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On-line shopping vs. Traditional shopping
Nowadays more and more young people choose the on-line shopping instead of
traditional shopping, nevertheless, traditional shopping is still of great importance in
contemporary society. Both of them are indispensable to human's life. Despite the
same purpose of on-line shopping and traditional shopping, there are two obvious
differences between them.
To begin with, the traditional shopping means we need to go to the streets or
markets if we need something. We can decide whether to buy or not by our true
feelings. All the goods in the stores are visible to customers. Unlike traditional
shopping, on-line shopping depends on the Internet. You can find many shopping
websites such as Taobao and Amazon and buy what you need without going out. We
can only get the information by the pictures or descriptions while price in on-line
shopping is much lower than traditional shopping.
The second difference is the comments. When you buy something like
cosmetics and medicines, you can't know the efficacy of them even you buy them in
the supermarket. The salesgirl may introduces different kings of goods and the
varieties of advantages of them, but sometimes you just find it difficult to believe
their words. In contrast, the on-line shopping can show you the comments left by the
buyers. From the comments, you can learn the disadvantages of the goods.
Every coin has two sides. According to the differences between traditional
shopping and on-line shopping, both of them have their own strengths and
weaknesses. We should make better use of the strengths and try to avoid the weakness
when we are shopping in our daily life.
Revised by group
On-line shopping vs. Traditional shopping
Nowadays more and more young people choose the on-line shopping instead of
traditional shopping, nevertheless, traditional shopping is still of great importance in
contemporary society. Both of them are indispensable to human's life. Despite the
same purpose of on-line shopping and traditional shopping, there are two obvious
differences between them.
To begin with, the traditional shopping means we need to go to the streets or
markets if we need something. We can decide whether to buy or not by our true
feelings. All the goods in the stores are visible to customers. Unlike traditional
shopping, on-line shopping depends on the Internet. You can find many shopping
websites such as Taobao and Amazon and buy what you need without going out. We
can only get the information by the pictures or descriptions while price in on-line
shopping is much lower than traditional shopping.
The second difference is the comments. When you buy something like
cosmetics and medicines, you can't know the efficacy of them even you buy them in
the supermarket. The salesgirl may introduces different kings of goods and the
varieties of advantages of them, but sometimes you just find it difficult to believe
their words. In contrast, the on-line shopping can show you the comments left by the
buyers. From the comments, you can learn the disadvantages of the goods.
Every coin has two sides. According to the differences between traditional
shopping and on-line shopping, both of them have their own strengths and
weaknesses. We should make better use of the strengths and try to avoid the weakness
when we are shopping in our daily life.
suggestions from your roommate:
This is a good comparison and contrast expository essay. The writing purpose is clear. The
main body of the essay is well organized. Please pay attention to the proper language use.
Revised by teachers
On-line shopping vs. Traditional shopping
Nowadays more and more young people choose the on-line shopping
instead of traditional shopping, nevertheless,. Nevertheless, traditional
shopping is still of great importance in contemporary society. Both of
them are indispensable to human's life. Despite the same purpose of
on-line shopping and traditional shopping, there are two obvious
differences between them.
To begin with, the traditional shopping means we need to go to the
streets or markets if we need something. We can decide whether to buy or
not by our true feelings. All the goods in the stores are visible to
customers. Unlike traditional shopping, on-line shopping depends on the
Internet. You can find many shopping websites such as Taobao and
Amazon and buy what you need without going out. We can only get the
information by the pictures or descriptions while price in on-line
shopping is much lower than traditional shopping.
The second difference is the comments. When you buy something
like cosmetics and medicines, you can't know the efficacy of them even
you buy them in the supermarket. The salesgirl may introduces introduce
different kings kinds of goods and the varieties of advantages of them,
but sometimes you just find it difficult to believe their words. In contrast,
the on-line shopping can show you the comments left by the buyers.
From the comments, you can learn the disadvantages of the goods.
Every coin has two sides. According to the differences between
traditional shopping and on-line shopping, both of them have their own
strengths and weaknesses. We should make better use of the strengths and
try to avoid the weakness when we are shopping in our daily life.
Teachers’ comments and suggestions:
This comparison and contrast essay is good. The writer used the
point by point pattern to explain the similarities and differences
between shopping on line and shopping in a supermarket. Good.
Keep it up.