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Name: ___________________________________ Date: ______________ Period: __________
Enduring Cultures CBA
Step Up to Writing Rough Draft
Title: __________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 1: Introduction
Attention getter (blue)
Background
information (blue)
Thesis
statement/position
(green)
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Paragraph 2: Similarities between the Athenian Democracy and the Roman Republic. How
did they distribute power? How were leaders decided? What was their voting system like?
I compared the governments of ancient Athens and Rome, and I discovered several
Topic Sentence
similarities.
(green)
Example
Athens
Example
While Rome,
Example
In addition,
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Rome,
Example
Furthermore Athens,
Example
Rome also
Final Sentence
(transition to next paragraph
or tell how this paragraph
relates to/supports thesis or
position)
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Paragraph 3: Differences between Athenian Democracy and the Roman Republic. How did
they distribute power? How were leaders decided? What was their voting system like?
Ancient Athens and Rome are both very important and powerful civilizations; however,
Topic Sentence
their governments were different in many ways.
(green)
Example
Example
Example
Example
Example
Example
Example
Example
Final Sentence
(transition to next paragraph
or tell how this paragraph
relates to/supports thesis or
position)
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Paragraph 4: Compare/Contrast the Roman Republic and Athenian Democracy to the
modern Democracy of the United States
If we compare the Athenian Democracy and Roman Republic to the United States
Topic Sentence
current government, it is easy to recognize that these governments
(green)
Example (yellow) –
Reason
Reason
Example (yellow)
Reason
Reason
Example (yellow)
Reason
Reason
Final Sentence
(transition to next paragraph
or tell how this paragraph
relates to/supports thesis or
position)
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Paragraph #5: Conclusion: Restate your thesis and include which government: Athenian
Democracy or Roman Republic was more effective and WHY?
Thesis statement
restated without
repeating it (green)
Recap of main points
OR a question for
further thought OR
suggest a course of
action (yellow)
Which government
was most effective
and why
After completing my research I feel that the ____________________________________
had the most effective form of governing because
Final thought – Wrap
it up!
Transition words for beginning sentences:
In addition
furthermore
however
also
as
Another
first
second
third
moreover
I compared
again
to
like
likewise
Even though
although
Elaboration Strategies: (Circle the ones you used in your examples)
Definitions
statistics/facts
quotations