3930)
Contains some
interesting ideas,
but the writer
does not explore
them thoroughly.
Lacks detailed
explanation or
supporting
examples. (23-18)
Includes an
organizational
skeleton (intro,
body, conclusion),
but often strays
from the main
idea. Lacks
transitions. (6)
Some errors in
grammar and
word choice.
Sentences may be
incomplete or
rambling. (3.9-3)
Some distracting
errors. Needs
more thorough
proofreading. (3.93)
Failing
The essay does
NOT address
MANY of the
required
informative &
reflective
questions of the
assignment. (30-0)
The writer simply
restates facts
rather than
reflecting on his or
her own
experience. The
writer’s point of
view is not evident.
(18-0)
No clear direction.
Main ideas are
vague and
connections are
confusing or
incomplete. (5-0)
Contains frequent
grammar errors.
Sentences are
choppy, awkward,
and hard to follow.
Vocabulary is
limited and words
are used
incorrectly (2.9-0)
Frequent spelling,
punctuation, and
typographical
errors. No
evidence of
proofreading. (2.90)
Total: 91/100
Constructive Comments: Proof reading or taking your essay to the academic writing center to help
with the general mechanics will greatly reduce the amount of grammatical errors and overall
structure of the essay (double spacing, indent at the beginning of every paragraph, spacing issues
between words, etc). Overall, good job.